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koyee umr mitane aya hai, koyee umr bitane aya hai -
5th February 2006, 12:05 PM
Ek Koshish aur
nakam muhabbat ka, dastoor nibhane aya hai tera ansoo tara ban ke, rah dikhane aya hai khud ro ro ke aise too, mujhe rulane aya hai aag lagane aya hai ,ki aag bujhane aya hai ishq me mit ke mujhe, manzil mil gayee jaise too bhola manzil se phir, rah pe lane aya hai syahee ban nayee kahanee, phir se ye likh dalenge too ankhon ke panee se, likha mitane aya hai? chhar pahar tak hathon se, tere ansoo ponche hain kaun manega mere ghar, too mujhe hansane aya hai mujh tak aane se pahale, ye do baten samjha de mujhe bulane aya hai ya, mujhe bhulane aya hai meree raah pe aaj woh apne, sare ansoo ro dega garm zamee par ankhon se, phool bichane aya hai main kal tak tera tha, aaj bhee bas tera hoon duniya se chip chip ke ab, too kya pane aya hai sar utha kee cheena, jisne kal mujh se tujh ko sar jhuka ke aaj wo mujh se, tujhko pane aya hai too mera sab kuch hai, aur main tere koyee naheen kya uljhan hai is rishte main, kya suljhane aya hai tere ghar main bhee hoon aaj, aur woh bhee aya hai koyee umr mitane aya hai, koyee umr bitane aya hai Anil aap ka dar khatkhate huye khul jayega meree shayree ke liye? |
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5th February 2006, 01:24 PM
Kammaal ka likha hai aapne.....
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5th February 2006, 01:27 PM
anil ji
bhaut sunder bhaut hi sunder sar utha kee cheena, jisne kal mujh se tujh ko sar jhuka ke aaj wo mujh se, tujhko pane aya hai nice keep writing shrdh 
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Re: koyee umr mitane aya hai, koyee umr bitane aya hai -
5th February 2006, 02:07 PM
kya baat hai........ek ek line jaise dil ko chu laeti hai
maza aagaya padkar.............hidhay chali kar diya aapne to aaj i am really getting short of words to describe how mush i like it. keep sharing such kind of shayris. pyar kare jo hume sone sa khara jiski ankhon me ho pyar hi pyar bhara me uska "veer" wo meri "zarra" -------------------Brizesh_kol_------------------------------------- 
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5th February 2006, 02:07 PM
thanks vipin aur shradhha achha laga aap logon pe paraha aur bataya kaisa likha apnee shayree pe remarks apnee shayree se bhee zyada pyare lagte hain
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tumhe pahalee baar parha maine -
5th February 2006, 02:11 PM
meree shayree main tum ko pahlee baar parha maien bahut achha laga aur tumheree id kee tasweer main gahara pyar nazar aya nam aur tasweer dono pyare hain passionatelover
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Re: tumhe pahalee baar parha maine -
5th February 2006, 02:16 PM
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pyar kare jo hume sone sa khara jiski ankhon me ho pyar hi pyar bhara me uska "veer" wo meri "zarra" -------------------Brizesh_kol_-------------------------------------
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5th February 2006, 02:58 PM
nakam muhabbat ka, dastoor nibhane aya hai tera ansoo tara ban ke, rah dikhane aya hai khud ro ro ke aise too, mujhe rulane aya hai aag lagane aya hai ,ki aag bujhane aya hai tera aansoo tara anke... waaaaaahhh...ky keh diya hai...! ishq me mit ke mujhe, manzil mil gayee jaise too bhola manzil se phir, rah pe lane aya hai syahee ban nayee kahanee, phir se ye likh dalenge too ankhon ke panee se, likha mitane aya hai? Last share was fab... too good...! chhar pahar tak hathon se, tere ansoo ponche hain kaun manega mere ghar, too mujhe hansane aya hai mujh tak aane se pahale, ye do baten samjha de mujhe bulane aya hai ya, mujhe bhulane aya hai Beautiful expression...! meree raah pe aaj woh apne, sare ansoo ro dega garm zamee par ankhon se, phool bichane aya hai main kal tak tera tha, aaj bhee bas tera hoon duniya se chip chip ke ab, too kya pane aya hai Welll said...! sar utha kee cheena, jisne kal mujh se tujh ko sar jhuka ke aaj wo mujh se, tujhko pane aya hai too mera sab kuch hai, aur main tere koyee naheen kya uljhan hai is rishte main, kya suljhane aya hai Nice one...! tere ghar main bhee hoon aaj, aur woh bhee aya hai koyee umr mitane aya hai, koyee umr bitane aya hai wellll said...loved these lines 2...! Anil aap ka dar khatkhate huye khul jayega meree shayree ke liye? ??? Yeh isi poem ka part thha? Hi Anil, Bahut hi khoobsurat aur asardaar ghazal pesh kii ahi aapne... Kucch sherto bass dil me utarte chale gaye... Meri daad kubool kijiyega... Likhte rahiye yun hi... Apna khyal rakhiye...TC  Woh last do lines ka is poem se relation nahi samjh aaya mujhe? Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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5th February 2006, 03:08 PM
pulkit shukriya bahut gahare dil se parh ke tum ne jawab diya hai samjha hai sahmjaya hai janata hoon poora waqt diya tum ne meree is ghazal ko. aur main dil se chahta tha tum parho is ko aur haan last lines bas mere request thee ke meree shauyree un logon ka darwaza khatakhta rahee hai jinhone abhee tak parha nahee aur kuch nahee it was not part of my shayree
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5th February 2006, 04:02 PM
too good.. bahoot achha likha hai aapne
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5th February 2006, 05:24 PM
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Anil ji aap to cha gaye yu hin mehfil sajaate rahiye jab yaad karte hai kisi ko wo waqt suhana hota hai uth jati hai kalam likhne ko wo pyar deewana hota hai kar deti hai haal-e-dil bayaan wo kalaam shayraana hota hai jab yaad karte hai kisi ko wo waqt suhana hota hai... ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* duniya mein kitna gam hai apna gam phir bhi kam hai ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* |
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shuriya -
5th February 2006, 05:32 PM
garima achha laga tum ne parha meree rachana adee se anant tak pahunch gayee agar sach main laga main cha gaya kuhulika main bahut khush hoon thanks again
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aapko aaj 1st baar pada .acha laga apka likha. aapke lafz bahut hi asar daar hai sachhi. lagta hai ki koi sachhaai bayaan kar raha hai apni hi. aage bhi yuhi aapko padne ka mauka milta rahe bas. sakhi शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे |
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5th February 2006, 08:40 PM
thanks aur wada hai jo khoonga dil se kahoonga achha bura ho sakta hai par baat dil kee hogee seedhe dil se
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5th February 2006, 09:47 PM
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adaab janaab,,, bahut khoob.......ab to alfaazon ko dhoondna hoga jo aapke in umda khayaalon ke layak ho,,,ek baar phir se hamari daad kabool kijiye is umda zehn e peshki ke liye,,, janaab hamari dua aapke saath hai ki issi khoobsurti se aap yuhi likhte rahiye aur hamare beech aate rahiye... apna khayaal rakhiyega... saakib... |
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5th February 2006, 09:53 PM
saakib mujhe likh ke achha laga tha. is liye chahta tha tum batayo tum ko parh ke bhee achha laga ke naheen. bahut achha laga ki tumhe achee lagee
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7th February 2006, 02:11 AM
Anil ji,
This one is beautiful of yours. like each and every words of this creation. iss khubsurat kalam pe meri daad kubul kare, aur yun hi likhte rahiye. take care! |
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7th February 2006, 08:11 AM
bahut achha lagata hai tumhha meree shayree ko parhana samjhana bas yoon hee mere ko babatee rhana agara achha lage
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7th February 2006, 11:27 AM
Anil Ji Mujhe Aapki Ye Poem Kitni Achi Laggi Ki Bata BHi Nahi Sakti
really Ye Lines Tuh dil Ko Chu Gai syahee ban nayee kahanee, phir se ye likh dalenge too ankhon ke panee se, likha mitane aya hai? chhar pahar tak hathon se, tere ansoo ponche hain kaun manega mere ghar, too mujhe hansane aya hai sar utha kee cheena, jisne kal mujh se tujh ko sar jhuka ke aaj wo mujh se, tujhko pane aya hai Really Superb.....yunhi likhte rahiyega...... Nahi Yaad Mujhko Yun Ton Vo Kya Tha Mera Sayad Meri Bhool Ko Vo Phir Dohrane Aaya Hai |
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7th February 2006, 10:30 PM
tum ne jo meree tareef kee mujhe bahut khushee milee us se ba mujeh parhte rahana taqat milegee e mujhe
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7th February 2006, 10:56 PM
nakam muhabbat ka, dastoor nibhane aya hai
tera ansoo tara ban ke, rah dikhane aya hai khud ro ro ke aise too, mujhe rulane aya hai aag lagane aya hai ,ki aag bujhane aya hai Anil saahab... Bahoot khoob likha hai aap ne.. YuN to har sher achchhe haiN par ye 2 sher bahoot achchhe lage.. Likhte Rahiye.. YuN hi... Meri kaamyaabi ka sitaara ab tum ho.. Meri Gham ki nadiyaan ka kinaara tum ho.. Tumhaare bina besahaara hai MayanK Meri Jaaan mera to sahaara tum ho.. MayanK |
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8th February 2006, 07:37 AM
mayank parhte rahana mujhe main koshish karoonag sab achh hee likhoon
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8th February 2006, 10:04 AM
Anil jee...
khuub likha hai aapne! nakam muhabbat ka, dastoor nibhane aya hai tera ansoo tara ban ke, rah dikhane aya hai yoonhi koshish karte rahiye...mehfil sajaae rahiye gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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8th February 2006, 01:00 PM
paras ne chuya to meree gahzal sona ho gayee yoon hee choote rahana meree shayree ko tum
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anil hai
bahut khub likha hai maja aa gaya padhke maine do baar padha hai isse bahut accha laga aise hi likhte rahiye aapka apna Cute Sa Ashu Honth Kaape Magar Koi Baat Na Ho Saki, Meri Khamosh Nigahen Har Baat Keh Gayi, Aur Unko Shikayat Hai Ki Baat Na Ho Saki.... (nm) *(`'·.¸(`'·.¸*¤*¸.·'´)¸.·'´)* .....«´¨`·..ASHU...·´¨`»...... *(¸.·'´(¸.·'´*¤*`'·.¸)`'·.¸)* ------------------------------------------------ |
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10th March 2006, 07:37 PM
do baar meree shayree ko parhne ke liye bahut bahut shukriya achha laga tum aye is bar bhee meree ek kuch din pahale kahe ehuyee rachana g uthee phir se
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19th March 2006, 11:23 PM
ANIL JI
yeh kya kar diya aapne anil ji.......ek ek line ka dard apne undar tak mehsus kiya .....iski ek ek line ne jaise mujhe hila ke rakh diya.............anil ji nazm jab dil ko chhoo jati hai , ya rula deti hai toh woh khuda ki ebadat ki treah khud ko mehsus hoti hai........aapki is nazm ne aaj yahi kiya.............aapki is nazm ne meri aatma ko chhoo liya.......... bahut sundar .......iski tareef ke liye shbad nahi mere pass......... with best wishes ranju |
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20th March 2006, 11:16 AM
jab koyee shayree ek dard ko apna dard mahsoos kare to shayer ko bahut khushee hotee hai meree shayree ko zinda kiya hai aap ke alfaz ne thanks for comming aur itna gahara parhne ke liye
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22nd March 2006, 01:04 AM
... Nawazish, karam, shukaria, merharaabaani... ajeeb sher pesh kiya hai apnay, khoob dill kaa dard alfazoun key zariye kagaz per uthar diyaa...
Yan tu phir dard-shanaasaa ho yan phir bohat achay musaanif ho... itnaa he kahoun ge... junoon say lickthay ho yan phir jazbah say, josh mein lickthay ho yan phir shafakat say... jesse bhi lickthay ho lickthay zaroor rehanaa... Ijazat... Rahoun main bhatak rahee thi, do char qadam per manzil thee, taudi dair ho gayee... |
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22nd March 2006, 04:41 AM
bahut hi sundar...my first post to your sher...but I really liked it...
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22nd March 2006, 10:29 AM
tumhara meree is ghazal ko parhana to achha laga hee itne pyre alfas main us kee tareef karana aur achha laga shukrguzar hain mere ashar
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22nd March 2006, 10:31 AM
anil kee post par sunil aya achha laga
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