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~*~ Teri Tasweer ~*~ -
18th July 2006, 01:18 AM
Teri tasweer meri Nigaaho mai hardam kyun haiN Aaine to tutate rahte haiN tumhe gham kyuN haiN Wohi lamhe wohi manjar wohi yaado ke hujjuM* Aur kya chahiye? Maayus mere sanam kyuN haiN Mere na hone se shayad raahat haiN zamaane ko Shor ye kaisa hangaama-e-maatam kyuN haiN Har mulaaquaat pe mujhko ye hota hai gumaaN Faasley furkat ke ye itney beraham kyuN haiN Dil ko sadalakht* kiya sine ko bhi sad chaak kiya Ab bhi dilresh* mai dhadkati tu paiham* kyuN haiN Maine sincha haiN apne ashqo se dil ke gulshan ko Baag-e-hasti* mai khizaaoN* ka mausam kyuN haiN Hujjum= crowd Dilresh=zakhmi dil sadalakht= dil ke so tukde karna Paiham=continues,constant Baag-e-hasti= garden of life KhizaaN=patzad paiham= nirantar,sada,hameha |
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18th July 2006, 05:01 AM
SAMNE HAI MANZIL...RASTA ABHI DOOR..!
AI KAASH KI TUM BHI MERE SATH HOTI... TO DONO MILKAR YE SAFAR TAY KAR LETE.. PAR SHAYAD HAI NA MANZOOR ,YE UPER WALE KO.. PHIR BHI DIL ME EK AAS HAI , YE SAFAR TAY KARNE KI.. AUR MANZIL TAK PAHUCHNE KI.. KE KAHI MERI MANZIL TUM HI TO NAHI...? VIBHESH |
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18th July 2006, 01:51 PM
dear bhavesh ,
mujhe lagta hai aap ne ye yaha galti se post kar diya hai ,par kaafi acha likha hai, regards manu |
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18th July 2006, 01:54 PM
Teri tasweer meri Nigaaho mai hardam kyun haiN
Aaine to tutate rahte haiN tumhe gham kyuN haiN Wohi lamhe wohi manjar wohi yaado ke hujjuM* Aur kya chahiye? Maayus mere sanam kyuN haiN kya baat hai... Mere na hone se shayad raahat haiN zamaane ko Shor ye kaisa hangaama-e-maatam kyuN haiN Har mulaaquaat pe mujhko ye hota hai gumaaN Faasley furkat ke ye itney beraham kyuN haiN nice words... Dil ko sadalakht* kiya sine ko bhi sad chaak kiya Ab bhi dilresh* mai dhadkati tu paiham* kyuN haiN Maine sincha haiN apne ashqo se dil ke gulshan ko Baag-e-hasti* mai khizaaoN* ka mausam kyuN haiN hmmmm.... well written.... Dear Manu, Bahut accha likha hai tumne.... really liked it..... likhte raho yun hi... Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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19th July 2006, 06:53 PM
hmmm cool posting manish ji,keep sharing
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19th July 2006, 07:26 PM
Hello Manu
After a long time read ur poetry....it's nice one.... Teri tasweer meri Nigaaho mai hardam kyun haiN Aaine to tutate rahte haiN tumhe gham kyuN haiN Meri daad kabul karna...keep writing take care |
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Re: ~*~ Teri Tasweer ~*~ -
20th July 2006, 12:30 PM
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appki gazal bahut acchi laggi, mubarakbaad kabool kijiye  .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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21st July 2006, 01:07 PM
pullu tumaara bahut bahut shukriya dost
aise hi aate rahoge yahi ummid karat hoo regrds manu |
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Re: ~*~ Teri Tasweer ~*~ -
21st July 2006, 04:54 PM
Teri tasweer meri Nigaaho mai hardam kyun haiN
Aaine to tutate rahte haiN tumhe gham kyuN haiN KYA BAAT HAI...!!! WAH..>! Wohi lamhe wohi manjar wohi yaado ke hujjuM* Aur kya chahiye? Maayus mere sanam kyuN haiN BAHOOT SUNDAR ALFAAZ ISTEMAAL KIYE HAI AAPNE...... Mere na hone se shayad raahat haiN zamaane ko Shor ye kaisa hangaama-e-maatam kyuN haiN WAH.,.,.WAH...JIO.... Har mulaaquaat pe mujhko ye hota hai gumaaN Faasley furkat ke ye itney beraham kyuN haiN KYA KEHNE JANAAB....BAHOOT KHOOOB.... Dil ko sadalakht* kiya sine ko bhi sad chaak kiya Ab bhi dilresh* mai dhadkati tu paiham* kyuN haiN WAH.... Maine sincha haiN apne ashqo se dil ke gulshan ko Baag-e-hasti* mai khizaaoN* ka mausam kyuN haiN WAH...JANAAB WAH... ACHARYA SAHEB ALFAAZON KE nageenon se,,,sheron ke gauhar se saje gazal ke aise beshkeemti jewar birle hi dekhne ko milte hai,,,aur saheeb ham wo jauhri hai jo heere ki parakh rakhte hai....kya khoob nikhaara hai aapne jewar-e-gazal ko..!!!! meri daad kuboool kijiye..... -MANOJ karte hai jo "kureel" se gila karte rahein. |
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21st July 2006, 05:06 PM
hmmm kya baat hai manuji,bahut acha laga aapko padhkar.itni khoobsoorti se likha hai aapne.yeh ashaar to bahut pasand aaye,
Mere na hone se shayad raahat haiN zamaane ko Shor ye kaisa hangaama-e-maatam kyuN haiN Har mulaaquaat pe mujhko ye hota hai gumaaN Faasley furkat ke ye itney beraham kyuN haiN Dil ko sadalakht* kiya sine ko bhi sad chaak kiya Ab bhi dilresh* mai dhadkati tu paiham* kyuN haiN likhte rahiye yunhin. gham ko mujh se yeh unsiyat kaisi?? --akelijaan-- |
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22nd July 2006, 04:12 PM
shivendra ji aap ka shukriya kalaam ki tarif karne ke liye
aise hi aate rahiyega manu |
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23rd July 2006, 07:24 PM
shivendra ji aap ka bhi shukriya ada karta hu,meri kavvish ko apna kimtee samay dene ke liye,aate rahiyega
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25th July 2006, 01:30 PM
sukanya ji lagta hai aap ne meri post par pahli baar reply diya hai,par mujhe khushi hui ke aap ne mujhe padha to sahi,aap ka shukriya apna kimtee samay meri post ko dene ke liye ,
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29th July 2006, 12:52 PM
sunitaa ji ap ka bahut bahut shukriya ,mujhe jaan kar khushi hui ke aap ko meri likhi lines pasand aayi
bas yunhi aati rahiyega regards manu |
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4th August 2006, 08:08 PM
Wow
Manu, bahut achha likha hain tumne. meri daad kubul karna. aaise hi likhte rehna. take care |
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5th August 2006, 02:30 AM
manoj ji ap ka bahut bahut shukriya mujhe padhne ke liye ,aap aate hai to lagta hai koi bada shayar aa kar phool rakh kar gaya
yunhi aate rahiyega regards manu |
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5th August 2006, 07:09 AM
Dear Manu...
Ek dil ko chuu jaane wala kalaam pesh kiya hai aapne...kya ajab baat hai ki jisne dil ke tukde tukde kiye...wahi ragon mein daudte phirta hai...aur hum hain ki us meharam-e-dil ko dil par jab tab qahar dhaane dete hain... Ab yeh tau Manu tarq-e-wafa mein barse ashq hain...ashq nahin aankhon se tapka lahuu hain...tau lahuu bhala gulistaan mein bahaar kaise laaye...well anyways...bahut achha laga tumhein padhkar...keep it up... gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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6th August 2006, 01:19 PM
akeli jaan aap mujhe lagta hai kaafi samay baad yaha pe aayi hai, aur itne samay ke bad ane ke bavjud aap ne mujhe yaad rakha aur padha vo mere liye khushi kibaat hai ,mai aap ka shukragujaar hu.aap age bhi isi tarah saath deti rahegi yahi ummid karta hu
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7th August 2006, 01:17 AM
parul u come after such a long time on my post,thanx 4 come from busy schedule
take care regards manu |
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7th August 2006, 03:48 PM
Manu Ji!!
Kaafi arsey key baad ees site per aney ka iteffaq huva aur aapki likhi hui yeh khubsurat rachna padh ker bahot accha laga.... Mere na hone se shayad raahat haiN zamaane ko Shor ye kaisa hangaama-e-maatam kyuN haiN Har mulaaquaat pe mujhko ye hota hai gumaaN Faasley furkat ke ye itney beraham kyuN haiN Wah! bahot khub.. Dadh kabool kijiyega!! Rajan!! |
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8th August 2006, 01:20 AM
hi parul its nice to see u on my post eventhough u appear rarely.
i feel ur presence anyway. nahi aave to todi nakhish bhangi naakhish ane bhukko kari naakhish tc manu |
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8th August 2006, 04:30 PM
paras didi aap jaise bade shayar ne meri post par aa kar dastak di hai, dhanya bhaagya hamara,bahut khushi hoti hai jab aap meri post par aati hai,aise hi aati rahiyega di
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8th August 2006, 04:56 PM
hi acharya....
lovely ghazal..... teri tasveer ke mein chaho hazaaro tukade karna... aur kabhi use jalana ... fir na jaane haaatho mein maachis aur dil mein taakat ki kami kyun hai..... just a bit addition to ur poem nit at all urdu one as i dont know urdu... but a hindi reply... tried actually now-a-days left habbit of writing so .... mistakes might be there...... anyways.. do .... ex-cuse..... luv.... priyanka |
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10th August 2006, 10:29 AM
priya rajan ji mane laage chhe tame ghana lamba samay pachhi darshan ap ya chee .kya khovayi jaao chho? ahin gujju loko ni haajari thi kharekhar khub j anan thay chhe, anhi bahu ochha gujju chhe,hu,parul,tame,deepen bas.....................
anyway tame aatla samay pacchi aavya ane te pan pahela maari ost par reply karyo ghanu saru laagyu aavta rahejo thanx regards manu |
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11th August 2006, 01:37 AM
waaah waaah manubhaiya bahut hi khoob likha hai aap ne
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14th August 2006, 11:10 AM
priyanka , tum itne saal baad aayi aur fir bhi mujhe yad rakh kar padha ye jan kar dil ko tasalli bhi hui aur khushi bhi,
tumne jo bhi likha hai achha likha hai, ummid hai tum ye koshish jaari rakhogi aur hamre tumaare bahtareen kalam fir se padhane ko milenge, tumaara haatho ka jaadu barkaraar rahe aur tumari khubsurat likhavat bhi. yahi dua hai regards manu |
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14th August 2006, 11:38 AM
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excellent ghazal,the intensity of words,flow,emotions, goes on increasing line after line...sach main yaar badhiyaa likha hain.. Har mulaaquaat pe mujhko ye hota hai gumaaN Faasley furkat ke ye itney beraham kyuN haiN waise to saare sher behtreen rahe hain par ye waala kuch zyaada hi asar kar gaya ...thanxxx.keep writing ..byeeee marane kii duaaye.n kyuu.N maa.Nguu.N jiine kii tamaannaa kaun kare ye duniyaa ho yaa vo duniyaa ab Khvaahish-e-duniyaa kaun kare jo aag lagaaii thii tum ne us ko to bujhaayaa ashko.n ne jo ashko.n ke bha.Dakaaii hai us aag ko Tha.nDaa kaun kare jab kashtii saabit-o-saalib thii, saahil kii tamannaa kisako thii ab aisii shikastaa kashtii me.n saahil kii tamannaa kaun kare duniyaa ne hame.n chho.Daa ai dil, ham chho.D na de kyo.n duniyaa ko duniyaa ko samajh kar baiThe hai.n ab duniyaa duniyaa kaun kare -Moen Ahsan Jazbi |
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16th August 2006, 10:02 PM
anu thanx,aate rahna.
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deepu yaar tui kyaan khovaayi jaay chhe ,ghana samay pachhi tane joyo maari post par,pan mane anand thayo tu aavyo to take care regards manu |
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Aadaab Manu ji waah bhai bahut hi khoob rahi yeh gazal bhi tareef ke liye koi alfaaz hi nahui daad kubool kijiuye
Dunia ke sitam ki koi perwah nahi mujhko, wo kyoun mujhpe ungliya uthaye ja rahe hain. Jis shaks ko janta tha ek chehre se ''kashif'' Uske kitne chehre samne laye ja rahe hain.  |
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hey manu..... thanks for all u said.... but now a days not in touch with writing poems and all but really glad to see that u r keeping up the good work..... carry on..... luv, bubye |
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2nd February 2008, 04:03 AM
Dil ko sadalakht* kiya sine ko bhi sad chaak kiya
Ab bhi dilresh* mai dhadkati tu paiham* kyuN haiN bahoot khoob.... Premraj Acharya |
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2nd February 2008, 04:09 AM
manuji,
aapki yeh Ghazal behad pasand aayi.. thanks for sharing it. regards aarya inke sahaaron me raahai.n rahe.ngii lage.nge ye lejaa rahe alag raste un raston pe bhii kai seekhai.n to ho.ngii ye seekhai.n hameshaa sameTe rakhnaa inhii.n se to sabko manzil milai.ngii regards aarya |
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keep coming thanx 4 ur valuable time and replies here hope to read u sometime in near future regards manu |
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7th February 2008, 10:26 PM
manu ji bahut khub gazal...
acha ;likhet ho ahsasoin ko... sakhi शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे |
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