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10th August 2007, 01:31 PM
din ta gujar janda hai sham de intezar ch par iss raat da mai ki kara,
moia sadhra dafan karda thak gya sham dhale fir je uthdia ne mai ki kara. lakh kaj ke rakha akhaan de pani nu, nahi hunda palka to smbhal mai ki kara. kikra de phula de rakhwale nahi hoya karde, phir v mai ohna de haar proi jawa mai ki kara. kali raat ne dang dang jehar chada diti, das kehra vaed bulawa mai ki kara. saun mahina pani varda jora te, mera soka na vat ave mai ki kara. ishq de boote di mai godi karda reh gya, par je khet vaad nu khawe ta mai ki kara. tere didar nu tarsda mai neendo jaga na, par je tu sufne vich v na aave ta mai ki kara. |
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10th August 2007, 08:15 PM
HA JI "A-BABBU" JI
Tuhanu kiha si ke asi reply dite bina nahi reh sakde, TERI POETRY READ KITE BINA NA REH SAKA, TAA MAI KI KARA AGAR REPLY DITE BINA NA REH SAKA , TAA MAI KI KARA AGAR TAINU KUCH LIKHE BINA NA REH SAKA, TAA MAI KI KARA HA JI A-BABBU JI SANU VI DAS DEVO ASI KI KARIYE, bahut hi pyara likhiya hai, eh waliya line taa bahut hi sohniya han ke.......... moia sadhra dafan karda thak gya sham dhale fir je uthdia ne mai ki kara. lakh kaj ke rakha akhaan de pani nu, nahi hunda palka to smbhal mai ki kara. akhir wich taa...............kya baat hai tere didar nu tarsda mai neendo jaga na, par je tu sufne vich v na aave ta mai ki kara. "Love is life So don't live ur life without love "  |
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10th August 2007, 08:46 PM
WOW !KYA BAAT HAI LOVEDEEP!lagda hai tusi v reply dinde dinde ik bahoot sohne poet ban javo ge.chalo iss vaar mai tuhanu shukria nahi kehnda dost.eh ik banawati jehi chez lagdi hai. ena keh dinda hai muskurande raho hamesha hi.
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11th August 2007, 01:12 PM
Waah ji Waah bhut hi sohna likhaya dear......
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19th July 2008, 10:09 AM
meharbani ji
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22nd July 2008, 03:43 AM
Bahut hi khooob and sohniya lines han din ta gujar janda hai sham de intezar ch par iss raat da mai ki kara, moia sadhra dafan karda thak gya sham dhale fir je uthdia ne mai ki kara. Kuch k kamiya vi lagiya ne, par je khet vaad nu khawe ta mai ki kara mere anusar Vaad khet nu khandi hundi hai kali raat ne dang dang jehar chada diti, das kehra vaed bulawa mai ki kara. je tusi eda likhde ta jiada good lagna si, kali raat ne dang dang jehar chada diti, je vaed vi ilaz na kar pave, mai ki kara. plz mind na karna, ek dosti de tor te hi eh gustakhi kiti aa,  GOD IS GREAT
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25th July 2008, 03:55 PM
Kuch k kamiya vi lagiya ne, par je khet vaad nu khawe ta mai ki kara mere anusar Vaad khet nu khandi hundi hai ji HEER ji ha mere to likhan vich galti hoi hai,jis to mai janu v ha.par tusi sach hi poetry di bahut doonghi samajh rakhde ho..tusi. eh line eda hi chahidi c je vid vi na ilaaz kar pave ta mai ki kara.. bahut bahut shukriya HEER ik suchaji salah lai.. |
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26th July 2008, 12:20 PM
Babbu ji bahut hi wadhiyaa. I'm impressed. Kujh lines ne te bahut andar tak asar keetaa.
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26th July 2008, 01:41 PM
din ta gujar janda hai sham de intezar ch,
par vairan raat da mai ki kara, (.....heart touching) moia sadhra dafan karda thak gya, sham dhale fir jee uthdia ne mai ki kara. (.....aida hunda hai aksar) lakh kaj ke rakha akhaan de pani nu, nahi hunda palka to smbhal mai ki kara. (dard akhiya raste vag jaye taan behtar hai) kikra de phula de rakhwale nahi hoya karde, phir v dil ohna de haar proi jawa mai ki kara. kali raat ne dang dang jehar chada diti, das kehra vaed bulawa mai ki kara. (heer ji da sujao theek hai es te) saun mahina pani varda jora te, mera soka na vat ave mai ki kara. ishq de boote di mai godi karda reh gya, par je khet vaad nu khawe ta mai ki kara. (eh v heer ji de according sahi hai) tere didar nu tarsda mai neendo jaga na, par je tu sufne vich v na aave ta mai ki kara. (bahut khoob) Babbu ji....es vich koi shaq nahi hai ki tusi bahut vadiya likhde ho, bas kuj galla.n da khayal rahkna jaroori hai, likhan to baad 2-3 baar khud jaroor pad liya karo, kyunki je koi spelling mistake hove taan sudhaari ja sakti hai, ek gal hor har sher to baad 1 line da gap jaroor de diya karo...es naal padan wale nu asaani hundi hai te samaj v jaldi aaunda hai. umeed hai meri gal da bura nahi manoge kyuki main te ehi chauNdi aa ki ek acchey poet nu jayada to jayada member pad sakan. dua kardi aa ki parmatma tuhadi kalam nu hor nikhaar deve. kush raho duava.n naal  .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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26th July 2008, 10:13 PM
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26th July 2008, 10:25 PM
Babbu ji....es vich koi shaq nahi hai ki tusi bahut vadiya likhde ho, bas kuj galla.n da khayal rahkna jaroori hai, likhan to baad 2-3 baar khud jaroor pad liya karo, kyunki je koi spelling mistake hove taan sudhaari ja sakti hai, ek gal hor har sher to baad 1 line da gap jaroor de diya karo...es naal padan wale nu asaani hundi hai te samaj v jaldi aaunda hai.
umeed hai meri gal da bura nahi manoge kyuki main te ehi chauNdi aa ki ek acchey poet nu jayada to jayada member pad sakan. dua kardi aa ki parmatma tuhadi kalam nu hor nikhaar deve. kush raho duava.n naal sat sri akal Sunita ji,ji mai iss da jaroor khyaal rakhaga.and tuhade sujhaw te amal karan di poori poori koshish karaga.mainu sach hi bahut changa lageya ki tusi meri poetry nu bahut dhayaan naal read karde ho and meriya kamiya to janu karwaunde ho.bahut bahut meharbani tuhade beshkimti sujhawa lai..tuhadiyaaN duawaN anmol ne.. |
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