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Jab se ghungroon pehne hai -
23rd March 2006, 04:06 PM
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kisi ka tamasha bana, taaliyan bajana bohut aasan hai Apna dard samjhana bohut aasaan hai,Kisi ka dard samajhne ke liye uski aatma mein jhankna padta hai, aisi ek koshish maine ki hai, shayad pasand aaye apko Apki sarika Jab se ghungroon pehne hai saanjh ab dhalti nahi......... raaat aati hain magar Dil mein shama jalti nahi Pyaar, mohabbat sab bikey, chund sikkon ke mol mein Jism chalta hain yahan, Rooh ab chalti nahi sab hai 'sajaa', iss begairat baazaar mein Har cheez milti hai yahaan, 'Hayaa' par milti nahi Mitti ke iss jism ka mol, lagate jo hain jaane kyun gairat unki, unmein kabhi palti nahi Shool ban kar 'aatma' chubhti hai meri, raat-din jaane kyun rooh iski mar kar marti nahi armaanon ki sej par 'phool' ban sajti hoon main na jaane kis ki chaah mein jindagi galti nahi Jab se ghungroon pehne hai saanjh ab dhalti nahi saanjh ab dhalti nahi saanjh ab dhalti nahi...... |
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Re: Jab se ghungroon pehne hai -
23rd March 2006, 04:17 PM
Dear sarika ji
aaj maine bhi aapko dusri baar padha par sach mein pdhta hi reh gaya..aur aapki baat bhi sahi dusro k dard par taliya bajana aasan hai... aapne itna khoobsurat likha hai ki lagta hai dard bhi muskra raha hai "Pyaar, mohabbat sab bikey, chund sikkon ke mol mein Jism chalta hain yahan, Rooh ab chalti nahi" kya likha hai aapne bohat khoob.... sab hai 'sajaa', iss begairat baazaar mein Har cheez milti hai yahaan, 'Hayaa' par milti nahi Mitti ke iss jism ka mol, lagate jo hain jaane kyun gairat unki, unmein kabhi palti nahi Shool ban kar 'aatma' chubhti hai meri, raat-din jaane kyun rooh iski mar kar marti nahi armaanon ki sej par 'phool' ban sajti hoon main na jaane kis ki chaah mein jindagi galti nahi" sabhi itne pyare hai ki kisi ek ko chun naa saka shukriya itna umda likhne aur ishe yaha post karne k liye bas ek gujarish hai ki bas aati rahiyega Diggaj  Quote:
kabhi humne yu khud ko harata naa dekha Kaise Samjhau Dil-e-hasarat-nasiib Ko Apne K Sab Kuch Milta Nahi Chah Lene Se Ish Zamane Mein..... "Diggaj" |
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23rd March 2006, 04:23 PM
Diggaj ji
acha laga ki apko mera likha pasand aaya yeh sab apki hi prerna thi Shukriya aapke us sujhav ke liye apki dost sarika |
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hi -
23rd March 2006, 04:27 PM
Hamari prerna?
nahi ji aapne likha hi tarif k kabil hai plzzzzzzz ab aati rahiyega hamein acha padhne ko milta rahega Quote:
kabhi humne yu khud ko harata naa dekha Kaise Samjhau Dil-e-hasarat-nasiib Ko Apne K Sab Kuch Milta Nahi Chah Lene Se Ish Zamane Mein..... "Diggaj" |
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23rd March 2006, 04:28 PM
Diggaj ji
acha laga ki apko mera likha pasand aaya yeh sab apki hi prerna thi Shukriya aapke us sujhav ke liye apki dost sarika |
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Re: Jab se ghungroon pehne hai -
24th March 2006, 11:56 AM
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MaiN samajh gaya huN is nazm maiN chupi gehrayi aur iske dard ko .. aapne wakai sahi kaha ki kisi ke dard ko padhne ke liye uski aatma maiN jhaNkna padta hai ... par aaj kal to aatmayeN bhi jhooti ho gayi haiN khair .. maiN tab bhi isi baat ko hi manta huN .. acchai aur burai ek hi sikke ke do pehlu haiN ... aapke is sher ne wakai gehra asar chora,... meri mubarakbaad aapko ..is dilfareb nazm ke liye ... apna khayal rakhna aapka devu  Kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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gahree soch hai |
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gahree soch hai -
24th March 2006, 12:50 PM
gahree soch hai gahree baat hai achha laga ummeed hai ye achee baten parhne ko miltee rahengee yoon hee
Anil kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai |
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Re: Jab se ghungroon pehne hai -
24th March 2006, 02:32 PM
MASTI SAHIBA
AABDAB jindagi ki un andheri galion par apni kalam se jo roshni daali hai wo "dard" par "wah" kehe ka majboor kar rahi hai...sahir saheb ka mashoor kalaam jehan mein ubhar aaya...."yeh kooche yeh neelaam ghar bekashi ke,,yeh loot_te hue kaarwan jindagi ke,,kahan hai,,kahaan hai muhaafiz khudi ke,,,jinhe naaz hai Hind par wo kahan hai" meri daad kubool kijiye -MANOJ karte hai jo "kureel" se gila karte rahein. |
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Re: Jab se ghungroon pehne hai -
28th March 2006, 05:26 PM
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Sarika Ji.. Sach kahooN to aap ke is ghazal ne mujeh la-jawaab kar diya.. MAine kayi baar isay padha.. Aap ne jis dard ko yahaaN pesh kiya hai. us par bahoot kam log hi likh paate haiN.. Aur aap ne is dard bhare ehsaas ko khoobsoorati ke saath lafzoN mai baandh kar ghazal ka shakal diya hai.. Dili daad kabool kijiye.. Jo aap ke hunar ke liye hai.... MayanK |
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28th March 2006, 06:16 PM
hi dear meine pahli baar aapko padha hai sach bahut achha likha hai aapney dil ko chu si gayi har line isi tarah likhte rahna
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Shukriya -
29th March 2006, 04:16 PM
Dear Kunal, Manoj, Anil, Mayank, Surbhi
Shukriya ! aapko mera likha pasand aaya, koshish karungi isi tarah kuch acha aur meaningful apke samne laane ki Aap sab apna khayal rakhiyega Ishwar apke saath rahe Apki Dost Sarika |
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24th February 2015, 06:58 AM
Rajeev ji ki kavita yaad aa gayi. Isliye re sharing.
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24th February 2015, 09:47 AM
Too good peshkash Sarika jii.. kaafii puaanii hai magar jazbaat ab bhi taazaa hain...
likhtiii rahiyegaa...... Shaaad..... |
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24th February 2015, 10:23 AM
Bahut bahut achchi kavita....aur sach baat kisi aise dard ko samjhna aur us par likhna jo aapne kabhi mahsoos na kiya ho..bada hee mushkil hai...
Dil se pasand aayi aapki ye rachna.. अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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24th February 2015, 11:25 AM
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sachmuch bohut purani hai.aaj achaanak rajeev ji ki rachna padi to yaad aaya ki is vishaya par maine bhi kabhi kuch likha tha aur dhundte hue ye haath lag gayi. socha aap logo se share karun. Sarika |
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24th February 2015, 11:27 AM
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jab bhi aap aati hain mujhe bohut khushi hoti hai, pata nahi kya rishta ban raha hai aapse aati rahiye Sarika |
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25th February 2015, 08:17 PM
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26th February 2015, 11:01 AM
sab hai 'sajaa', iss begairat baazaar mein
Har cheez milti hai yahaan, 'Hayaa' par milti nahi Mitti ke iss jism ka mol, lagate jo hain jaane kyun gairat unki, unmein kabhi palti nahi Jab se ghungroon pehne hai saanjh ab dhalti nahi saanjh ab dhalti nahi saanjh ab dhalti nahi...... waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahh... waaaaaaahhh.. waaaaaaaaaaaah. kamaal hii kamaal ....... nihayat hii chubte hue .. dil-doz haqeeqat kiii ronamaayi karte hue aap ka ka likha aik aik lafz dil ke aar-paar ho gaya ........ aap kii is umdah peshkash ke liye daad-o-tehseen bohat kam hy.... kyuN ky meri nazr meiN yeh kalaam in se kahiN bhad kar hy .... likhte rahiye ... khush rahiye ... tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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Shukriya hassan ji mujhe bohut khushi hui ki aapko mera likha pasand aaya aur apne zaroorat se zyaada tareef kar di shayad itni tareef ki main khud ko haqdaar nahi samajhti. Sarika |
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