Dear sunita ji
aapne apni pehli koshish me dil ke ehsaaso ko to bakhubi utaar diya lekin alfaazo ke taal mel kahin kuchh kasar reh gayi.. bura mat maaniyega.. q ki haal-e-dil bayaan karna ek seedhi saadhi baat me bhi ho sakta hai aur ek dilfareb ghazal ya nazm ke zariye bhi... ghazal likhne ke loiye kuchh to rhym ya rules hote hain... aapki koshish bahut achhi hai.. lekin isme nikhaar laane me thoda waqt lagega.. aap plz maayoos mat hoiyega mere reply se.. lekin main mayank ki baato se poori tareh sehmat hu ... koshish jaari rakhiyega.. lekin post karne se pehle 2 - 3 dafa khud jarur padhiye... uske baad hum log aapke saath hain hi... ek achha shayar banne ke liye.. sabse pehle khud ka critic banna jaruri hota hai..
apna khyaaal rakhiyega