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Tumhe Kia Maloom....! - 2nd October 2009, 12:16 AM
Piyase darya ke kinaray hain tumhe kia maloom
Hoslay yeh bhi hamaray hain tumhe kia maloom

Yeh alag baat hai tum mano ya mano lekin,
Hum dil-o-jan se tumharay hain tumhe kia maloom

Yeh hum jantay hain tum se bichar kar jana
Roz-o-Shab kesay guzaray hain tumhe kia maloom

Hasratien bechain hain kitni dil mein
Ajab armaan hamaray hain tumhe kia maloom

Laut bhi aao ke ab umer bhi hai dhalnay ko
Muntazir kab se tumhray hain tumhe kia maloom

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2nd October 2009, 03:48 PM
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Piyase darya ke kinaray hain tumhe kia maloom

Hoslay yeh bhi hamaray hain tumhe kia maloom

Yeh alag baat hai tum mano ya mano lekin,
Hum dil-o-jan se tumharay hain tumhe kia maloom

Yeh hum jantay hain tum se bichar kar jana
Roz-o-Shab kesay guzaray hain tumhe kia maloom

Hasratien bechain hain kitni dil mein
Ajab armaan hamaray hain tumhe kia maloom

Laut bhi aao ke ab umer bhi hai dhalnay ko

Muntazir kab se tumhray hain tumhe kia maloom
Hassan sahab aadaab

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Chaliye ek achchi koshish per dil se daad kabool kijiye.
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Piyase darya ke kinaray hain tumhe kia maloom
Hoslay yeh bhi hamaray hain tumhe kia maloom

Yeh alag baat hai tum mano ya mano lekin,
Hum dil-o-jan se tumharay hain tumhe kia maloom

Yeh hum jantay hain tum se bichar kar jana
Roz-o-Shab kesay guzaray hain tumhe kia maloom

Hasratien bechain hain kitni dil mein
Ajab armaan hamaray hain tumhe kia maloom

Laut bhi aao ke ab umer bhi hai dhalnay ko
Muntazir kab se tumhray hain tumhe kia maloom

hello Hassan ji.........nice poetry hai aap ki
feelings are great
keep writing

Regards

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Hassan ji....aapki ghazal ke ehsaas bahut khubsurat rahe....acha laga padhkar....par sameer ji ne jo bataya hai...uspar bhi dhiyan dena zaruri hai.....mere saath bhi qafiye mai kai baar gadbad ho jaati hai....khair yeh sab toh likhte rehne se theek ho jayega....

khush rahiye....
aur apna khayal rakhiye...
duaaon ke saath....



YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...

Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...

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Hassan sahab aadaab

Bhai dekha ke aapki post hai aur ek naye andaz mein lagi to socha daad deta chaluN...
Highlighted sher khoob lage ... baqi sabhi sher achche hai per ek mashwara hai mera ke aapne baar baar wohi kafiye dohraye...
aap yahan matching kafiye yeh bhi istemal ker sakte the.. Saharay, bharay, nazaray, sitaray, is tarha ke...

Chaliye ek achchi koshish per dil se daad kabool kijiye.
Likhate rahiey..
Aate rahiey..
Khush rahiye..
Khuda Hafez..
Sameer Bhai,

Adaab!

Aap ki Daad qabool ki janab
Boht Boht Shukria....

Aur haan different qafiye ho sakte thay, khair aainda khiyaal rakhonga

Aisay hi saath banaye rakhiye ga,

GOD BLESS YOU,

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2nd October 2009, 07:11 PM
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hello Hassan ji.........nice poetry hai aap ki
feelings are great
keep writing

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Pari Ji,

Adaab!

Apna qeemti waqt denay ka boht shukria,

Umeed karta hon k aagay aap ko aur bhi achi
poetry pharne ko day paon ga

Aisay hi saath banaye rakhiye ga,

GOD BLESS YOU,

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Hassan ji....aapki ghazal ke ehsaas bahut khubsurat rahe....acha laga padhkar....par sameer ji ne jo bataya hai...uspar bhi dhiyan dena zaruri hai.....mere saath bhi qafiye mai kai baar gadbad ho jaati hai....khair yeh sab toh likhte rehne se theek ho jayega....

khush rahiye....
aur apna khayal rakhiye...
duaaon ke saath....
Naresh Ji,

Aap ka teh dil se shukar guzaar hon ke aap ne
meri maamooli si kawish ko pasand kiya hai

Aisay hi saath banaye rakhiye ga,

GOD BLESS YOU,

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Tujhe kya khabar teri yad ne, mujhe kis tarha se sata diya
Kabhi khilvaton mein hansa diya, kabhi mehfilon mein rula diya
Kabhi yun howa teri yad mein, mere kaee sajde qaza howe
Kabhi yun howa teri yad ne, mujhe mere rab se mila diya

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7th October 2009, 02:36 PM
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Piyase darya ke kinaray hain tumhe kia maloom

Hoslay yeh bhi hamaray hain tumhe kia maloom

Yeh alag baat hai tum mano ya mano lekin,
Hum dil-o-jan se tumharay hain tumhe kia maloom

Yeh hum jantay hain tum se bichar kar jana
Roz-o-Shab kesay guzaray hain tumhe kia maloom

Hasratien bechain hain kitni dil mein
Ajab armaan hamaray hain tumhe kia maloom

Laut bhi aao ke ab umer bhi hai dhalnay ko

Muntazir kab se tumhray hain tumhe kia maloom

HSN jee,
aapki ghazal padh kar mujhe ek sher yaad aagayi .....

Yeh bhi andaaz hamare hain tumhen kiya maloom.
Hum tumhen jeet kar hare hain tumhen kiya maloom

wakai bahut khubsoorat ghazal kahi hai aapne

Laut bhi aao ke ab umer bhi hai dhalnay ko

Muntazir kab se tumhray hain tumhe kia maloom

bilkul sahi kaha hai aapne
yeh sher hume bahut khas laga

youn hi kahte rahiye
khus rahiye

aapki dost
Diya


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HSN jee,
aapki ghazal padh kar mujhe ek sher yaad aagayi .....

Yeh bhi andaaz hamare hain tumhen kiya maloom.
Hum tumhen jeet kar hare hain tumhen kiya maloom

wakai bahut khubsoorat ghazal kahi hai aapne


aapki dost
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Yeh Bhi Aadab Hamare Hain, Tumhain Kya Malum
Hum Tumhain Jeet Ke Harey Hain, Tumhain Kya Malum
Ek Tum Ho Ke Samajhte Nahi Hum Ko Apna
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Diya..... I read this version.......

Yeh Bhi Aadab Hamare Hain, Tumhain Kya Malum
Hum Tumhain Jeet Ke Harey Hain, Tumhain Kya Malum
Ek Tum Ho Ke Samajhte Nahi Hum Ko Apna
Ek Hum Hain Ke Tumhare Hain, Tumhain Kya Maalum

bahut hi khubsoorat aashar hai
thanx baqs jee ....................................


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HSN jee,
aapki ghazal padh kar mujhe ek sher yaad aagayi .....

Yeh bhi andaaz hamare hain tumhen kiya maloom.
Hum tumhen jeet kar hare hain tumhen kiya maloom

wakai bahut khubsoorat ghazal kahi hai aapne

Laut bhi aao ke ab umer bhi hai dhalnay ko

Muntazir kab se tumhray hain tumhe kia maloom

bilkul sahi kaha hai aapne
yeh sher hume bahut khas laga

youn hi kahte rahiye
khus rahiye

aapki dost
Diya
Diya Jii,,

Saath banaye rakhnay per teh-dil se shukria adaa kar hon,
Aur mujhe khushi hui ke meri adna si kawish ko aap ne itna pasand kiya...

Aisay hi mera saath detay rahiye ga,

Apna khiyaal rakhiye ga,,

GOD BLESS YOU,

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tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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Diya..... I read this version.......

Yeh Bhi Aadab Hamare Hain, Tumhain Kya Malum
Hum Tumhain Jeet Ke Harey Hain, Tumhain Kya Malum
Ek Tum Ho Ke Samajhte Nahi Hum Ko Apna
Ek Hum Hain Ke Tumhare Hain, Tumhain Kya Maalum
Bakhtiyaar Jii,,

Aap ko yahan dekh kar acha laga...

Aisay hi aatay rahiye,,

GOD BLESS YOU,

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Bakhtiyaar Jii,,

Aap ko yahan dekh kar acha laga...

Aisay hi aatay rahiye,,

GOD BLESS YOU,

Yahan se kya murad hai...............
   
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Yahan se kya murad hai...............
Bakhtiyaar Jii,,

Matlab k meray post kiye hue thread per.....

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"tumhe kya maloom"
Seems like i've read this one before dunno the original

But alteration was done.... nicely
Janab "Tumhe kia Maloom" se hi inspiration le kar yeh khud hi compose ki....

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Hassan jee,

aap ki is peshkash ka har sher ke ehesaas waqyi bahot acche hai...
aur haan raddif ka chunav bhi accha laga

aise hee likhte rahiye

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Hassan jee,

aap ki is peshkash ka har sher ke ehesaas waqyi bahot acche hai...
aur haan raddif ka chunav bhi accha laga

aise hee likhte rahiye

purvi
Purvi Jii,,

Sab se phely se aap ka mashkoor hon k,
aap ne hur waqt mera saath diya hai,,
Yeh peshkash bhi pasand aanay per aap ka teh-e-dil se
shukar guzaar hon,,

aagay bhi aap se yahi umeed hai k aap saath banaye rakhien gii,,

Apna khiyaal rakhiye,,

GOD BLESS YOU,,

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12th October 2009, 11:11 AM
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Piyase darya ke kinaray hain tumhe kia maloom
Hoslay yeh bhi hamaray hain tumhe kia maloom

Yeh alag baat hai tum mano ya mano lekin,
Hum dil-o-jan se tumharay hain tumhe kia maloom

Yeh hum jantay hain tum se bichar kar jana
Roz-o-Shab kesay guzaray hain tumhe kia maloom

Hasratien bechain hain kitni dil mein
Ajab armaan hamaray hain tumhe kia maloom

Laut bhi aao ke ab umer bhi hai dhalnay ko
Muntazir kab se tumhray hain tumhe kia maloom
Very nice thoughts Hasan bhai ... bahut accha ikha hai.. aise hi likhte rahiye tk cr..
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Very nice thoughts Hasan bhai ... bahut accha ikha hai.. aise hi likhte rahiye tk cr..
Deep Jii,,

Aap yahan aaye aur meri shayri ko pasand kiya,, mujhe boht acha laga...

Aisay hi mera saath detay rahiye,,,

Take care,,

GOD BLESS YOU,,

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12th October 2009, 09:43 PM
Haqiqaton k qareeb aanay k baad...
Samjhe mohabbat ko dil lagane k baad...
Mujhe apna gham nahi dukh us ka hai...
Kon chahe ga itna usay mere jane k baad??

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