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Post Hope U All Like This..... ? - 13th October 2006, 01:13 AM

Mehfil me unki jaane ka iraada aaya
jaake dekha to khud ko bahut der paaya.

Jisko dil me chupaneki koshish thi meri
ghairoN ke beech aaj usiko benaqaab paaya.

Likha tha usey khat woh bhi ek baar
jawwab aaya unsey to dubaara dil likh na paaya.

DosthoN se apni dil ki baath kehney aaya
kambhakhT har kisiko, wohi kahani sunathey paaya.

Zameen phisal gayi kadmoN ke neechey meri
haath me jab unki shaadi ka paigaam paaya.

Kya khata huee ki ye din dekhney ko aaya
fizool ke sawaal aaj dil ne hazaaroN mein paaya.

Akeley me tum kitna bhi roliyeh "ahsan"
logoN ke beech phir bhi yeh dil has na paaya.


Be kinder than necessary because everyone you meet is fighting
some kind of battle. "


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14th October 2006, 12:01 AM

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Mehfil me unki jaane ka iraada aaya
jaake dekha to khud ko bahut der paaya.

Jisko dil me chupaneki koshish thi meri
ghairoN ke beech aaj usiko benaqaab paaya.

Likha tha usey khat woh bhi ek baar
jawwab aaya unsey to dubaara dil likh na paaya.

DosthoN se apni dil ki baath kehney aaya
kambhakhT har kisiko, wohi kahani sunathey paaya.

Zameen phisal gayi kadmoN ke neechey meri
haath me jab unki shaadi ka paigaam paaya.

Kya khata huee ki ye din dekhney ko aaya
fizool ke sawaal aaj dil ne hazaaroN mein paaya.

Akeley me tum kitna bhi roliyeh "ahsan"
logoN ke beech phir bhi yeh dil has na paaya.
ahsan ji aaj apke iss kalaam par nazar pari.............achha laga aaj apko parh kar.......bahot khoob likha hai apne..........har line me dard ka ehasaas ho raha hai.......last sher dil ko chhu gaya ji..........meri daad kabool farmaiye janaab ahsan ji.ok ji

grazie

aapki dost
pooja


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14th October 2006, 02:30 AM

situation acchi nahi lagi hamen magar aapne likkha bahut acccha hai.
The flow of the words were very smooth.



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14th October 2006, 04:00 AM

Salam....


Shukriya Pooji Ji, Mere Ashaar Ki Tareef Ki, Waisey Har Lafez Main Dard Toh Hai, Issilye Shayri Dard Ko Bhayaan Karne Ka Hi Naam Hai Waise Thax A Lot For Reading , Take Care

Salam .........

Aarya Waisey Aapne Sahi Kaha Situation Ghalat Hosakti Hai Aapki Opinion Hai Magar Maine Khuch Aur Samajh Kar Likha Hope U Can Understand ..... Take Care............

Bye

Apka Dost

Ahsan..........


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15th October 2006, 10:17 PM

my friend, mera kehne ka matlab tha ki "situation sad lagee". (sad---acchi nahi lagi). My apologies if i came across as insensitive to the sentiments in the poem.



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16th October 2006, 01:14 AM

salam...........


oh i m really sorry brother main agar aapko hurt kiya hai toh mujhe maaf karey anyways thax for appreciating my poem............apke kidmat mein ek chota sa ashaar hope u will like it ?

ISHQ KI MEHAK KAM NAHI HOTI,
ISHQ SE ZINDAGI KATAM NAHI HOTI,
AGAR SAAT HO ZINDAGI MAIN AAP JAISEY DOSTON KA,
TOH ZINDAGI BHI JANNAT SE KAM NAHI HOTI..............

TAKE CARE, GOD BLESS U .........

APKA DOST
AHSAN............


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