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Me and the rain - 25th January 2005, 03:03 AM

Hi Everyone,

We have a very notable Shayar with us "dard_thesorrow"
In his signature i found a line which just touched my hart, that line is:

"I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying"

I was sitting alone remembering my old days and slowly this line turned into a poem for me, which I am going to post here.
I hope he likes it and so do all of you.

Dard_thesorrow ji if you do not like my poetry do let me know for the inspiration is from u.

Me and the rain

On a rainy morning
When the sun was hiding
I was out in the open
Drenched from top to bottom

My love had asked me to meet
Our usual place in the field
Behind the wind mill
Under the cedar tree

It was a lovely place
Near the quiet lake
Where the lovebirds met
When the sun is about to set

But nobody was there today
Just the rain and me
Been waiting the whole day
but she had never been late

Then She came running
i reached out and pulled her to me
She was breathing heavily
Her eyes were watery

She then moved away
And opened her wet hands
She gave me the chain
I gave her on our first date

I looked in her eyes
And she looked in mine
I understood what she didn't say
She realised, turned, ran away

I stood there for hours
Holding my hart in my hand
I didn't know how to cry
For with her I always smiled

I thank god it rained
Oh I just love the rain
for It hid my tears,
It hid my pain

That day that rain
those tears and that pain
The rain stopped then
but in my eyes it still rains

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hi rohin,
it was simply superb.the way u cud express ur felings is fantastic.dear wow wat a depth of emotions of urs in it.well thx for inviting me for this thread or else i wud hv missed sumthing which wen read touched my heart.i dun knw wat to say as this poem felt as its me who wanted to express this feeling and the words r written by u.even i love rains for this reason tht it can hide our tears. lovely. aaj ur words hv touched my heart.keep writing ur depth of feelings like this ahead too.all the best buddy.

KITNA BEBAS HAI INSAAN KISMAT KE AAGE,
KITNA DOOR HAI SAPNA HAQIQAT KE AAGE,
KOI RUKI HUI DHARKAN SE POOCHE,
KITNA TADAPTA HAI DIL MOHABBAT KE AAGE.

TAQDEER HUMEIN US MOD PAR LE AAYI JAHAN GUM HI GUM AUR TANHAI HAI,BARAS RAHE HAI AANKHON SE AANSU KYA ISI KA NAAM JUDAI HAI.

KAFAN MERE ARMANO KA KAFI RANGEEN HAI,
CHITAIN TO KHOON KI HAI,
ZAKHM SANGEEN HAI,
AASMAAN ROYA NA HAWA KUCH KEH SAKI
MERE AANSOUN KI GAWAH YE GILI ZAMEEN HAI.

AAJafter reading ur poetry dil ke sab zakhm uber aaye,loved reading it. aaise hi likhte rahiye.keep the flames high n all the best for future too.
   
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25th January 2005, 09:06 AM

rohin
i have no words to express my happiness about this gr8test concern i have ever recieved from any frnd from shayri .com frnd
chalo koi to hai yaha jo hamare baare me sochta hai,thanks a lot rohin thank u very very much
i just loved the simplicity in the language

and i loved these lines very very much
"She then moved away
And opened her wet hands
She gave me the chain
I gave her on our first date

I looked in her eyes
And she looked in mine
I understood what she didn't say
She realised, turned, ran away

I stood there for hours
Holding my hart in my hand
I didn't know how to cry
For with her I always smiled

I thank god it rained
Oh I just love the rain
for It hid my tears,
It hid my pain

That day that rain
those tears and that pain
The rain stopped then
but in my eyes it still rains"


thank a lot rohin for this wonderful gift i will always treasure this its a wonderful memory
thank u very very much rohin

ek sher main bhi pesh karna chahunga

khwab me ishq farmate ho
paas aane se itraate ho
har pal aankhon me aate ho aur
ek boond ki tarah beh jaate ho


thkank u rohin
khuda aapko lambi umr de
khushiyo se aapka aangan bhar de
aur aapke saare dard hume de de
aapka jubin

once again thank u very very much -keep writing and reading


main aur meri tanhayee..............

I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying

jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
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log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....

hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
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25th January 2005, 09:55 AM

Rohin ji......


milne aur bichadne ke riwaaz ko baarish ki boondon ke saath bakhubi dhala hai aapne......


aachi lagi aapki ye poem......



**(*·.¸(`·.¸ ¸.·´)¸.·*)**
*·.¸Paigaam -e- Aman¸.·*
**(¸.·´(¸.·* *·.¸)`·.¸)**


~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
inhan ankhaaon vicho kadi, tere hanju vaghe si.....
aaj ki hoye, jehda ^AMAN^ da lahoo vagda ae......

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25th January 2005, 09:57 AM

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hi rohin,
it was simply superb.the way u cud express ur felings is fantastic.dear wow wat a depth of emotions of urs in it.well thx for inviting me for this thread or else i wud hv missed sumthing which wen read touched my heart.i dun knw wat to say as this poem felt as its me who wanted to express this feeling and the words r written by u.even i love rains for this reason tht it can hide our tears. lovely. aaj ur words hv touched my heart.keep writing ur depth of feelings like this ahead too.all the best buddy.

KITNA BEBAS HAI INSAAN KISMAT KE AAGE,
KITNA DOOR HAI SAPNA HAQIQAT KE AAGE,
KOI RUKI HUI DHARKAN SE POOCHE,
KITNA TADAPTA HAI DIL MOHABBAT KE AAGE.

TAQDEER HUMEIN US MOD PAR LE AAYI JAHAN GUM HI GUM AUR TANHAI HAI,BARAS RAHE HAI AANKHON SE AANSU KYA ISI KA NAAM JUDAI HAI.

KAFAN MERE ARMANO KA KAFI RANGEEN HAI,
CHITAIN TO KHOON KI HAI,
ZAKHM SANGEEN HAI,
AASMAAN ROYA NA HAWA KUCH KEH SAKI
MERE AANSOUN KI GAWAH YE GILI ZAMEEN HAI.

AAJafter reading ur poetry dil ke sab zakhm uber aaye,loved reading it. aaise hi likhte rahiye.keep the flames high n all the best for future too.
Wah Jasleen,

Ur words are also fantabulous.
Really loved them. I am also glad that you liked my words.

But one thing is dangerous that it rekindled the flame in ur wounds. Not good.

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rohin
i have no words to express my happiness about this gr8test concern i have ever recieved from any frnd from shayri .com frnd
chalo koi to hai yaha jo hamare baare me sochta hai,thanks a lot rohin thank u very very much
i just loved the simplicity in the language

and i loved these lines very very much
"*****"

thank a lot rohin for this wonderful gift i will always treasure this its a wonderful memory
thank u very very much rohin

ek sher main bhi pesh karna chahunga

khwab me ishq farmate ho
paas aane se itraate ho
har pal aankhon me aate ho aur
ek boond ki tarah beh jaate ho


thkank u rohin
khuda aapko lambi umr de
khushiyo se aapka aangan bhar de
aur aapke saare dard hume de de
aapka jubin

once again thank u very very much -keep writing and reading
Hi Jubin,

Arre dost bhai inspiration tum the aur thank you mujhe de rahe ho.
Kaise gal kar rahe ho Dost.
Chalo ab apne saare thank you vapas lo..bus 5 min deta hoon..LOL
EK dost ne ek dost ke feelings samjh usko sirf shabdo mein dhalne ki koshish ki hai.
Aapko acha laga mere liye yehi bahut hai.

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25th January 2005, 10:02 AM

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Rohin ji......


milne aur bichadne ke riwaaz ko baarish ki boondon ke saath bakhubi dhala hai aapne......


aachi lagi aapki ye poem......
Hi Aman,

What shall i say?

thanks for coming mere dost.
I am really gladd you liked it.
Sab kuch paani hai mere dost...

I think this is the best i have written till date. Why? I guess it is heart feelt thats why.

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25th January 2005, 10:09 AM

ok rohin sahab main sab thank u wapas leta hu
par 2 thank u tumhe rakhne padenge
ek mujhse inpiration lene ke liye
doosra mere baare me likhne ke liye

lolo aahahah
ok


main aur meri tanhayee..............

I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying

jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
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log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....

hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
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25th January 2005, 10:16 AM

Dardd ji,

Matlab ab mere ko gaana gana hi padega aur gadho ko bulana hi padega..lol

Ek jagjit singh ki gazal hai...

Mujhe gussa dilaya ja raha hai....

Well bhai dosti mein formalities nahi karne ka..

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ok maaf kigiyega
o sorry no formalities right
ahahah


main aur meri tanhayee..............

I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying

jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
«´¨`·..¤-JuBin-¤..·´¨`»
(¸.·'´(¸.·'´* ¤ *`'·.¸)`'·.¸)

log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....

hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
ho ke zameen ki khakh aasmaan se dil laga baithe
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25th January 2005, 10:34 AM

Rohin ji....

Your poem is just amazing......

Aur hogi kaise nahi....inspiration jo dard ji se mila hai.....

Dard ji ki shayri to wakai kamaal ki hoti hai...hai naa.......

Yours this one is very very very nice......really.....

Bye...Take Care....

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Rohin ji....

Your poem is just amazing......

Aur hogi kaise nahi....inspiration jo dard ji se mila hai.....

Dard ji ki shayri to wakai kamaal ki hoti hai...hai naa.......

Yours this one is very very very nice......really.....

Bye...Take Care....

Megha
Hi Megha,

I am really happy that you liked it.
haan unki bhi shayri kamal ki hoti hai.
Thanks for coming and encouraging me.

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Hi Rohin - 25th January 2005, 11:18 AM

The poetry written by you is absolutly fabulous. I have no words to expresss my feelings on it

Barish aayi, Barish aayi
lekar ek paigam
padh lo logon sun lo usko
jo vo layi hai aaj
Barish kehti hai yeh aasman se girta pani nahi
aansun hain un toote dilon ke jo main layi apne sang
yeh girte pani ki awaaz nahi, awaaz hai un dilon ki jo toote hain aaj
Logon na khush ho tum ki main layi ek saugat
sochon un lohgon ke bare mein jinka paigam layi hun aaj
kehte hain dil mujhe ki main ay hun unke aansun chupane ko
unhein kya pata bhagwan ne mujhe bheja hai unka dard chupane ko.

Rohin, yeh ek koshis thi barish ka paigam dene keliye, ummed hai pasand ayegi apko


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25th January 2005, 11:23 AM

Hi Nidhi,

Yaar you ae too good.
Fantastic my friend. the lines were really wonderful.

thanks for making my post so wonderful with ur composition

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Rohin...! - 25th January 2005, 01:07 PM

Hii rohin
Great one... really loved the poerty of yours
You know ......
words are always same and simple but the community of the words is simply awesome.
And The best thing about this poetry... It is carrying The story,
You wont see me ofen repllying any post as i don't read poertys here But your poerty Is so spacial that i couldn't prevent '
Rain aaah very nice life from dard the sorrow
I m looking forward to write something on in
Bheegte mausam me bheegti aankhen
Or dekhiye youn ke kissi ko pata na chale'
Fida ho gaye janaab
CHaliye chalte hain
aise he bulate rehna
acchi cheezon ke kadrdaan hum bhee hain
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Mai or samander,do gehre khwaab khuda ke.....
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25th January 2005, 01:10 PM

Hi karan thanks for coming,

Vaise aapne jo do line likhi woh bahut hi achi lagi humme.
yunhi likhte rehna.

Well i will keep u posted and
do keep posting ur wonderful thoughts


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25th January 2005, 01:15 PM

On a rainy morning
When the sun was hiding
I was out in the open
Drenched from top to bottom

My love had asked me to meet
Our usual place in the field
Behind the wind mill
Under the cedar tree

It was a lovely place
Near the quiet lake
Where the lovebirds met
When the sun is about to set

But nobody was there today
Just the rain and me
Been waiting the whole day
but she had never been late

Then She came running
i reached out and pulled her to me
She was breathing heavily
Her eyes were watery

She then moved away
And opened her wet hands
She gave me the chain
I gave her on our first date

I looked in her eyes
And she looked in mine
I understood what she didn't say
She realised, turned, ran away

I stood there for hours
Holding my hart in my hand
I didn't know how to cry
For with her I always smiled

I thank god it rained
Oh I just love the rain
for It hid my tears,
It hid my pain

That day that rain
those tears and that pain
The rain stopped then
but in my eyes it still rains


Hey Rohin!!

Tum to Anu Malik ko bhi Garvaanvit mehsoss kar doge dost....
Acchi inspiration hai... Tooo good budddyyy

Dost.. i can very well understand the feelings behind the post... but waht say.... Some great shayar said "Aur bhi gham hain zamane me mohabbat ke siva"......

Tumhare dard ko samjhte hain par Wahh na karen to shayri ki inshult hogi... Wah Wahh....


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25th January 2005, 02:15 PM

Hi Pulkit,

Sach wajah to hai hi dost.
Varna shayad yeh na likhta..

Anu malik to yaar mere pas hi aata hai...lol

Yaar mohabbat ke siva aur bhi gum hain humari zindagi mein..
Ek din un par bhi hum zaroor likhenge...

Philhal aap aaye padha aur aapka acha laga

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25th January 2005, 04:48 PM

rohin ji
baarish ko lekar ek aur sher pesh kar raha hu
aasha hai aapko pasand aayega

khwab dikhe bhi nahi or toot gaye,
vo humse mile bhi nahi or ruth gaye,
hum jagte rahe duniya soti rahi,
ek baarish hi thi jo sath mein roti rahi...


zaroor bataiyega kaisa laga


main aur meri tanhayee..............

I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying

jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
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log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
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25th January 2005, 04:54 PM

Hi Jubin bhai,

Wah kya baat likhi hai,

Magar dua hai humari ki yeh barish ke paani ke saath saath aapke dard bhi beh jayein.

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rohin ji is par bhi humne ek sher likha hai
aaj hi humne post kiya hai


khwaab me ishq farmate ho
milne aane se itraate ho
har pal aankhon me aate ho
aur aansu ki tarah beh jaate ho

dard hi dard


dard ko na dekhiye dard se aakhir dard ko bhi dard hota hai,dard ko bhi zaroorat hai pyar ki,aakhir pyar me dard hi to hamdard hota hai.........


main aur meri tanhayee..............

I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying

jootha hi sahi,
kaash koi mujhe bhi pyar karta.......
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log dil ko dard samajhte hai,
ham dard ko dil samajhte hai.....

hui humse ye nadani ki teri mehfil me aa baithe,
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Jubin ji,

Bahut acha likha hai yunhi likhte raha karein,

Dard ..... Dard hi to hai

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26th January 2005, 08:53 AM

Oh I love the rain
It hides my tears
It hides my pain

I was walking alone
and it started to rain
I looked above
Oh it was dark again

As it started to pour
I reached out to feel
The sky started to roar
Oh the sweet smell

I began to play
jumping in joy
Dancing in rain
It was ecstacy

I began to cry
for I missed her today
As we always did
Enjoy the first rain

Oh I love the rain
It hides my tears
It hides my pain

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Good post and follow ups, Rohin and Dardji good posts of rain now i think its time for a rainbow!!!!

Bandu log itna mat bigiye barsat mein, kahi sardi na ho jaye
Aanso phir nikle to chale jayiyega shower mein.....


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26th January 2005, 09:26 AM

Shadow ji,

Kya baat hai aaj to aap bade rangeen ho rahein hain...LOL

Your reply was fantabulous.

Bhai ankhon mein pani
Kuch yaadein kuch afsane
Kuch dil ki kuch dosti ki
Bus yunhi kuch saathi purane
Gelli ankhon se dekho zara
Satrangi hai yeh zindagi

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Well Rohin,
thats great kept the theme and covered the subject.
Bole tu hai great....


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hi robin,
i m really late replying u here. actually i was unable to express wat i really wanted to say after reading ur poem. thoughts were there bt words were difficult to come out. anyways after a long time i am here to say sumthing to u. hope u love reading it....................


Memories of you and when I learned everything about love
Memories that I try to reject
But sometimes I end up crying
because I can't forget
All the love you brought and left in my way.
Sometimes I wonder why
All this memories come to my mind
When I thought it was easy to leave you behind

I was wrong because my broken heart still misses and call for your hands,
To feel it pump for you.
Now all I have is memories,
Memories that brings emptiness.
Memories of the days we used to talk,
When we used to think we were the only lovers in this crazy world,
When I used to think our love was the more valuable
than all the pearls and gold,

Memories sealed forever by my side,
memories I will always keep deep inside.

after reading ur post, i really lost into it n this was wat i cud cum out with.
   
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26th January 2005, 05:42 PM

Hi Jasleen,

a wonderful poetry and wizardry of words my friend. But so much pain inside you should not be allowed to bottle up. Let yourself free. Let yourself fly like a bird. The cage is not for you. Realise your dreams and passion. Trust me. Life is not as painful as you think it is. there is a lot in life to see.

A old poem of mine just for you.

Moments of life

Dew drops on a red rose
The rays of sun thru a tree
The sweet sound of chirping birds
The sun melting into the sea
Stars sparkling in the Milky Way
The innocent smile of a child
Cuddling into mummy’s arms
Arm wrestling with papa
Stories told by my granny
Teasing but caring of your sister
Scolding by teacher for being naughty
Having chocolate all over the face
Sliding in the mud & dancing in rain
The first day at college
Bunking class to see movies
Partying all nite and coming home late
And getting caught as we come in
The feeling of being in love
Walking on the beach with your love
The very first kiss to bliss
The moment of getting married
The birth of one’s own child
So beautiful and so wonderful
But are these, what we cherish
We don’t seem to remember them
Lost are these somewhere in time
Lost are the real moments of life
Pause and stand to observe
What have we got and what have we missed
Having wealth yet not rich
All the luxury yet not comfortable
Everybody around but alone
Moments of life my friend
You missed them and your life

It is in its original form and raw. This poem changed some forms when i posted it here earlier as i tried to remove the imperfections but i feel it somehow lost the real touch of emotion. But i put the original here for you to realise that not evrything is perfect and not everything is glorious and happy. It is you who have to make the world a better place to live in. Hope you relaise that pain is not everything but life is. For us your happiness.

I hope

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26th January 2005, 05:47 PM

rohin my brother

I am really impressed by the lines you have written.
These are really very heart touching and very softly but very effectively delivered.
Normally I do not read every post at this forum, but fortunately today first time i read you and specially this poem, and now think I will not miss your any line.
Simply I can say these words are "bohat khushbudaar khoobsurat guldasta hain visl o firaaq ka"
Please keep continue writing, and by reading these lines i can assure you , you can write much much better.

God bless you.

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rohin,
i dun knw wat to say now. wow wat adepth of emotions u wrote for me. i understand wat u r trying to tell me bt buddy things are not easy at my end. i try to cum out of it but such circumstances are created tht i am agian lost in the depth of sorrows. anyways still smiling in this bitter world as smile on my face doesnt make others feel the sorrows in my heart.and i hate those who pity me. i really want to come out of the depth of this pain . even i want to get free frm this cage, but buddy its easy to say bt in reality its really difficult. anyways i m lucky to hv such wonderful friend who really cares for my feelings. thx buddy
   
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rohin my brother

I am really impressed by the lines you have written.
These are really very heart touching and very softly but very effectively delivered.
Normally I do not read every post at this forum, but fortunately today first time i read you and specially this poem, and now think I will not miss your any line.
Simply I can say these words are "bohat khushbudaar khoobsurat guldasta hain visl o firaaq ka"
Please keep continue writing, and by reading these lines i can assure you , you can write much much better.

God bless you.

musharrafhusain
Hi Musharraf sahab,

I am really happy that my poetry touched your hearts.
Pata nahi ki mein acha likhta hoon ki nahi. Magar sab kuch dil se Likhta hoon. Kissi ke dil ke taar ko ched doon aur unke chehre par ek muskurahat ya ek chintan ke rekha chod doon to mujhe lagat hai mera prayas safal hua hai.

Aap ki shubkamnao ke liye shukriya. Aate rahiyega.

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rohin,
i dun knw wat to say now. wow wat adepth of emotions u wrote for me. i understand wat u r trying to tell me bt buddy things are not easy at my end. i try to cum out of it but such circumstances are created tht i am agian lost in the depth of sorrows. anyways still smiling in this bitter world as smile on my face doesnt make others feel the sorrows in my heart.and i hate those who pity me. i really want to come out of the depth of this pain . even i want to get free frm this cage, but buddy its easy to say bt in reality its really difficult. anyways i m lucky to hv such wonderful friend who really cares for my feelings. thx buddy
Hi Jasleen kudiye,

Mein khya ji ki haal hai,

I am sure buddy you can come out of it.
Waise dost yahan kissi ko kissi ki phikar nahi hoti. Pity to duur ki baat hai.

Haan yeh zaroor kahonga..... Mein doston ko dard mein nahi chodta bhale khushi mein woh daman chuda lein. i know its difficult.

Zindagi mein har rasta aasan nahi hota. Hota to yeh zindagi hi nahi hoti.

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rohin i know this. i understand ur nature. thts why i said na ki i m lucky tht god gv me u in my life. thx buddy for all ur care n love for me.each moment that i spend in ur company is close to my heart and is cherished a whole lot.however hard i try, i wont be able to repay for all that u have done to make my life rich in numerous ways.
   
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hi - 26th January 2005, 08:54 PM

dearest rohin, der se aayi par aapki peom jaane kitni baar padhi, kehne ko peom hai aur feel karne ko..........jaane.....kya kaun jaane.....

rohim the words are so so drenched in pain that one cant control and while reading the keyyboard filled with tears....i could feel what u wrote, u know like they say in devdass i dont remember exactly but hum dil ka haal sunate hai aur log wah wah wah karte hai ....ur words are filled up with pain and luv and the words i would never forget are: " the rain then stopped but in my eyes it still rains" u 've said a lot in these words, more then i can comment.

i dont know what i am saying is making much sense but rohin there is something i want to share that associated with rain. i will post it here or a different post.....but make sure u read it and reply to it. i will be waiting for it..


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26th January 2005, 09:57 PM

Hi Priya,

Pata nahi Mein bevakoof hoon ya kya....Sabko hasana chahta hoon magar rula bethta hoon.

Magar aapko acha laga to mujhe yeh jaan kar acha laga.

Haan kuch jasbaat hain jo kabhi kabhi kagaz par beh jaate hain.

I will await your post and i will surely reply to it. Hope i am the first one to see

Thanks a lot for coming

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HI - 26th January 2005, 10:27 PM

HI ROHIN

ye to apne apne dekhne ka dhang hai let me tell u something

yea what u wrote made me cry but hey guess what.....kayi baar hum rona chahte hai and we keep the fake smile on us ever....duniya to kya dekhegi we hide it from us even.....so when we come across someone who went through or hsa something like you have then in their writing, in their talks u find yourself and u shead the tears that u were holding from ages and ages, so crying sometimes is good my luv........it gets the burden of pain a little less for sure.........

if u know what i am saying....

so feel good....cuz i am with u as your friend always

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27th January 2005, 11:46 AM

Hi Priya,

Sach kaha aapne.
Kabhi kabhi ek nakab ek makhote ke neeche log apna asli chehra chupa te hain.
Aanson ko beh jana chahiye....
Kyunki ankhon mein jab aasoon ho to duniya dhundli aur begani lagti hai
Magar aankhein saaf ho to rangeen aur suhani.

Baat to wahi rahi na dost...Koi padhke rota ...Phir roke hasta ...
To lagta woh baat merei samjh gaya....lol

But i am glad you liked the poetry

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hi rohin! - 27th January 2005, 12:12 PM

Awsommme!...buddy!...its really very simple n cute!...ur words were also like small rain drops..one by one as i went through each word..droping of each one of them in my site made my heart wet! ..keep smiling buddy!

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Hi Komal,

Kya talent hai aap mein....

Kehte hain na Koi tareef kare to jiski tareef o rahi ho woh bhi bole

Wah kya tareef ki hai...

Yahan aapka reply dekh kar to aapki tareef larni chahiye ki apne itne ache shabdo mein dhale apne vichar...

Good .... Write more like this.

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hi! - 27th January 2005, 12:57 PM

Arrw wah kay baat hai...
Aye the apko padh ne ke liye.. apne baarein mein kuch padh ke jaa rahen hein..aye toh the apko sarahne..khud ki tareef sun ke jaa rahein hein!

...are rohin tumhare shabdo ka jadu thi meri tariff..aur kuch nahi!
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