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Ek aur Ghazal Mulaiza Kiijiye - 30th December 2015, 08:21 PM

Facebook par ek group mein Qafiya aur Radeef par sher kehne thhe. Sher to huve hi ye ghazal mukammal ho gayi.

Aaap hazraat aapni aara se nawaazeiN.


GHAZAL
मोड़ ये भी हैं दास्तान में क्या?
संग सब बन गए जहान में क्या?

सांस लेती नहीं हैं दीवारें
घर बदलने लगे मकान में क्या?

क्या उम्मीदों से उसको तकते हो
कोई सुनता है आसमान में क्या?

चल हक़ी़क़त से दोस्ती कर लें
यूँ भी रक्खा है अब गुमान में क्या?

दाम लगने लगे उसूलों के
रक्खे जाएंगे वो दुकान में क्या?

कैसी दरियादिली तुम्हारी है
ज़ख़्म देते रहोगे दान में क्या?

हौसला तो बहुत है सीने में
देखें आता है इम्तेहान में क्या?

दोस्तों के उतर गए चेहरे
है हक़ीक़त मेरे बयान में क्या?

कहते हैं देखता है वो सबको
कोई खिड़की है आसमान में क्या?
- प्रवीण सक्सेना


GHAZAL

Modh ye bhi haiN dastaan meiN kya?
Sang sab ban gaye jahaan meiN kya?

SaaNs leti nahiiN haiN deewareiN
Ghar badalne lage makaan meiN kya?

Kya ummeedoN se usko takte ho
Koi suntaa hai aasmaan meiN kya?

Chal haqeeqat se dosti kar leiN
YuN bhi rakkha hai ab gumaan meiN kya?

Daam lagne lagey usooloN ke
Rakkhe jaayeNge wo dukaan meiN kya?

Kaisi dryadilii tumhaari hai
Zakhm detey rahoge daan meiN kya?

Hosla to bohat hai seeney meiN
DekheiN aata hai imtehaan meiN kya?

DostoN ke utar gaye chehrey
Hai haqeeqat mere bayaan meiN kya?

Kehte haiN dekhta hai wo sabko
Koi khidki hai aasmaan meiN kya?

- Praveen Saxena


raah meiN hi manziloN ka zikr mat chedo Praveen
manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi

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Facebook par ek group mein Qafiya aur Radeef par sher kehne thhe. Sher to huve hi ye ghazal mukammal ho gayi.

Aaap hazraat aapni aara se nawaazeiN.


GHAZAL
मोड़ ये भी हैं दास्तान में क्या?
संग सब बन गए जहान में क्या?

सांस लेती नहीं हैं दीवारें
घर बदलने लगे मकान में क्या?

क्या उम्मीदों से उसको तकते हो
कोई सुनता है आसमान में क्या?

चल हक़ी़क़त से दोस्ती कर लें
यूँ भी रक्खा है अब गुमान में क्या?

दाम लगने लगे उसूलों के
रक्खे जाएंगे वो दुकान में क्या?

कैसी दरियादिली तुम्हारी है
ज़ख़्म देते रहोगे दान में क्या?

हौसला तो बहुत है सीने में
देखें आता है इम्तेहान में क्या?

दोस्तों के उतर गए चेहरे
है हक़ीक़त मेरे बयान में क्या?

कहते हैं देखता है वो सबको
कोई खिड़की है आसमान में क्या?
- प्रवीण सक्सेना


GHAZAL

Modh ye bhi haiN dastaan meiN kya?
Sang sab ban gaye jahaan meiN kya?

SaaNs leti nahiiN haiN deewareiN
Ghar badalne lage makaan meiN kya?

Kya ummeedoN se usko takte ho
Koi suntaa hai aasmaan meiN kya?

Chal haqeeqat se dosti kar leiN
YuN bhi rakkha hai ab gumaan meiN kya?

Daam lagne lagey usooloN ke
Rakkhe jaayeNge wo dukaan meiN kya?

Kaisi dryadilii tumhaari hai
Zakhm detey rahoge daan meiN kya?

Hosla to bohat hai seeney meiN
DekheiN aata hai imtehaan meiN kya?

DostoN ke utar gaye chehrey
Hai haqeeqat mere bayaan meiN kya?

Kehte haiN dekhta hai wo sabko
Koi khidki hai aasmaan meiN kya?

- Praveen Saxena
Waah!!!..kya khoob ghazal huyi hai praveen ji..
Tamaam ashaar dil chhoo gaye....

Aapki kalam se aise hee nagme padhne ko milte rahein ..yahi dua hai....

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namaste Praveen bhai


kya Ghazal hui hai, sadke jaauN!


marhoom Jaun Eliya bohat yaad aaye aapki yeh Ghazal paDh kar, unka ek sher jo mujh bohat se bhi zyada pasaNd hai, isi zameen meiN hai:

yeh mujhe chain kyoN nahiiN paDta
ek hi shakhs tha jahaan meiN kya?


mere liye haasil-e-Ghazal sher yeh hua :

Chal haqeeqat se dosti kar leiN
YuN bhi rakkha hai ab gumaan meiN kya?


so iske liye alag se mubarakabaad baaNdh lijiye, beh'tareen Ghazal raqm ki hai aapne, mubarakbaak to ban'ti hai, Tikaaiye


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Facebook par ek group mein Qafiya aur Radeef par sher kehne thhe. Sher to huve hi ye ghazal mukammal ho gayi.

Aaap hazraat aapni aara se nawaazeiN.


GHAZAL
मोड़ ये भी हैं दास्तान में क्या?
संग सब बन गए जहान में क्या?

सांस लेती नहीं हैं दीवारें
घर बदलने लगे मकान में क्या?

क्या उम्मीदों से उसको तकते हो
कोई सुनता है आसमान में क्या?

चल हक़ी़क़त से दोस्ती कर लें
यूँ भी रक्खा है अब गुमान में क्या?

दाम लगने लगे उसूलों के
रक्खे जाएंगे वो दुकान में क्या?

कैसी दरियादिली तुम्हारी है
ज़ख़्म देते रहोगे दान में क्या?

हौसला तो बहुत है सीने में
देखें आता है इम्तेहान में क्या?

दोस्तों के उतर गए चेहरे
है हक़ीक़त मेरे बयान में क्या?

कहते हैं देखता है वो सबको
कोई खिड़की है आसमान में क्या?
- प्रवीण सक्सेना


GHAZAL

Modh ye bhi haiN dastaan meiN kya?
Sang sab ban gaye jahaan meiN kya?

SaaNs leti nahiiN haiN deewareiN
Ghar badalne lage makaan meiN kya?

Kya ummeedoN se usko takte ho
Koi suntaa hai aasmaan meiN kya?

Chal haqeeqat se dosti kar leiN
YuN bhi rakkha hai ab gumaan meiN kya?

Daam lagne lagey usooloN ke
Rakkhe jaayeNge wo dukaan meiN kya?

Kaisi dryadilii tumhaari hai
Zakhm detey rahoge daan meiN kya?

Hosla to bohat hai seeney meiN
DekheiN aata hai imtehaan meiN kya?

DostoN ke utar gaye chehrey
Hai haqeeqat mere bayaan meiN kya?

Kehte haiN dekhta hai wo sabko
Koi khidki hai aasmaan meiN kya?

- Praveen Saxena


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behad haseen khayaalon se sajaaya hai aapne is ghazal ko..... ehsaas behad ummdah aur shaandaar.... is kalaam ki tareef karnaa jaise suraj ko lau dikhaana.... mujh nacheez ki naakis daad qubool kijiye..... aur duaaon me hame yaad rakhiye....

क्या उम्मीदों से उसको तकते हो
कोई सुनता है आसमान में क्या?

is sher ne jaise dhadkan rok di, bahut khoobsurat sher hai......... mubaarakbaad dheron aapko.....

likhte rahen.... aate rahen....

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Shukria - 10th January 2016, 11:31 AM

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Tamaam ashaar dil chhoo gaye....

Aapki kalam se aise hee nagme padhne ko milte rahein ..yahi dua hai....

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kya Ghazal hui hai, sadke jaauN!


marhoom Jaun Eliya bohat yaad aaye aapki yeh Ghazal paDh kar, unka ek sher jo mujh bohat se bhi zyada pasaNd hai, isi zameen meiN hai:

yeh mujhe chain kyoN nahiiN paDta
ek hi shakhs tha jahaan meiN kya?


mere liye haasil-e-Ghazal sher yeh hua :

Chal haqeeqat se dosti kar leiN
YuN bhi rakkha hai ab gumaan meiN kya?


so iske liye alag se mubarakabaad baaNdh lijiye, beh'tareen Ghazal raqm ki hai aapne, mubarakbaak to ban'ti hai, Tikaaiye


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Ji haaN jab uss group meiN ye qavafi aur rdeef diye gaye to mujhe bhi Jaun Eliya ki ye ghazal yaad aa gayi. Unko ek video mein ek mushaire mein isse padhte huve suna tha. Tab se ye zameen mere zehn meiN thii, socha tha kabhi iss par kuchh kehne ki jasarat karuuNga.

Aapki mubarakbaad aur daad ka bohat-bohat shukria.

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Bohat Shukria - 10th January 2016, 11:42 AM

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saxena saahab tak shaad ka aadaab pahuche..... subah subha aapki taazaareen ghazal par nazar kyaa ggayee yoon laga din ban gayaa...
behad haseen khayaalon se sajaaya hai aapne is ghazal ko..... ehsaas behad ummdah aur shaandaar.... is kalaam ki tareef karnaa jaise suraj ko lau dikhaana.... mujh nacheez ki naakis daad qubool kijiye..... aur duaaon me hame yaad rakhiye....

क्या उम्मीदों से उसको तकते हो
कोई सुनता है आसमान में क्या?

is sher ne jaise dhadkan rok di, bahut khoobsurat sher hai......... mubaarakbaad dheron aapko.....

likhte rahen.... aate rahen....

Shaad....
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Huzoor maiN to aapke andaaz-e-daad ka qaayal ho gaya huuN. Badi shayraana daad milti hai aapse. Aur Ghazal par aapki aamad se lag jaata hai ke humne kuchh achcha hi kaha hoga.

Aapki daad-0-mubarakbaad ka bohat shukria. Ye silsile yuN raheN in duaoN ke saath.

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Wah wah....Praveen ji.

Bohut hi pyari Ghazal hai. Bohut pasand aayi.
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Gahzal pasand aayi aapko, bada achcha laga ye jaankar.
Aaapki daad ka bohat-bohat shukria.

DuaoN ke saath

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Bohat kushi hui ke aapko ghazal pasand aayi aur aapko padhakar achchi lagi. Meri jaanib se shukriya qubool farmaayeN. Aise hi hosla badhate rahiye.

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Aaap hazraat aapni aara se nawaazeiN.


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मोड़ ये भी हैं दास्तान में क्या?
संग सब बन गए जहान में क्या?

सांस लेती नहीं हैं दीवारें
घर बदलने लगे मकान में क्या?

क्या उम्मीदों से उसको तकते हो
कोई सुनता है आसमान में क्या?

चल हक़ी़क़त से दोस्ती कर लें
यूँ भी रक्खा है अब गुमान में क्या?

दाम लगने लगे उसूलों के
रक्खे जाएंगे वो दुकान में क्या?

कैसी दरियादिली तुम्हारी है
ज़ख़्म देते रहोगे दान में क्या?

हौसला तो बहुत है सीने में
देखें आता है इम्तेहान में क्या?

दोस्तों के उतर गए चेहरे
है हक़ीक़त मेरे बयान में क्या?

कहते हैं देखता है वो सबको
कोई खिड़की है आसमान में क्या?
- प्रवीण सक्सेना


GHAZAL

Modh ye bhi haiN dastaan meiN kya?
Sang sab ban gaye jahaan meiN kya?

SaaNs leti nahiiN haiN deewareiN
Ghar badalne lage makaan meiN kya?

Kya ummeedoN se usko takte ho
Koi suntaa hai aasmaan meiN kya?

Chal haqeeqat se dosti kar leiN
YuN bhi rakkha hai ab gumaan meiN kya?

Daam lagne lagey usooloN ke
Rakkhe jaayeNge wo dukaan meiN kya?

Kaisi dryadilii tumhaari hai
Zakhm detey rahoge daan meiN kya?

Hosla to bohat hai seeney meiN
DekheiN aata hai imtehaan meiN kya?

DostoN ke utar gaye chehrey
Hai haqeeqat mere bayaan meiN kya?

Kehte haiN dekhta hai wo sabko
Koi khidki hai aasmaan meiN kya?

- Praveen Saxena


Namaskaar Praveen ji.............bahut hi umda aur sacche ehsaas hai yeh...har ek ehsaas par wahhh kehne ko dil kiya...

dil se daad hazir hai...aate rhiye aur likhtey rhiye

regards


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Praveen jee

Namaste

Kaise hain aap?

Ghazal dlkash aur andaaz bhee dilkash...bahot hi behterin Ghazal pesh kee hay aapne mehfil me....mere dil se daad

Yuunhi bazm ki shaan badhaate rahiye


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Praveen saahab..

Bohat hi aala peshkash rahi ye to .. har sher pichle sher se badhkar nazar aaya.. sahi kahan maikash bhai ne .. jaun yaad aa gaye .. salaam aapki peshkash ko ..

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Shukria - 22nd January 2016, 10:59 AM

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bahut khoob Praveen jee ghazal pasand aayee...........................
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Ghazal pasand farmaane ka bohat shukria. Jawaab meiN deri ke liye muafi chaahta huuN.

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Shukria - 22nd January 2016, 11:01 AM

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Namaskaar Praveen ji.............bahut hi umda aur sacche ehsaas hai yeh...har ek ehsaas par wahhh kehne ko dil kiya...

dil se daad hazir hai...aate rhiye aur likhtey rhiye

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Ghazal ke ehsaas aapko pasand aaye jaankar baohat achcha laga. Aapki daad ka bohat shukria.

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Shukria - 22nd January 2016, 11:03 AM

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Praveen jee

Namaste

Kaise hain aap?

Ghazal dlkash aur andaaz bhee dilkash...bahot hi behterin Ghazal pesh kee hay aapne mehfil me....mere dil se daad

Yuunhi bazm ki shaan badhaate rahiye


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Praveen saahab..

Bohat hi aala peshkash rahi ye to .. har sher pichle sher se badhkar nazar aaya.. sahi kahan maikash bhai ne .. jaun yaad aa gaye .. salaam aapki peshkash ko ..

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Facebook par ek group mein Qafiya aur Radeef par sher kehne thhe. Sher to huve hi ye ghazal mukammal ho gayi.

Aaap hazraat aapni aara se nawaazeiN.


GHAZAL
मोड़ ये भी हैं दास्तान में क्या?
संग सब बन गए जहान में क्या?

सांस लेती नहीं हैं दीवारें
घर बदलने लगे मकान में क्या?

क्या उम्मीदों से उसको तकते हो
कोई सुनता है आसमान में क्या?

चल हक़ी़क़त से दोस्ती कर लें
यूँ भी रक्खा है अब गुमान में क्या?

दाम लगने लगे उसूलों के
रक्खे जाएंगे वो दुकान में क्या?

कैसी दरियादिली तुम्हारी है
ज़ख़्म देते रहोगे दान में क्या?

हौसला तो बहुत है सीने में
देखें आता है इम्तेहान में क्या?

दोस्तों के उतर गए चेहरे
है हक़ीक़त मेरे बयान में क्या?

कहते हैं देखता है वो सबको
कोई खिड़की है आसमान में क्या?
- प्रवीण सक्सेना


GHAZAL

Modh ye bhi haiN dastaan meiN kya?
Sang sab ban gaye jahaan meiN kya?

SaaNs leti nahiiN haiN deewareiN
Ghar badalne lage makaan meiN kya?

Kya ummeedoN se usko takte ho
Koi suntaa hai aasmaan meiN kya?

Chal haqeeqat se dosti kar leiN
YuN bhi rakkha hai ab gumaan meiN kya?

Daam lagne lagey usooloN ke
Rakkhe jaayeNge wo dukaan meiN kya?

Kaisi dryadilii tumhaari hai
Zakhm detey rahoge daan meiN kya?

Hosla to bohat hai seeney meiN
DekheiN aata hai imtehaan meiN kya?

DostoN ke utar gaye chehrey
Hai haqeeqat mere bayaan meiN kya?

Kehte haiN dekhta hai wo sabko
Koi khidki hai aasmaan meiN kya?

- Praveen Saxena
Praveen ji sabse pehle to maaufi ka talabgaar hoon ki itni khoobsurat aur pur asar ghazal meri nazar se bach gayi. Yun to sabhi guni jano ne tareef kar hi di par mere liye aapki is ghazal ka makhtaa bahut gehraa asar kar gaya hai bahut saadgi se aapne itni gehri baat kar di hai dil hairaan ka hai....aapko khaaksaar ka salaam, yunhi likhte rahiYeGaa



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