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Originally Posted by prayerforall
Ajnabi ji . Its a good correction .. Thanks for it.. My hindi is not so good. But I just write & sing whatever comes to my mind..
I appreciate it sir !
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No worries g but a to meri drishti mein suggestion aur swaal tha na ki correction...your choice is the correct if we just focus on the pair I mean the last two lines of the stanza but when you go with the structure of the stanza the other word fits in with the rhythm...and your word looks more grammatically correct.
And please continue writing down the way the thoughts come to you....there's nothing worse than spoiling the original thought while attempting structural perfection....thats my view!