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Rahne de zid mujhe main koyee shahjahan talash na kar
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aaj apne pinzre ko khud hee tor ke ek nazm laya hoon jo parhnege ise batayenge bhee mujhe kaisee kahee hai aisee ummed hai mujhe agar bata diya to eeenam mera hoga na bataya to shikayate nahee par aise main udas rahoonga ummeed karata hoon udas hone ka haq nahee cheena jayega pichle 15 dino main pahlee nazm Anil Na tujhe hee raha yad maine bhee bhula diya Too hee kah de kaise ban sakta tha phir yadgar Mere pyar ka woh pur sukoon junoon Tera shabnam ke katre sa woh masoom pyar Rahne de zid mujhe main koyee shahjahan talash na kar Mere kadmon ke naksh sahil kee ret par bakaya to hain In ko sizda na kar ibadat se inka rishta naheen hai Inke peeche gayee too to milegee bas ek bhatkan too jan le meree rahguzar kisee manzil se wabasta naheen hai Rahne de zid mujhe main koyee shahjahan talash na kar Too bahut udas hai mujh ko kho kar maine mana Meree hokar bhee soch to yahan kya badal jata Meree bastee main zindgee kuch yoon jeete hain log Tera pyar khudkashi karta tera husn dhal jata Rahne de zid mujhe main koyee shahjahan talash na kar Aj teree palkon pe mera kajal to nazar ata hai Tab shayad tere khayalon main mera aks bhee na rahata To mujhse is andaz main miltee ki kho jatee mujhse Tere wazood pe kaheen mera naksh bhee na rahata Rahne de zid mujhe main koyee shahjahan talash na kar Ek udasee se palkon pe ansoon kab thaharte hain Ek gam ke sawan se ankhon main badal naheen bante sahil kee ret par kuch gharonde banaye hamne kafee hai Sahil kee ret se kabhee taj mahal naheen bante Rahne de zid mujhe main koyee shahjahan talash na kar Udas kyon hai tujhe koyee taj mahal na somp saka Pyar kewal yadgar ho jaye kafee naheen Khusboo kee tarah har taraf faile to pyar kahiye Tere gesoo orh ke agar so jaye kafee naheen Rahne de zid mujhe main koyee shahjahan talash na kar Taj mahal kaya hai ek shanshah ka junoon Tera aur mera is junoon main koyee hissa naheen hai Kal zinadgee kaya thee ek kahanee thee Aj hayat hayat hai koyee kissa naheen hai Rahne de zid mujhe main koyee shahjahan talash na kar Too kisee aur kee anjuman main hai hai to sahee Too kisee aur kee nazar main hai hai to sahee Tajmahal main naheen to na sahee itna hee bahut hai Too kisee ghar main hai hai to sahee Rahne de zid mujhe main koyee shahjahan talash na kar Tujhe ek imarat naseeb ho gayee warna Yahan woh bhee jee rahe hain jinhe ghar naheen milta Too game zindgee se ghabra ke chahe to mar bhee saktee hai Yahan woh bhee jee rahe hain jinhe zahar naheen milta Rahne de zid mujhe main koyee shahjahan talash na kar Tajmahal ek kafas(pinzara) hai tera ghar tera nigehban Phir kis khayal main kho gayee too kis liye mayoos hai Too yahan kaid naheen mumtaz kee rooh ki manind too yaha rahtee hai too yahan mahfoos(safe) hai Rahne de zid mujhe main koyee shahjahan talash na kar Muhabbat yadgar hai ki naheen sochne ka waqt kahan Aj mahfoos hona hee masala e hayat hai Mian naheen tere hamrah to kya itna hee bahut hai Koyee tere sath hai too kisee ke sath hai Rahne de zid mujhe main koyee shahjahan talash na kar Ek udasee se palkon pe ansoon kab thaharte hain Ek gam ke sawan se ankhon main badal naheen bante sahil kee ret par kuch gharonde banaye hamne kafee hai Sahil kee ret se kabhee taj mahal naheen bante Rahne de zid mujhe main koyee shahjahan talash na kar Anil |
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anil ji
ek galti anjaane mai ki aur galtion ka karavan ban gaya , jane kaise choti si ek baat ka fasana ban gaya gunah ka ban gayi tab ye choti si galti meri , tjb ek mandir pyar ka galti se dhah gaya . Aaj aapne mujhe maaf kiya aur fir se kuch likha hai uske liye dil se aabhari hoon ab aapki is kalam par kuch kahna chahti hoon Quote:
har ek sher apne mai bhaut kuch sikha gaya , pyar ki nayi manjilen bana gaya kisne kaha har aashiq taajmahal nahi bana sakta aaj aapne likhkar ek ankho tarika sikha diya pyar mai junun ho ye to jariri tha par aaj is junnun ne pyar ko naya aakash dikha diya shrdh |
anil
achha likha hai |
bahut hi khooooooooooob bahut hi accha likha hai bhai............
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na khata na mafi
kuch chubhata raha kuch din par woh meree apnee chubahn thee. tum ne kya galtee kaee koyee nahee to mafi kee baat kahan atee hai tum ne bahut man laga ke parha meree is nazm ko achha laga aur bahut detail main kaha is ke liye woh bhee achha laga . ye anzm bahut dil se dalee thee dil ke dard wale section main dobara shukriya ki tum ne parha is ko
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namsakar anil ji..........
iske bare mein kya kahu.......itni khubsurat hai ki sab kuch is ke samane fika sa nazar aata hai..ek , ek line pad ke us mein dub jane ko dil hota hai.......bahut dino se aapki har nazm ko pada hai aur sabko ek dusre se behtar paya hai......... Ek udasee se palkon pe ansoon kab thaharte hain Ek gam ke sawan se ankhon main badal naheen bante sahil kee ret par kuch gharonde banaye hamne kafee hai Sahil kee ret se kabhee taj mahal naheen bante Rahne de zid mujhe main koyee shahjahan talash na kar ranju |
shukriya meena g
tabiyat kaisee hai aap kee? meree is nazm ko parhne ka shukriya achha laga aap ka ana is kalam par
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shukriya mehul
mehul bahut bahut shukriya mujhe ek baar phir bahut dil se parhne ke liye
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shukriya ranju
ye meree nazm bhee mere dil ke kisee bahut nam hisse se ayee hai aur sab se achee baat ye hai ki is main bhee jo asahar mujhe sab se zyada ache lage tum ne dobara likhe sar jhuka ke shukriya karata hoon meree shayree ko bahut apana pan dene ke liye
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shukriya
tum meree nazm tak aueen shukriya bahut achha laga tumhe yahan dekh ke
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Bahut khoob.masoomshayer sahab
nazro ke raaste dil se guzarte rooh ko cchoo gayi aapki nazm...bahut khoob likha hai aapne...
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shukriya
mer shayree aap ke dil ko choo gayee mujeh bahut achha laga kabhee kabhee parhte rahiyega mujhe
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Dear bhai
subah se ishse padh raha hu bar-2 samjh nahi aa raha ki padhta hi raahunga to reply kab dunga...sach mein itne dino baad aapne ye nazm post ki lekin shayad ishme bhi koi raaz hai...tabhi har sabad itna pyara hai ki jaise aapne itne dino tak uski pooja ki ho Batane k liye koi aesi line nahi jo sabse pyaari lagi ho....poori hi bohat hi khoobsurat hai shukriya :) APka Diggaj:) Hum to apne hai apno se rutha nahi karte Dil se samjhte hai apko apna kabhi yu apno gila nahi karte Quote:
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yuhi apna dard hamesha bantna.mein nahi janti apke dukh ka karan lekin bas yhi kahugi aap jaldi se khush ho jao apko deroin khushiya mile. sakhi |
kaise ho diggaj
bahut bahut bahut achha laga ki tum ne bar bar parha warna varee nazm hai kayee log aisee anzom ko itna bharee man lete hain ki kulee lene chale jate hai uthwane ke liye apane zehan pe nahee uthate
shuriya diggaj bahut dil se pasand karne ke liye is nazm ko aur sada khush bhee rahana aur pyra pyar likhte bhee rahna ANil |
bahut achha laga
sakhi tumhara ana meree shayree ke liye khas bat hotee hai kyon ke tum bahut dino baad site pe atee ho jab bhee atee ho meree kisee na kisee nazm se baat kartee ho bahut achha lagata hai tumhara meree shayree ke liye kcuh kahana apana aur meree shayree ka yoon he ekhayal rakhana
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Anil ji,
Padha aur acha laga.. aapne title hi kuch aisa diya tha ki padhna hi tha,.... yeh ek rachna ki khoobi hoti hai... aur yeh rachna kaafi achi thi... isne woh baatein kahin ,... jo shayad shabdon mein kehna aasan na hota.. magar aapne kahi..... acha laga padh kar.. Apna khayal rakhein Rohin |
shukriya rohin
tum ko nazm achee lagee bahut achha laga aur us ke title achha laga aur achha laga kyon ke wahee is nazm kee rooh hai. bahut dino baad tumahree aur meree nazm kee baatcheet huyee hai achha laga kabhee kabhee aa ke mil liya karo hosla barhta hai
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mohtaram anil saheb
agar yeh kahun ki aapne "tajmehal" kaagaz par taamir kar liya hai to shayad galat na hoga...aapki is imarat (nazm) mein bhi wohi pyar hai jo Shahjahan ki imarat mein hai,,,mohabbat ki wohi khushboo aur kasak basi hai jo sangemarmar ke taj mein hai,,farq bas itna hai wo pathar ka tajmehal hai aur aapne kagaz par ise banaya hai,,, magar rooh dono ki ek hgi hai...!! bahoot purasar kalaam pesh kiya hai aapne...aapke jazbaat bahoot baakhubi se jaahir ho rahe hai aapke kalaam mein aur haqeeqat ko ek aam insaan ki nazron se dekh kar pesh kiya hai aapne... meri dil se nikli daad kuboool kijiye...likhte rhaiye..apna khayl rakhiye -MANOJ |
anil mere bhai
aap ne ek bohat pecheeda nazm ek aazmooda shayer yah philospher ki tarjumaani kerte hue likhi hai. aap ki kaawish qaabil e satayesh hai. meri daad qabool karein. musharrafhusain |
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Too bahut udas hai mujh ko kho kar maine mana
Meree hokar bhee soch to yahan kya badal jata Meree bastee main zindgee kuch yoon jeete hain log Tera pyar khudkashi karta tera husn dhal jata Rahne de zid mujhe main koyee shahjahan talash na kar Aj teree palkon pe mera kajal to nazar ata hai Tab shayad tere khayalon main mera aks bhee na rahata To mujhse is andaz main miltee ki kho jatee mujhse Tere wazood pe kaheen mera naksh bhee na rahata Rahne de zid mujhe main koyee shahjahan talash na kar Too kisee aur kee anjuman main hai hai to sahee Too kisee aur kee nazar main hai hai to sahee Tajmahal main naheen to na sahee itna hee bahut hai Too kisee ghar main hai hai to sahee Rahne de zid mujhe main koyee shahjahan talash na kar Ek udasee se palkon pe ansoon kab thaharte hain Ek gam ke sawan se ankhon main badal naheen bante sahil kee ret par kuch gharonde banaye hamne kafee hai Sahil kee ret se kabhee taj mahal naheen bante Rahne de zid mujhe main koyee shahjahan talash na kar Anil Ji, Wakayee dil se likhi hui rachna ko salaam! ...Kya kahun, bezubaan hokar padna accha laga, kaash meri bezubaani iski tareef ke bol bhi bol jaye... Khyal jo dil ki gehrayee se sidha kagaz par utar aaye hain...aisi expressiveness GOD gifted hai, is gift ko humare saath share karte rahiye:) |
manoj bhai
mera chota bhai manoj jab parhta hai mujhe bahut pyar se parhata hai aur mujhe us ke remarks main bahut details miltee hain meree apnee hee shayree kee . par maoj par kya guarztee hogee jab romatic shayree se alag rahne wale insan ko romance parhna parata hai bahut bahut skukriya meree shayree ko pyar dene ke liye
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musharraf bhai
bahut bahut shukriya mujeh bahut apane pan se parhne ke liye aur bahut kcuh samjhane ke liye aap ke alfaz bahut keemtee hain mere liye
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shalini
shalini tum jantee ho? nahee jantee kasam se tum apnee kalam ka jadoo nahee janteen tum meree shayree par jo bhee lafz bikhertee ho tayar ho ajne ke bad parfume chirakne ajise hote hain meree shayree aur sanwar jatee hai. par sach main tum nahe ejanteen tumhre alfaz kee taqat tabhee to kam likhtee ho bahut bahut shukriya meree is nazm ko bahut sara pyar dene ke liye
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Too kisee aur kee anjuman main hai hai to sahee
Too kisee aur kee nazar main hai hai to sahee Tajmahal main naheen to na sahee itna hee bahut hai Too kisee ghar main hai hai to sahee Rahne de zid mujhe main koyee shahjahan talash na kar Tujhe ek imarat naseeb ho gayee warna Yahan woh bhee jee rahe hain jinhe ghar naheen milta Too game zindgee se ghabra ke chahe to mar bhee saktee hai Yahan woh bhee jee rahe hain jinhe zahar naheen milta Rahne de zid mujhe main koyee shahjahan talash na kar Anil ji…… Behad sadgi se aap apne khayal pesh karte hain…bahut hi pyari lagti hai aapki har kavita…aur ye kavita toh jaise majboori ki kashti pe savar hokar dard ke dariya mein beh rahi hai……issi umeed par ki kinara bhi milega….bahut pasand aayi aapki ye kavita…..kayi baar padha maine isse…daad kabool kijiyega Apna khayal rakhyiega |
shukriya wafa
tum ne bahut dil se parhe eye rachana mujeh meree shgayree ko nayee taqat milee main bahut man deta hoon tumhre likhe ko bahut pyar se parhta hoon jo mere liye likhtee ho bas meree shayree ke sath rahana aur sath dena meree shayree ka
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hindi main koshish
ना तुझे ही रहा याद मैने भी भुला दिया तू ही बता कैसे बन सकता था फिर यादगार मेरे प्यार का वो पुरसुकून जुनूँ तेरा शबनम के कतरे सा वो मासूम प्यार रहने दे ज़िद मुझे मैं कोई शाहजहाँ ना तलाश कर मेरे क़दमों के नक्श साहिल की रेत पैर बाकाया तो हैं इन को सज़दा ना कर इबादत से इनका रिश्ता नहीं है इनके पीछे गयी तू तो मिलेगी बस एक भट्कन मेरी रहगुज़ार किसी मंज़िल से वाबस्ता नहीं है रहने दे ज़िद मुझे मैं कोई शाहजहाँ ना तलाश कर तू बहुत उदास है मुझ को खो कर मैने माना मेरी होकर भी सोच तो यहाँ क्या बदल जाता मेरी बस्ती में ज़िंदगी कुछ यूँ जीते हैं लोग तेरा प्यार ख़ुदकुशी करता तेरा हुस्न ढल जाता रहने दे ज़िद मुझे मैं कोई शाहजहाँ ना तलाश कर आज तेरी पलकों पे मेरा काजल तो नज़र आता है तब शायद तेरे ख़यालों मैं मेरा अक्स भी ना रहता तो मुझसे इस अंदाज़ मैं मिलती की खो जाती मुझसे तेरे वाज़ूद पे कहीं मेरा नक्श भी ना रहता रहने दे ज़िद मुझे मैं कोई शाहजहाँ ना तलाश कर एक उदासी से पलकों पे आसूं कब ढहरते हैं एक ग़म के सावन से आँखों मैं बादल नहीं बनते साहिल की रेत पैर कुछ घरोंडे बनाए हमने काफ़ी है साहिल की रेत से कभी ताज महल नहीं बनते रहने दे ज़िद मुझे मैं कोई शाहजहाँ ना तलाश कर उदास क्यों है तुझे कोई ताज महल ना सॉंप सका प्यार केवल यादगार हो जाए काफ़ी नहीं खुसबू की तरह हैर तरफ़ फैले तो प्यार कहिये तेरे गेसू ओढ़ के अगर सो जाए काफ़ी नहीं रहने दे ज़िद मुझे मैं कोई शाहजहाँ ना तलाश कर ताज महल क्या है एक शांशाह का जुनूँ तेरा और मेरा इस जुनूँ मैं कोई हिस्सा नहीं है कल ज़िंदगी क्या थी एक कहानी थी फक़त आज हयात हयात है कोई क़िस्सा नहीं है रहने दे ज़िद मुझे मैं कोई शाहजहाँ ना तलाश कर तू किसी और की अंजुमन में है है तो सही तू किसी और की नज़र में है है तो सही ताजमहल मैं नहीं तो ना सही इतना ही बहुत है तू किसी के घर मैं है है तो सही रहने दे ज़िद मुझे मैं कोई शाहजहाँ ना तलाश कर तुझे एक इमारत नसीब हो गयी वरना यहाँ वो भी जी रहे हैं जिन्हे घर नहीं मिलता तू ग़मे ज़िंदगी से घबरा के चाहे तो मर भी सकती है यहाँ वोह भी जी रहे हैं जिन्हे ज़हर नहीं मिलता रहने दे ज़िद मुझे मैं कोई शाहजहाँ ना तलाश कर ताजमहल शहन्शाह का कफस(पिंज़ारा) तेरा घर तेरा निगेहबान है फिर किस ख़यल मैं खो गयी तू किस लिये मायूस है तू यहाँ क़ैद नहीं मुमताज़ की रूह की मनींद तू यहा रहती है तू यहाँ महफूज़ है रहने दे ज़िद मुझे मैं कोई शाहजहाँ ना तलाश कर मुहबत यादगार है की नहीं सोचने का वक़्त कहाँ आज महफूज़ होना ही मसला-ए-हयात है में नहीं तेरे हमराह तो क्या इतना ही बहुत है कोई तेरे साथ है तू किसी के साथ है रहने दे ज़िद मुझे मैं कोई शाहजहाँ ना तलाश कर |
Shayad is nazm ki tarif karna mere bas ki baat nahin..............har shabd apne aap mein ek chubhan liye huve........maine isse kai baar padha....kya reply karu samajh nahin haar baar kuch naye ehsaas lage isme........aaj subah se man kuch bhari sa tha...aapki is nazm se jyada ho gaya....bura na maana meri baat ka ..par shayad yehi is nazm ki tarif hain..............behtereen nazm:)
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shukria
achanak aaj ke tajmahal ke liye wishesh din is kavita ko dobara aage lne ke lie bahut bahut shukria mousam apna khayal rakhana
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Anil ji...........aapki kalam jab chalti hai to har baat saaf saaf likhti jaati hai...aapka likhne ka yeh alag andaaz hame behadd pasand hai...bazm meiN phir se lout kar aayeiye, es bazm ko aapka intezaar hai. regards |
Sunitaa jee meree is purane enazm ko dobara sansen dene ke liye bahut bahut shukriyaa aap kaa
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YahaN to wo bhi zinda hai jinhe zahar nahi milta..
Ye ek baat aapki poori nazam ko kehti hai.. aur poori nazam is ek baat ka intzaar karti hai.. bohay bhadiya.. Khyaal rakhiye apna Kunaal |
kaise ho kunal arsaa ho gayaa tum sab se mile huye pulkit se kabhee kabhee milanaa huyaa bakee log to bas yadon kaa hissa hain jaise kaise ho? likhate to kya khoob ho
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