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Koi Tum Se Agar Poch Bethay.......
Aaj DIL.....thora sa udaaas hai.....to yeh likh dia.....:-
Koi tumse agar poch bethe k kon hon main To bila jhijhak bata dena koi khaas nahi Waja-e-hamdardi ki khatir mujhse baat karti ho Dar haqeeqat zara bhi tere dil ke pass nahi Langar to faqeeron mein bhi taqseem hota hai Khanay per bulati ho lekin izzat mujhko raas nahi Khiyaal rakhti ho sirf khidmat-e-khalaq waastay Jag ko yeh bhi bata do tumhe mujh se koi aas nahi Tareeqa-e-zeest hai jo tum mujhse bewafai nahi karti Warna umer bhar saath nibhaon itna farz-shanaas nahi Bila Jhijhak = Without hesitation Waja-e-hamdardi = Due to kindness Dar Haqeeqat = Actually Faqeeron = Beggars Khidmat-e-khalaq = Kind to humanity Jag = World Tareeqa-e-zeest = Method of Live - Dunia-daari Farz-shanaas = Duteous (Hassan Rasheed) |
[quote=Hassan Rasheed;369616]Aaj DIL.....thora sa udaaas hai.....to yeh likh dia.....:-
Koi tumse agar poch bethe k kon hon main To bila jhijhak bata dena koi khaas nahi :) so cute ..... Waja-e-hamdardi ki khatir mujhse baat karti ho Dar haqeeqat zara bhi tere dil ke pass nahi behad achy bhayee bahut hi achy beautiful !!!!! Langar to faqeeron mein bhi taqseem hota hai Khanay per bulati ho lekin izzat mujhko raas nahi hmmm ... !!! sahi bahut sahi Khiyaal rakhti ho sirf khidmat-e-khalaq waastay Jag ko yeh bhi bata do tumhe mujh se koi aas nahi bahut ache bahut achy bhayee Tareeqa-e-zeest hai jo tum mujhse bewafai nahi karti Warna umer bhar saath nibhaon itna farz-shanaas nahi behad umdaa bhayee ..... is dafa u are at the best .. bahut achy gahre khyaal... sanjeeda bhi baht ab laga ki tum kaha se ho ...:) phool se gunchy se chaman se ho ya fir mere mahboob vatan se ho baha ke raste sab seedhy honge isiliya to sada chal-chalan se ho bhayee ko uske main jaanta nahi bhole se uski us bahan se ho take care reps Addded :) this time |
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bahut khub.... sabhi ashaar bahut ache lage mujhe.... dil se daad...kabul kare... khush rahiye....aise udaas nahi hona chaahiye.... aur apna khayal rakhiyega duaaon ke saath... |
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Har sher laajawaad hai, tah e dil se daad kabuul karein...! Thik se apna khayaal rakhiyegaa, ok...? With blessing...! :) |
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Aap ne meri shayri ki itni hosla afzaai ki, mera dil khush ho gaya :) Aur kia kamal likha aap nay:- phool se gunchy se chaman se ho ya fir mere mahboob vatan se ho baha ke raste sab seedhy honge isiliya to sada chal-chalan se ho bhayee ko uske main jaanta nahi bhole se uski us bahan se ho Boht hi zaberdast,,, Aap ko meri ghazal itni ziyada pasand aayi, aap ka teh-e-dil se shukar guzaar hon,,,:) Umeed hai aagay bhi aisay hi aap ka saath milta rahay ga,, Apna khiyaal rakhiye,, GOD BLESS YOU,, |
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aap ki yeh peshkash ab tak ki mujhe best ghazal lagi... ehesaas to kya kahu??? mujhe hilla kar rakh diyaa....:) Beshq Daad ke qabil.............. Aise hee likhte rahiye aur mahefil roshan karte rahiye aap ki dost purvi |
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Adaab..:) Aap ko meri kawish achi lagi... teh-e-dil se shukriaaa...... Daad qabool karta hon janab.... :) Aisay hi saath detay rahiye ga,, aur duayen bhi,, Khush rahiye,,, GOD BLESS YOU,, |
bahut khoob likha hai aapne
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Aslaam HSN jiiii kaise haiN aap ??? aapne baar baar hume nayota diya apni poetry padne ka to lijiye bhai sahiib aaj hum waqt nikaal kar aa gaye aapki poetry padne :) sabse phele to yeh bataye ki aapka dil aaj kuch kuch udhas kyu hai :rolleyes: agar aap apni dil ki baat humse share karna chaheN to khushi se kar sakte haiN, hume bhi accha lagega :) aapki poetry to sach mein kabiley tareef hai, aur vaise bhi sone (Gold) par nikhaar jalne ke baad hi aata hai....hai na ! jab dard ho dil mein poetry tabhi mukaamal banti hai ! hume sabhi sher bahuttttttttttt khaas lage aur last wala sher to dil loot le gaya....wah ! Tareeqa-e-zeest hai jo tum mujhse bewafai nahi karti Warna umer bhar saath nibhaon itna farz-shanaas nahi aur maiN VIKAS jii (Janu-Manu) se poori tarah sahmat hoon, ki aaj lag raha hai ki aap kahan se haiN. unka post kiya sher main bhi aapko dedicate karti hoon :) phool se gunchy se chaman se ho ya fir mere mahboob vatan se ho reps +++ added kush rahiye duao.n ke saath :) |
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Chote MiyaaN Salaam, Der aaye magar durust aaye :) Aur Mashallah kya durusti hai!! Subhanallah. Dil khush ho gaya. Highlighted sher bahot achhe lage. Khubsuurti ki baat ye lagi ke sanjidaa ehsaasoN ko ba.Di saadgi se pesh kiya hai aapne. Aisi saadgi jo siidhe dil meiN utar jaaye. Achhey girah bhi lagaai hai aapne. Shabash. Kush raheN aur mehfil ki raunaq ba.Dhate raheN. Salaam aur Ijaazat, Shyam |
Hassan sahab Aadaab..........
wah wah shaab bahut khoob ek behtrin peshkash per dil se nikali daad kabool kijiye... Agar aap aisa likhenge to daad dene wale khud ba khud aapko daad denge... Bahut hi khoobsurat khayal aur afaaz istemal kiye hia aapne.... wakai is dafa kamal kiya hai...:) daad ......... Likhate rahiye khush rahiye.. Khuda Hafez.... |
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kya khub likha hai aap ne Hassan Sahab..lajawab!! yeh padh kar mujhe do lines kahene ko mann kar raha hai...ummid hai aap bura nahi maanege peete rahe har ashq bebasi ki apni ab zindagi mein hume koi pyaas nahi daad qabul kare..........keep writing Warm Regards:) |
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Meri shayri ne aap ka dil chu liya..... I am very pleased to listen this precious comment... Aap ki daad qabool karta hon Jii....:) Ok Boss... main theek se apna khiyaal rakhonga,,, :) Aap bhi theek se apna khiyaal rakhiye ga,, Aisay hi saath detay rahiye ga,,, GOD BLESS YOU,, |
oye hassan bhai baaki batein baad me
aap udaas kyun ho jiii pehle ye bataao...:confused: itni achi ghazal likhne baad bhi koi udaas ho sakta hai kya??? chalo ab ache bachon ki tarah muskuraao aapki ye ghazal humein bahut pasand aayi:) kitne apnepan se aap khud ko begana kar rahe ho ghazal me.. superb mind blowing jii aise hi likhte raho.. khush raho...:) |
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Main aap ka mamnoon hon k aap nay meri is adna ki kawish ko ab tak ki best "GHAZAL" kaha.... aur mujhe sab se ziyaada khusi is baat per hui k meri composition mein itni taaqat to hai k is nay aap ko hila kar rakh dia....:) Daad qabool ki,,, :) Aisay hi saath detay rahiye,, Apna khiyaal rakhiye,, GOD BLESS YOU,, |
Assalam-o-Alaykum Hassan ji
Janaab kya khoob gazal pesh ki hai aapne dil kanhi kho sa gaya khuch purani baate zehen mein taza ho gayi is khoobsurat kalaam par meri daad hazir hai likhte rahe apna khayaal rakhe...Khuda Hafiz Quote:
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Adaab! Main theek hon. Aap kesi hain?? Sab se phelay to main aap ka be-had shukar guzaar hon k aap ne apna qeemti time nikaal kar meri composition read ki,,, Hmmm,, Sunita Jii,, udaasi ka din to guzar gaya... ab to main happy hon... aisay :). To choriye udaasi wali baton ko,,,, Aap bhi Vikaas Jii,,se sehmat hain to mujhe boht ziyaada khushi hui,,,:) Umeed hai aagay bhi aap aisay hi mera sath aur duayen deti rahien gi,, Apna Khiyaal rakhiye ga,, GOD BLESS YOU,, |
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koi tum se puche kaun hu main to kah dena koi khaas nahi ek dost h kaccha pacca sa, ek jhoot h aadha saccha sa superb..... sir |
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Han G, Dair se aaya hon umeed hai durust aaya hon :) Aap ka dil meri is khak kawish se khush hua.. Main aap ka be-had mamnoon hon, Aap ki nazar ki baareeki nay is mein koi khami nahi nikali, mujhe is baat ki ziyada khushi hai,, aap nay meray sanjeeda ehsaason ko samjha un ki tareef ki,, aik dafa phir se shukria...:) Aisay hi saath detay rahiye ga,, Apna khiyaal rakhiye,, GOD BLESS YOU,, |
Excellent ghazal, Hassan
This one was very good Tareeqa-e-zeest hai jo tum mujhse bewafai nahi karti Warna umer bhar saath nibhaon itna farz-shanaas nahi |
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Aap ki daad sir ankhon per janab...:) Mujhe khushi hai k aap ki nazar ki bareeki nay meray likhay mein koi khami nahi nikaali ....:) Boht boht shukria... Aagay bhi aisay hi saath detay rahiye ga,, Khush rahiye,, GOD BLESS YOU,, |
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Aap ki tareef ka be-had shukria... Aur aap ki do lines sun kar acha laga, bura nahi manaya...:) Boht achi likhi aap nay yeh do lines,,,, Aur Daad qabool ki janab,:) Aisay hi saath detay rahiye,, Apna Khiyaal rakhiye,, GOD BLESS YOU,, |
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Aap ki baat bikul sahi hai, ab itni achi ghazal bani hai aur itni tareef bhi hui hai to main udaas nahi hon.. Ab happy hon.. aisay kar kay :) :) :) Aap ne meray likhay ki itni ziyada tareef ki, main aap ko teh-e-dil se shukria kehta hon,, Aagay bhi aisay hi saath detay rahiye ga,, Apna Khaiyaal rakhiye,, GOD BLESS YOU,, |
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apke saare sher acche lage............... style to hai apme...ye baat to hai.......... this is your best up till now......... daad......... regards |
Waja-e-hamdardi ki khatir mujhse baat karti ho Dar haqeeqat zara bhi tere dil ke pass nahi hasan jee, behad juuda andaaz ho jaata hai aap ka jab aap udaas ho jaate hai.n.. :p aap ki koshish mujhe achchhii lagii... yuu.n hi koshish zaari rakhiye.... daad haazir hai... Mayank |
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Aap ko meri koshish achi lagi aur main aap ki puraani yaadien taaza karnay mein kamyaab hua, mujhe is baat ki ziyaada khusi hai....:) Aisay hi saath detay rahiye ga,,, Take care,, GOD BLESS YOU,, |
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Hur dafa meri poetry pasand karanay aur mera saath dena ka boht boht shukria:) Han g,, mujhe bhi yaad aa gayi yeh kaavish, mujhe thori thori yaad hai, woh kuch youn hai:- Koi tum say poche kon hon main Tum keh dena koi khas nahi Ik dost hai kacha pakka sa Ik jhoot hai aadha sacha sa Jazbat ko dhanpay ik parda Bus ik bahana acha sa Jevan ka aisa sathi hai Jo door na ho kar pas nahi Koi tum se poche kon hon main Tum keh dena koi khas nahi :) Umeed hai aagay bhi aap ka aisay hi saath milta rahay ga,, Apna khiyaal rakhiye ga,, GOD BLESS YOU,, |
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M.mayoos Jii, Aap ka boht boht shukria saath banay rakhnay ka...:) Aur meri composition pasand karnay ka.... Teh-e-dil se mamnoon hon,,, Aisay hi saath detay rahiye ga,, Take care,, GOD BLESS YOU,, |
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Boht hi mamnoon hon aap ka, ke aap apna qeemti waqt meri composition per surf kartay hain,,, Aur isay appreciate kartay hain,, Aagay bhi aap ko INSHALLAH, niraaash nahi karonga,,, Bas aap mera saath detay rahiye,,, Take care, GOD BLESS YOU,, |
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Aap ko yahan dekh kar be-had khushi hui,, Aur mujhe ziyaad khusi is baat ki hui k aap ko na-cheez ki khaak- koshish achi lagi.....:) Aagay bhi INSHALLAH aap ko kuch acha pharnay ko donh ga,, Sath banaye rakhiye ga,, Take care,, GOD BLESS YOU,, |
HSN jee,
Gar aap udas ho kar itni achhi tahrir kah sakte hain to mere khayal se aapko kabhi kabhi udas rahna chahiye ;) yahan to bade bade ustad ne aapki bahut tarif kiye hain wah kai aapki yeh peshkas kabil-e-tarif hai saare aashar hume pasand aayi udasiyon ke mousam ko gujar jane dijiye kalam pe uske ehesaas ko barkrar rakhiye khus rahiye ghamo se kosho dur rahiye aapki dost Diya |
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Aap nay apna qeemti waqt meri composition per barbaad kiya... main shukar guzaar hon,,,,, :) Likha pasand karnay per mamnoon -o- masroor hon.... :) Aap ki duayen saath rahi.N to baray baray ustaad tareef kartay rahien gay.... :) Aisay hi saath detay rahiye ga,,, Apna khiyaal rakhiye,, GOD BLESS YOU,, |
Hasaan Bhaa'ii:
Aadaab! waah!! aapki ye peShkaSh sach meN bahot hi Khoob haii ! aapne baRii gehrA'ii se ehsaasoN ko lafzoN ke Zar'iiYe peSh kiyaa haii,, aik beHteriN Shuruaat aur aik beHteriN aNjaam diyaa.. Poorii koShiSh bahot hi Khoob rahiiN! duaa hay aap aise hi bazm ki Shaan baRhaate raheN! dil se DheroN saarii daad aur duaaeN! KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~ Dhaval |
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Rasheed Saheb, Adaab! Bahut khoob likha, udaasi aur jhalahat ka khoob rang bhara hai.... Aise hi likhte rahiye.... Khush rahiye...... Ek dost, Vikram |
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Aap ko yahan dekh kar, hamesha ki tarah be-had khushi hui,,,,,:) Aur sone per suhaaga yeh k aap ne na-cheez ki khaak koshish ko itne ache remarks diye....... Aap ka pyaar aur duaayen le kar boht khusi hui,, Sath banaye rakhiye ga,, Take care n Regardz, HSN |
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Vikram Bhai,, Likha pasand karne ka boht boht shukria...........:) Sath banaye rakhiye ga,, Aap ka,, |
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wahhhhh..... beautiful indeed.... umdaa ehsaas.... har ek sher dil me utar gaya.... dil se daad hazir hai.... yuhi mehfil ko roshan karte rahiye.... khush rahiye....:) |
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It's been long since I see you! Where're you dear? Is everything fine? Jaanta hooN dair ho gayi aate aate, lekin dair aayed durust aayed! bohat bohat shukriyaaH pazeraayi ke liye! :) Apna khiyaal rakhna, DuaooN ke saath,, |
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Sorry to comment late...! Thanks a lot for appreciation and your valuable time! :) Take care, Regards, |
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