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16th March 2011, 01:35 AM
Beher= Ramal (2122 / 2122 / 2122 / 212)
Wo kabhi tanhaiyon me mubtila kar jaaegi,
Yaa kabhi jane-jigar yuNhi gila kar jaaegi.
yuN kabhi toDaa karegii phool ko guldaan se.
Har kali ko shaakh pe haNs ke khilaa kar jaaegi.
Zindgi bhar lab sile hii rah gaya jiske liye,
Mere afsaane mujhe wo hii sunaa kar jaaegi.
Bhuulna us pal ko pahle se nahii aasaan thaa,
Aaj phir manzar judaai kaa dikhaa kar jaaegi.
Hai munasib ab karo tauba kabhi aye 'shaad' tum,
Dekh lenaa tum ko hi tum se judaa kar jaaegi.
shaad.....
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16th March 2011, 07:49 AM
yuN kabhi toDaa karegii phool ko guldaan se.
Har kali ko shaakh pe haNs ke khilaa kar jaaegi.
Zindgi bhar lab sile hii rah gaya jiske liye,
Mere afsaane mujhe wo hii sunaa kar jaaegi.
Bhuulna us pal ko pahle se nahii aasaan thaa,
Aaj phir manzar judaai kaa dikhaa kar jaaegi.
Bahut naazuk se ... dil ko chhuute ehsaas ... behad dilkash andaaz meN likhe hai aapne ... Shaad Bhai ... !
Tamaam Ghazal ke ashaar ki saaf bayaani aur rawaangi ... asardaar rahi .... tahe dil se daad hazir hai ... ... aise hi diloN ko gudgudaate raheN aur laboN pe gungunaane waale taraane sajaate raheN ... khush rahen ... !
Simple ... Sweet ... SuperB Creation .... !!!
duaaoN ke saath ... !
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
---Naresh Mehra----
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16th March 2011, 02:25 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by sameer'shaad'
Beher= Ramal (2122 / 2122 / 2122 / 212)
Wo kabhi tanhaiyon me mubtila kar jaaegi,
Yaa kabhi jane-jigar yuNhi gila kar jaaegi.
yuN kabhi toDaa karegii phool ko guldaan se.
Har kali ko shaakh pe haNs ke khilaa kar jaaegi.
Zindgi bhar lab sile hii rah gaya jiske liye,
Mere afsaane mujhe wo hii sunaa kar jaaegi.
Bhuulna us pal ko pahle se nahii aasaan thaa,
Aaj phir manzar judaai kaa dikhaa kar jaaegi.
Hai munasib ab karo tauba kabhi aye 'shaad' tum,
Dekh lenaa tum ko hi tum se judaa kar jaaegi.
shaad.....
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Sameer ghazal itni achchi hai kae alfaaz khasir hain ,kae kaesae inki pazeerayee karaen
sameer tum to kamaal ker gae
la-jawaab ho
awesome
Khuda jhoot ba bulwayae
Ae mahaz laffazi nahin
Khush raho
Razia
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16th March 2011, 10:39 PM
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Originally Posted by naresh_mehra110
yuN kabhi toDaa karegii phool ko guldaan se.
Har kali ko shaakh pe haNs ke khilaa kar jaaegi.
Zindgi bhar lab sile hii rah gaya jiske liye,
Mere afsaane mujhe wo hii sunaa kar jaaegi.
Bhuulna us pal ko pahle se nahii aasaan thaa,
Aaj phir manzar judaai kaa dikhaa kar jaaegi.
Bahut naazuk se ... dil ko chhuute ehsaas ... behad dilkash andaaz meN likhe hai aapne ... Shaad Bhai ... !
Tamaam Ghazal ke ashaar ki saaf bayaani aur rawaangi ... asardaar rahi .... tahe dil se daad hazir hai ... ... aise hi diloN ko gudgudaate raheN aur laboN pe gungunaane waale taraane sajaate raheN ... khush rahen ... !
Simple ... Sweet ... SuperB Creation .... !!!
duaaoN ke saath ... !
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Shukriya Naresh bhai, aapne jis tareeke se nacheez ki tareef kar di hai, mere paas alfaaz bhi nahi bachte kaise aapka shukriya adaa karun.. bas yoon samajh lijiye dil se itni khushi hoti hai har baar aapko yahan dekh kar ke kuch bataa nahi saktaa.... aapko khayaal pasand aa sake meri khush naseebi hai... saath banaae rakhiyegaa... shukriya
shaad...
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17th March 2011, 12:02 AM
yuN kabhi toDaa karegii phool ko guldaan se.
Har kali ko shaakh pe haNs ke khilaa kar jaaegi.
Bhuulna us pal ko pahle se nahii aasaan thaa,
Aaj phir manzar judaai kaa dikhaa kar jaaegi.
Bahut Badiyaa ............ Shaad Bhai .............
Aapka Apna Ishk
'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है
इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है
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17th March 2011, 09:35 AM
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Originally Posted by yasmeenraaz
Sameer ghazal itni achchi hai kae alfaaz khasir hain ,kae kaesae inki pazeerayee karaen
sameer tum to kamaal ker gae
la-jawaab ho
awesome
Khuda jhoot ba bulwayae
Ae mahaz laffazi nahin
Khush raho
Razia
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Pyaari Appijaan, kya kahun ke armaano ke kya haal hain aapko yahan dekh kar... aapne jis andaaz se tareef kar di hai, main bataa nahi saktaa khushiyon ka kya aalam hai... bas aap aaya karen aur koshsihen padhti rahen yahi mujh haqeer ke liye kaafi hogaa... duaaon ke liye shukriya...
Allah hafiz..
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17th March 2011, 12:16 PM
Zindgi bhar lab sile hii rah gaya jiske liye,
Mere afsaane mujhe wo hii sunaa kar jaaegi.
ji nice one ............................
Radhika
Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye
Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye
Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye
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17th March 2011, 05:34 PM
Waoooooooooooooo Shaibi her baar aik nai damaka se bhar poor Ghazal le kar aate haiN aap, Wah Bara hi sakoon mila aap ka kalaam parh kar, her sher mukammil aor laajawab hai, Dil nikli daad qabool kije
aor yunhi Mehfil ki raunaq bane raheye ga
Sada khush rahaiN
Nazish
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Dil jalaa ke poochhte haiN badii masoomiyat se woh.
Shamaa ka hi kyuN muqaddar hai raat bhar jalnaa.
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18th March 2011, 12:18 AM
Bahut khoobsurat ghazal 'shaad' saahab!
ek se ek sher kahen hain aapne!
Sandeep 'Saahil'
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18th March 2011, 10:07 AM
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yuN kabhi toDaa karegii phool ko guldaan se.
Har kali ko shaakh pe haNs ke khilaa kar jaaegi.
Bhuulna us pal ko pahle se nahii aasaan thaa,
Aaj phir manzar judaai kaa dikhaa kar jaaegi.
Bahut Badiyaa ............ Shaad Bhai .............
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Behad shukriyaa Rajinder saahib.. aap sab ka sath hi hai jo likhne ko majboor karta rahta hai.. yoonhi saath banaae rakhiyegaa.. shukriyaa.
shaad....
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18th March 2011, 10:08 AM
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Zindgi bhar lab sile hii rah gaya jiske liye,
Mere afsaane mujhe wo hii sunaa kar jaaegi.
ji nice one ............................
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bahot bahot shukriya Radhika jee, jo aap tashreef laain.. yoonhi aati rahiyegaa.. shukriyaa
shaad...
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18th March 2011, 11:55 AM
Masha Allah bohot khooob ,,
lekin iska kya matlab hai?? Beher= Ramal (2122 / 2122 / 2122 / 212)
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18th March 2011, 06:44 PM
Assalam-o-Alaykum Sameer Sahab
Janaab bahut khoob gazal pesh ki hai aapne dil ko chu gaya hai aapka likha hua ehsaas bhi bahut umda rahe meri dili daad hazir hai kubool farmaye
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Originally Posted by sameer'shaad'
Beher= Ramal (2122 / 2122 / 2122 / 212)
Wo kabhi tanhaiyon me mubtila kar jaaegi,
Yaa kabhi jane-jigar yuNhi gila kar jaaegi.
yuN kabhi toDaa karegii phool ko guldaan se.
Har kali ko shaakh pe haNs ke khilaa kar jaaegi.
Zindgi bhar lab sile hii rah gaya jiske liye,
Mere afsaane mujhe wo hii sunaa kar jaaegi.
Bhuulna us pal ko pahle se nahii aasaan thaa,
Aaj phir manzar judaai kaa dikhaa kar jaaegi.
Hai munasib ab karo tauba kabhi aye 'shaad' tum,
Dekh lenaa tum ko hi tum se judaa kar jaaegi.
shaad.....
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Dunia ke sitam ki koi perwah nahi mujhko,
wo kyoun mujhpe ungliya uthaye ja rahe hain.
Jis shaks ko janta tha ek chehre se ''kashif''
Uske kitne chehre samne laye ja rahe hain.
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18th March 2011, 11:02 PM
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Waoooooooooooooo Shaibi her baar aik nai damaka se bhar poor Ghazal le kar aate haiN aap, Wah Bara hi sakoon mila aap ka kalaam parh kar, her sher mukammil aor laajawab hai, Dil nikli daad qabool kije
aor yunhi Mehfil ki raunaq bane raheye ga
Sada khush rahaiN
Nazish
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ye sab aapki muhabbat hai Dr. saab jo aap qatre me samundar talaashte hain.. aapne koshish ko pasand kiya behad mashkoor hoon bhai... yoonhi saath dete rahiyegaa..
shukriyaa..
shaibi...
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18th March 2011, 11:03 PM
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Bahut khoobsurat ghazal 'shaad' saahab!
ek se ek sher kahen hain aapne!
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shukriya saahil bhai, aapko koshish pasand aai meri khush naseebi hai... aaage bhi aate rahiyegaa.. duaaon ka arz-mand
shaad..
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19th March 2011, 09:20 AM
Muzammil saahab,
behad shukriyaa aapka jo aapko ye koshish pasand aa saki aur jo aapne poocha hai wo beher kahlaati hai, iska matlab hota hai wo meter jisme shayri fit karte hain, main bhi faqat seekh hi raha hoon aur bas bas likh likh ke ise nikhaarne ki koshish me hoon..... link maine aapko Pm me bhej di thee aap padhna zaroor aur likhne ki kosshishh karna... shukriya...
Kashif bhai,
Walekum salaam janaab, kaise hain aap, bade dino baad aana hua aapka bazm me, aapne pasand kiye nacheez ke aashar meri badee khushnaseebi hai.. aate rahiyega aage bhi.. yoonhi saath dete rahiyega isi ummeed ke saath ijaazat..
shaad....
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19th March 2011, 06:42 PM
sameer saahab,
aap ki Ghazal achchhii lagii, khaas kar yeh sher.....
Bhuulna us pal ko pahle se nahii aasaan thaa,
Aaj phir manzar judaai kaa dikhaa kar jaaegi.
daad haazir hai qubool keejiyegaa.. likhte rahe.n yuun hii...
Mayank
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21st March 2011, 11:30 PM
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sameer saahab,
aap ki Ghazal achchhii lagii, khaas kar yeh sher.....
Bhuulna us pal ko pahle se nahii aasaan thaa,
Aaj phir manzar judaai kaa dikhaa kar jaaegi.
daad haazir hai qubool keejiyegaa.. likhte rahe.n yuun hii...
Mayank
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Mayank saab aadaab... meri khushnaseebi jo aapko nacheez ki koshsih pasand aa sakii.... jis sher ko aapne khaastaur se pasand kiya hai uska lafz lafz apne muqammal hone ki gawaahi de raha hai ... shukriya tahe dil se qubool karen...
shaad....
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23rd March 2011, 12:56 AM
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Originally Posted by sameer'shaad'
Beher= Ramal (2122 / 2122 / 2122 / 212)
Wo kabhi tanhaiyon me mubtila kar jaaegi,
Yaa kabhi jane-jigar yuNhi gila kar jaaegi.
yuN kabhi toDaa karegii phool ko guldaan se.
Har kali ko shaakh pe haNs ke khilaa kar jaaegi.
Zindgi bhar lab sile hii rah gaya jiske liye,
Mere afsaane mujhe wo hii sunaa kar jaaegi.
Bhuulna us pal ko pahle se nahii aasaan thaa,
Aaj phir manzar judaai kaa dikhaa kar jaaegi.
Hai munasib ab karo tauba kabhi aye 'shaad' tum,
Dekh lenaa tum ko hi tum se judaa kar jaaegi.
shaad.....
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Shaad!
Tum jab bhi likhtae ho ,dhamkakheez likhtae ho
kae tareef kae liyae alfaaz kum lagtae hain
khush raho
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23rd March 2011, 11:51 AM
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Shaad!
Tum jab bhi likhtae ho ,dhamkakheez likhtae ho
kae tareef kae liyae alfaaz kum lagtae hain
khush raho
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yasmeen appi.... sabse pahle to shukriya adaa karnaa chaunga ke is andaaz me aap tareef kar jaati hain.. khaaaksaar shaayad is laayaq bhi nahi, par aapki muhabbat aur khuloos ka ehteraam karta hoon... duaaon me yaad rakhiyegaa.. aaati rahiyegaa.
shukriyaa
shaad...
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