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2nd September 2014, 02:48 PM
Adaab hazireen-e-meHfil-e-dard,
Wese to aaj kal hur jagaH yeHi soorat-e-haal hai,
lekin khaas aaj kal mere mulk ke halaat kuch aise hue haiN,
inhi halaat ko mad-de-nazar rakhte pesh-e-khidmat hai aik dard 'koshish':-
munsif-e-daur-e-haazir be-imteyaaz hai
nahi aati Ya Illahi Teri aawaaz hai
be-imteyaaz : indiscriminating
charcha nahi karta zulmat-e-shab ka
aaj ka insaan huaa be-awaaz hai
zulmat-e-shab : obscurity of night
be-aawaaz : voiceless
ik be-aabru sa sakhs dehleez pe
muntazir-e-banda-nawaaz hai
banda-nawaz : one who looks after poor
khandaH peyshaani hui nadarad
maizbaanoN ka aaj yeH andaaz hai
khandaH peyshaani : jovial
nadarad : unable to find, missing
kahaN dekhti hai dar-o-deewar!
barsaat haadisoN se be-niyaaz hai
haadisoN : incidents
be-niyaaz : unconcern
bhokaa soye, jiye ya phir marey!
hamsaaya, hamsaaye se naraaz hai
khoon peena hai shaamil-e-fitrat!
muflisoN ka jo chaara-saaz hai
chaara-saaz : doctor
zindagi mujhe raas nahi shayed!
bohat oonchhi meri parwaaz hai
mann ke taar haiN zang aalood
imroz! raag-e-ishQ be-saaz hai
zang aalood : fret
imroz : today
raag-e-ishq : melody of love
abr aalood hai dil ka mausam!
'parStaar' ki tabiyat na-saaz hai...
abr aalood : cloudy
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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2nd September 2014, 03:13 PM
waaaaahhh!!!
Hassanbhai,
behad dard hai iis kaavish meN, aur yakin maaniye, har mulk ka ye hi haal rahaa hai aaj kal...
duaaGo
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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2nd September 2014, 09:06 PM
Aadaab o tasleemaat !
Hassan Bhai , jo mulk ke Haalaat ki tasweer appne khenchi or idher bayaan kee hai yaqeen kijiye qabil e daad hai , dil waqqi khoon ke aansoo roota hai
hairaan hoN maiN apne app per apni qaum per ... haey rey jamhooriat nigal jaa ghareeb ko bus tum mai sirf itna hi taqat hai kiyoN keh ameeroN ne hi tujhy paida kiya hai ... aur kya kahoN is jamhoriat ko ?
dhairoN daad qabool fermaaieN , teh dil se shukriyah . Allah kary appki awaz her soey huwe fard tak pahunchy .
i ll add reps later ...
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3rd September 2014, 03:48 AM
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waaaaahhh!!!
Hassanbhai,
behad dard hai iis kaavish meN, aur yakin maaniye, har mulk ka ye hi haal rahaa hai aaj kal...
duaaGo
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Adil bhai,
Mashkoor-o-manoon hooN itni mohabbatooN se nawaazne ke liye!
Milte rahiye ga,
DuaooN ke saath,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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3rd September 2014, 08:55 AM
Speechless. ............................
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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3rd September 2014, 10:46 AM
HSN bhai.....aapne jo bayaan kiya hai, kya kahu uske liye....dard par wahh wahhh nahi keh sakti....par ham Bhagwaan se yehi dua karte hai ki har taraf sukh-shaanti rhe.
har koi khushi ke, pyar ke tarane likhe na ki aise dard bhare.
duaoN ke saath
aapki baaji
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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3rd September 2014, 11:02 AM
bahut hee badiya shayri hassan jee.....ek baar fir aapne prove kiya that u r the best....
एक हाथ में दिल उनके एक हाथ में खंजर था
चेहरे पे दोस्त का मुखौटा अजीब सा मंजर था
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3rd September 2014, 01:39 PM
Waah waaah waaah waah
Behad hi pur asar pur dard pur soz ghazal kahi hai Hassan bhai !!! Aap ke alfaaz cheekh cheekh kar benawaaon ki sadah ban kar uthe hain !! Shayari ka ek bahaut bada maqasad bhi haasil kiya hai aap ne ... ki wo apne daur ki aawaaz bane.
Waise, badkismati se duniya mein kayee jagah aise hi haalaat hain. Aap ne ek universal anguish ko touch kiya hai.
Is andaaz se Faiz sahab ki yaad aa rahi hai ... un ke qalaam jo dil dimaagh rooh zameer .... in sab ko jhanjhorh dete the ....
un ka ek sher yaad aata hai, jis se shaayad kuchh hausla mil sake ....
halqa kiye baithe raho ik shamma ko yaaroN
kuchh roshni baakee to hai harchand ke kam hai
- faiz
ek baar phir dheron daad aap ko is behtareen aur asardaar qalaam par Hassan bhai !!!!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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4th September 2014, 05:37 AM
bahot gazab likhtey Ho bhai....
well done
repz due
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4th September 2014, 12:09 PM
wah wah hassan saheb....lajawaab.....eh kalam kisi pazirayi ke mohtaaj nahin hai.../
Eh pata chala aaj ke aap bhi all-rounder hain....har tarah ke kalam likhte hain.....aaj ke halaat pe shandaar peshkash hai....good job done .....keep it up.
Mujeeb Parwaaz.
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4th September 2014, 01:42 PM
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Masterpiece.....feelings brilliantly executed and aptly penned down.....you have clearly bared your pain for your country through this exceptionally beautiful ghazal....excellent selection of words too...hard hitting and impactful.....congratulations for this wonderful creation parStaar......welldone....may Allah bless you & your country (Aameen)
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Dear Naazuk!
Whatever I wrote, good, bad or worst but you're always there to support me.
Thankyou very much for telling me how much you have enjoyed reading my
composition. I'm flattered and 'Aameen' for your prayers.
Take care,
Regards,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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5th September 2014, 12:17 PM
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Aadaab o tasleemaat !
Hassan Bhai , jo mulk ke Haalaat ki tasweer appne khenchi or idher bayaan kee hai yaqeen kijiye qabil e daad hai , dil waqqi khoon ke aansoo roota hai
hairaan hoN maiN apne app per apni qaum per ... haey rey jamhooriat nigal jaa ghareeb ko bus tum mai sirf itna hi taqat hai kiyoN keh ameeroN ne hi tujhy paida kiya hai ... aur kya kahoN is jamhoriat ko ?
dhairoN daad qabool fermaaieN , teh dil se shukriyah . Allah kary appki awaz her soey huwe fard tak pahunchy .
i ll add reps later ...
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Mujeeb bhai,
Adaab-o-tasleemaat,
Aameen.. bohat bohat shukriyaaH meri awaaz ke saath
awaaz milaanay ke liye ... teh-e-dil se manooN hooN bhai!
Milte rahiye ga,
Apna khayaal rakhiye ga,
DuaooN ke saath,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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8th September 2014, 11:24 AM
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Zainy saheba,
Khaak alfaazooN ko itni tarjeeH-o-pazeeraayi bakhshne ke liye,
maiN aap ka be-had shukarguzaar hooN!
Aagay bhi aise hi saath ki umeed rahe gi,
DuaooN ke saath ijaazat,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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9th September 2014, 11:33 AM
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HSN bhai.....aapne jo bayaan kiya hai, kya kahu uske liye....dard par wahh wahhh nahi keh sakti....par ham Bhagwaan se yehi dua karte hai ki har taraf sukh-shaanti rhe.
har koi khushi ke, pyar ke tarane likhe na ki aise dard bhare.
duaoN ke saath
aapki baaji
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Sunita baaji,
Aap ka saath shuru se hi aik thandi hawaa ke jhonkay ki taraH raha hai,
aur aap ki duaooN ke liye teh-e-dil se manooN hooN.... (ameen)
Apna khayaal rakhiye ga,
Miltay rahiye ga,
DuaooN ke saath,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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9th September 2014, 11:52 AM
Gazal behad pasand aayi.........aur ye yakin bhi ho gaya ki phool chahe jis tarah ke ho bagban me.....hassan jee ki baagbaani kamaal ki hai.....I consider it very abstruse to write over an odd or a bit less celeberated topic....but u rocked with dis.......ek sukhan bhi hai isme jo mujhe behad pasand aayi......bahut bahut mubaarakbaad aapko....
Bahut gumraah karna chahta hai aaina mujhko !
Magar wo apni hi fitrat se hardam haar jaata hai !! (Pankaj Mishra 'Nawaab')
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10th September 2014, 11:36 AM
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bahut hee badiya shayri hassan jee.....ek baar fir aapne prove kiya that u r the best....
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Arvind jee,
Jis andaaz se aap ne adna si koshish ki hausla afzaai ki hai,
dilli sukooN pohnchaaa..... bohat accha laga aap ko yahaN dekh kar!
bohat bohat shukriyaaH....
Milte rahiye ga,
Apna khayaal rakhiye ga,
DuaooN ke saath,,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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10th September 2014, 12:09 PM
kya kahun Hassan saahab.... aapke kalaam ne chashme nam hone ko majboor kar diyaa ...
Allah se duaa karta hoon tamaam mulqon aur saari duniyaa me aman aur chain qaayam rahe hameshaa. ...
insaan insaan ko ahmiyat de bajaay daulat taaqat aur shohrat ke...... aapne bahot accchi koshish ki hai apna msg failaane ke liye.... meri dili duaa hai ke Allaah aapko sukoon de.. aameen...
khush rahiye
Shaad...
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10th September 2014, 01:41 PM
hassan bhaai..........
mujhe urdu nhi aati jis ki wajah se puri gazal ka mazza nhi le paayaa
aapne apne aas pass ho rahe haalaat pr jo likhaa aur jitnaa maiN padh aur samjh paayaa wo bahut hi badiyaa tarike se pesh kiyaa hai aapne....
maiN eswar se paraathnaa kartaa huN ki chaaroN taraf sukh-shaanti ho aur hm sabhi ka ye prem-bhaav hameshaa yuN hi banaa rahe..
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11th September 2014, 12:12 AM
Hassan ji Namaskar
Maine aaj duusre baar aapki rachna parhi.Pehli baar tasveer par tehreer mein parhi thi.u r a good poet.Aapke shabd parh sach ki dager par chalti shabdon ki dor bahut khoobsurat lagi.shukr hay aapne har word ka meaning daal diya nahin to mughey rachna theek se samagh hi nahin aati.Keep up the good work.
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11th September 2014, 01:57 PM
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Waah waaah waaah waah
Behad hi pur asar pur dard pur soz ghazal kahi hai Hassan bhai !!! Aap ke alfaaz cheekh cheekh kar benawaaon ki sadah ban kar uthe hain !! Shayari ka ek bahaut bada maqasad bhi haasil kiya hai aap ne ... ki wo apne daur ki aawaaz bane.
Waise, badkismati se duniya mein kayee jagah aise hi haalaat hain. Aap ne ek universal anguish ko touch kiya hai.
Is andaaz se Faiz sahab ki yaad aa rahi hai ... un ke qalaam jo dil dimaagh rooh zameer .... in sab ko jhanjhorh dete the ....
un ka ek sher yaad aata hai, jis se shaayad kuchh hausla mil sake ....
halqa kiye baithe raho ik shamma ko yaaroN
kuchh roshni baakee to hai harchand ke kam hai
- faiz
ek baar phir dheron daad aap ko is behtareen aur asardaar qalaam par Hassan bhai !!!!
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Zarraa saheb,
Aap ne jis taraH se na-cheez ko itni izzat bakhshi hai,
uss ke liye maiN aap ka makrooz ho gaya hooN....
bas Allah se dua hai ke aap ka saath hamesha mere saath rahe! (ameen)
Adna si koshish ko had darja pasand karne ke liye bohat bohat shukriyaaH.
Milte rahiye ga,
Apna khayaal rakhiye ga,
DuaooN ke saath,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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11th September 2014, 01:58 PM
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bahot gazab likhtey Ho bhai....
well done
repz due
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Shan saheb,
Bohat bohat khushi ho rahi hai aap ko yahaN dekar kar!
Aap ko khaak alfaaz pasand aaye.. yeH to meri khush naseebi hai...
Milte rahiye ga,
Apna khayaal rakhiye ga,
DuaooN ke saath,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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11th September 2014, 02:00 PM
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wah wah hassan saheb....lajawaab.....eh kalam kisi pazirayi ke mohtaaj nahin hai.../
Eh pata chala aaj ke aap bhi all-rounder hain....har tarah ke kalam likhte hain.....aaj ke halaat pe shandaar peshkash hai....good job done .....keep it up.
Mujeeb Parwaaz.
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Mujeeb bhai,
Khaaksaar ko itna baDa aizaaz dene ke liye maiN aap ka bohat ziyaada
manoon hooN! ... khushi hui jaan kar ke aap koi meri yeH chhoti si
koshish pasand aayi...
Milte rahiye ga,
Apna khayaal rakhiye ga,
DuaooN ke saath,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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15th September 2014, 11:48 AM
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Gazal behad pasand aayi.........aur ye yakin bhi ho gaya ki phool chahe jis tarah ke ho bagban me.....hassan jee ki baagbaani kamaal ki hai.....I consider it very abstruse to write over an odd or a bit less celeberated topic....but u rocked with dis.......ek sukhan bhi hai isme jo mujhe behad pasand aayi......bahut bahut mubaarakbaad aapko....
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Pankaj jee,
Adna si koshish ki iss darjaa hausla afzaai ke liye, maiN aap ka
mashkoo-o-manoon hooN!
Milte rahiye ga,
Apna khayaal rakhiye ga,
Regards,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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15th September 2014, 11:52 AM
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kya kahun Hassan saahab.... aapke kalaam ne chashme nam hone ko majboor kar diyaa ...
Allah se duaa karta hoon tamaam mulqon aur saari duniyaa me aman aur chain qaayam rahe hameshaa. ...
insaan insaan ko ahmiyat de bajaay daulat taaqat aur shohrat ke...... aapne bahot accchi koshish ki hai apna msg failaane ke liye.... meri dili duaa hai ke Allaah aapko sukoon de.. aameen...
khush rahiye
Shaad...
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Shaad bhai,
Aap ka meri ghazal per aana.. meri ghazal ko mukammal kar gaya!
Aap ke duaoN ke shukriyaaH aur Ameen!
Milte rahiye ga,
Apna khayaal rakhiye ga,
DuaooN ke saath,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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15th September 2014, 11:54 AM
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hassan bhaai..........
mujhe urdu nhi aati jis ki wajah se puri gazal ka mazza nhi le paayaa
aapne apne aas pass ho rahe haalaat pr jo likhaa aur jitnaa maiN padh aur samjh paayaa wo bahut hi badiyaa tarike se pesh kiyaa hai aapne....
maiN eswar se paraathnaa kartaa huN ki chaaroN taraf sukh-shaanti ho aur hm sabhi ka ye prem-bhaav hameshaa yuN hi banaa rahe..
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Rajeev bhai,
Aap ne meri koshish per nazar ki, bohat accha laga aap ko yahaN dekh kar,
aur aap ki duaoN ke liye bhi shukar-guzaar hooN!
Milte rahiye ga,
Apna khayaal rakhiye ga,
Regards,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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15th September 2014, 11:57 AM
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Hassan ji Namaskar
Maine aaj duusre baar aapki rachna parhi.Pehli baar tasveer par tehreer mein parhi thi.u r a good poet.Aapke shabd parh sach ki dager par chalti shabdon ki dor bahut khoobsurat lagi.shukr hay aapne har word ka meaning daal diya nahin to mughey rachna theek se samagh hi nahin aati.Keep up the good work.
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Sukanya jee,
Yeh meri khush-naseebi hai ke aap ne mere alfazooN ko itni wuqqat bakhshi,
aur apna qeemati waqt surf kiya.... likhay ko pasand karne ke kiye teh-e-dil
se aap ka shukriyaaH!
Apna khayaal rakhiye ga,
Regards,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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