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12th February 2004, 07:22 PM
Khata humari, ghalti humari, zulm to batata jaa, Humari betaha mohabbat ki saza to sunata jaa... Socha tha aaya hain thandi-hawa ka jhooka bahar mei, Be-dard apne saath woh yaadein woh umeedein bhi leta jaa... Qurbat mei humari, dhokey ka naam-o-nishan na tha, Sang-dil apni chahat ki yeh saugat bhi saath leta jaa... Tamaam umar ke liye humei dil ka rogh de diya, Malhum na sahi kam se kam zeher hi deta jaa... Jatey jatey humari maut ka saaman bhi deta jaa, Bina tere jeena na-mumkin hani yeh sada bhi sunta jaa... har baat mei aye sanam sirf tera hi zikhar kartey hain. |
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12th February 2004, 08:18 PM
Khata humari, ghalti humari, zulm to batata jaa,
Humari betaha mohabbat ki saza to sunata jaa... Socha tha aaya hain thandi-hawa ka jhooka bahar mei, Be-dard apne saath woh yaadein woh umeedein bhi leta jaa... Qurbat mei humari, dhokey ka naam-o-nishan na tha, Sang-dil apni chahat ki yeh saugat bhi saath leta jaa... Tamaam umar ke liye humei dil ka rogh de diya, Malhum na sahi kam se kam zeher hi deta jaa... Jatey jatey humari maut ka saaman bhi deta jaa, Bina tere jeena na-mumkin hani yeh sada bhi sunta jaa... Gudiyaa ji, namsakaar, Bahut achha likha hai aap ne. Dard mehsoos ho rahi hai aap ke dil ki. Daad qabul farmaieyega. Humesha aise hi likhti rahiye aur hontoon pe mushkaan bani rahe. Yahi duaaoon ke saath.. Manish |
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*Ishq~Ibadat.......**
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12th February 2004, 08:22 PM
Bohot hi dard chhupakar rakhhi hein aapne. For me this was your first post but I checked you posted 2 more earlier on. I don't know how I missed your post till now. You really can express the feeling. I really don't know what to say. I can only say, you are in to much pain.
 Nahi mein wah kahungi nahi koi tarif karungi. Baas yeh hein ke aapki dard ko mehsoosh kee. Khuda aapko thodi si chain de yehi Duwa rahegi. Likhte zaroor rahiyega. Aapna khayal rakhiyega. God bless you. Jiss Jagah Koyi Na Pahuncha Wahaan Tak Pahunche Main Samajhta Huun Harr Dil Mein Khuda Rehta Hain Mera Paigam Mohabbat Hain Jaahan Tak Pahunche** *~~~Ahsan Sherazi Jee~~~** *Pure Love** |
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13th February 2004, 03:17 AM
wow..that's really good..i love it!
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kashtiki talashme..SAAHIL
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13th February 2004, 08:14 PM
Namaskaar Gudiyaa jee,
Bahot achchhi tarah se bayaan kiyaa he aapne apne dard ko.... ------------------- Khata humari, ghalti humari, zulm to batata jaa, Humari betaha mohabbat ki saza to sunata jaa... Socha tha aaya hain thandi-hawa ka jhooka bahar mei, Be-dard apne saath woh yaadein woh umeedein bhi leta jaa... Qurbat mei humari, dhokey ka naam-o-nishan na tha, Sang-dil apni chahat ki yeh saugat bhi saath leta jaa... Tamaam umar ke liye humei dil ka rogh de diya, Malhum na sahi kam se kam zeher hi deta jaa... Jatey jatey humari maut ka saaman bhi deta jaa, Bina tere jeena na-mumkin hani yeh sada bhi sunta jaa... -------------------- Aap ke kalaam ke baare mei.n kuch aur nahi.N kahoo.Ngaa mei.n... par ek duaa jharoor maa.Ngugaa rab se ki agar ho sake to jiske liye likha gayaa he ye kalaam, bas ek baar use yahaa.N tak pahoo.Nchaa de... bas ek baar use is dard kaa ehsaas karva de... vohi shaayad aap ke dard ki dawaa bhi hogee... well dost keep writing ... take care..... god bless u .... ---------------------------------------------- Ye alfaz he dard e dil ke, aur kuch nahi.n Ye ghaav he zindagee ke, aur kuch nahi.n ---------------------------------------------- |
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14th February 2004, 01:21 PM
Salam Gudiya G
Buhat Hi Aacha Likha Ha Pap Na,, Kay Kehana,, Buaht Khoob, Take care Allah Hafiz $ooraj, |
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Thankyou all :) |
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Thankyou all :) -
23rd February 2004, 10:40 PM
Hi there,
I'm glad that you guys find my Fariyad that interesting.. Aese mujhe likhna aata nahi hain bas kabhi kabhi apne dil ke dard ko lafzon mei dal deti hu.. aap sab ka reply padh kar bohat achha laga.. Thankyou All Gudiya har baat mei aye sanam sirf tera hi zikhar kartey hain. |
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hi |
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kuch likhne ki koshish
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hi -
24th February 2004, 03:56 AM
hi
its nice ...lafzon ka istaimal acha hay likhti rhaiye ga Jatey jatey humari maut ka saaman bhi deta jaa, Bina tere jeena na-mumkin hani yeh sada bhi sunta jaa... bohat khob aik banjara'''' bas'''' agar mohabbat hay to judai kiyon or judai main mohabbat kasi???? |
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24th February 2004, 07:54 AM
Gudiya jii,
maafii chahtaa hooN! mujhse galtii ho gayii.. maine sochaa thaa kii maiN aapkii ghazal paD chukaa hooN, aur jawaab bhii de chukaa hooN, is kar ke 'link' hi kuch dinoN se nahiiN kholaa, aur itnii khoob ghazal merii nazaroN ke saamne meiN se guzarne waalii thii! maiN kin lafzoN se taareef karooN is laa-jawaab kalaam kii? khaas-taur pe yeh sher to bahot hii achaa laggaa -- "Jatey jatey humari maut ka saaman bhi deta jaa, Bina tere jeena na-mumkin hani yeh sada bhi sunta jaa.." isii taraH likhte rahiiye aap; bahot khoob laggaa aapkii ghazal paD kar! daad qabuul farmaaiiye gaa, aman "je tu akhiiyaaN de saamne naii rehnaa, te bibba saada dil moD de..!" kya karooN? aisa hi hooN maiN.. |
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