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8th January 2009, 05:49 PM
Dil tod kar puchte hai, ki haal kaesa hai?
Main boli aye dilbar, ye sawaal kaesa hai?!
Yeh aasu yeh bebasi, bigde halaat
Yeh dard yeh chubhan, machalte jasbaat
Yeh tadap yeh ghum, hai tere saugaat
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Adhure hai hum ab, jeene ki chah nahi
Gumarah hai kahi, manzil aur rah nahi
Rote hi rahete hai, hasne ki vajah nahi
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Tere kadmon mein hum ne, bichaya tha dil
Jise tod diya tune, na samjha kaabil
Zinda laash ban kar rah gaye, kahe kise qatil
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Jism the hum, jinhe samjha tha saya
Kal tak the apne, aaj ho gaye paraya
Phir bhi labon pe, naam tera hi aaya
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Ek din socha, kahe tumse haal-e-dil
Sunaye dil ki dastan, hum bhari mahefil
Bata de jaha ko, ki tum ho qatil
Phir tum na puchoge, ki haal kaesa hai?
Dard de tu hume, hum dua denge tum ko
Socha mita de bebasi, khatam kare ghum ko
Ki laakh minaten, par aayi na maut humko
Uff yeh maut bhi, bewafa tere jaesa hai!!
Ab kabhi na puchna, ki haal kaesa hai?
Na ji saku na mar saku, haal kuch aesa hai!!
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Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
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8th January 2009, 08:42 PM
kitni aasaani se aap ne dil ki baat kaagaz par utaar lii hai... bohat hi achchha likhti hai.n aap aur kaafii aasaani se likh leti hai.n... is baar bhi aap ne behad achchha likha hai, aur kya kahuu.n.........aise hi likhti rahe.n....
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12th January 2009, 11:02 PM
mayank ji
yahan me apse sahmat nahi hun..mere hisab se jo likha hai wo asani se nahi aaya hai kagaz par ek lambe gujare waqt ki suagat hai to bas kuch shabd jinse bhi dard ka wo sagar na niukla jo asliyat me ander bah raha hai kisi ke....yani shayd likhne wale ne bhaut yaise pal jiye jinme uska dard hi uska sathi raha tab ye shabd bane hai...kyun prineeta ji...beshq dil pe asar karte hai ye shabd aur ahsas kyun ki dil ki awaj hai.
sakhi with love
कुछ ऐसे पल जिनको संजोना है ,
शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे
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17th January 2009, 01:31 PM
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Originally Posted by Mayank
kitni aasaani se aap ne dil ki baat kaagaz par utaar lii hai... bohat hi achchha likhti hai.n aap aur kaafii aasaani se likh leti hai.n... is baar bhi aap ne behad achchha likha hai, aur kya kahuu.n.........aise hi likhti rahe.n....
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thank you Mayank ji... hope u keep enjoying reading my poetries
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17th January 2009, 01:32 PM
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mayank ji
yahan me apse sahmat nahi hun..mere hisab se jo likha hai wo asani se nahi aaya hai kagaz par ek lambe gujare waqt ki suagat hai to bas kuch shabd jinse bhi dard ka wo sagar na niukla jo asliyat me ander bah raha hai kisi ke....yani shayd likhne wale ne bhaut yaise pal jiye jinme uska dard hi uska sathi raha tab ye shabd bane hai...kyun prineeta ji...beshq dil pe asar karte hai ye shabd aur ahsas kyun ki dil ki awaj hai.
sakhi with love
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sakhi ji...shukriya aap ke reply ke liye
mere dil ki awaaz aap ke dil tak pahuchi...
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17th January 2009, 02:43 PM
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mayank ji
yahan me apse sahmat nahi hun..mere hisab se jo likha hai wo asani se nahi aaya hai kagaz par ek lambe gujare waqt ki suagat hai to bas kuch shabd jinse bhi dard ka wo sagar na niukla jo asliyat me ander bah raha hai kisi ke....yani shayd likhne wale ne bhaut yaise pal jiye jinme uska dard hi uska sathi raha tab ye shabd bane hai...kyun prineeta ji...beshq dil pe asar karte hai ye shabd aur ahsas kyun ki dil ki awaj hai.
sakhi with love
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sakhii saahiba,
maaf keejiye ga, main dekha nahii.n tha ki aap ne mujh se mukhaatib ho kar kuchh likha hai... aap ke is post ko paDh kar mujhe lag raha hai ki aap nahii.n samjh paaye ki main kya kahana chaahta huu.n......... maine likha hai 'kitni aasaani se aap ne dil ki baat kaagaz par utaar lii hai... bohat hi achchha likhti hai.n aap aur kaafii aasaani se likh leti hai.n...' ab aap ko bhi yeh pata hai ki har woh shaksh jis ke seene me.n dard hai woh shaayar nahii.n hota.. aur har shayar ke seene me.n dard ho yeh bhi zaruuri nahii.n, haa.n seene me.n dil hona behad zaruuri hai......... aur jo shayar hai bhi aur seene me.n dard bhi hai,to bhi kaii kaii baar kaaGaz me.n uTaarne me.n mushkil hoti hai, mere kahane ka muraad yeh tha ki, praneeta jee ne apne ehsaas ko bohat hi aasaani se lafzo.n me.n uTaara hai.... is se zeyadaah kuchh nahii.n
ummmeed hai ki aap is baar meri baat samajh gayee hogii.......
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23rd January 2009, 03:37 PM
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Originally Posted by Praneeta
Dil tod kar puchte hai, ki haal kaesa hai?
Main boli aye dilbar, ye sawaal kaesa hai?!
Yeh aasu yeh bebasi, bigde halaat
Yeh dard yeh chubhan, machalte jasbaat
Yeh tadap yeh ghum, hai tere saugaat
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Adhure hai hum ab, jeene ki chah nahi
Gumarah hai kahi, manzil aur rah nahi
Rote hi rahete hai, hasne ki vajah nahi
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Tere kadmon mein hum ne, bichaya tha dil
Jise tod diya tune, na samjha kaabil
Zinda laash ban kar rah gaye, kahe kise qatil
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Jism the hum, jinhe samjha tha saya
Kal tak the apne, aaj ho gaye paraya
Phir bhi labon pe, naam tera hi aaya
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Ek din socha, kahe tumse haal-e-dil
Sunaye dil ki dastan, hum bhari mahefil
Bata de jaha ko, ki tum ho qatil
Phir tum na puchoge, ki haal kaesa hai?
Dard de tu hume, hum dua denge tum ko
Socha mita de bebasi, khatam kare ghum ko
Ki laakh minaten, par aayi na maut humko
Uff yeh maut bhi, bewafa tere jaesa hai!!
Ab kabhi na puchna, ki haal kaesa hai?
Na ji saku na mar saku, haal kuch aesa hai!!
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Hi Praneeta,
Maaf kijiye ga par in Ehsaason ki tareef mein kuch nahin kahunga... Iske baare mein kuch bhi kehna iski taujheen karna hai... Ya Shayad mere paas itne alfaaz hi nahin ki iski tareef kar saku.. As a feeling, its awesome...
BUT, as a poem it could not touch my heart. Aapke ek doosri post par diye hue reply se laga ki aap suggestions ke liye kaafi open hain. Sirf isliye, as a listener or reader, main apne jazbaat pesh kar raha hu. Mujhe ye zyada khoobsurat aise lagti hai (changes marked in red):
Dil tod kar puchte hai, ki haal kaesa hai?
Main boli aye dilbar, ye sawaal kaesa hai?!
Yeh aasu yeh bebasi, bigde halaat
Yeh dard yeh chubhan, machalte jasbaat
Yeh tadap yeh ghum, hai tere saugaat
Palko.n ka afsana, bemausam barsaat jaisa hai
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Adhure hai hum ab, jeene ki chah nahi
Gumarah hai kahi, manzil aur rah nahi
Rote hi rahete hai, hasne ki vajah nahi
Dil ka sukoon, bhatakte musafir jaisa hai
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Tere kadmon mein hum ne, bichaya tha dil
Jise tod diya tune, na samjha kaabil
Zinda laash ban kar rah gaye, kahe kise qatil
Adhoore sab armaan naaraz taqdeer jaisa hai
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Jism the hum, jinhe samjha tha saya
Kal tak tha apna, aaj ho gaya paraya
Phir bhi labon pe, naam tera hi aaya
Jism-e-gul, murjhaye phoolon jaisa hai
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Dard de tu hume, hum dua denge tum ko
Socha mita de bebasi, khatam kare ghum ko
Ki laakh minaten, par aayi na maut humko
Uff yeh maut bhi, bewafa tere jaisa hai!!
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Ek din socha, kahe tumse haal-e-dil
Sunaye dil ki dastan, hum bhari mahefil
Mera rehnuma hi, hai mera qatil
Har ek Ehsaas zinda laash jaisa hai
Phir na puchoge, ki haal kaesa hai....
Na ji saku na mar saku, haal aesa hai!!
Ab kabhi na puchna, ki haal kaesa hai?
But please kuch achha na lage toh dil par mat lijiyega. These are just my feelings....
Regards,
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23rd January 2009, 08:46 PM
Praneeta jee
Apke likhe har Lafz me Dard hai,
Koi Be-dard bhi, padh le ise,
Wo Hamdard ho jayega....
Keep writing
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24th January 2009, 03:28 AM
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Originally Posted by Widhani
Hi Praneeta,
Maaf kijiye ga par in Ehsaason ki tareef mein kuch nahin kahunga... Iske baare mein kuch bhi kehna iski taujheen karna hai... Ya Shayad mere paas itne alfaaz hi nahin ki iski tareef kar saku.. As a feeling, its awesome...
BUT, as a poem it could not touch my heart. Aapke ek doosri post par diye hue reply se laga ki aap suggestions ke liye kaafi open hain. Sirf isliye, as a listener or reader, main apne jazbaat pesh kar raha hu. Mujhe ye zyada khoobsurat aise lagti hai (changes marked in red):
Dil tod kar puchte hai, ki haal kaesa hai?
Main boli aye dilbar, ye sawaal kaesa hai?!
Yeh aasu yeh bebasi, bigde halaat
Yeh dard yeh chubhan, machalte jasbaat
Yeh tadap yeh ghum, hai tere saugaat
Palko.n ka afsana, bemausam barsaat jaisa hai
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Adhure hai hum ab, jeene ki chah nahi
Gumarah hai kahi, manzil aur rah nahi
Rote hi rahete hai, hasne ki vajah nahi
Dil ka sukoon, bhatakte musafir jaisa hai
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Tere kadmon mein hum ne, bichaya tha dil
Jise tod diya tune, na samjha kaabil
Zinda laash ban kar rah gaye, kahe kise qatil
Adhoore sab armaan naaraz taqdeer jaisa hai
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Jism the hum, jinhe samjha tha saya
Kal tak tha apna, aaj ho gaya paraya
Phir bhi labon pe, naam tera hi aaya
Jism-e-gul, murjhaye phoolon jaisa hai
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Dard de tu hume, hum dua denge tum ko
Socha mita de bebasi, khatam kare ghum ko
Ki laakh minaten, par aayi na maut humko
Uff yeh maut bhi, bewafa tere jaisa hai!!
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Ek din socha, kahe tumse haal-e-dil
Sunaye dil ki dastan, hum bhari mahefil
Mera rehnuma hi, hai mera qatil
Har ek Ehsaas zinda laash jaisa hai
Phir na puchoge, ki haal kaesa hai....
Na ji saku na mar saku, haal aesa hai!!
Ab kabhi na puchna, ki haal kaesa hai?
But please kuch achha na lage toh dil par mat lijiyega. These are just my feelings....
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Hello Amit ji,
aap ko kyu lagta hai har baar mujhe bura lagega. i am always open to comments, suggestions and criticisims. i am new to writing and really wana be good at it. this can only be if i am guided properly. i do love the changes you did in the poetry. please don't think ever i might not like your suggestions. you must have spent quite some time to come with those lovely changes so thank you for the time you put in it... aap ke words bahot pyare hai. like i mentioned before, in Fiji we don't know proper hindi leave alone urdu, so the words i normally use in my poetries are very simple.
lagta hai aap ke company mein bahot kuch sikhne ko milega...
keep commenting.....and smiling...
Regards
Praneeta
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24th January 2009, 03:31 AM
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Praneeta jee
Apke likhe har Lafz me Dard hai,
Koi Be-dard bhi, padh le ise,
Wo Hamdard ho jayega....
Keep writing
Regards
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thank you Ajay ji aap ke humdardi ke liye.
koshish jari hai.
Keep reading....
Regards
Praneeta
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24th January 2009, 10:03 AM
bahut khoob likha hai aapne..
aise hi likhti rahiye..
god bless u..
khush rahein..
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bahut khoob likha hai aapne..
aise hi likhti rahiye..
god bless u..
khush rahein..
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shukriya ji
hope u like other poetries of mine as well...keep replying n smile always..
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Praneeta
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24th January 2009, 12:08 PM
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Originally Posted by Praneeta
Dil tod kar puchte hai, ki haal kaesa hai?
Main boli aye dilbar, ye sawaal kaesa hai?!
Yeh aasu yeh bebasi, bigde halaat
Yeh dard yeh chubhan, machalte jasbaat
Yeh tadap yeh ghum, hai tere saugaat
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Adhure hai hum ab, jeene ki chah nahi
Gumarah hai kahi, manzil aur rah nahi
Rote hi rahete hai, hasne ki vajah nahi
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Tere kadmon mein hum ne, bichaya tha dil
Jise tod diya tune, na samjha kaabil
Zinda laash ban kar rah gaye, kahe kise qatil
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Jism the hum, jinhe samjha tha saya
Kal tak the apne, aaj ho gaye paraya
Phir bhi labon pe, naam tera hi aaya
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Ek din socha, kahe tumse haal-e-dil
Sunaye dil ki dastan, hum bhari mahefil
Bata de jaha ko, ki tum ho qatil
Phir tum na puchoge, ki haal kaesa hai?
Dard de tu hume, hum dua denge tum ko
Socha mita de bebasi, khatam kare ghum ko
Ki laakh minaten, par aayi na maut humko
Uff yeh maut bhi, bewafa tere jaesa hai!!
Ab kabhi na puchna, ki haal kaesa hai?
Na ji saku na mar saku, haal kuch aesa hai!!
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pranita ji
bakai main ek behad shandar si nazam likhi hai aapne......
ye sawal kaisa hai.....
bahut khoob raha aapka sawal...
meri daad kabool kre.n
Dilip
" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya
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24th January 2009, 12:11 PM
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pranita ji
bakai main ek behad shandar si nazam likhi hai aapne......
ye sawal kaisa hai.....
bahut khoob raha aapka sawal...
meri daad kabool kre.n
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glad that you liked my poetry...keep reading
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zaalim ab ke bhii na royegaa to mar jaayegaa
Ahmed Faraz
Dard ka samandar nazar aaya tumhari peshkash me........Allah se dua hai ke woh tumhai zindagi khushiyo se bhar dein. AAMEEN
Now give me a big smile.....
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19th December 2010, 03:14 PM
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Dil tod kar puchte hai, ki haal kaesa hai?
Main boli aye dilbar, ye sawaal kaesa hai?!
Yeh aasu yeh bebasi, bigde halaat
Yeh dard yeh chubhan, machalte jasbaat
Yeh tadap yeh ghum, hai tere saugaat
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Adhure hai hum ab, jeene ki chah nahi
Gumarah hai kahi, manzil aur rah nahi
Rote hi rahete hai, hasne ki vajah nahi
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Tere kadmon mein hum ne, bichaya tha dil
Jise tod diya tune, na samjha kaabil
Zinda laash ban kar rah gaye, kahe kise qatil
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Jism the hum, jinhe samjha tha saya
Kal tak the apne, aaj ho gaye paraya
Phir bhi labon pe, naam tera hi aaya
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Ek din socha, kahe tumse haal-e-dil
Sunaye dil ki dastan, hum bhari mahefil
Bata de jaha ko, ki tum ho qatil
Phir tum na puchoge, ki haal kaesa hai?
Dard de tu hume, hum dua denge tum ko
Socha mita de bebasi, khatam kare ghum ko
Ki laakh minaten, par aayi na maut humko
Uff yeh maut bhi, bewafa tere jaesa hai!!
Ab kabhi na puchna, ki haal kaesa hai?
Na ji saku na mar saku, haal kuch aesa hai!!
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duaon ke saath
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26th December 2010, 07:30 AM
[QUOTE=Praneeta;323742] Dil tod kar puchte hai, ki haal kaesa hai?
Main boli aye dilbar, ye sawaal kaesa hai?!
Yeh aasu yeh bebasi, bigde halaat
Yeh dard yeh chubhan, machalte jasbaat
Yeh tadap yeh ghum, hai tere saugaat
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Adhure hai hum ab, jeene ki chah nahi
Gumarah hai kahi, manzil aur rah nahi
Rote hi rahete hai, hasne ki vajah nahi
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Tere kadmon mein hum ne, bichaya tha dil
Jise tod diya tune, na samjha kaabil
Zinda laash ban kar rah gaye, kahe kise qatil
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Jism the hum, jinhe samjha tha saya
Kal tak the apne, aaj ho gaye paraya
Phir bhi labon pe, naam tera hi aaya
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Ek din socha, kahe tumse haal-e-dil
Sunaye dil ki dastan, hum bhari mahefil
Bata de jaha ko, ki tum ho qatil
Phir tum na puchoge, ki haal kaesa hai?
Dard de tu hume, hum dua denge tum ko
Socha mita de bebasi, khatam kare ghum ko
Ki laakh minaten, par aayi na maut humko
Uff yeh maut bhi, bewafa tere jaesa hai!!
Ab kabhi na puchna, ki haal kaesa hai?
Na ji saku na mar saku, haal kuch aesa hai!!
aadaab
pahlee baar aap ki rachnaa parhee to dil me shor sa paidaa ho gayaa lagtaa hi nahi ki ye ghazal hai balki ye to dil ki daastaan hai mahboob se baat cheet hai judaayee ka qissa hai be wafaayi ki dohaayee hai dil ki baat ko qatii ki galee me kahne ki jur"at batorne ki baat hai
aisaa lag raha hai koi aaine ke saamne khare ho ke apne ateet me jhaank kar khud se sawaal w jawab kar raha hai
is qadar ehsaas se bhar poor saade lafzon se choor banaawat se door rachnaa kbhi kabhi saamne aatee hai ... parneetaa ji wo ek waqt aap pe aayaa hogaa jab aap ne khud me doob ke ya kah diyaa hogaa .. ab aap khud bhi sochtee hon gee are ye main ne kaise likh diyaa ji ji ji haan jab koi doob jaata hai tab jaa ke use motee haath lagtaa hai aor main is motee pe dil se daad detaa hun
aap ka dost
masood hassaas
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26th December 2010, 10:20 AM
SuperBBBBBBBB Creation ........ Praneeta Ji !
Dili daad li jiye ... aise hi likhti rahen ... aati rahen aage bhi ... !
khush rahen ...
apna theek se khayal rakhen ...
duaaon ke saath ... !
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
---Naresh Mehra----
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26th December 2010, 02:49 PM
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Originally Posted by Praneeta
Dil tod kar puchte hai, ki haal kaesa hai?
Main boli aye dilbar, ye sawaal kaesa hai?!
Yeh aasu yeh bebasi, bigde halaat
Yeh dard yeh chubhan, machalte jasbaat
Yeh tadap yeh ghum, hai tere saugaat
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Adhure hai hum ab, jeene ki chah nahi
Gumarah hai kahi, manzil aur rah nahi
Rote hi rahete hai, hasne ki vajah nahi
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Tere kadmon mein hum ne, bichaya tha dil
Jise tod diya tune, na samjha kaabil
Zinda laash ban kar rah gaye, kahe kise qatil
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Jism the hum, jinhe samjha tha saya
Kal tak the apne, aaj ho gaye paraya
Phir bhi labon pe, naam tera hi aaya
Aur tum puchte ho, ki haal kaesa hai?!
Ek din socha, kahe tumse haal-e-dil
Sunaye dil ki dastan, hum bhari mahefil
Bata de jaha ko, ki tum ho qatil
Phir tum na puchoge, ki haal kaesa hai?
Dard de tu hume, hum dua denge tum ko
Socha mita de bebasi, khatam kare ghum ko
Ki laakh minaten, par aayi na maut humko
Uff yeh maut bhi, bewafa tere jaesa hai!!
Ab kabhi na puchna, ki haal kaesa hai?
Na ji saku na mar saku, haal kuch aesa hai!!
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wah praneetaa ji ... aapne ghamzadaa dil ki behaalee is junoon aur bebaakee se bayaan ki, ke patthar se bhi aah nikal jaaye aur hum to aakhir insaan hi hain !! dil ko chhoo lene waale ehsaah rahe aapke, aur kaha bhi bade asardaar tareeke se. dil se daad aur duaon ke saath ... zarraa
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13th July 2014, 07:27 PM
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Originally Posted by sajid_ghayel
zabt laazim hai magar dukh hai qayaamat kaa 'Faraz'
zaalim ab ke bhii na royegaa to mar jaayegaa
Ahmed Faraz
Dard ka samandar nazar aaya tumhari peshkash me........Allah se dua hai ke woh tumhai zindagi khushiyo se bhar dein. AAMEEN
Now give me a big smile.....
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shukriya iss response ke liye............
_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
Ananthpak
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