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हाल-ए-दिल आपसे कहूँ अब तो क्या कहूँ - 10th May 2009, 09:32 PM

हाल-ए-दिल आपसे कहूँ अब तो क्या कहूँ
दास्तान-ए-गम ना कहूँ अब तो क्या कहूँ

छोटी बहुत कहानी है, थोड़ी सी रूमानी है
बात बड़ी पुरानी है, कहूँ अब तो क्या कहूँ

एक चेहरा सुहाना था, रंगीन हर फसाना था,
क्या खूब वो ज़माना था, कहूँ अब तो क्या कहूँ

वो उनका मेरे घर आना, साथ साथ दो पल बिताना
हर छोटी बात पर मुस्कुराना, कहूँ अब तो क्या कहूँ

वो हसीन रात थी, छोटी एक मुलाकात थी
दिल में मेरे जो बात थी, कहूँ अब तो क्या कहूँ

हम कुछ ना कह पाए, उनके लब पे बात ना आए
उम्र भर ये अफ़सोस सताए, कहूँ अब तो क्या कहूँ

आज सूना है मकाँ मेरा, सूना है यह जहाँ मेरा
मेरे सिवा कौन है मेरा, कहूँ अब तो क्या कहूँ

एक ओर गम है, 'मायूस' एक ओर जिंदगी है
क्या फ़र्क दोनों में है, कहूँ अब तो क्या कहूँ
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11th May 2009, 04:40 PM

Mujhe aisa kyun lag raha hai ke mayne yeh Gazal pahele bhi padhi hai....

.........................:roll eyes:.........................

Chhodiye agar yeh Gazal aapki hai to wakai behad umda aur khoob surat hai.
Aapka andaze bayan achcha laga aur ahsaas bahut hi asardar...

Meri ek rai hai ke aap Hindi se jyada English me post karenge to behter honga, kyun ki yahan ke jyada ter members ko Hindi nahi aati.

Likhate rahiye duaon ke sath.......
Daad kabool kijiye


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11th May 2009, 06:04 PM

मुझ पर यह इल्ज़ाम है, किसी और का यह काम है
'मायूस' का भी कुछ तो नाम है, कहूँ अब तो क्या कहूँ


[quote=kwahish;353858]Mujhe aisa kyun lag raha hai ke mayne yeh Gazal pahele bhi padhi hai....

.........................:roll eyes:.........................


बुरा भी लगता मगर यह सोचकर तस्सल्ली भी हुई
की मेरे दिल की बात आप पढ़ लेते है तहरीर से पहले
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12th May 2009, 10:55 AM

mayoos ji
itna mayoos na ho...

agar ye apki hi rachna hai to bahut achi hai...
daad kubul kare..
khush khush rahe


कुछ ऐसे पल जिनको संजोना है ,
शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे
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12th May 2009, 07:42 PM

Hi sakhi1909,

Thanks for your comments.
It is so easy for people to accuse others of plagiarism without trying to back it up with something as simple as a google search. I don't mind at all if people are willing to leave comments trashing my writings but by leaving an unfounded accusation not only reveals the immaturity of a person, it also brings forth the crudeness of ones thoughts.

But, all in all, it does add to my experience about people.


regards

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12th May 2009, 10:23 PM

Jii Janab Mayoos sahab!

Lagta hai aapko meri baat ka bura laga, per mera matlab aapko dukhane ka nahi tha.
Shayad aapne mera pura reply nahi padha, chaliye koi baat nahi ab phir se padh lijiye..

Maine aapki Gazal ki tarif bhi ki hai and aapko ek sahi salah bhi di hai....

And main kisi ka dil dukhana nahi chahta agar aapko bura laga hai to SORRY !

Wakai aapki Gazal bahut umda hai likhate rahiye, aur ho sake to meri salah per bhi likhker dekhiye...

Yakinan aapko yahan sab hi pasand karenge...

Duaon ke sath Daad kabool kijiye....

Aur mere liye nahi to khuda ke liye dil se meri baaton ka gila nikal lijiye....


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12th May 2009, 10:53 PM

Hi Khwahish

Sorry, i didn't mean to be personal. hope things then stand the way they were.

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haal-e-dil aapse kahun ab to kyaa kahun
daastan-e-gam na kahun ab to kyaa kahun

chhoti bahut kahani hai, thodi si roomaani hai
baat baddi puraani hai, kahun ab to kyaa kahun

ek chhehraa suhaanaa tha, rangeen har fasaanaa tha
kyaa khoob zamaanaa tha, kahun ab to kyaa kahun

vo unkaa mere ghar aanaa, saath saath do pal bitaana
har chhoti baat par muskuraana, kahun ab to kyaa kahun

vo haseen raat thi, chhoti ek mulaakaat thi
dil men mere jo baat thi, kahun ab to kyaa kahun

hum kuch na kah paaye, unke lab pe baat na aaye
umr bhar ye afsos sataaye, kahun ab to kyaa kahun

aaj sunaa hai makaan mere, sunaa hai yeh jahaan mera
mere sivaa kaun hai mera, kahun ab to kyaa kahun

ek or gam hai, 'mayoos' ek or zindagi hai ("or" as in ओर - taraf)
kyaa fark donon men hai, kahun ab to kyaa kahun

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दास्तान-ए-गम ना कहूँ अब तो क्या कहूँ

छोटी बहुत कहानी है, थोड़ी सी रूमानी है
बात बड़ी पुरानी है, कहूँ अब तो क्या कहूँ

एक चेहरा सुहाना था, रंगीन हर फसाना था,
क्या खूब वो ज़माना था, कहूँ अब तो क्या कहूँ

वो उनका मेरे घर आना, साथ साथ दो पल बिताना
हर छोटी बात पर मुस्कुराना, कहूँ अब तो क्या कहूँ

वो हसीन रात थी, छोटी एक मुलाकात थी
दिल में मेरे जो बात थी, कहूँ अब तो क्या कहूँ

हम कुछ ना कह पाए, उनके लब पे बात ना आए
उम्र भर ये अफ़सोस सताए, कहूँ अब तो क्या कहूँ

आज सूना है मकाँ मेरा, सूना है यह जहाँ मेरा
मेरे सिवा कौन है मेरा, कहूँ अब तो क्या कहूँ

एक ओर गम है, 'मायूस' एक ओर जिंदगी है
क्या फ़र्क दोनों में है, कहूँ अब तो क्या कहूँ
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