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29th April 2008, 01:26 AM
Hi,
yeh naya game yeh soch kar shuru kiya hai k is se entertainment bhi hogaa aur ham achche achhe sher bhi paRh sakeNge aur sath hi sath hamari memory ki testing bhi ho jaayegi. so, shuru ho jaiye. karna yeh hai k maiN kisi mashhoor shaair ke ek she'r ka sirf pahla misra likhuNga aur aap ko dusra misra batana hoga. phir uske ba'd ek naya misra likheN [kisi mashhoor shaair ka hi, preferably ustad shoara] EXAMPLE: maiN pahla misra deta huN: yeh na thi hamari qismat k visaal-e-yaar hotaa to koi dusra banda iska dusra misra yuN likhe: yeh na thi hamari qismat k visal-e-yaar hota agar aur jeete rahte, yehii intizaar hotaa samajh meN aa gayaa na?  agla misra: yeh masail-e-tasavvuf, yeh tira bayaan, "Ghalib!"  tu aur aaraa'ish-e-Kham-e-kaakul maiN aur andesha_haa-e-dur o daraaz |
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29th April 2008, 02:02 AM
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ye masail e tasavuf ye tera bayaan Ghaalib tujhe hum wali samajhte, jo na baadaa_Khwaar hota  |
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29th April 2008, 02:08 AM
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is laRi meN shirkat ke liye maiN aapka mutashakkir huN. welcome. aapne sher to ba-Husn-e-Khoobii mukammil kar diya par aap agla misr'a dena shaayad bhoo gaiN. aapke misr'e ka intizaar rahega. shukria wassalam MuKhlis tu aur aaraa'ish-e-Kham-e-kaakul maiN aur andesha_haa-e-dur o daraaz |
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29th April 2008, 02:34 AM
Adaab,
bauhat umda zouq hei apka , bauhat behtreen laree ki ibtidaah ki hei ap ne daad haazir hei lijiye janab sher ka pehla misra haazir hei GUL HOEE JATEE HEI AFSURDA SULAGTEE HOEE SHAAM Dekhte hien agla misra kahan se ata hai magar ssshhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh apko batanae ki ijazat nehie hei hargiz let someone else do it apko malum ho ga hum jante hein |
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29th April 2008, 02:43 AM
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tu aur aaraa'ish-e-Kham-e-kaakul maiN aur andesha_haa-e-dur o daraaz |
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29th April 2008, 12:48 PM
very nice thread mukhlisji.....................
chaliye mahamji...apka sher hum complete kiye dete hain........... GUL HOEE JATEE HEI AFSURDA SULAGTEE HOEE SHAAM dhul ke nikle gee abhi chashma e mehtaab se raat chaliye ab humari baari.............. badan ke donoN kinaaroN se jal rahaa huuN maiN ................ Jaane kya samjhi main useN Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se |
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29th April 2008, 01:03 PM
Jiiiii janab FAIZ the ye apke lye hmmmmmmmmmm RIGHTON INDEED!
apka misra badan ke dono kinaron se jal raha hon mein YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAR banda hei ya diya salayee HEHEEHEE mmmmmmmmmmmmm bataoun agla misra oka nai batatee let someone come and do it for us eh ?!  |
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29th April 2008, 01:21 PM
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 ....Jaane kya samjhi main useN Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se |
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29th April 2008, 01:40 PM
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hahahha yaaaaaaar mujhe to ye koi SUCIDAL BOMB ATTACKER LAG RAHA HAI heheehh ssshhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh ita pyara thread maham ki shararton ki nazar ho raha hai jaldiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii se ab koi is ka agla misra de ji warna shararartain jaaree rahein gee |
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29th April 2008, 02:03 PM
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aisa karungi shaam tak kisi ne jawab nahin diyaa....to...hum de denge..........Jaane kya samjhi main useN Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se |
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29th April 2008, 03:10 PM
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ya tou acidity prob hei ya ulcers hehehe sshh ok ok no masti no shararart sach ye hei ke shadeed uljahn mein hei dimaagh ke iska misra kaunsa hai i thought i knew magar haar gaye hazur apke agayae acha ye HAZRAT E MUKHLIS ko anae dijiye dekhte hein inko ata hie ke nai warna ap ata kijiye ga iska misra Wat say ?@! |
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29th April 2008, 03:33 PM
salaam
shukria and welcome Mausam sahiba. hahaha mazaa aa gayaa aapke aur Nahanm sahiba ke beech kii mizaahiya nok jhoNk hehehe ya yeh dynamite stick bhi to ho sakte haiN. kijiye she'r mukammil kiye dete haiN ham badan ke donoN kinaaroN se jal rahaa huuN maiN ke chhuu rahaa huuN tujhe, aur pighal rahaa huuN maiN aaiye Misra Ji ab aapkaa number hai hehehe agla misr'a hai: nahiiN minnat kash-e-daam-e-shuneedan daastaaN meri Good Luck wassalaam, MuKhlis tu aur aaraa'ish-e-Kham-e-kaakul maiN aur andesha_haa-e-dur o daraaz |
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29th April 2008, 03:43 PM
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NOW THAT MAKES SENSE INDEED!!!! waise ehm siachin mein beth ke likha tha ye sher isko waise cadbury cone icecream pe bhi marketing ke lye likh sakte hein hehehee  sorry guys yaar i can t resist sharararating on this sher imaan se aise aise ideas arae hein ke eik kitaab likh saktee hon is sher pe hehehe sorry sorry mukhlis aap kaheen hamae sue na kar den ya giraftaar na karwa den apke thread mein ita hanagama karne pe ok ok ab maham chup !!!!!!! magar sirf thori der ke lye iti der nai chup raha jata ji kar len jo karna hei |
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30th April 2008, 01:09 PM
aisa lagta hai ke har imithan ke liye
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30th April 2008, 01:30 PM
heeeeee....tum to sher ke piche haat dhoke pad gayi...nahin nahin naha dhoke pad gayi...................
siachin bhi pahoch gayi..maham tum bhi na too much ho?????jeee mukhlisji sher to bilkul thik ata aapne kiyaaa aapne par zara lafz zara idhar udhar kiye..."ke" pehle mishre main nahin hain dusre mishre ke starting main hain.............aur "tujhii" aapne shayad bhul se likh diyaaa badan ke donoN kinaaroN se jal rahaa huuN maiN ke chhuu rahaa huuN tujhe, aur pighal rahaa huuN maiN chaliyee ab aapke mishraji ki baari nahiiN minnat kash-e-daam-e-shuneedan daastaan meri Khaamoshii guftaguu hai, bezubaanii hai zabaa.N merii ab agla sher.......... zamaane ke lab par zamaane kii baateN ........ Jaane kya samjhi main useN Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se |
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3rd May 2008, 06:40 AM
badan ke dono kinaron se jal raha hon mein
abtak kiseene fiebrigade bhee nahiN bheja |
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3rd May 2008, 08:52 AM
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aapka is laRii meN Khair maqdam hai. mu'aaf kijiyega is laRii meN aapko apna misr'a nahiIN dena bal k us she'r ka ORIGINAL misr'a denaa hogaa jaise upar ki misaloN misaaloN meN aap dekheNge. vaise, jis she'r ko apane mukammil kiyaa hai vo already maiN mukammil kar chukaa huN. uske ba'd Mausam sahiba ne ek aur misr'a likha hai jise ka aapko dusra misr'a likh kar she'r mukammil karna hai. shukria. regaerds MuKhlis tu aur aaraa'ish-e-Kham-e-kaakul maiN aur andesha_haa-e-dur o daraaz |
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3rd May 2008, 09:00 AM
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haiN aabaad laakhoN jahaaN mere dil meN kabhii aao daaman-kushaa mere dil meN ab meri jaanib se yeh misr'a mulaahizah farmaaiye: yaa Rab! dil-e-Muslim ko vo zinda tamanna de Good Luck tu aur aaraa'ish-e-Kham-e-kaakul maiN aur andesha_haa-e-dur o daraaz |
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3rd May 2008, 01:31 PM
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 lagta hain neend meiN sher likha hain aapne......maine koi aur sher mukammal karne ko kaha tha aur aapne koi aur kar diya...ghazal waise ek hi hain par sher apni marzi ka kyuNzamaane ke lab par zamaane kii baateN merii dukh-bharii daastaaN mere dil meN chaliye aapke sher ki baari..... yaa Rab! dil-e-Muslim ko vo zinda tamanna de Jo kalb ko germa day Jo rooh ko tarpa day ab next...... Tum mohabbat ko khel kehte ho.... Jaane kya samjhi main useN Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se |
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3rd May 2008, 07:31 PM
not to sure buddy but is it :
tum mohabbat ko khel kehte ho hum ne zindagi barbaad kar lee   |
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4th May 2008, 06:45 PM
Maham jee:
aadaab! aap shaayad misra dena bhuul gayee, chaliye main arz kiye deta huu.n...... intezamaat naye sire se sambhaale jaaye.n.. |
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4th May 2008, 07:42 PM
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yeh lijiye janaab ham pooraa kiye dete haiN. Rahat Indori ka yeh she'r yuN hai. intezamaat naye sire se sambhaale jaayeN jitne kam-zarf haiN mehafil se nikaale jaayeN agla misr'a: nikaalaa chaahtaa hi kaam kia ta'noN se tu, "Ghalib!" tu aur aaraa'ish-e-Kham-e-kaakul maiN aur andesha_haa-e-dur o daraaz |
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5th May 2008, 05:29 PM
nikaalaa chaahtaa hi kaam kia ta'noN se tu, "Ghalib!"
tere be mahar kehne se vo tujh par meharabaa.N kyo.n ho ... next... Kuch na puch e-humnashi mera nasheman tha kaha... ...... Jaane kya samjhi main useN Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se |
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5th May 2008, 06:38 PM
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muje is sher ki next line ka to pata nahi hai....par MUKHLIS let me tell u one thing ki ye bahut achi thread hai...i loved it.....keep it up.....good luck....  "LAMHA"mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa , ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe.... |
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5th May 2008, 07:01 PM
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ab to yeh kehna bhi mushkil hain woh gulshan tha kaha next: merii daastan-e-hasarat vo sunaa sunaa ke roye |
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5th May 2008, 07:26 PM
merii daastan-e-hasarat vo sunaa sunaa ke roye
mere aazamaane vaale mujhe aazamaa ke roye next..... maslahat chaahtii hai ke manzil mile Jaane kya samjhi main useN Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se |
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13th May 2008, 07:00 PM
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maslahat chaahtii hai ke manzil mile aur dil DhuuNDtaa hai ko’ii kaarvaaN next:  vo aaye ghar me.n hamaare Khudaa kii qudrat hai |
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13th May 2008, 07:18 PM
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kabhii ham un ko kabhii apane ghar ko dekhate hai.n next... bhul shaayad bahut ba.Dii kar lii ................ Jaane kya samjhi main useN Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se |
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13th May 2008, 07:31 PM
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bhul shaayad bahut ba.Dii kar lii dil ne duniya se dosti kar li..... next: dost ban kar bhii nahii.n saath nibhaanevaalaa |
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13th May 2008, 07:51 PM
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vahii andaaz hai zaalim kaa zamaanevaalaa Betabiya naseeb mein thi warna humnashi.... Jaane kya samjhi main useN Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se |
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10th June 2008, 03:35 PM
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Lagata hai is sher ka duusra misra kisii ko nahii.n pata, atah aap khud hi bata de.n to mehrbaani hogii |
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10th June 2008, 04:02 PM
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Betabiya naseeb mein thi warna humnashi.... Yeh kya zaroor tha ki unhi par nazar pade... akbar illahabadi~ next...... Kuch tabiyat hi mili thi aisi,chense jeene ki surat na hui .............. Jaane kya samjhi main useN Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se |
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11th June 2008, 11:39 PM
BETABIYAN NASEEB MEIN THEEN WARNA HIMNASHEEN
RAATON KO JAAGNE KI ZAROORAT THI KYA MUJHE. prashant vasl |
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12th June 2008, 01:10 AM
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Kuch tabiyat he mili thi aisi chain se jeene ki surat na hui Jis ko chaaha use apna na sake jo milaa us se muhabbat na hui next .... ab mere pass tum aai ho to kya aai ho |
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25th July 2008, 09:11 AM
ab mere paas tum aayee ho to kya aayee ho...
maine maana ke tum ik paikar-e-raanaee ho Next... Ab tum aaye ho toh jaane ke liye mat aana ....... Main zameen pe tanha, aur woh aasmaano mein... |
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28th July 2008, 01:47 PM
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naina jee, lagta hai is sher ka agla misra kisii ko pata nahii.n, to aap khud hi bata de.n next: ta.ng aa chuke hai.n kash-ma-kash-e-zindagii se ham |
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