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Us benam saks ko aaj bhoola di humne - 27th July 2008, 04:02 AM
Us benam saks ko aaj bhula di humne
apne pyar ko sade aam nilam kar di humne
Rafta rafta bikhar gayi thi jiske chahat main
aaj khud ko fir se samet liya maine
yaad uska ab aayega bhi nehin
apne dilse usko nikala humne
Gumnam ho jayega andhre main
har paal mera imtehan leta raha woh
har roz mujhko aajama raha woh
bachi kuchhi armaan jo dil main tha
usko bhi kaal tod diya woh
Apne zindegi se aaj usko ruksat kiya humne
us benam saks ko aaj bhula diya humne


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Sad 27th July 2008, 04:03 AM
uske sare eheshash aaj mita diye
raat bhar takiye pe rote rote bita diye
dil se aawaz aayi ki chahat thi kiski
khamosh rahe uske naam nehin liye


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27th July 2008, 04:05 AM
mere kwahish ko aaj dafna gaya koi
mujhe naam se benam kar gaya koi
ek saks tha is sheher main
aaj apna wajud mita gaya koi


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Sad 27th July 2008, 04:06 AM
bahat dard hua dil main jab usse bhoolne lagi
tute kaanch ki tarah bikhargaya yaadein jab sametne lagi
aaj meri khudki mout hui uske nazar main
ek ajnabee bagnke meri lash uske samne gujarne lagi


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27th July 2008, 04:07 AM
ek din tujhe bhi mere jaise rona hoga
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khoon ki aansoon jo aaj main ro rahi hun
ek din us aansoon ko tujhe pina hoga







my own sayari....if u like frnds pls reply.........


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28th July 2008, 09:34 PM
PYAR KA DARD AAPKI SHAYRI ME JHALAKTA HAI..

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PYAR KA DARD AAPKI SHAYRI ME JHALAKTA HAI..
Kisi ki aankh mein yunhi toh aansoo aa nahin jaate

Sabab iska bata dena mujhe acha nahin lagta

Khizaan ke daur mein jeene ke bhi andaaz hote hai

Bahaaron ko sadaa dena mujhe acha nahin lagta (NM)



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Us benam saks ko aaj bhula di humne
apne pyar ko sade aam nilam kar di humne
Rafta rafta bikhar gayi thi jiske chahat main
aaj khud ko fir se samet liya maine
yaad uska ab aayega bhi nehin
apne dilse usko nikala humne
Gumnam ho jayega andhre main
har paal mera imtehan leta raha woh
har roz mujhko aajama raha woh
bachi kuchhi armaan jo dil main tha
usko bhi kaal tod diya woh
Apne zindegi se aaj usko ruksat kiya humne
us benam saks ko aaj bhula diya humne
Aadaab...........
Aaj aapki is koshish par nazar padi jiske ehsaas mujhe bahut pasand aye aap shayri par kafi mehnat kar rahi hain koshish karti rahiye manzil zaroor milegi........meri dua aapke saath hai.........likhti rahiye

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Aadaab...........
Aaj aapki is koshish par nazar padi jiske ehsaas mujhe bahut pasand aye aap shayri par kafi mehnat kar rahi hain koshish karti rahiye manzil zaroor milegi........meri dua aapke saath hai.........likhti rahiye

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Us benam shaks ko aaj bhula di humne
apne pyar ko sare aam nilam kar di humne
Rafta rafta bikhar gaye the jiske chahat main
aaj khud ko fir se saamet liya humne
yaad uska ab aayega bhi nehin
apne dilse usko nikala humne
Gumnam ho jayega andhre main
har paal mera imtehan leta raha woh
har roz mujhko aajamta raha woh
bachi kuchhi armaan jo dil main tha
usko bhi kal tod diya woh
Apne zindegi se aaj usko ruksat kiya humne
us benam shaks ko aaj bhula diya humne


kuchh spelling mistake tha usko sirf sudhari hai ........

thanx a lot


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Us benam shaks ko aaj bhula di humne
apne pyar ko sare aam nilam kar di humne
Rafta rafta bikhar gaye the jiske chahat main
aaj khud ko fir se saamet liya humne
yaad uska ab aayega bhi nehin
apne dilse usko nikala humne
Gumnam ho jayega andhre main
har paal mera imtehan leta raha woh
har roz mujhko aajamta raha woh
bachi kuchhi armaan jo dil main tha
usko bhi kal tod diya woh
Apne zindegi se aaj usko ruksat kiya humne
us benam shaks ko aaj bhula diya humne


kuchh spelling mistake tha usko sirf sudhari hai ........

thanx a lot
bahut accha likha hai dear......kuch ahsaas aise hote hain ki jab bhi pado tabhi tazza ho jate hain.....so behtar hai kuch bhi na badlo...jaisa hai rahne do.....keep it up

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29th September 2008, 10:13 PM
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Us benam saks ko aaj bhula di humne
apne pyar ko sade aam nilam kar di humne
Rafta rafta bikhar gayi thi jiske chahat main
aaj khud ko fir se samet liya maine
yaad uska ab aayega bhi nehin
apne dilse usko nikala humne
Gumnam ho jayega andhre main
har paal mera imtehan leta raha woh
har roz mujhko aajama raha woh
bachi kuchhi armaan jo dil main tha
usko bhi kaal tod diya woh
Apne zindegi se aaj usko ruksat kiya humne
us benam saks ko aaj bhula diya humne
DIYA saare aash'aar ek se badh ke ek hai,kaafi mehnat ki tumne apne ash'aar per saaf nazar aa raha hai, bas aise hi likhti jao,humari duaaein aapke sath hai.

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bahut accha likha hai dear......kuch ahsaas aise hote hain ki jab bhi pado tabhi tazza ho jate hain.....so behtar hai kuch bhi na badlo...jaisa hai rahne do.....keep it up

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diya ji app se kuch arz kerna tha hamieN , umeed hai app ko bura nahiN lage ga

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sab se pehle app ko batana chahoN ga keh lafz hai "shakhs" uske baad bhula di humne nahieN ho sakta balkeh "Bhula diya" ab dosra misra' meN "sade aam" nahi hai balkeh " sarre a'am " phir "ker di" nahi balkeh " ker diya " hona chahiye , mere naQis ilm ke mutabiQ inhaiN aisa hona chahiye lakin app teHQeeQ ker laiN takeh app aur meN donoN hi ghalti se bach sakieN

yeh to thieN Urdu ki ghaltiyaN ab aate haiN kuch shayri ke bunyadi asooloN per , Qaafiya smajh nahi aa raha , pehle misra' meN appne likha "bhula" aur dosre meN "nilam kar "

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matla ke ke mutabiQ "di humne" radeef hai lakin app ne yahaN radeef aur Qaafia donoN hi badal Daale

diya ji app se ilteja hai ager app ke pass waqt ho aur app meN zauQ hai shayri seekhne ka to app The Technical Aspect ko visit kijiye umeed hai bahut kuch seekhne ko mile ga

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7 Mahina pahle main Ek shairi site pe Join ki aur wahan shairi Dekhti thi ...Kabhi kabhi dusre ke shairi wahan post kar deti thi (mujhe pata hai yeh galat hai Fir bhi ..main copy paste karti thi ....Ab mujhe dukh hoti hai is baat se kitna nadan thi main)...wohi se main chhote chhote 2 line ki sher khud likhne ki koshish ki ....Main Apni Thread pe Shairi post karne keliye Net pe har Dusri shairi site Search karti thi ...aur 4 mahine pahle mujhe SDC iktfaaq se mila ...jahan mujhe sabke post bahot pasand aayi....Main to yahan se Shairi copy karke Dusre site pe deti thi ....aur aise karte karte ...2/4 line likhne ki hosla mili ....Itne shairi dekhne ke baad bhi mujhe yeh nahin pata ki gazal nazm ,shairi main farak kya hai ...main sirf itna janti hun apne feelings ko sabd do aur koi aisa chhota story bane to shairi pe nazar aaye ...Tabhi main yeh poem likhi thi .....

5 din pahle mujhe pata chala..Gazal main Radeef.Qaafia....Kisse kahte hain ...aur mujhe meri khud ki sare thread galat nazar aaye ...Inmain pahle 100 galti thi aur ab hazaroon...Fir bhi main isko Change nahin karoongi ...ab jo naya likhungi ..usmain jarur in sare baat pe dhyan dungi ...

Mujhe sayaara banna hai ...SDC pe aayi hun to jarur banke rahoongi....Mujhe aap sabki saath youn hi chahiye ....

Meri yeh Purani thread Har SDC ke Un member keliye hogi jo kabhi likhna chahate hain per likh nahin pate ...ya fir darte hain kabhi unke lafz galat na ho ...ya fir apne galti jo chhupana chahate hain .....aaj nahin per kal main Hindi thik se likhungi ....apni feelings ko sabd dungi ...meri gazal main koi galti nazar nehin aayegi yeh mujhe Yakeen hai ..........

Tab koi new member aake galti karega aur usse Example dena hoga,ki khud ke galti se khud sikho To beshak Aap mere Example de dena .....Diya ki Purani thread dekho kitni galtiyan hai ...usse to Thik se Hindi likhna nahin aati thi per aaj woh Gazal Likh rahi hai ........Meri yeh khwahish Jarur puri hogi ..

Sare SDC member se request hai pls aap mere saath Dijiye ...Mujhe apna galti batayiye aur ..sahi kya hai yeh batyiye ...taki mujhe Garv ho apne aap pe ki main SDC ki Member hun...

Mujeeb ji Dilse Sukriya ada karna chahati hun aapki
Agar aapke pass kabhi waqt ho to main aapse kuchh sikhna chahati hun


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Umeed hai khairiyat se hoNgi , waQt se zyada insaan Qeemti hai shukriya kerne ki koi zaroorat nahi hai , yeh mera farz hai jitna meN jaanta hoN utna app dostoN ko bhi bataoN ,

yeh jo app ne pesh kiya yeh naghma nahieN balkeh Ghazal hai , mujhe ORIYA ke baare meN bilkul e'lm nahieN hai , apni zubaan se hat ker ager koi zubaan seekhni ho to zahri baat hai thoRa mushkil bhi hai aur us meN kuch rad-o-badal (changing) to ho jaati hai , bolne ke andaaz (style) meN aur waghera waghera ...

aap ko HINDI/URDU seekhne ka lagao hai yeh jaan ker behad khushi huwi ....thoRi se sanjeedgi appko HINDI/URDU jald seekhne meN bahut madad ker sakti hai

aur app ne likha keh app ghalt likhti haiN aur ghalt bolti haiN to aisa bilkul nahieN hai ... app koshish ker rahi haiN is se baRh ker saHiH kaam koi aur nahieN hai .

Ghazal usooloN ki paband hai aur nazm usooloN ki paband nahi hai

aap ki koshishoN ki sarahta hoN daad Qabool fermaaiye ...

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kisi shaai'r ne kiya khoob kaha ,

iraade jinke pukhta hoN nazer jinki khuda per ho
taltum khez maujoN se woh ghebraya nahieN kerte

bus yehi jid-o-jehd (spirit) chahhiye , mujhe umeed hai app zaroor kaamyaab hoN ge

ager seekhne waale meN app jesi juraat ho to kaamyab ho ker rehte haiN


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Ap Toh The Best Ho................ Meri aankhon ko nam kar diya apki is poem ne......... meri dost to itna acha likhti hai.................................. yeh kavita toh seedhe dil me utar gayi..........................
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Us benam saks ko aaj bhula di humne
apne pyar ko sade aam nilam kar di humne
Rafta rafta bikhar gayi thi jiske chahat main
aaj khud ko fir se samet liya maine
yaad uska ab aayega bhi nehin
apne dilse usko nikala humne
Gumnam ho jayega andhre main
har paal mera imtehan leta raha woh
har roz mujhko aajama raha woh
bachi kuchhi armaan jo dil main tha
usko bhi kaal tod diya woh
Apne zindegi se aaj usko ruksat kiya humne
us benam saks ko aaj bhula diya humne


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Us benam saks ko aaj bhula di humne
apne pyar ko sade aam nilam kar di humne
Rafta rafta bikhar gayi thi jiske chahat main
aaj khud ko fir se samet liya maine
yaad uska ab aayega bhi nehin
apne dilse usko nikala humne
Gumnam ho jayega andhre main
har paal mera imtehan leta raha woh
har roz mujhko aajama raha woh
bachi kuchhi armaan jo dil main tha
usko bhi kaal tod diya woh
Apne zindegi se aaj usko ruksat kiya humne
us benam saks ko aaj bhula diya humne
be hadd acha likha aap ne
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Ap Toh The Best Ho................ Meri aankhon ko nam kar diya apki is poem ne......... meri dost to itna acha likhti hai.................................. yeh kavita toh seedhe dil me utar gayi..........................

Nalin jee,
maine socha tha is poem per meri msg ko padhne ke baad koi reply nahi karega .........aapne khud dekha hai kitna ghalti hai is mein fir bhi tareef kar diye ....ek sher yaad aagayi mujhe apni ek ghazal ki..............

Wohi afsaane vo aaj fir se dohrane lage hai
ki jinhe bhulane meiN hume jamane lage hai



yeh thread mera vo past hai jo mujhe khusi deti hai
main pahle aise hi ulta pulta likhti thi
per yeh nazam ek sachai hai
kabhi ek dost ne itnaa dil dukhaya tha ki uskeliye aah
nikal gayi thi dilse ...aur gusse mein maine yeh likha tha
tab mujhe ghazal nazam sher iske baremain kuchh maloom nahi tha
tuta futa hindi ke shahare main apne soch ko bayaN kar di thi


sukriya dost .........

khus rahna apna khayal rakhna


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diya ji,,
keep writing

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thanx a lot lamha sweety


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Mujhay jis ne chaha jala diya, jis ne chaha bhuja dia....!

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diya g wish u great birthday - 17th December 2009, 07:20 PM
kuch khayal is dil se aap ke liye aaye hai .
ye wo tarif hai jo mere lafjo ne barsaye hai .
aap jane is dharti pe kiske liye aaye hai .
aap humare ho jaye ye kismat humne nahi paye hai /
par itni fraiyad to abhi b kar sakta hun .
wo insan khusnasib hai jiske tum khudaye hai.
ae DIYA humko tu itna to bta hi de ?
hum tere dil me aab tak kahan aaye hai ?

DIYA G WISH U A GREAT BIRTH DAY ON YEAR ....... YEAR OF BIRTH

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Mujeeb Ji,

Pahle to main aapki Sukriya ada karna chahati hun aapne apna Kimti waqt se kuchh mujhe diye ..mere nagme pe nazar dale aur mujhe galti kya hai yeh samjhaye ....Kaash ki aap Pahle jab main isko post ki thi tab milte to aaj tak jo galti main bar bar dohrati rahi ho nahin hoti ....Der hi sahi per aap ke ehsaan mujhe Humesha yaad rahegi ....Mujhe Khusi hai ki SDC ki member hun aur yahan aap jaise log hain jo kisi ki bhi Help karne ko tayar hain......

Ab main kuchh Apne baremain batati hun Jiska is nagme se koi matlab nahin ......Main Orissa se Hun ,Oriya meri Mother tounge....Hindi main class 8 se hi sikhi ,baki Tv dekh dekh ke ....mujhe Hindi thik se bolna bhi nehin aati ..humesha galat bolti hun....beshaq galat Likhti hun

Mujhe Oriya main poem Likhne ki Souk thi ....isiliye jab koi Hindi shairi sunti thi main dukhi ho jati thi kash main kabhi aise likh paun....Gazal main pichhle 7 saal se sunti aayi hun,per mujhe Gazal, Nazm main faraq kya yeh maloom nahin

7 Mahina pahle main Ek shairi site pe Join ki aur wahan shairi Dekhti thi ...Kabhi kabhi dusre ke shairi wahan post kar deti thi (mujhe pata hai yeh galat hai Fir bhi ..main copy paste karti thi ....Ab mujhe dukh hoti hai is baat se kitna nadan thi main)...wohi se main chhote chhote 2 line ki sher khud likhne ki koshish ki ....Main Apni Thread pe Shairi post karne keliye Net pe har Dusri shairi site Search karti thi ...aur 4 mahine pahle mujhe SDC iktfaaq se mila ...jahan mujhe sabke post bahot pasand aayi....Main to yahan se Shairi copy karke Dusre site pe deti thi ....aur aise karte karte ...2/4 line likhne ki hosla mili ....Itne shairi dekhne ke baad bhi mujhe yeh nahin pata ki gazal nazm ,shairi main farak kya hai ...main sirf itna janti hun apne feelings ko sabd do aur koi aisa chhota story bane to shairi pe nazar aaye ...Tabhi main yeh poem likhi thi .....

5 din pahle mujhe pata chala..Gazal main Radeef.Qaafia....Kisse kahte hain ...aur mujhe meri khud ki sare thread galat nazar aaye ...Inmain pahle 100 galti thi aur ab hazaroon...Fir bhi main isko Change nahin karoongi ...ab jo naya likhungi ..usmain jarur in sare baat pe dhyan dungi ...

Mujhe sayaara banna hai ...SDC pe aayi hun to jarur banke rahoongi....Mujhe aap sabki saath youn hi chahiye ....

Meri yeh Purani thread Har SDC ke Un member keliye hogi jo kabhi likhna chahate hain per likh nahin pate ...ya fir darte hain kabhi unke lafz galat na ho ...ya fir apne galti jo chhupana chahate hain .....aaj nahin per kal main Hindi thik se likhungi ....apni feelings ko sabd dungi ...meri gazal main koi galti nazar nehin aayegi yeh mujhe Yakeen hai ..........

Tab koi new member aake galti karega aur usse Example dena hoga,ki khud ke galti se khud sikho To beshak Aap mere Example de dena .....Diya ki Purani thread dekho kitni galtiyan hai ...usse to Thik se Hindi likhna nahin aati thi per aaj woh Gazal Likh rahi hai ........Meri yeh khwahish Jarur puri hogi ..

Sare SDC member se request hai pls aap mere saath Dijiye ...Mujhe apna galti batayiye aur ..sahi kya hai yeh batyiye ...taki mujhe Garv ho apne aap pe ki main SDC ki Member hun...

Mujeeb ji Dilse Sukriya ada karna chahati hun aapki
Agar aapke pass kabhi waqt ho to main aapse kuchh sikhna chahati hun


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diya jii,

iss jazbe ko salaam karne ko dil chaha to reply likhne baith gaya.....aisi him'mat ka maiN sada se kayal rehta hooN aur jiske andar bhi yeh jazba ho uske liye mere dil meiN izzat khud-ba-khud aa jaati hai...
aapne apne baare meiN mote taur par 3 baateN kahiN haiN aur unhiN 3 baatoN ke liye aapko daad dena chahta hooN, chahe to aap meri taraf se usse apne janamdin ka tohfa samjh leN

1. aapne kaha aapko hindi/urdu nahi aati phir bhi aapko shayara ban_na hai....yaha'n aapki lagan aur hausle ko daad deta hooN.....yeh koi asaaN kaam nahi hai....

2. aapne kaha ki aap auroN ki shayari ko copy paste karti thi...bahut him'mat wali baat hai apni galati ko sar'e aam qabuul karna....daad haazir hai....kehne ko duniya kehti hai ki apni galati maan ne meiN koi sharam nahi karni chahiye.....karta kaun hai....?

3. aapne kaha hai ki chahe iss kalaam meiN hazaar galatiyaN hoN lekin aap ise change nahi karengi.....iss par bhi daad haazir hai....qabuul farmayeN....

yeh jazba ta_umr banaye rakheN....khush raheN....

HAPPY BIRTHDAY TO YOU.....!

aapka dost,
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Dearest Diya ..

kaise ho ? tum hamesha ki tarah aacha aur bahut hi aacha likhti ho .... yeh 1st ghazal shayad tumharii phelii koshish thii .. jo ki bhaut hi aachi thiii ...

har sher dil ke kareeb raha ... u have always been hard working gal ....

take care aur likhti raho

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