budhi sawari
 

aaj mai apni umar se bari nazm pesh kar raha aur har padhne wale se darkhwast hai ke puri imandari ke sath apne khayalat hame bhejen.

hai ab mere bete teri zimmedari.
hai ab mere bete teri apni bari.
hui khatm kadhon ki taakat hamare
hui khatm teri ye budhi sawari.

wo ungli ke jinse tu chalna sikha tha
wo bahen jo bachpan ka jhula tera tha.
wo aakhen ke jinme teri rah thi kal
wo khwahish ke jinme teri chah thi kal.

hua khatm sab kuch magar yad rakhna
mujhe khud me hardam tu aabad rakhna.
hain apni jagah tere sab rishte nate
hai apni jagah tere yaron ki yari.
hai ab mere bete..............

kya hisab aur kya be hisabon ke kharche
mujhko bhari the teri kitabon ke kharche.
fir bhi tujhko tera har khilona dilaya
kar ke majduri tujhko likhaya padhaya.

meri kurbaniyon ka sila dena dekho nam karke jahan me dikha dena dekho.
hai khwahish meri teri aisi na bite
jaisi ke hamne hai apni guzari.
hai ab mere bete.................

bahut achche vishay pe aapne likhkha hai...

thanks for sharing the thoughts...
we all need to read this and respect our elders/parents for all they have endured and done for us.
regards
aarya

Rahnuma ji namaskaar.............bahut accha likha hai aapne.....aise lagta hai jaise saamne aaina rakh diya ho .....nice creation. yu hi likhtey rahiye

god bless u

Rehnuma jee:

aadaab arz hai!

koii lafz nahii.n hai bayaa.n karne ke liye.. aap kii yeh nazm aapke shaKhsiyat ka aainaa hai.. bohat hii gehre khayaal ko aap ne baa.ndhaa hai.. aur yeh aakhirii ke stanza, puure nazm par bhaari hai..

meri kurbaniyon ka sila dena dekho
naam karke jahan me dikha dena dekho.
hai khwahish meri teri aisi na bite
jaisi ke hamne hai apni guzari.

hats off! keep writing!

Mayank

rahnuma ji aapne jo ahsasaat bayan kiye pehle to unhain mehsoos kerna aur phir alfaz main itni khoobsoorti se dhalna bohat mushkil hai khas tor per mere liye to haqeeqat main aasaan nahi bohat hi khubsurat likha hai aapne yunhi likhti rahiye

rahnuma ji aapne jo ahsasaat bayan kiye pehle to unhain mehsoos kerna aur phir alfaz main itni khoobsoorti se dhalna bohat mushkil hai khas tor per mere liye to haqeeqat main aasaan nahi bohat hi khubsurat likha hai aapne yunhi likhti rahiye

Jaise jaaiydaad ko varasat mein de diya jata hie

ishee tarha eik baap apnee aulaad ko apnee achaiyaan , apne gun , apne rishte naatae , apnee yaadain apni baatain , apne dukh dard , apne azeez dost ehbaab , apnee riwayatain apne jazbe apne ehsasat sabhi kuch virse mein saunp dena chahta hei

Ishee sab ko mehsus karatee ye magical nazm apki jaise rugon mein shaamil ho ke reh gayee , uff kamal kar diya is ko ap ne likhne mein hazrat ,

Ye nazm parhte hoay tasavur mein eik manzar ubhra , eik baap , boorha sa betha hei pass beta hei kursi ke pas hee uska hath thaamae aur vo bap dhere dhere , ahista ahista apne bete ko samjha raha hai , sab bata raha hei , apna aap saunp raha hai , tamaam zimaidariyaan tamaam vo kaam jo vo adhure chor ke jaa raha hei

kitna ajub ehsas hei ye h

kitni khubsoorat baat

apke hasas dilko ujaagar kartee

apke zehan ki wusat ko baavaar karatee

bauhat umda ye nazm

sada yaad rahe ge Maham ko

sach !


Dheron dilli daad haazir hei is kalam ke hazur ,

qabul kijiye hazrat

MahamAzmi

maham ji
 

Rehnuma ji kya ehsaas aur khayalaat apne pesh kiye hain dil khush ho gaya bahut hi umda raha......................dili daad hazir hai kubool ho

kasif saheb
 

kasif bhai shukriya nawajish aapki

Rahnumaa Jee

Adaab,

Bohot hi khubsurat kalaam pesh kiyaa hai aapne. BeshaQ dil ko chune ka hunar hai aap mein... Bohot bohot shukriyaa isse hamaare saath baaNtne ka aur iss ke liye aap ko mubaarak baad bhi pesh kartaa hoon. Apna Khayaal rakhiyega. Dua go.

talib saheb
 

talib saheb hausla afzai ka shukriya

namaskaar rahnuma ji,

kaise hain aap?

bahut dino k baad aapko padna mila. aur jo padne ko mila...vah subah-allah. dard ko bahut hi bareeki se bayaan kiya hai aapne.

yuhin likte rahein aur khush rahein.

aapka dost

manish

manish ji
 

manish ji bahut bahut shukriya aapki nawajishon ka aap jaise logon ko meri tahreer ki ek line bhi pasand aa jaye to meri tamam tahreer kamyeb hai .aap[ka dost rahnuma

Ahh...

Bahut Bahut Acha lokha hei dost......

God Bless You!
susheel

nawajish
 

bahut bahut shukriya aapki muhabbaton ka

khushamdeed ahle adab ham fhir hazir hain