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Thumbs up 17th December 2009, 08:20 PM

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Originally Posted by Diya_Jale View Post
Mujeeb Ji,

Pahle to main aapki Sukriya ada karna chahati hun aapne apna Kimti waqt se kuchh mujhe diye ..mere nagme pe nazar dale aur mujhe galti kya hai yeh samjhaye ....Kaash ki aap Pahle jab main isko post ki thi tab milte to aaj tak jo galti main bar bar dohrati rahi ho nahin hoti ....Der hi sahi per aap ke ehsaan mujhe Humesha yaad rahegi ....Mujhe Khusi hai ki SDC ki member hun aur yahan aap jaise log hain jo kisi ki bhi Help karne ko tayar hain......

Ab main kuchh Apne baremain batati hun Jiska is nagme se koi matlab nahin ......Main Orissa se Hun ,Oriya meri Mother tounge....Hindi main class 8 se hi sikhi ,baki Tv dekh dekh ke ....mujhe Hindi thik se bolna bhi nehin aati ..humesha galat bolti hun....beshaq galat Likhti hun

Mujhe Oriya main poem Likhne ki Souk thi ....isiliye jab koi Hindi shairi sunti thi main dukhi ho jati thi kash main kabhi aise likh paun....Gazal main pichhle 7 saal se sunti aayi hun,per mujhe Gazal, Nazm main faraq kya yeh maloom nahin

7 Mahina pahle main Ek shairi site pe Join ki aur wahan shairi Dekhti thi ...Kabhi kabhi dusre ke shairi wahan post kar deti thi (mujhe pata hai yeh galat hai Fir bhi ..main copy paste karti thi ....Ab mujhe dukh hoti hai is baat se kitna nadan thi main)...wohi se main chhote chhote 2 line ki sher khud likhne ki koshish ki ....Main Apni Thread pe Shairi post karne keliye Net pe har Dusri shairi site Search karti thi ...aur 4 mahine pahle mujhe SDC iktfaaq se mila ...jahan mujhe sabke post bahot pasand aayi....Main to yahan se Shairi copy karke Dusre site pe deti thi ....aur aise karte karte ...2/4 line likhne ki hosla mili ....Itne shairi dekhne ke baad bhi mujhe yeh nahin pata ki gazal nazm ,shairi main farak kya hai ...main sirf itna janti hun apne feelings ko sabd do aur koi aisa chhota story bane to shairi pe nazar aaye ...Tabhi main yeh poem likhi thi .....

5 din pahle mujhe pata chala..Gazal main Radeef.Qaafia....Kisse kahte hain ...aur mujhe meri khud ki sare thread galat nazar aaye ...Inmain pahle 100 galti thi aur ab hazaroon...Fir bhi main isko Change nahin karoongi ...ab jo naya likhungi ..usmain jarur in sare baat pe dhyan dungi ...

Mujhe sayaara banna hai ...SDC pe aayi hun to jarur banke rahoongi....Mujhe aap sabki saath youn hi chahiye ....

Meri yeh Purani thread Har SDC ke Un member keliye hogi jo kabhi likhna chahate hain per likh nahin pate ...ya fir darte hain kabhi unke lafz galat na ho ...ya fir apne galti jo chhupana chahate hain .....aaj nahin per kal main Hindi thik se likhungi ....apni feelings ko sabd dungi ...meri gazal main koi galti nazar nehin aayegi yeh mujhe Yakeen hai ..........

Tab koi new member aake galti karega aur usse Example dena hoga,ki khud ke galti se khud sikho To beshak Aap mere Example de dena .....Diya ki Purani thread dekho kitni galtiyan hai ...usse to Thik se Hindi likhna nahin aati thi per aaj woh Gazal Likh rahi hai ........Meri yeh khwahish Jarur puri hogi ..

Sare SDC member se request hai pls aap mere saath Dijiye ...Mujhe apna galti batayiye aur ..sahi kya hai yeh batyiye ...taki mujhe Garv ho apne aap pe ki main SDC ki Member hun...

Mujeeb ji Dilse Sukriya ada karna chahati hun aapki
Agar aapke pass kabhi waqt ho to main aapse kuchh sikhna chahati hun


Diya
diya jii,

iss jazbe ko salaam karne ko dil chaha to reply likhne baith gaya.....aisi him'mat ka maiN sada se kayal rehta hooN aur jiske andar bhi yeh jazba ho uske liye mere dil meiN izzat khud-ba-khud aa jaati hai...
aapne apne baare meiN mote taur par 3 baateN kahiN haiN aur unhiN 3 baatoN ke liye aapko daad dena chahta hooN, chahe to aap meri taraf se usse apne janamdin ka tohfa samjh leN

1. aapne kaha aapko hindi/urdu nahi aati phir bhi aapko shayara ban_na hai....yaha'n aapki lagan aur hausle ko daad deta hooN.....yeh koi asaaN kaam nahi hai....

2. aapne kaha ki aap auroN ki shayari ko copy paste karti thi...bahut him'mat wali baat hai apni galati ko sar'e aam qabuul karna....daad haazir hai....kehne ko duniya kehti hai ki apni galati maan ne meiN koi sharam nahi karni chahiye.....karta kaun hai....?

3. aapne kaha hai ki chahe iss kalaam meiN hazaar galatiyaN hoN lekin aap ise change nahi karengi.....iss par bhi daad haazir hai....qabuul farmayeN....

yeh jazba ta_umr banaye rakheN....khush raheN....

HAPPY BIRTHDAY TO YOU.....!

aapka dost,
Vikram


'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali
Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho
Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi....



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