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Shunya Hote Hum (शून्य होते हम ) - 30th August 2008, 12:53 AM


शून्य
यही दिया था ना भारत ने विश्व को?
फिर आज खुद शून्य क्यूँ हो रहा है खुद?

एक --

संवेदनाओं में शून्य..

अब नहीं दिखती किसी की तकलीफ?
या सड़क पर दुर्घटना का शिकार हुए
व्यक्ति को देखने में
तुम्हे रोमांच आने लगा है?
ये देखना चाहते हो-
कि मेरे सामने कोई कैसे मरता है?
तड़प-तड़प कर..
और कुछ महानुभाव तो
बहुत ही परम हो गये हैं
चैन, मोबाइल, घडी और पैसे ले कर भी
नहीं सुनते उसकी विनती..
ना समझ सकते हैं उसके दर्द को..
लूट कर चल देते हैं
अपने घरवालो को खुशिया देने..
क्या इतनी भीड़ में
एक आदमी भी खून से लथपथ पड़े
उस व्यक्ति को अस्पताल नहीं पंहुचा सकता?
क्या मै भी नहीं?
क्या तुम भी नहीं?

दो--

शून्य हो चुके हैं रिश्ते

क्या माँ-बाप?
क्या भाई बहन?
सब यार हो गये..
और यार रिश्तेदार हो गये..
मामा-मामी, चाचा-चाची..
सब अंकल आंटी बन गये
और उनके बच्चे
कजिन बन गये
सारे रिश्ते
एक ही नाम में सिमटने लगे..
अपनापन खोजते तो हैं हम
पर किसी को अपना कर
अपना बना कर देखा है कभी?
प्यार सब पाना चाहते हैं
प्यार लुटा कर देखा है कभी?
ये वो दौलत है
जो लुटा कर और भी
दौलत मंद हो जाता है..
ज्ञान कि तरह..
पर ज्ञान भी तो शुन्य हो गया है..
अमेरिका में बैठी दोस्त
क्या कर रही है वो पता है
पर पड़ोस में कौन रहता है
ये नहीं पता॥

तीन --

खुशियों में शून्य

झूठी हँसी हँसने लगे
और जो हँसता दिखा
उसको ऐसी बात बोल दी
कि उसका भी चेहरा अपने जैसा
मनहूस बना दिया..
खुद तो हँस सकते नहीं
दूसरे की ख़ुशी भी नहीं देख सकते।

चार --

संतुष्टि में शुन्य

अब संतोषी माँ की कृपा
शायद लोगो में कम हो गयी है
या वो हम सब से रूठ गयी हैं..
किसी को संतोष ही नहीं
और पहले?
३०० रूपये में पूरा परिवार
ख़ुशी से चलता था
आज?
३०,००० भी कम पड़ रहा है..
पहले इच्छाएँ कम थी,
अब संतुष्टि कम हो गयी..

पांच --

संस्कृति से शून्य

अब किसी की फोटो से
अगर उसका चेहरा हटा दिया जाये
तो कोई बता ही नहीं सकता
कि ये फोटो किस देश के
व्यक्ति की है..
सब इंटरनेशनल हो चले हैं,
पर खुद की पहचान खो कर..
हम सभी शून्य से ही हैं
और शून्य होने की तरफ
हम कदम बढाये जा रहे हैं.

--गोपाल के.


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4th September 2008, 04:45 PM

gopal ji aap nein bahot achha likha hai ........ parntu visheshatah hindi forum mein post kiye jane k uddeshya se dekhi jaaye to isme kafi kamiya hai ..... aapki hindi rachna mein urdu aur farsi shabdo ka mishran nahi hona chahiye .... dhanyawad
   
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SHUKRIYA SAGAR JI.. MAGAR MAI JO SAMAJHTA HU AUR JO MUJHE PADHNE WALE SAMAJHTE HAIN USI BHAASHA ME LIKHTA HU.. AISI SHUDDH HINDI KIS KAAM KI KE KHUD KO BHI USKA MATLAB KHOJNE KE LIYE DICTIONARY KI JARURAT PADE, AUR MERI SAMAJH SE YAHI EK WAJAH HAI HINDI KI DURDASHA KI..
JINKO HINDI KO AAGE BADHAANE KA KAAM DIYA JATA HAI WO ITNI KLISHT (KATHIN) HINDI KA PRAYOG KAR DETE HAIN KI PADHNE WALA SAMAJH HI NAHI PATA.. AAJ BHI ADAALATOn ME HINDI KI JAGAH URDU KA HI PRAYOG HOTA HAI..
MAI KHUD KE LIYE AUR APNE CHAND PADHNE WALE DOSTO KE LIYE HI LIKHTA HU, MUJHE KAUN SA KAVI SAMMELAN ME JANA HAI YA HINDI KA PURUSKAAR JEETNE KA SOCHNA HAI.. JO HINDI MAI BOLTA, SUNTA AUR SAMAJHTA HU WAHI YAHA PAR LIKHA HU.. AUR AGAR ISME URDU YA FARSI BHI SHAMIL HAI TO KOI BAAT NAHI..
BAS EK SAWAAL FIR SE WAHI KHADAA HO GAYA MERE SAAMNE KI AGAR YE SHUDDH HINDI ME NAHI HAI TO ISE YAHA HINDI KE FORUM ME POST Q KAR DIYA MAINE? TO SIR JI, AUR KOI FORUM IS LAAYAK DIKHA HI NAHI..
GALTI KE LIYE SORRY


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priy gopal ji - 6th September 2008, 09:05 PM

sarpratham to ap se kshama chahunga .......... aap mishrit bhasha ko hindi na kahe wo hindi nahi ........ hindi hoti hai ...... khichdi bhasha ko hindi nahi kaha jaa sakta .... aur aapse ye kisne kah diya k hindi kathi dushkar athawa asadhya bhasa hai ..... haan ye dusri baat hai k samnya jan aapni matri bhasha apni rastra bhasha k prati na adar bhaw rakhte hai na hi prem bhaw ......... yah mansikta si ban chali hai jo sahaj hai use prapt karna jo saral hai usi marg par chalna .......... jo saras hai us k prati lalayit rehna ..... jo sab karte hai agar wahi karna hai to fir kuchh likhne padhne ki kya awashykat hai shriman ......... aap bhid se alag kuch karna chah rahe hai to bhid se alag ek marg ka chunaw bhi to kijiye ......... aap itna achha likhte hai ........ kya jara sa aur achha nahi likh sakte ......... aage jaisy aapki iksha ....... sukhi rahiye
   
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sarpratham to ap se kshama chahunga .......... aap mishrit bhasha ko hindi na kahe wo hindi nahi ........ hindi hoti hai ...... khichdi bhasha ko hindi nahi kaha jaa sakta .... aur aapse ye kisne kah diya k hindi kathi dushkar athawa asadhya bhasa hai ..... haan ye dusri baat hai k samnya jan aapni matri bhasha apni rastra bhasha k prati na adar bhaw rakhte hai na hi prem bhaw ......... yah mansikta si ban chali hai jo sahaj hai use prapt karna jo saral hai usi marg par chalna .......... jo saras hai us k prati lalayit rehna ..... jo sab karte hai agar wahi karna hai to fir kuchh likhne padhne ki kya awashykat hai shriman ......... aap bhid se alag kuch karna chah rahe hai to bhid se alag ek marg ka chunaw bhi to kijiye ......... aap itna achha likhte hai ........ kya jara sa aur achha nahi likh sakte ......... aage jaisy aapki iksha ....... sukhi rahiye

Saagar Ji agar humein kisi baat ka gyaan nahin hai, iska arth ye na nikalein ki humein usse prem hi nahin. Main kai deshwasiyon aur baalikao.n ko prem karta hu par sabse vivaah toh nahin kar sakta na. Moral is, u do not have to b an expert of everything u love and respect. U learnt hindi cos u respected it. We did not. Doesnt mean we disrespect it.... I cud not learn hindi cos I learnt Statistics and business Admin... Hope that solves ur concern. Also, I request u to not disrespect everyone who loves it.

Jshs tak rahi is post ke yaha hone ki baat toh bhai sahib, ye forum a naam hindi nahin, ye Hindi/english and other languages forum hai..

This is so disappointing ki jo insaan aapko chaand dikha raha hai aap uski ungli mein dosh nikaal rahe hainnn..

Agli baar plz aisa na karein. Gopal Ji ne bahut hi khoobsurat vichaar pesh kiye hain. Behtar hoga aap unse kuch seekhen aur unhe appreciate karein...

Gopal Ji... The thread was fantabulous. I salute u4 sharing something so beautiful...


Who Cares.....

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Love priye sagar ji - 16th September 2008, 04:07 PM

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sarpratham to ap se kshama chahunga .......... aap mishrit bhasha ko hindi na kahe wo hindi nahi ........ hindi hoti hai ...... khichdi bhasha ko hindi nahi kaha jaa sakta .... aur aapse ye kisne kah diya k hindi kathi dushkar athawa asadhya bhasa hai ..... haan ye dusri baat hai k samnya jan aapni matri bhasha apni rastra bhasha k prati na adar bhaw rakhte hai na hi prem bhaw ......... yah mansikta si ban chali hai jo sahaj hai use prapt karna jo saral hai usi marg par chalna .......... jo saras hai us k prati lalayit rehna ..... jo sab karte hai agar wahi karna hai to fir kuchh likhne padhne ki kya awashykat hai shriman ......... aap bhid se alag kuch karna chah rahe hai to bhid se alag ek marg ka chunaw bhi to kijiye ......... aap itna achha likhte hai ........ kya jara sa aur achha nahi likh sakte ......... aage jaisy aapki iksha ....... sukhi rahiye

priye sagar ji ye bilkul sach hai ki is rachna me sudha hindi ka prayog nahi kiya gaya hai,parantu ye kadachit satya nahi ki hindi kavitao me sirf hindi bhasha ka hi upyog kiya jata hai,aap adhunik yug ke sabhi kaviyo ko dekh lijiye unki rachnao me kahi na kahi apko anya bhashao ka prayog mil jayega yaha tak ki hindi kalkhand ke mahakavi jayshankar prsad ji jinhone kamayni sa sudha hindi ka mahakavya likha hai ki rachnao me bhi apko anya bhashao ka prayog milega,aap kavi gopal das neeraj ji ko dekh lijiyue,aap harivanshrai bachan ji ko dekh lijiye,aap ye kadapi nahi kah sakte ki hindi rachnao me sirf hindi ka prayog kiya jaye,rachna vo shrestha hai jo apki atma se nikal kar dusre ki atma ko jakjhor sake,aik sudha hindi me likhi gayi kavita jinme kilistha sabdo kia prayog kiya gaya ho nihsandeh aik uttam rachna ho sakti hai,parantu ye rachana sirf dikhti uttam hai aur is rachna ki atma us dhundh me chipe admi ki tarah hoti hai jise dekhkar aap ye to kah sakte hai kikoi hai parantu ye nahi kah sakte ki ye koi akhir hai kon.sagar ji main bhi hindi ko utna hi prem karta huun jitna ki aap karte hain,meri likhne ki suruvat hi hindi se hui hai,parantu mujhe dusri bhashao se bhi dvesh nahi hai.
sagar ji main kshama prarthi huun agar meri bato se apko thes lagi ho.
aap jis tarah ki rachnao ki ummeed karte hai mene bhi esi aik rachna liki hai vah padne me sabko achchi lagti hai parantu mene jin jin ko vo kavita kahi hai unme se kisi ko aaj tak uski atma nahi dikhi,isiliye mene vo kavita kabhi post bhi nahi ki hai,ab main vo kavita jarur post karunga ummed karta hu aap uski atma khoj payenge,us par apne bhav jarur vyakt kare.achche ya bure sab sweekar hain bas main ye janna chahunga ki sudha hindi me likhi hui us kavita ki atma aap khoj paye ya nahi,kyoki aam admi ke liye us kavita ki koi kimat nahi hai,isliye mene ab aam admi ke liye likhna suru kar diya hai.
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sarpratham to ap se kshama chahunga .......... aap mishrit bhasha ko hindi na kahe wo hindi nahi ........ hindi hoti hai ...... khichdi bhasha ko hindi nahi kaha jaa sakta .... aur aapse ye kisne kah diya k hindi kathi dushkar athawa asadhya bhasa hai ..... haan ye dusri baat hai k samnya jan aapni matri bhasha apni rastra bhasha k prati na adar bhaw rakhte hai na hi prem bhaw ......... yah mansikta si ban chali hai jo sahaj hai use prapt karna jo saral hai usi marg par chalna .......... jo saras hai us k prati lalayit rehna ..... jo sab karte hai agar wahi karna hai to fir kuchh likhne padhne ki kya awashykat hai shriman ......... aap bhid se alag kuch karna chah rahe hai to bhid se alag ek marg ka chunaw bhi to kijiye ......... aap itna achha likhte hai ........ kya jara sa aur achha nahi likh sakte ......... aage jaisy aapki iksha ....... sukhi rahiye
yeh kavitaayen aap jaise logon ke liye nahi hain mitra.Aap sankeern soch ke log zamin se uth nahi paate aur samaaj me pradushan failate hain.Main aapke shabdo ke chayan se aur prayog se hi aapke vyaktitva ki pahchaan kar chukaa hoon.Aap zindgi se hataash aur
pareshaan aadmi hain jo apne jivan main siwaay doosron ki kami dekhne ke alawa kuch nahi jaanta.shayad aap kavi deepak sharma se parchit nahi hain.Pahle aap unka saahitya main yogdaan dekhen.Unki kitaaben pade phir baad main kuch likhen...........
MAHAZ ALFAAZ SE KHILWAAD NAHI HAIN KAVITA,
KOI PAISHA ,KOI VAYAVSAAY NAHI HAIN KAVITA,
KAVITA SAUQ SE BHI LIKHNE KA KAAM NAHI
ITNI SASTI BHI NAHI ITNI BEDAAM NAHI.....................

Aaj ke baad aap is site par kavi Deepak Sharma ki koi rachna nahi pad paayenge........
aap ka drbhaagya hain yeh..............

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ab main aap sab se kya kahun .... aap sabhi nein khud hi prashn kiye hai aur khud hi unke uttar bhi de diye hai ...... swnamdhanya hai aap sabhi , tahtha satyashah itna hi sankuchit "viachar shil" vyakti hun main .... yadhyapi aap sab uchit hi hai parantu anytha hi mujhe lagta hai k na hi sahitya aisa hona chahiye tha na hi sahityakar aise hone chahiye tha ..... apne anargal pralap k liye aap sab se hi hriday se kshamaprarthi hun
aap sab ko hi dhanyawad aapke prem poorn sandesho vaktavyo awam bahumulya suchanao k liye

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