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"kaya yehi pyar hai" ek gazal pyar bhare ahsaao.n ke saath -
10th December 2008, 10:26 PM
namaskaar dosto, aaj bahut dino baad kuch likha hai, pichley kuch dino se likhne ki koshish kar rahi thi, par likha nahi ja raha tha, ahsaas to thy par lafz saath nahi de rahe thy, ab ahsaaso.n ko kisi tarah lafzo.n mein pirone ki koshish ki hai, umeed hai aap sabko niraash nahi kiya hoga maine apni es poetry se.
teri ankhon mein kaisi masti hai
Doobi - doobi si dil ki hasti hai.
Pyar se tu ne jab mujhe dekha
Mahki - mahki ye dil ki basti hai.
chaand se bhi lage mujhe roshan
chaandni tujh pe yun barasti hai.
Ik jhalak teri dekh-ne ke liye
Har ghadi ye nazar tarasti hai.
Jane kya ho gaya "Sunita" ko
Aaj kal woh akele hansti hai.
10.12.2008
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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10th December 2008, 10:55 PM
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namaskaar dosto, aaj bahut dino baad kuch likha hai, pichley kuch dino se likhne ki koshish kar rahi thi, par likha nahi ja raha tha, ahsaas to thy par lafz saath nahi de rahe thy, ab ahsaaso.n ko kisi tarah lafzo.n mein pirone ki koshish ki hai, umeed hai aap sabko niraash nahi kiya hoga maine apni es poetry se.
teri ankhon mein kaisi masti hai
Doobi - doobi si dil ki hasti hai.
Pyar se tu ne jab mujhe dekha
Mahki - mahki ye dil ki basti hai.
chaand se bhi lage mujhe roshan
chaandni tujh pe yun barasti hai.
Ik jhalak teri dekh-ne ke liye
Har ghadi ye nazar tarasti hai.
Jane kya ho gaya hai "Sunita" ko
Aaj kal woh akele hansti hai.
10.12.2008
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sunita di apka ehshash hume bahut acha laga
apka ye last sher humare dil me utar gaya
Jane kya ho gaya hai "Sunita" ko
Aaj kal woh akele hansti hai.
bahut acha likha hai apne
khush rahiye humesha
humari dua sada apke sath hai
AankheN khuleeN to jaag uTheeN hasrateN tamaam Uss ko bhi kho diyaa jissay paya thaa khwaab mein
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11th December 2008, 02:43 AM
Kya baat hai sunita jee.. sadah lafzoN main intekhab karte hue ek tasweer se jo bani last sher pe ek nishan sa chor gayi .. mujhe aapki ye kashm-o-kash behad pasand aayi
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KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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11th December 2008, 05:17 AM
Pyari Di
bahot din baat fir aapki Ghazal mahfil main nazar aayi......isika hi intezar tha aapki Roshni ko.........khubsurat ehesaas ke saath dilki baat bakhubi bayaan kiye hain aap.....
Ghazal to sidha dil main utar gayi........humesha khus rahiye
aur apni Roshni ko aise ghazal padhne ka mouka dete rahiye
pyar ke saath
aapki Roshni
Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
Goodbye SDC
Diya
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11th December 2008, 06:19 AM
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sunita di apka ehshash hume bahut acha laga
apka ye last sher humare dil me utar gaya
Jane kya ho gaya hai "Sunita" ko
Aaj kal woh akele hansti hai.
bahut acha likha hai apne
khush rahiye humesha
humari dua sada apke sath hai
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Dinesh bhai....shukriya jo aapne meri es adna si koshish ko pasand kiya aur saraha....yoon hi aage bhi aapke saath ki tamaana rahegi.
aapki diii
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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11th December 2008, 08:53 AM
wah Sunita ji kya baa hai....bahoo khoob shabdoN ki nakkashi ke hai aapne.....merii janib se daad qubool kareiN dost......
Harash
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11th December 2008, 12:06 PM
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namaskaar dosto, aaj bahut dino baad kuch likha hai, pichley kuch dino se likhne ki koshish kar rahi thi, par likha nahi ja raha tha, ahsaas to thy par lafz saath nahi de rahe thy, ab ahsaaso.n ko kisi tarah lafzo.n mein pirone ki koshish ki hai, umeed hai aap sabko niraash nahi kiya hoga maine apni es poetry se.
teri ankhon mein kaisi masti hai
Doobi - doobi si dil ki hasti hai.
Pyar se tu ne jab mujhe dekha
Mahki - mahki ye dil ki basti hai.
chaand se bhi lage mujhe roshan
chaandni tujh pe yun barasti hai.
Ik jhalak teri dekh-ne ke liye
Har ghadi ye nazar tarasti hai.
Jane kya ho gaya hai "Sunita" ko
Aaj kal woh akele hansti hai.
10.12.2008
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wah sunita jee , mazza aa gaya !
taRapte dil ki ye chaahat mujhe behad pasand aayii !
kabhi deedaar ki chaahat ,kabhi paas aane ki chaahat ... wakeyii inn juzbaatoN ko barii khoobsooratii ke saath aapne kaagaz pe utara hai !
huzuur e alaa aap ne kalaam paRhne meiN waQt zaroor lagaya magar vo waQt kahiN se zaya nahi gaya balki uss ke aiwaz meiN mahfil ko ek naya gauhar naseeb hua !
mujhe ghazal khoob pasand aayii , ummeed karta huN aapki ye kashmaksh aage bhi dekhne ko milti rahegii !
maQte ko ek baar phir paRhna chaahunga !
jaane kya ho gaya sunita ko
aaj kal vo akele haNstii hai ...
bahut khoob ...
meri jaanib se daad Qabool farmaeiN ..
aur innhe bhi ... reps+++
apna khyaal rakheiN !
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11th December 2008, 12:31 PM
Sunita Ji
bahut achhi lagi aap ki ye gazal..kai baar padhi.aise hi likhti rahiye..
aur haan..aap ne makte ka jo sher likha hai galti se us ke pahle misre(line) mein 'hai' likh gya hai jo gazal ko be-bahar(out of meter) kar raha hai.aap thhe samjhen to hata den..main ne use underline kar diya hai.ummeed hai,meri salah ka bura nahin maanengi.
Jane kya ho gaya hai "Sunita" ko
Aaj kal woh akele hansti hai.
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11th December 2008, 12:45 PM
haan yahi pyar hai..
KOI RISHTA HAI,TA-ALLUQ HAI,NA PEHCHAAN KOI
PHIR BHI MERE LIYE RAHTA HAI PARESHAN KOI.
by rashant vasl
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namaskaar dosto, aaj bahut dino baad kuch likha hai, pichley kuch dino se likhne ki koshish kar rahi thi, par likha nahi ja raha tha, ahsaas to thy par lafz saath nahi de rahe thy, ab ahsaaso.n ko kisi tarah lafzo.n mein pirone ki koshish ki hai, umeed hai aap sabko niraash nahi kiya hoga maine apni es poetry se.
teri ankhon mein kaisi masti hai
Doobi - doobi si dil ki hasti hai.
Pyar se tu ne jab mujhe dekha
Mahki - mahki ye dil ki basti hai.
chaand se bhi lage mujhe roshan
chaandni tujh pe yun barasti hai.
Ik jhalak teri dekh-ne ke liye
Har ghadi ye nazar tarasti hai.
Jane kya ho gaya hai "Sunita" ko
Aaj kal woh akele hansti hai.
10.12.2008
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11th December 2008, 09:30 PM
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namaskaar dosto, aaj bahut dino baad kuch likha hai, pichley kuch dino se likhne ki koshish kar rahi thi, par likha nahi ja raha tha, ahsaas to thy par lafz saath nahi de rahe thy, ab ahsaaso.n ko kisi tarah lafzo.n mein pirone ki koshish ki hai, umeed hai aap sabko niraash nahi kiya hoga maine apni es poetry se.
teri ankhon mein kaisi masti hai
Doobi - doobi si dil ki hasti hai.
Pyar se tu ne jab mujhe dekha
Mahki - mahki ye dil ki basti hai.
chaand se bhi lage mujhe roshan
chaandni tujh pe yun barasti hai.
Ik jhalak teri dekh-ne ke liye
Har ghadi ye nazar tarasti hai.
Jane kya ho gaya "Sunita" ko
Aaj kal woh akele hansti hai.
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hi sunita dii ..bahut achi lagi aapki gajal .. bahut khoobsurat aandaaj e bayaan aapka hai..kabhi humein aisi shayri likhne ki tricks baatayein.. bahut khoob sach mein..
tujhko dekhenge to sitaare ziyaa mangenge...
or pyaase teri julfon se ghata mangenge...
apne kandhe se dupatta na sarkane dena ..
warna budhe bhi jawaani ki duaa mangenge... nm
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11th December 2008, 09:40 PM
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namaskaar dosto, aaj bahut dino baad kuch likha hai, pichley kuch dino se likhne ki koshish kar rahi thi, par likha nahi ja raha tha, ahsaas to thy par lafz saath nahi de rahe thy, ab ahsaaso.n ko kisi tarah lafzo.n mein pirone ki koshish ki hai, umeed hai aap sabko niraash nahi kiya hoga maine apni es poetry se.
teri ankhon mein kaisi masti hai
Doobi - doobi si dil ki hasti hai.
Pyar se tu ne jab mujhe dekha
Mahki - mahki ye dil ki basti hai.
chaand se bhi lage mujhe roshan
chaandni tujh pe yun barasti hai.
Ik jhalak teri dekh-ne ke liye
Har ghadi ye nazar tarasti hai.
Jane kya ho gaya "Sunita" ko
Aaj kal woh akele hansti hai.
10.12.2008
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Hnmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm As Usual Awesome hmmmmm
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11th December 2008, 11:42 PM
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namaskaar dosto, aaj bahut dino baad kuch likha hai, pichley kuch dino se likhne ki koshish kar rahi thi, par likha nahi ja raha tha, ahsaas to thy par lafz saath nahi de rahe thy, ab ahsaaso.n ko kisi tarah lafzo.n mein pirone ki koshish ki hai, umeed hai aap sabko niraash nahi kiya hoga maine apni es poetry se.
teri ankhon mein kaisi masti hai
Doobi - doobi si dil ki hasti hai.
Pyar se tu ne jab mujhe dekha
Mahki - mahki ye dil ki basti hai.
chaand se bhi lage mujhe roshan
chaandni tujh pe yun barasti hai.
Ik jhalak teri dekh-ne ke liye
Har ghadi ye nazar tarasti hai.
Jane kya ho gaya "Sunita" ko
Aaj kal woh akele hansti hai.
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jitne bhie misre likhe qaabil e tareef hain,saare misre aash'aar pyaar k ehsaas hai, lekin pyaar sirf"jaane kya ho gaya SUNITA ko ,
aaj kal woh akele hasti hai.....................is pyaar kehte hai... g'nt
shayer mit jaate hain jahaa se magar unka qall fanaah nahi hota,
Tanhaai bhie tanha hoti hain magar,TAHIR tanha nahi hota................./
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12th December 2008, 05:44 PM
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namaskaar dosto, aaj bahut dino baad kuch likha hai, pichley kuch dino se likhne ki koshish kar rahi thi, par likha nahi ja raha tha, ahsaas to thy par lafz saath nahi de rahe thy, ab ahsaaso.n ko kisi tarah lafzo.n mein pirone ki koshish ki hai, umeed hai aap sabko niraash nahi kiya hoga maine apni es poetry se.
teri ankhon mein kaisi masti hai
Doobi - doobi si dil ki hasti hai.
Pyar se tu ne jab mujhe dekha
Mahki - mahki ye dil ki basti hai.
chaand se bhi lage mujhe roshan
chaandni tujh pe yun barasti hai.
Ik jhalak teri dekh-ne ke liye
Har ghadi ye nazar tarasti hai.
Jane kya ho gaya "Sunita" ko
Aaj kal woh akele hansti hai.
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kitani tazGii Aur sacchaii hai is shayri main....
khas kar ke ye
Jane kya ho gaya "Sunita" ko
Aaj kal woh akele hansti hai.
badi hi pyaarii gazal hai merii daad hazir hai.....
apna khyaal rakhna
dilip
" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya
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12th December 2008, 06:02 PM
Jaane kya samjha woh mujhe
Jaane kya samjhi main useN
Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se
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13th December 2008, 02:55 AM
wah didi wah
kya baat hai
Jane kya ho gaya "Sunita" ko
Aaj kal woh akele hansti hai
sab se zyaada yeh sher
baqya tamaam sher bhi acche hain
didi yahaan is gazal mein ek nayi cheez dekhne ko mili hai
ek accha khasa experience
na zyaada lambe sher na zyaada tough words
aur sher itne simple hain ki bas koi bhi samajh lega
aur didi yeh sab ek umda shayar ki pehchaan hai
keep it up didi
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13th December 2008, 12:31 PM
teri ankhon mein kaisi masti hai
Doobi - doobi si dil ki hasti hai.
Pyar se tu ne jab mujhe dekha
Mahki - mahki ye dil ki basti hai.
wah wah di...kya khoob likha hai aapne....bahut khoobsurat ehsaas hain...per ye ghazal shayri-e-dard me kyu.n post kiya aapne ...isay to shayri-e ishq me hona chahiye shayed...hahaha........
hamesha khush rahiye
zainy
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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13th December 2008, 02:18 PM
Jaane kya samjha woh mujhe
Jaane kya samjhi main useN
Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se
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waah waah -
13th December 2008, 08:07 PM
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namaskaar dosto, aaj bahut dino baad kuch likha hai, pichley kuch dino se likhne ki koshish kar rahi thi, par likha nahi ja raha tha, ahsaas to thy par lafz saath nahi de rahe thy, ab ahsaaso.n ko kisi tarah lafzo.n mein pirone ki koshish ki hai, umeed hai aap sabko niraash nahi kiya hoga maine apni es poetry se.
teri ankhon mein kaisi masti hai
Doobi - doobi si dil ki hasti hai.
Pyar se tu ne jab mujhe dekha
Mahki - mahki ye dil ki basti hai.
chaand se bhi lage mujhe roshan
chaandni tujh pe yun barasti hai.
Ik jhalak teri dekh-ne ke liye
Har ghadi ye nazar tarasti hai.
Jane kya ho gaya "Sunita" ko
Aaj kal woh akele hansti hai.
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waah wah sunita jii aap ki kavita behad khoobsurat hai, ek dum taro tazaa pyaar se bhari hui,
aakhir kaun se din likhi hai.................. ,
ham teen logo ke janamdin par................
good creativity of mind
congrates and keep it up the good work
regards
manu
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15th December 2008, 09:55 PM
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Kya baat hai sunita jee.. sadah lafzoN main intekhab karte hue ek tasweer se jo bani last sher pe ek nishan sa chor gayi .. mujhe aapki ye kashm-o-kash behad pasand aayi
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namaskaar kunaal jii, aapne dil se meri poetry ko pada aur dil se saraha, hume behad accha laga, umeed hai yoon hi aapka saath bana rahega.
kush rahiye
duao.n ke saath
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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Pyari Di
bahot din baat fir aapki Ghazal mahfil main nazar aayi......isika hi intezar tha aapki Roshni ko.........khubsurat ehesaas ke saath dilki baat bakhubi bayaan kiye hain aap.....
Ghazal to sidha dil main utar gayi........humesha khus rahiye
aur apni Roshni ko aise ghazal padhne ka mouka dete rahiye
pyar ke saath
aapki Roshni
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meri roshni......tujhe intzaar tha tabhi to likha tumne meri poetry ko waqt diya, bahut bahut bahut shukriya
pyar aur duao.n ke saath
diii
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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16th December 2008, 10:08 PM
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wah Sunita ji kya baa hai....bahoo khoob shabdoN ki nakkashi ke hai aapne.....merii janib se daad qubool kareiN dost......
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harash jii, sach kahti hoon aapko achanak yahaN dekh kar hairaani bhi hue aur bahut khushi bhi hue, accha laga ki aapne apne keemti waqt se kuch pal meri poetry padne ke liye nikaley, bahut bahut shukriya aapka jo aapne mujhe pada aur meri housla afjai ki.
regards
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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17th December 2008, 01:52 PM
teri ankhon mein kaisi masti hai
Doobi - doobi si dil ki hasti hai.
<bahut khoob...man ko chhune vaali lines>
Pyar se tu ne jab mujhe dekha
Mahki - mahki ye dil ki basti hai.
<anterman hi samajh sakta hai..shabdo mein bayan nahi kiya ja sakta>
chaand se bhi lage mujhe roshan
chaandni tujh pe yun barasti hai.
<khubsurati tulan ho aur chaad na aaye aise bhi kahi hota hai..laajvab>
Ik jhalak teri dekh-ne ke liye
Har ghadi ye nazar tarasti hai.
<ek aisa entjaar jismein samay ka pata hi nahi lagta..the period, when love enters in the mind>
Jane kya ho gaya "Sunita" ko
Aaj kal woh akele hansti hai.
<shayad yahi pyaar hai...hakikat ke karib vastvikta ka dershan>
Aise hi likhate rahiye.. bahut dino baad padha aur man bahut pulkit hua.
shubhkamnao sahit,
Akant...
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आहट सी कोइ आये तो समझ लेना कि तुम हो...
AahaT si koi aaye to samajh lena ki tum ho...
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17th December 2008, 09:42 PM
Bahut hi saral si ghazal likh di hai aapne Sunita ji, matla khoob achha laga..
Shukriya isse yahan pesh karne ka
Jyoti
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17th December 2008, 10:15 PM
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wah sunita jee , mazza aa gaya !
taRapte dil ki ye chaahat mujhe behad pasand aayii !
kabhi deedaar ki chaahat ,kabhi paas aane ki chaahat ... wakeyii inn juzbaatoN ko barii khoobsooratii ke saath aapne kaagaz pe utara hai !
huzuur e alaa aap ne kalaam paRhne meiN waQt zaroor lagaya magar vo waQt kahiN se zaya nahi gaya balki uss ke aiwaz meiN mahfil ko ek naya gauhar naseeb hua !
mujhe ghazal khoob pasand aayii , ummeed karta huN aapki ye kashmaksh aage bhi dekhne ko milti rahegii !
maQte ko ek baar phir paRhna chaahunga !
jaane kya ho gaya sunita ko
aaj kal vo akele haNstii hai ...
bahut khoob ...
meri jaanib se daad Qabool farmaeiN ..
aur innhe bhi ... reps+++
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hello shitiz jii..........aapka review padkar dil garden garden ho jata hai...!
aapke likhe lafz tonic ka kaam karte haiN.....aur likhne ki prerna milti hai aapki aisi halla-sheri se....umeed hai aapko punjabi words samaj aa rahe honge...
bahut bahut shukriya.....yoon saath detey rahiyega.
god bless u
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17th December 2008, 10:18 PM
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Sunita Ji
bahut achhi lagi aap ki ye gazal..kai baar padhi.aise hi likhti rahiye..
aur haan..aap ne makte ka jo sher likha hai galti se us ke pahle misre(line) mein 'hai' likh gya hai jo gazal ko be-bahar(out of meter) kar raha hai.aap thhe samjhen to hata den..main ne use underline kar diya hai.ummeed hai,meri salah ka bura nahin maanengi.
Jane kya ho gaya hai "Sunita" ko
Aaj kal woh akele hansti hai.
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shukriya bhaiya aapne meri galti ka taraf mera dhayan kheencha, mujhe bahut sahi laga....aapke kahne ke baad maine us ek lafz ko edit kar diya hai....
aapka saath paakar accha laga....yoon hi apni chotti ka saath detey rahiyega
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haan yahi pyar hai..
KOI RISHTA HAI,TA-ALLUQ HAI,NA PEHCHAAN KOI
PHIR BHI MERE LIYE RAHTA HAI PARESHAN KOI.
by rashant vasl
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bahut khoob bhaiya.....aapki shayri ka koi jawaab nahi hai hamare paas....aapki shayri laajwaab hai
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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17th December 2008, 10:20 PM
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hi sunita dii ..bahut achi lagi aapki gajal .. bahut khoobsurat aandaaj e bayaan aapka hai..kabhi humein aisi shayri likhne ki tricks baatayein.. bahut khoob sach mein..
tujhko dekhenge to sitaare ziyaa mangenge...
or pyaase teri julfon se ghata mangenge...
apne kandhe se dupatta na sarkane dena ..
warna budhe bhi jawaani ki duaa mangenge... nm
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dear vicky..........bahut bahut shukriya ki aapne meri adna si shayri ko pada, saraha aur pasand kiya.....umeed hai yoon hi saath milta rahega.
kush raho
duao.n ke saath
tumhari diii
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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19th December 2008, 10:48 PM
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Hnmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm As Usual Awesome hmmmmm
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shukariya sahil bhai..................................
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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19th December 2008, 10:50 PM
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jitne bhie misre likhe qaabil e tareef hain,saare misre aash'aar pyaar k ehsaas hai, lekin pyaar sirf"jaane kya ho gaya SUNITA ko ,
aaj kal woh akele hasti hai.....................is pyaar kehte hai... g'nt
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Khan bhai....namaskaar
bahut accha laga yeh jaan kar ki aapko hamari yeh chotti si koshish bhi pasand aaye....umeed hai yoon hi aapka saath bana rahega.
khan sister
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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21st December 2008, 04:47 AM
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teri ankhon mein kaisi masti hai
Doobi - doobi si dil ki hasti hai.
Pyar se tu ne jab mujhe dekha
Mahki - mahki ye dil ki basti hai.
chaand se bhi lage mujhe roshan
chaandni tujh pe yun barasti hai.
Ik jhalak teri dekh-ne ke liye
Har ghadi ye nazar tarasti hai.
Jane kya ho gaya "Sunita" ko
Aaj kal woh akele hansti hai.
10.12.2008
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Aadaab !
bahut dinoN ke baad app ke kalam se ru ba ru hone ka mauQa milaa hai , app ko hamesha hi bahut acha likhti haiN mager yeh kalam apne app maiN aik micaal choR gaya hai , nihaayat hi umda rahi yeh ghazal , app ka parh ker bahut kuch seekhne ko milta hai , her aik sher Qaabil-e- taareef hai kisi aik ko muntakhib kerna to kaThin nahieN mere liye naamumkin waali baat hai ,
likhti rahiye ... app nihayat umda likhti haiN
app ki ghazal peRhate peRhte mujhe bhi likhne ko kuch dil kiyaa gustaakhi ke liye maazrat chata hoN , bus yeh maiN ne bombay maiN huwe waaQiye ko mad-e-nazer likha hai . umeed hai app ko bhi passand aaye ga
maaro mujhe maiN hindu hoN muslim bhi
Qeemat meri jaan ki bahut sasti hai
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22nd December 2008, 11:30 PM
mujeeb bhai
aap ke message ke aaakhir mein likhe sher ne mujhe majboor kar diya ki main aap se apni gazal ke chand misre share karoon:
Apne andar hi simta raha aadmi
haal poochhe kisi ka to kya aadmi.
nafraten dil mein ik aag bharti rahin
aur dhuen mein kahin kho gaya aadmi.
qatl hindu ka ho ya musalmaan ka
sach to ye hai ki maara gaya aadmi
ye sadi hum ko jis waqt rukhsat kahe
aei Khuda hum ko dena naya aadmi
mujrimon ki tarah apne hi ru-ba-ru
VASL aayega ik din bura aadmi.
by Prashant Vasl:from latest majmua'LAUT-TE-HUYE'
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Aadaab !
bahut dinoN ke baad app ke kalam se ru ba ru hone ka mauQa milaa hai , app ko hamesha hi bahut acha likhti haiN mager yeh kalam apne app maiN aik micaal choR gaya hai , nihaayat hi umda rahi yeh ghazal , app ka parh ker bahut kuch seekhne ko milta hai , her aik sher Qaabil-e- taareef hai kisi aik ko muntakhib kerna to kaThin nahieN mere liye naamumkin waali baat hai ,
likhti rahiye ... app nihayat umda likhti haiN
app ki ghazal peRhate peRhte mujhe bhi likhne ko kuch dil kiyaa gustaakhi ke liye maazrat chata hoN , bus yeh maiN ne bombay maiN huwe waaQiye ko mad-e-nazer likha hai . umeed hai app ko bhi passand aaye ga
maaro mujhe maiN hindu hoN muslim bhi
Qeemat meri jaan ki bahut sasti hai
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22nd December 2008, 11:35 PM
CHHAON DE KAR HI GUZAR JAATA HAI BAADAL KOI
YE ZAROORI NAHIN,HAR ABRA* SE BARSAAT BHI HO.
by rashant vasl
*ABRA-baadal
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namaskaar dosto, aaj bahut dino baad kuch likha hai, pichley kuch dino se likhne ki koshish kar rahi thi, par likha nahi ja raha tha, ahsaas to thy par lafz saath nahi de rahe thy, ab ahsaaso.n ko kisi tarah lafzo.n mein pirone ki koshish ki hai, umeed hai aap sabko niraash nahi kiya hoga maine apni es poetry se.
teri ankhon mein kaisi masti hai
Doobi - doobi si dil ki hasti hai.
Pyar se tu ne jab mujhe dekha
Mahki - mahki ye dil ki basti hai.
chaand se bhi lage mujhe roshan
chaandni tujh pe yun barasti hai.
Ik jhalak teri dekh-ne ke liye
Har ghadi ye nazar tarasti hai.
Jane kya ho gaya "Sunita" ko
Aaj kal woh akele hansti hai.
10.12.2008
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24th December 2008, 01:22 PM
teri ankhon mein kaisi masti hai
Doobi - doobi si dil ki hasti hai.
Pyar se tu ne jab mujhe dekha
Mahki - mahki ye dil ki basti hai.
chaand se bhi lage mujhe roshan
chaandni tujh pe yun barasti hai.
Ik jhalak teri dekh-ne ke liye
Har ghadi ye nazar tarasti hai.
Jane kya ho gaya "Sunita" ko
Aaj kal woh akele hansti hai.
kuch ajib faslon ka janam ho raha hai,
nasib jaag kar bhi mera so raha hai,
kaise keh du tuta dil dharkta nahi,
jabki dil ka har tukda ro raha hai
Anil Arora
Naulekahe par tere khoon ki boond hai,
Motiyo ki jagah par jada kaun hai,
Jiski khatir daga chandini se kare,
Puch suraj ki woh dilruba kaun hai?
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24th December 2008, 06:54 PM
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aaj aapki yeh pyaar bharii Ghazal paRh ke dil ko be-Had KhuShnuudee hu'ii... ehsaas dil ko chhu gaye haMeShaa ki tarah.. saadagee se bharii aapki yeh koShiSh bahot Khuub rahee...! daad hi daad!
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
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25th December 2008, 10:52 PM
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kitani tazGii Aur sacchaii hai is shayri main....
khas kar ke ye
Jane kya ho gaya "Sunita" ko
Aaj kal woh akele hansti hai.
badi hi pyaarii gazal hai merii daad hazir hai.....
apna khyaal rakhna
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dear dilip .............shukriya yoon saath banaye rakhne ke liye....aapki daad hume dil se sawikaar hai.
aapki diii
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25th December 2008, 10:55 PM
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Oye Hoye......di ishq wishk kya baat hain masaallah....bahut hi acchi ghazal hain................to yeh sab likhne ke liye chutti li gayi thi........
Jane kya ho gaya "Sunita" ko
Aaj kal woh akele hansti hai
di yeh halat kuch thik nahin hain..aisa hota hain to kya hua hain pata hain samajh gayi na aap
apki...
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Mausam tu nalayak ki nalayak hi rahi....ishq vishaq wali koi baat nahi hai, yeh gazal maine apne jaan-pahchaan wali kisi ladki ke ahsaaso.n par likhi hai, jaisi baateN woh apne bare mein batati thi....bas maine un baato.n ko lafzo.n ka shingaar karke aap sabke saamne rakh diya....samji kuch
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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25th December 2008, 10:57 PM
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wah didi wah
kya baat hai
Jane kya ho gaya "Sunita" ko
Aaj kal woh akele hansti hai
sab se zyaada yeh sher
baqya tamaam sher bhi acche hain
didi yahaan is gazal mein ek nayi cheez dekhne ko mili hai
ek accha khasa experience
na zyaada lambe sher na zyaada tough words
aur sher itne simple hain ki bas koi bhi samajh lega
aur didi yeh sab ek umda shayar ki pehchaan hai
keep it up didi
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Zamir bhai.....bahut accha laga aapki baato.n ko padkar.....aap sabki enhi baato.n se to hume likhne ka housla milta hai....maine to bas jo dil mein baat thi kahi hai, aapko woh pasand aaye yeh mere liye bahut maayne rakhta hai.....shukriya bhai yoon hi saath banaye rakhiyega.
aapki didi
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27th December 2008, 07:55 PM
Namaskaar Sunita Ji
bahaut samay baad aapko parha tow bahaut khushi hui.
aabhaar
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Me Pehli Baar Is Website Me Aya Hu Mujhe Aapki Gazl Bahut Pasand Aai Aap Is Tarah Hi Likhte Rahe.
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2nd January 2009, 10:09 PM
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teri ankhon mein kaisi masti hai
Doobi - doobi si dil ki hasti hai.
Pyar se tu ne jab mujhe dekha
Mahki - mahki ye dil ki basti hai.
wah wah di...kya khoob likha hai aapne....bahut khoobsurat ehsaas hain...per ye ghazal shayri-e-dard me kyu.n post kiya aapne ...isay to shayri-e ishq me hona chahiye shayed...hahaha........
hamesha khush rahiye
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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