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"zaroorat"......nazm - 26th October 2006, 08:20 AM

aadaab yaaraan-e-mehfil

maut ki chaahat kam hi logoN ko hoti hai, kuch log kehte haiN ke "jaan hai to jahaan hai" mujhe is baat se ittefaaq nahiiN, maut hi ek aisi shay hai duniya meiN jo apne chaahne waaloN ki ummiidoN pe har baar kharaa utar ke dikhaati hai

is nazm ka tassavvur maine kayi saal pehle kiya tha aur waqt ke saath saath iske DhaaNche meiN bohat tabdiiliiyaaN bhi aayiiN aur shaayad aage bhi aayeNgii, ye kisi haal meiN bhi muqammal nahiiN hai, aaj mann hua ke post karuuN to kar raha huuN, ummiid hai aapko qaabil-e-ga'ur lagegi



nazm ka unvaan hai "zaroorat"


mula'iizaa farmaayeN :



nijaat qaid-e-Gham se mujhko dilaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi


tere dar pe maiN badii aas liye aayaa huuN
ashk aaNkhoN meiN haiN TuuTa hua dil laya huuN
suna hai dard ke maaroN ko panaah milti hai
dil ke zakhmoN ki tere paas davaa milti hai

mujhe vo jaam de ke pee ke dam nikal jaaye
taDap rahi hai jaan kuch sukuun mil jaaye
maiN ziNdagi se ab nibaah kar nahiiN sakta
maiN roz-roz,lamha-lamha mar nahiiN sakta


maine choDa tha zamaana jisey paane ke liye
usii ne choD diya mujhko, zamaane ke liye
tavvaqo'aat* se daaman ko chuDaaya hi nahiiN
dil ne us shaKhs ki yaadoN ko bhulaaya hi nahiiN

tavvaqo'aat = Expectations , UmmiideiN



maine bacchoN ki tarah dard ko paalaa dil meiN
muddatoN zakhm-e-mohabbat ko saNbhaala dil meiN
dil ke tuKdoN ki khalish ab nahiiN sahi jaati
mujhse haalaat yeh apni ab nahiiN dekhii jaati


jaan dene ke ilaawaa ko_ii chaara hi nahiiN
ab mera ziNdagii ke saath guzaara hi nahiiN
meri saaNsoN ka diyaa aaj bhujhaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi

maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi...................


apni aaraa se zaruur nawaazeiN


shukriya
maikash


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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai

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26th October 2006, 08:40 AM

maine choDa tha zamaana jisey paane ke liye
usii ne choD diya mujhko, zamaane ke liye

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aadaab yaaraan-e-mehfil

maut ki chaahat kam hi logoN ko hoti hai, kuch log kehte haiN ke "jaan hai to jahaan hai" mujhe is baat se ittefaaq nahiiN, maut hi ek aisi shay hai duniya meiN jo apne chaahne waaloN ki ummiidoN pe har baar kharaa utar ke dikhaati hai

is nazm ka tassavvur maine kayi saal pehle kiya tha aur waqt ke saath saath iske DhaaNche meiN bohat tabdiiliiyaaN bhi aayiiN aur shaayad aage bhi aayeNgii, ye kisi haal meiN bhi muqammal nahiiN hai, aaj mann hua ke post karuuN to kar raha huuN, ummiid hai aapko qaabil-e-ga'ur lagegi



nazm ka unvaan hai "zaroorat"


mula'iizaa farmaayeN :



nijaat qaid-e-Gham se mujhko dilaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi


tere dar pe maiN badii aas liye aayaa huuN
ashk aaNkhoN meiN haiN TuuTa hua dil laya huuN
suna hai dard ke maaroN ko panaah milti hai
dil ke zakhmoN ki tere paas davaa milti hai

mujhe vo jaam de ke pee ke dam nikal jaaye
taDap rahi hai jaan kuch sukuun mil jaaye
maiN ziNdagi se ab nibaah kar nahiiN sakta
maiN roz-roz,lamha-lamha mar nahiiN sakta


maine choDa tha zamaana jisey paane ke liye
usii ne choD diya mujhko, zamaane ke liye
tavvaqo'aat* se daaman ko chuDaaya hi nahiiN
dil ne us shaKhs ki yaadoN ko bhulaaya hi nahiiN

tavvaqo'aat = Expectations , UmmiideiN



maine bacchoN ki tarah dard ko paalaa dil meiN
muddatoN zakhm-e-mohabbat ko saNbhaala dil meiN
dil ke tuKdoN ki khalish ab nahiiN sahi jaati
mujhse haalaat yeh apni ab nahiiN dekhii jaati


jaan dene ke sivaa ab koi chaara hi nahiiN
ab mera ziNdagii ke saath guzaara hi nahiiN
meri saaNsoN ka diyaa aaj bhujhaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi

maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi...................


apni aaraa se zaruur nawaazeiN


shukriya
maikash


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26th October 2006, 09:16 AM

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aadaab yaaraan-e-mehfil

maut ki chaahat kam hi logoN ko hoti hai, kuch log kehte haiN ke "jaan hai to jahaan hai" mujhe is baat se ittefaaq nahiiN, maut hi ek aisi shay hai duniya meiN jo apne chaahne waaloN ki ummiidoN pe har baar kharaa utar ke dikhaati hai

is nazm ka tassavvur maine kayi saal pehle kiya tha aur waqt ke saath saath iske DhaaNche meiN bohat tabdiiliiyaaN bhi aayiiN aur shaayad aage bhi aayeNgii, ye kisi haal meiN bhi muqammal nahiiN hai, aaj mann hua ke post karuuN to kar raha huuN, ummiid hai aapko qaabil-e-ga'ur lagegi



nazm ka unvaan hai "zaroorat"


mula'iizaa farmaayeN :



nijaat qaid-e-Gham se mujhko dilaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi


tere dar pe maiN badii aas liye aayaa huuN
ashk aaNkhoN meiN haiN TuuTa hua dil laya huuN
suna hai dard ke maaroN ko panaah milti hai
dil ke zakhmoN ki tere paas davaa milti hai

mujhe vo jaam de ke pee ke dam nikal jaaye
taDap rahi hai jaan kuch sukuun mil jaaye
maiN ziNdagi se ab nibaah kar nahiiN sakta
maiN roz-roz,lamha-lamha mar nahiiN sakta


maine choDa tha zamaana jisey paane ke liye
usii ne choD diya mujhko, zamaane ke liye
tavvaqo'aat* se daaman ko chuDaaya hi nahiiN
dil ne us shaKhs ki yaadoN ko bhulaaya hi nahiiN

tavvaqo'aat = Expectations , UmmiideiN



maine bacchoN ki tarah dard ko paalaa dil meiN
muddatoN zakhm-e-mohabbat ko saNbhaala dil meiN
dil ke tuKdoN ki khalish ab nahiiN sahi jaati
mujhse haalaat yeh apni ab nahiiN dekhii jaati


jaan dene ke ilaawaa ko_ii chaara hi nahiiN
ab mera ziNdagii ke saath guzaara hi nahiiN
meri saaNsoN ka diyaa aaj bhujhaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi

maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi...................


apni aaraa se zaruur nawaazeiN


shukriya
maikash
maikash ji namaskar..........!

dil ko chu gaye aapki yeh nazam, har ek share mukamal lagga. bahut badiya bani hai nazam, dua hai app yu hi likhtey rahey.

aapki dost


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26th October 2006, 10:58 AM

maikasH ji kaise ho mere dost
aaj subha subha itni achhi nazam padhne ko mili baht achha laga ye nazam padhke iske asaar dil ko chhu gaye mere dost

aur ek sher to mujhe behaad pasand aaya wo saqi wala kya kamaal ka sher banaya hai aapne

jaan dene ke ilaawaa ko_ii chaara hi nahiiN
ab mera ziNdagii ke saath guzaara hi nahiiN
meri saaNsoN ka diyaa aaj bhujhaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi


bahot hi khub kaha hai aapne is sher me ,maikash ji is nazam ke liye dil se nikali daad kubul kijiyenga

apna khayal rakhiye , khus rahiye

jai shree karishna

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wa - 26th October 2006, 12:55 PM

nijaat qaid-e-Gham se mujhko dilaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi
**apke alfaaz padke mujhe apni ek purani post yaad aa gai aur who halt to aaj bhi mere saath hai jo apki gazal mein har tarah dekhne ko mil rahe hai.***

tere dar pe maiN badii aas liye aayaa huuN
ashk aaNkhoN meiN haiN TuuTa hua dil laya huuN
suna hai dard ke maaroN ko panaah milti hai
dil ke zakhmoN ki tere paas davaa milti hai

****dil ka totana maikesh ji kya kya nahi dikhata hai hamein. Kuch samjh pana bahut mushkil ho jata hai bas ek baat samjh aati hai ki kash ek pal yaisa aaye jo sab tarah se shanty de jaye.***

mujhe vo jaam de ke pee ke dam nikal jaaye
taDap rahi hai jaan kuch sukuun mil jaaye
maiN ziNdagi se ab nibaah kar nahiiN sakta
maiN roz-roz,lamha-lamha mar nahiiN sakta

***maut ki chahat dard ka had se gujarana…….Sahi kaha na???***


maine choDa tha zamaana jisey paane ke liye
usii ne choD diya mujhko, zamaane ke liye
tavvaqo'aat* se daaman ko chuDaaya hi nahiiN
dil ne us shaKhs ki yaadoN ko bhulaaya hi nahiiN

****jab koi hamein yun akela chod de aur hamne use pane ke liye koi kasar na rakhi ho to us shakhs ko bhulana us jeevan mein to namumkin hai. Uski yaad hamein pal pal marti hai aur hamari majboori dekho ham phir bhi jeete hai.***



maine bacchoN ki tarah dard ko paalaa dil meiN
muddatoN zakhm-e-mohabbat ko saNbhaala dil meiN
dil ke tuKdoN ki khalish ab nahiiN sahi jaati
mujhse haalaat yeh apni ab nahiiN dekhii jaati

****par kya kare ye haalat bhi dekhne padte hai aur is tarah bhi jeena padta hai. Majbor hai ham…***

jaan dene ke ilaawaa ko_ii chaara hi nahiiN
ab mera ziNdagii ke saath guzaara hi nahiiN
meri saaNsoN ka diyaa aaj bhujhaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi

***jaan dena itna aasaan nahi hai janaw. Bahut mushkil hai kyun ki ye jaan sirf hamari nahi hai ye ehsas tab hota hai jab ham ise dena chahte hai tamaam haalat hamein yaisa karne se rok lete hai****

maikash ji
kya kahun ab ye gazal kahan tak asar kar gai. Kuch nahi kah sakti iski tariff mein.
Kyun ki mere saare shabad ek hi shabd mein simat gaye…. ‘maut’. Is par likhne par jab ham majborr hote hai tab kuch nahi hota hai hamare pas bas ek khawahish hoti hai ise pane ki.
Apne jaisa ki bataya ki kaphi time hua ise likhe huye.to bas yahi dua hai ki who sab haalat bhi badal gaye ho apke liye jab apne ye chaha tha ki apko sukun is tarah mile.
Aapko bahut bahut khushi mile yahi dua hai meri.
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wah ji wah - 26th October 2006, 01:12 PM

maine bacchoN ki tarah dard ko paalaa dil meiN
muddatoN zakhm-e-mohabbat ko saNbhaala dil meiN
dil ke tuKdoN ki khalish ab nahiiN sahi jaati
mujhse haalaat yeh apni ab nahiiN dekhii jaati


jaan dene ke ilaawaa ko_ii chaara hi nahiiN
ab mera ziNdagii ke saath guzaara hi nahiiN
meri saaNsoN ka diyaa aaj bhujhaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi

janaan maikash sabhib appko raj ki sat sri akaal ji....kaya baat hai janaab appki kalam ki sanjeedgi ki....har lafaz bhut pyara lagga....kitni sacchai hai is nazam me...ki bass kush lamho par pari waqt ki dhool hat gai...meri daad kabool kijiyega....yu hee karam farmate rahiyega hum pyaso par....take care......raj.....


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26th October 2006, 08:46 PM

"teri dunia mein dil lagta nahin wapas bula le..
mein sazde mein gira hoon mujhko e maalik utha le..."

maikash bhai saheb
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aapki dilkash nazm padh kar barbas jehan mein is purane geet ke bol gooj uthe...aapki kalam jab bhi uth_ti hai...dil par apne dastkhat kar jati hai...aapki nazm padh kar kuch yun laga jaise koi "baagi"... "maikhane roopi mandir" mein "saaqi roopi devi" se "maut ka vardaan" maang raaha hai..
aapki yeh "aarzoo" kabhi kubool na ki jaye....isi dua ke saath aapse izzazat chaunga...ek dilfareb nazm par naacheez ki dheron daad kubool kijiye...
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26th October 2006, 09:43 PM

pranaam maikash ji,

mujhe vo jaam de ke pee ke dam nikal jaaye
taDap rahi hai jaan kuch sukuun mil jaaye
maiN ziNdagi se ab nibaah kar nahiiN sakta
maiN roz-roz,lamha-lamha mar nahiiN sakta

apki in chaar lino ne hume kuch kahane layak nahi chhoda. kya kahen dil ko chhu gai ye line. bahot sundar gazal likhi hai apne. meri dili daad kabuuul ffarmaiye janaab. ok ji ijaajat chahenge ab.inshah allah fir aisa khuuubsurat kalaam milega parhne ko.

khuda haffiiiz

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26th October 2006, 11:06 PM

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maut ki chaahat kam hi logoN ko hoti hai, kuch log kehte haiN ke "jaan hai to jahaan hai" mujhe is baat se ittefaaq nahiiN, maut hi ek aisi shay hai duniya meiN jo apne chaahne waaloN ki ummiidoN pe har baar kharaa utar ke dikhaati hai

is nazm ka tassavvur maine kayi saal pehle kiya tha aur waqt ke saath saath iske DhaaNche meiN bohat tabdiiliiyaaN bhi aayiiN aur shaayad aage bhi aayeNgii, ye kisi haal meiN bhi muqammal nahiiN hai, aaj mann hua ke post karuuN to kar raha huuN, ummiid hai aapko qaabil-e-ga'ur lagegi



nazm ka unvaan hai "zaroorat"


mula'iizaa farmaayeN :



nijaat qaid-e-Gham se mujhko dilaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi


tere dar pe maiN badii aas liye aayaa huuN
ashk aaNkhoN meiN haiN TuuTa hua dil laya huuN
suna hai dard ke maaroN ko panaah milti hai
dil ke zakhmoN ki tere paas davaa milti hai

mujhe vo jaam de ke pee ke dam nikal jaaye
taDap rahi hai jaan kuch sukuun mil jaaye
maiN ziNdagi se ab nibaah kar nahiiN sakta
maiN roz-roz,lamha-lamha mar nahiiN sakta


maine choDa tha zamaana jisey paane ke liye
usii ne choD diya mujhko, zamaane ke liye
tavvaqo'aat* se daaman ko chuDaaya hi nahiiN
dil ne us shaKhs ki yaadoN ko bhulaaya hi nahiiN

tavvaqo'aat = Expectations , UmmiideiN



maine bacchoN ki tarah dard ko paalaa dil meiN
muddatoN zakhm-e-mohabbat ko saNbhaala dil meiN
dil ke tuKdoN ki khalish ab nahiiN sahi jaati
mujhse haalaat yeh apni ab nahiiN dekhii jaati


jaan dene ke ilaawaa ko_ii chaara hi nahiiN
ab mera ziNdagii ke saath guzaara hi nahiiN
meri saaNsoN ka diyaa aaj bhujhaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi

maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi...................


apni aaraa se zaruur nawaazeiN


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maikash

maikash ji adaab!!


aapki tehreer ka jawaab nahi...

aap jo bhi likhte hain...aisa steek likhte hain..padne mein saroor aa jatahai....
maine pehle ye subah padi..toh achhi lagi..soch shaam ko aaker itminaan se padenge.....Ek oomda kism ki chhez padne ko mili...

maine bacchoN ki tarah dard ko paalaa dil meiN
muddatoN zakhm-e-mohabbat ko saNbhaala dil meiN
dil ke tuKdoN ki khalish ab nahiiN sahi jaati
mujhse haalaat yeh apni ab nahiiN dekhii jaati

ismein ahsaas ki aisi h=jhalak hai...ki dil,ko chhoo si jaati hai....


maine choDa tha zamaana jisey paane ke liye
usii ne choD diya mujhko, zamaane ke liye


waah...bahoot hi oomda dear....

kya kahein kya na kahein......bahoot khoob janaab


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Mohtaram Maikash saaheb, Aadab

Aaj kaafi waqt tha tau iDhar se guzra ur aap ko paRha ... par ab yeH afsoos ho raha hai kii maine pahle kyoN nahiiN paRha.. Aap kii yeH nazm is qadar dil ko bhai hai kii samajh meiN nahiiN aa raha hai ki kaise taarif ka haq ada karuuN.. tau saaheb maiN ghalti kar jaauN to peShgi meiN hi ma'azrat ka khwaaishmand huuN...

aap ke nazm ko paRh kar dil meiN yeh Khayaal aaya...


ai maut tuu mere qareeb aa aur gale se lagaale,
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tere dar pe maiN badii aas liye aayaa huuN
ashk aaNkhoN meiN haiN TuuTa hua dil laya huuN
suna hai dard ke maaroN ko panaah milti hai
dil ke zakhmoN ki tere paas davaa milti hai

mujhe vo jaam de ke pee ke dam nikal jaaye
taDap rahi hai jaan kuch sukuun mil jaaye
maiN ziNdagi se ab nibaah kar nahiiN sakta
maiN roz-roz,lamha-lamha mar nahiiN sakta

maine choDa tha zamaana jisey paane ke liye
usii ne choD diya mujhko, zamaane ke liye
tavvaqo'aat* se daaman ko chuDaaya hi nahiiN
dil ne us shaKhs ki yaadoN ko bhulaaya hi nahiiN

maine bacchoN ki tarah dard ko paalaa dil meiN
muddatoN zakhm-e-mohabbat ko saNbhaala dil meiN
dil ke tuKdoN ki khalish ab nahiiN sahi jaati
mujhse haalaat yeh apni ab nahiiN dekhii jaati

jaan dene ke ilaawaa ko_ii chaara hi nahiiN
ab mera ziNdagii ke saath guzaara hi nahiiN
meri saaNsoN ka diyaa aaj bhujhaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi

maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi....
waah! waah! waah! huzoor.. behad khuub..... ess se khuub-suurat bayaaN-e-bebasi kya ho sakti hai.. aap kii yeH nazm bohat achchhi lagii... Bohat khuub ravaani hai daad-0-mubaarak baad qubool kareN..

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maikash ji namaskar..........!

dil ko chu gaye aapki yeh nazam, har ek share mukamal lagga. bahut badiya bani hai nazam, dua hai app yu hi likhtey rahey.

aapki dost
sunita jee aapki duaa'oN ka aur daad ka tah-e-dil se mashkoor-o-mamnoon huuN, bohat shukriya


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maikasH ji kaise ho mere dost
aaj subha subha itni achhi nazam padhne ko mili baht achha laga ye nazam padhke iske asaar dil ko chhu gaye mere dost

aur ek sher to mujhe behaad pasand aaya wo saqi wala kya kamaal ka sher banaya hai aapne

jaan dene ke ilaawaa ko_ii chaara hi nahiiN
ab mera ziNdagii ke saath guzaara hi nahiiN
meri saaNsoN ka diyaa aaj bhujhaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi


bahot hi khub kaha hai aapne is sher me ,maikash ji is nazam ke liye dil se nikali daad kubul kijiyenga

apna khayal rakhiye , khus rahiye

jai shree karishna

aapka dost
dhaval
dhaval saahab aapne har baar ki tarah is dafaa bhi mujh na'ehl ki hausla afza'ii ki jiske liye behadd shukurguzaar huuN aapka, jo baNdh aapne khusuusan pasaNd farmaaya uske liye alag se shukriya qabuul kijiye


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"teri dunia mein dil lagta nahin wapas bula le..
mein sazde mein gira hoon mujhko e maalik utha le..."

maikash bhai saheb
namashkar
aapki dilkash nazm padh kar barbas jehan mein is purane geet ke bol gooj uthe...aapki kalam jab bhi uth_ti hai...dil par apne dastkhat kar jati hai...aapki nazm padh kar kuch yun laga jaise koi "baagi"... "maikhane roopi mandir" mein "saaqi roopi devi" se "maut ka vardaan" maang raaha hai..
aapki yeh "aarzoo" kabhi kubool na ki jaye....isi dua ke saath aapse izzazat chaunga...ek dilfareb nazm par naacheez ki dheron daad kubool kijiye...
-MANOJ KUREEL
Manoj bhai, namaste

miyaaN aap jis aNdaaz se daad ataa farmaate haiN uska jawaab haazir karne meiN jo diqqat pesh aati hai uska puuchiye mat, khair mera farz bantaa hai ke aapki muravvat ka shukurguzaar ho ke dikhaauN to kam se kam mera shukriya to tasleem kar hi lijiye

aur saahab ye jaate jaate aap jo "bad'duaa" de gaye haiN voh dil pe zaraa nagawaar guzrii hai


rab raakha
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nijaat qaid-e-Gham se mujhko dilaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi
**apke alfaaz padke mujhe apni ek purani post yaad aa gai aur who halt to aaj bhi mere saath hai jo apki gazal mein har tarah dekhne ko mil rahe hai.***

tere dar pe maiN badii aas liye aayaa huuN
ashk aaNkhoN meiN haiN TuuTa hua dil laya huuN
suna hai dard ke maaroN ko panaah milti hai
dil ke zakhmoN ki tere paas davaa milti hai

****dil ka totana maikesh ji kya kya nahi dikhata hai hamein. Kuch samjh pana bahut mushkil ho jata hai bas ek baat samjh aati hai ki kash ek pal yaisa aaye jo sab tarah se shanty de jaye.***

mujhe vo jaam de ke pee ke dam nikal jaaye
taDap rahi hai jaan kuch sukuun mil jaaye
maiN ziNdagi se ab nibaah kar nahiiN sakta
maiN roz-roz,lamha-lamha mar nahiiN sakta

***maut ki chahat dard ka had se gujarana…….Sahi kaha na???***


maine choDa tha zamaana jisey paane ke liye
usii ne choD diya mujhko, zamaane ke liye
tavvaqo'aat* se daaman ko chuDaaya hi nahiiN
dil ne us shaKhs ki yaadoN ko bhulaaya hi nahiiN

****jab koi hamein yun akela chod de aur hamne use pane ke liye koi kasar na rakhi ho to us shakhs ko bhulana us jeevan mein to namumkin hai. Uski yaad hamein pal pal marti hai aur hamari majboori dekho ham phir bhi jeete hai.***



maine bacchoN ki tarah dard ko paalaa dil meiN
muddatoN zakhm-e-mohabbat ko saNbhaala dil meiN
dil ke tuKdoN ki khalish ab nahiiN sahi jaati
mujhse haalaat yeh apni ab nahiiN dekhii jaati

****par kya kare ye haalat bhi dekhne padte hai aur is tarah bhi jeena padta hai. Majbor hai ham…***

jaan dene ke ilaawaa ko_ii chaara hi nahiiN
ab mera ziNdagii ke saath guzaara hi nahiiN
meri saaNsoN ka diyaa aaj bhujhaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi

***jaan dena itna aasaan nahi hai janaw. Bahut mushkil hai kyun ki ye jaan sirf hamari nahi hai ye ehsas tab hota hai jab ham ise dena chahte hai tamaam haalat hamein yaisa karne se rok lete hai****

maikash ji
kya kahun ab ye gazal kahan tak asar kar gai. Kuch nahi kah sakti iski tariff mein.
Kyun ki mere saare shabad ek hi shabd mein simat gaye…. ‘maut’. Is par likhne par jab ham majborr hote hai tab kuch nahi hota hai hamare pas bas ek khawahish hoti hai ise pane ki.
Apne jaisa ki bataya ki kaphi time hua ise likhe huye.to bas yahi dua hai ki who sab haalat bhi badal gaye ho apke liye jab apne ye chaha tha ki apko sukun is tarah mile.
Aapko bahut bahut khushi mile yahi dua hai meri.
sakhi
sakhi sb

aadaab

aapne apna nihayat qeemati waqt kharch karke jo apne ta'suraat se nawaaza hai uske liye shukriya jaisa lafz bohat kam pad raha hai, farz ka taqaaza hai to shukriya qabuul farmaaiye

amooman maiN internet ki adabii mehfiloN meiN shayri ke ilaawa kam hi koi baat kehta huuN lekin aapka hat padhne ke baad kuch baateiN arz karne ki zaroorat mehsuus huii to kar raha huuN

aapne sahi farmaaya ke jaan dena aasaan nahiiN lekin mohtarma ye baat har kisi pe laaguu nahiiN hoti, go mere khayaal meiN khudkushi karna buzdilii hai lekin maut ki khwaahish rakha alag baat hai...!!

shayri meiN aksar muhaavirey aur kahaavatoN ka istemaal kiya jaata hai aur mujhe un meiN se kayi jumloN se saKht shikayat hai jaise ke "ummiid pe hi duniya qaayam hai", mere ye maan'na hai ke insaan ki sabsi badi dushman uski apni ummiideiN hoti haiN, mere khayaal meiN kisi se bhi kisi tarah ki koi bhi ummiid rakha sabse badii bewakoofi hai aur ye baat maiN tajurbey se keh raha huuN, phir bhi ummiidoN ke pher meiN har koi aa jaata hai, maut waahid ek aisi shay hai jo na-ummiid nahiiN karti


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maine bacchoN ki tarah dard ko paalaa dil meiN
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dil ke tuKdoN ki khalish ab nahiiN sahi jaati
mujhse haalaat yeh apni ab nahiiN dekhii jaati


jaan dene ke ilaawaa ko_ii chaara hi nahiiN
ab mera ziNdagii ke saath guzaara hi nahiiN
meri saaNsoN ka diyaa aaj bhujhaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi

janaan maikash sabhib appko raj ki sat sri akaal ji....kaya baat hai janaab appki kalam ki sanjeedgi ki....har lafaz bhut pyara lagga....kitni sacchai hai is nazam me...ki bass kush lamho par pari waqt ki dhool hat gai...meri daad kabool kijiyega....yu hee karam farmate rahiyega hum pyaso par....take care......raj.....

Rajveer saahab Sat Sri Akaal

bhai aap jaise dostoN ki mehrbaani hai jo chaar log duaa salaam karne laayaq samajhte haiN varna mujh jaise kahaana-kharaab ko kaun puuchta hai

aapko nazm pasaNd aayi mujhe khushi hai is baat ki , daad ke liye shukriya saahab


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pranaam maikash ji,

mujhe vo jaam de ke pee ke dam nikal jaaye
taDap rahi hai jaan kuch sukuun mil jaaye
maiN ziNdagi se ab nibaah kar nahiiN sakta
maiN roz-roz,lamha-lamha mar nahiiN sakta

apki in chaar lino ne hume kuch kahane layak nahi chhoda. kya kahen dil ko chhu gai ye line. bahot sundar gazal likhi hai apne. meri dili daad kabuuul ffarmaiye janaab. ok ji ijaajat chahenge ab.inshah allah fir aisa khuuubsurat kalaam milega parhne ko.

khuda haffiiiz

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maikash ji adaab!!


aapki tehreer ka jawaab nahi...

aap jo bhi likhte hain...aisa steek likhte hain..padne mein saroor aa jatahai....
maine pehle ye subah padi..toh achhi lagi..soch shaam ko aaker itminaan se padenge.....Ek oomda kism ki chhez padne ko mili...

maine bacchoN ki tarah dard ko paalaa dil meiN
muddatoN zakhm-e-mohabbat ko saNbhaala dil meiN
dil ke tuKdoN ki khalish ab nahiiN sahi jaati
mujhse haalaat yeh apni ab nahiiN dekhii jaati

ismein ahsaas ki aisi h=jhalak hai...ki dil,ko chhoo si jaati hai....


maine choDa tha zamaana jisey paane ke liye
usii ne choD diya mujhko, zamaane ke liye


waah...bahoot hi oomda dear....

kya kahein kya na kahein......bahoot khoob janaab


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aadaab aur namaste

aapko nazm pasaNd aayi ye jaan kar yaqeen kijiye mujhe behadd khushi hui hai, aur aapne is haqeer si kavish ko is laayiq samjha ke khusuun waqt nikaal kar padha to miyaaN yuuN lag raha hai ke kam se kam mehnat zaaya na gayi, aapki muhabbat aur inayat ka shukurguzaar huuN bhai


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Mohtaram Maikash saaheb, Aadab

Aaj kaafi waqt tha tau iDhar se guzra ur aap ko paRha ... par ab yeH afsoos ho raha hai kii maine pahle kyoN nahiiN paRha.. Aap kii yeH nazm is qadar dil ko bhai hai kii samajh meiN nahiiN aa raha hai ki kaise taarif ka haq ada karuuN.. tau saaheb maiN ghalti kar jaauN to peShgi meiN hi ma'azrat ka khwaaishmand huuN...

aap ke nazm ko paRh kar dil meiN yeh Khayaal aaya...


ai maut tuu mere qareeb aa aur gale se lagaale,
kee jee raha huuN meiN teri khwaaish meiN har aik lamha,
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waah! Kya aagaaz hai, Bebasi ko khuuB lafzoN meiN sajaaya hai huzoor,


waah! waah! waah! huzoor.. behad khuub..... ess se khuub-suurat bayaaN-e-bebasi kya ho sakti hai.. aap kii yeH nazm bohat achchhi lagii... Bohat khuub ravaani hai daad-0-mubaarak baad qubool kareN..

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amooman maiN internet ki adabii mehfiloN meiN shayri ke ilaawa kam hi koi baat kehta huuN lekin aapka hat padhne ke baad kuch baateiN arz karne ki zaroorat mehsuus huii to kar raha huuN

aapne sahi farmaaya ke jaan dena aasaan nahiiN lekin mohtarma ye baat har kisi pe laaguu nahiiN hoti, go mere khayaal meiN khudkushi karna buzdilii hai lekin maut ki khwaahish rakha alag baat hai...!!

shayri meiN aksar muhaavirey aur kahaavatoN ka istemaal kiya jaata hai aur mujhe un meiN se kayi jumloN se saKht shikayat hai jaise ke "ummiid pe hi duniya qaayam hai", mere ye maan'na hai ke insaan ki sabsi badi dushman uski apni ummiideiN hoti haiN, mere khayaal meiN kisi se bhi kisi tarah ki koi bhi ummiid rakha sabse badii bewakoofi hai aur ye baat maiN tajurbey se keh raha huuN, phir bhi ummiidoN ke pher meiN har koi aa jaata hai, maut waahid ek aisi shay hai jo na-ummiid nahiiN karti


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mein apki last mein likhi kuch batoin se puri tarah sahmat hun.
haan sahi hai bujdil hi khudkhushi karte hai.
maut ki tamnaa rakhna alag baat hai. lekin maut ki tamnaa karna bhi tab hota hai jab koi dard apne saari hadeoin se gajr jaye phir bhi kahin koi kami na ho dard ki.
dard ka had se gujrna hai dawa ho jana, aur ye dawa hai ..mere khyaal se maut...
apne ye bhi sahi kaha ki umeedein karna bevkoofi hai.kyun ki jab ham umeed karte hai to woh hi totati hai.
umeedein karna insaan chod n ahi sakta hai kyun ki kahin na kahin koi umeed woh hamesha lagaye rakhta hai.
haan maut kabhi nirash nahi karti.
ye bhi sach hai.
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Mian Nahin jaanta ye nazm maine kitni baar pad daali... Aur kuchh is tarah isme doob gaya ke daad dena hi bhool gaya!!

Kya kahoon Maikash!! Nazm pad ke shahir ji ki nazmein yaad aa gayi... Har lafz jaise taraash ke likha gaya hai, dard ke saath saath khoob mehnat bhi kee gayi lagti hai isko likhne mein. Isse padne ka nahin gungunnane ka mann hua har baar, tarran ban gayi aapki ye nazm padte padte..

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maikash ji aapki yeh nazam aaj baar baar padney ka man hua...aur maine esko padda bhi...jab phele baar padi thi tab shayad es nazam ko mahaz shayri hi samja tha maine....par aaj padney par yeh mujhe aapke dil ki sadha laggi...har lafaz dard mein dooba hua mahsoos hua...!

dua karti hoon kudha aapko dard se koso door rakhey......!

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mein apki last mein likhi kuch batoin se puri tarah sahmat hun.
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maut ki tamnaa rakhna alag baat hai. lekin maut ki tamnaa karna bhi tab hota hai jab koi dard apne saari hadeoin se gajr jaye phir bhi kahin koi kami na ho dard ki.
dard ka had se gujrna hai dawa ho jana, aur ye dawa hai ..mere khyaal se maut...
apne ye bhi sahi kaha ki umeedein karna bevkoofi hai.kyun ki jab ham umeed karte hai to woh hi totati hai.
umeedein karna insaan chod n ahi sakta hai kyun ki kahin na kahin koi umeed woh hamesha lagaye rakhta hai.
haan maut kabhi nirash nahi karti.
ye bhi sach hai.
sakhi with shukriya and smile.


aapne mera bayaan lagta hai dil se padha hai, aapko meri baatoN se ittefaaq hai iske jawaab meiN ye no nahiiN kahuuNga ke "khush huuN" go ehsaas ko jab zabaaN milti hai to kuch tassalli to zaruur hoti hai

aapke tabsire ke liye shukurguzaar huuN


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Mian Nahin jaanta ye nazm maine kitni baar pad daali... Aur kuchh is tarah isme doob gaya ke daad dena hi bhool gaya!!

Kya kahoon Maikash!! Nazm pad ke shahir ji ki nazmein yaad aa gayi... Har lafz jaise taraash ke likha gaya hai, dard ke saath saath khoob mehnat bhi kee gayi lagti hai isko likhne mein. Isse padne ka nahin gungunnane ka mann hua har baar, tarran ban gayi aapki ye nazm padte padte..

Shukriya isse share karne ka..

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aapko nazm pasaNd aayi aur aapne hamesha ki tarah hausla bhi badhaaya hai, ummiid karta huuN ke aayiNda bhi aapki ummiidoN par kharaa utar ke dikha sakuN


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maikash ji aapki yeh nazam aaj baar baar padney ka man hua...aur maine esko padda bhi...jab phele baar padi thi tab shayad es nazam ko mahaz shayri hi samja tha maine....par aaj padney par yeh mujhe aapke dil ki sadha laggi...har lafaz dard mein dooba hua mahsoos hua...!

dua karti hoon kudha aapko dard se koso door rakhey......!

god bless u
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namaste aur SSA



khumar Barabankvi se farmaaya hai :

sau baar ye dil dard ki bhaTTi meiN jaley hai
tab ek Ghazal husn ke saaNche meiN dhaley hai


ab mujhe samajh nahiiN aa raha ke maiN aapke khat ka jawaab kaise duuN ?


kuch sawaaloN ka jawaab hota bhi nahiiN



ziNdagi rahi to phir mileNge

rab raakha
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namaste aur SSA



khumar Barabankvi se farmaaya hai :

sau baar ye dil dard ki bhaTTi meiN jaley hai
tab ek Ghazal husn ke saaNche meiN dhaley hai


ab mujhe samajh nahiiN aa raha ke maiN aapke khat ka jawaab kaise duuN ?


kuch sawaaloN ka jawaab hota bhi nahiiN



ziNdagi rahi to phir mileNge

rab raakha
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maikash ji

....................? mujhe jawaab mil gaya hai.....!

kudha aapko lambi aur kushiyo se bhari zindgi de...yehi dua hai aapki dost ki....!

god bless u


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maut ki chaahat kam hi logoN ko hoti hai, kuch log kehte haiN ke "jaan hai to jahaan hai" mujhe is baat se ittefaaq nahiiN, maut hi ek aisi shay hai duniya meiN jo apne chaahne waaloN ki ummiidoN pe har baar kharaa utar ke dikhaati hai

is nazm ka tassavvur maine kayi saal pehle kiya tha aur waqt ke saath saath iske DhaaNche meiN bohat tabdiiliiyaaN bhi aayiiN aur shaayad aage bhi aayeNgii, ye kisi haal meiN bhi muqammal nahiiN hai, aaj mann hua ke post karuuN to kar raha huuN, ummiid hai aapko qaabil-e-ga'ur lagegi



nazm ka unvaan hai "zaroorat"


mula'iizaa farmaayeN :



nijaat qaid-e-Gham se mujhko dilaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi


tere dar pe maiN badii aas liye aayaa huuN
ashk aaNkhoN meiN haiN TuuTa hua dil laya huuN
suna hai dard ke maaroN ko panaah milti hai
dil ke zakhmoN ki tere paas davaa milti hai

mujhe vo jaam de ke pee ke dam nikal jaaye
taDap rahi hai jaan kuch sukuun mil jaaye
maiN ziNdagi se ab nibaah kar nahiiN sakta
maiN roz-roz,lamha-lamha mar nahiiN sakta


maine choDa tha zamaana jisey paane ke liye
usii ne choD diya mujhko, zamaane ke liye
tavvaqo'aat* se daaman ko chuDaaya hi nahiiN
dil ne us shaKhs ki yaadoN ko bhulaaya hi nahiiN

tavvaqo'aat = Expectations , UmmiideiN



maine bacchoN ki tarah dard ko paalaa dil meiN
muddatoN zakhm-e-mohabbat ko saNbhaala dil meiN
dil ke tuKdoN ki khalish ab nahiiN sahi jaati
mujhse haalaat yeh apni ab nahiiN dekhii jaati


jaan dene ke ilaawaa ko_ii chaara hi nahiiN
ab mera ziNdagii ke saath guzaara hi nahiiN
meri saaNsoN ka diyaa aaj bhujhaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi

maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi...................


apni aaraa se zaruur nawaazeiN


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Assalam maikash bahot acha likha hai apne such hai yeh nazam kabhi mukammal ho hi nahi sakti jab tak app ke dil me dard hai aisa hi dard app bikharte rahenge..... yeh silsila to sansoo ke tootjane ke baad hi khatm hoga......
app jis daur se guzar rahe hai iska andaz main laga sakta hun kun ki is daur se main bahi guzar raha hoon....... jo dard apne apne sine mein daba rakha hai use bahot hi khubsurti se kagaz pe utara hai apne.......
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Aadaab Maikash Saheb!!! kaise hai aap!!
dino baad aaye, aap bhi !! mein bhii!!
ab tak aapki gazalo ki kashish se wakif thaa ...!! aaj Nazm se bhii do chaar huii!! bhai kyaa baat hai !! aapkaa kalaam hamesha ki tarah ek lau sa raushan hai!!!
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maikash ji

....................? mujhe jawaab mil gaya hai.....!

kudha aapko lambi aur kushiyo se bhari zindgi de...yehi dua hai aapki dost ki....!

god bless u


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Assalam maikash bahot acha likha hai apne such hai yeh nazam kabhi mukammal ho hi nahi sakti jab tak app ke dil me dard hai aisa hi dard app bikharte rahenge..... yeh silsila to sansoo ke tootjane ke baad hi khatm hoga......
app jis daur se guzar rahe hai iska andaz main laga sakta hun kun ki is daur se main bahi guzar raha hoon....... jo dard apne apne sine mein daba rakha hai use bahot hi khubsurti se kagaz pe utara hai apne.......
yeh dua hai meri rab se apko apki khushiya zaroor mile

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aadaab bhai

aapne bilkul durust farmaaya hai ke yeh silsila to ab saaNsoN ke TooTne ke baad hi khatm hoga

kya sha'y hai ziNdagi aur iNsaan bhi, dekheN.... na koii apni marzi se duniya meiN aata hai aur na koii jaata hi hai apni marzi se hai phir bhi dil ko yeh ummiid rehti hai ke sab kuch apni marzii se hi ho....ajeeb baat hai

ba-har-haal aapki duaa'oN ka shukurguzaar huuN bhai aur dua'go huuN ke aapko bhi aapki maNzil ataa ho


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Aadaab Maikash Saheb!!! kaise hai aap!!
dino baad aaye, aap bhi !! mein bhii!!
ab tak aapki gazalo ki kashish se wakif thaa ...!! aaj Nazm se bhii do chaar huii!! bhai kyaa baat hai !! aapkaa kalaam hamesha ki tarah ek lau sa raushan hai!!!
dad kabool kijiyegaa!!


miyaaN shukr karo ke aa gaye

bhai huuN to maiN chacha Ghalib ki tarah GHazal ka hi aashiq lekin kabhi kabhi do misre'y dil ki ghuTan bayaan karne meiN kam paDte'y ma'loom hote haiN to nazm keh leta huuN


aapki hausla-afza'ii ke liye shukurguzaar huuN


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maikash bhaiyya.................jaane kahaan se iss nageene par nazar pad gayi..........

ye dil jab tootataa hai to uski awaaz hoti hai.............aksar aapko padkar iss baat ka ehsaas hota hai..................


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7th January 2016, 12:26 PM

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aadaab yaaraan-e-mehfil

maut ki chaahat kam hi logoN ko hoti hai, kuch log kehte haiN ke "jaan hai to jahaan hai" mujhe is baat se ittefaaq nahiiN, maut hi ek aisi shay hai duniya meiN jo apne chaahne waaloN ki ummiidoN pe har baar kharaa utar ke dikhaati hai

is nazm ka tassavvur maine kayi saal pehle kiya tha aur waqt ke saath saath iske DhaaNche meiN bohat tabdiiliiyaaN bhi aayiiN aur shaayad aage bhi aayeNgii, ye kisi haal meiN bhi muqammal nahiiN hai, aaj mann hua ke post karuuN to kar raha huuN, ummiid hai aapko qaabil-e-ga'ur lagegi



nazm ka unvaan hai "zaroorat"


mula'iizaa farmaayeN :



nijaat qaid-e-Gham se mujhko dilaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi


tere dar pe maiN badii aas liye aayaa huuN
ashk aaNkhoN meiN haiN TuuTa hua dil laya huuN
suna hai dard ke maaroN ko panaah milti hai
dil ke zakhmoN ki tere paas davaa milti hai

mujhe vo jaam de ke pee ke dam nikal jaaye
taDap rahi hai jaan kuch sukuun mil jaaye
maiN ziNdagi se ab nibaah kar nahiiN sakta
maiN roz-roz,lamha-lamha mar nahiiN sakta


maine choDa tha zamaana jisey paane ke liye
usii ne choD diya mujhko, zamaane ke liye
tavvaqo'aat* se daaman ko chuDaaya hi nahiiN
dil ne us shaKhs ki yaadoN ko bhulaaya hi nahiiN

tavvaqo'aat = Expectations , UmmiideiN



maine bacchoN ki tarah dard ko paalaa dil meiN
muddatoN zakhm-e-mohabbat ko saNbhaala dil meiN
dil ke tuKdoN ki khalish ab nahiiN sahi jaati
mujhse haalaat yeh apni ab nahiiN dekhii jaati


jaan dene ke ilaawaa ko_ii chaara hi nahiiN
ab mera ziNdagii ke saath guzaara hi nahiiN
meri saaNsoN ka diyaa aaj bhujhaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi

maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi...................


apni aaraa se zaruur nawaazeiN


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maikash
waah maikash ji kya rawaan nazm hai..bas padhte hee banti hai....
daad qubool karein...

shukriya sarika jo aap ise samne layiin...

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maikash bhaiyya.................jaane kahaan se iss nageene par nazar pad gayi..........

ye dil jab tootataa hai to uski awaaz hoti hai.............aksar aapko padkar iss baat ka ehsaas hota hai..................
Sarika behen,

itti puraani nazm kahaaN se dhooNdi?

maiN to bhool bhi gaya tha, iske baad is nazm ko bilkul naye sirey se likha bhi hai, kahiiN likh rakkhi hai mil gayi to post karuuNga


mujhe phir se khud ko khud se milvaane ke liye aabhaari hooN


khush rahiye

rab raakha
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai

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aadaab yaaraan-e-mehfil

maut ki chaahat kam hi logoN ko hoti hai, kuch log kehte haiN ke "jaan hai to jahaan hai" mujhe is baat se ittefaaq nahiiN, maut hi ek aisi shay hai duniya meiN jo apne chaahne waaloN ki ummiidoN pe har baar kharaa utar ke dikhaati hai

is nazm ka tassavvur maine kayi saal pehle kiya tha aur waqt ke saath saath iske DhaaNche meiN bohat tabdiiliiyaaN bhi aayiiN aur shaayad aage bhi aayeNgii, ye kisi haal meiN bhi muqammal nahiiN hai, aaj mann hua ke post karuuN to kar raha huuN, ummiid hai aapko qaabil-e-ga'ur lagegi



nazm ka unvaan hai "zaroorat"


mula'iizaa farmaayeN :



nijaat qaid-e-Gham se mujhko dilaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi


tere dar pe maiN badii aas liye aayaa huuN
ashk aaNkhoN meiN haiN TuuTa hua dil laya huuN
suna hai dard ke maaroN ko panaah milti hai
dil ke zakhmoN ki tere paas davaa milti hai

mujhe vo jaam de ke pee ke dam nikal jaaye
taDap rahi hai jaan kuch sukuun mil jaaye
maiN ziNdagi se ab nibaah kar nahiiN sakta
maiN roz-roz,lamha-lamha mar nahiiN sakta


maine choDa tha zamaana jisey paane ke liye
usii ne choD diya mujhko, zamaane ke liye
tavvaqo'aat* se daaman ko chuDaaya hi nahiiN
dil ne us shaKhs ki yaadoN ko bhulaaya hi nahiiN

tavvaqo'aat = Expectations , UmmiideiN



maine bacchoN ki tarah dard ko paalaa dil meiN
muddatoN zakhm-e-mohabbat ko saNbhaala dil meiN
dil ke tuKdoN ki khalish ab nahiiN sahi jaati
mujhse haalaat yeh apni ab nahiiN dekhii jaati


jaan dene ke ilaawaa ko_ii chaara hi nahiiN
ab mera ziNdagii ke saath guzaara hi nahiiN
meri saaNsoN ka diyaa aaj bhujhaa de saaqi
maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi

maiN haath joDta huuN zahar pilaa de saaqi...................


apni aaraa se zaruur nawaazeiN


shukriya
maikash


maine bacchoN ki tarah dard ko paalaa dil meiN
muddatoN zakhm-e-mohabbat ko saNbhaala dil meiN
dil ke tuKdoN ki khalish ab nahiiN sahi jaati
mujhse haalaat yeh apni ab nahiiN dekhii jaati


ab in aashaar ki koi taref kare bhi to kaise.... kitnaa dard samet laaye hain hain ke waah nikle ke aah..... mere dil ki daad qubool kijiye....

Shaad.......


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15th January 2016, 09:59 AM

Maikash bhai..

Na jaane kaise ye peshkash nazar ke saamne aane se reh gayii.. aisa lagta hai ba-khuda gunaah ho gaya..

Nazm ke baare mai bohat badi baat kehne jaa raha huN meri nazar maiN.. aapki nazm padh ke yuN laga jaise majaaz khud likh ke padh rahe hai ise..

Aur khas taur pe matla jo aapne bandha hai.. wo poori nazm pe haavii tha bhaarii tha.. meri alag se mubaarakbaad uske liye ..

Khyaal rakhiye apna

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