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Sastey Aasoon -
31st January 2003, 07:54 PM
Woh din kya aayenge
jab hum mil paayenge,
Shayad nahin!
nahin kabhi nahin.
Itna bhi nahin hai kuch
ki koi itihaas bane,
Bas patthar hai yahan
beech deewar bane.
Tere duppatte ki parchayee
mere aagan mein pade,
Uski parchayee mein chupe
dukh registaan se hain bade.
Koi jab aayega sajkar
tujhe lejane ko,
Duppatta woh chod dena
karna hai saaf aasuvon ko.
Tu sada khush rahe
tu hee aabaad rahe.
Sasta hoon insaan main
sastey mein aasoon bik rahe.
_____________________
Vipin
...ek shoonya
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wah -
31st January 2003, 11:37 PM
wah vipin shahab! bahut khoob..aapke khyaal bare pasand aaye hame........touched my heart shayd vo din aayainge..shayad nahi!! nice lines
Priya
Akhihaan milaake chan'na paavi na Judayi Vey .......
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Jisnu Lagey, ohi'yo jaane, Kaun Jaane peer parayi!
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1st February 2003, 04:08 AM
"Tu sada khush rahe
tu hee aabaad rahe.
Sasta hoon insaan main
sastey mein aasoon bik rahe."
is sher ka matlab baDi gehraaii meiN hai Vipin saahab, aur hamesha ki taraH -- yeh kavita bhi pasand aayi!
maaf ki jiye gar thoDa late reply kiya to..
Likhte rahiye,
Aman
"je tu akhiiyaaN de saamne naii rehnaa,
te bibba saada dil moD de..!"
kya karooN? aisa hi hooN maiN..
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1st February 2003, 04:12 AM
Tu sada khush rahe
tu hee aabaad rahe.
Sasta hoon insaan main
sastey mein aasoon bik rahe.
Wah Vipin Ji ,
Bahut khoob kahaan hai aapne, Age kuch kahneki lafz nahin hamare pass, tho fir ek baar yehi kahthe hai ..waah.
Good luck,
Bijili
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Milna tha ittefaq bichadna naseeb tha
Woh utnaa dur gaya jho jitna kareeb tha
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1st February 2003, 11:49 AM
Koi jab aayega sajkar
tujhe lejane ko,
Duppatta woh chod dena
karna hai saaf aasuvon ko.
Wah Vipin ji..aapki ye Kavita bhi lajawaab thi aur iska shirshak 'Sastey Aansoon' bahut hi badia laga..
Aapki agli rachna ka intezar rahega.
Varinder
kyon zindagi ki raah mein akele chalta hai dost
chal waha chal jahan tere jaise aur bhi hai...
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hi -
1st February 2003, 08:28 PM
hw r u
after a long time tum se kuch paden to mila magar bhut hi acha laga kiya khoob likha hain
keep it up
take care
bye
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ek shoonya
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2nd February 2003, 07:18 PM
LuvPriya ji, Aman ji, Bijli ji, Varinder ji aur Neha ji,
Mujhe bahut juada khusi hui ki aap sab doston ko iss Shoonya ki Kavita pasand aayee. Varna Shoonya tow Shoonya hee rehta hai, ...jo kuch kar nahin sakta. Ussi tarah iss shoonya ke aasun bhi sastey hain.
Ek baar phir aap sabka Dhanyavaad
Vipin
...ek shoonya
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3rd February 2003, 12:00 AM
Wah Vipin, kya baat kahi apne. bohat waqt ke baad ayi aur apki shayri padi to acha laga.
keep it up
shaheen
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3rd February 2003, 11:58 AM
Vipin saab
Kya aap muje batange ki aap ke pas kon sa Pen hai? Sach me behut ascha liktey hai aap.
apki dost
Geetanjali
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hi vipin -
3rd February 2003, 01:16 PM
Bahoot khoob hai dost....tumhare dil main kabhi zhankanaa padega.
paplu khush hua.
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3rd February 2003, 09:13 PM
Shaheen ji aur Geetanjali ji,
Aapka dhanyavaad jo aapne mera likha pada.
AUR
Paplu sahab
Mere dil ke andar koi khaas baat nahin hai. Main ek maamooli sa insaan hoon aur mera dil ek khuli kitaab hai. Agar kuch aur jaan-na chahen tow jaroor batana.
Vipin
...ek shoonya
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hi -
24th August 2005, 06:36 PM
Vipin ji
u r too gr8
gr8 shayri
I think u hurt by sum 1
well take care
bye
SHWETA
jab yaad karte hai kisi ko
wo waqt suhana hota hai
uth jati hai kalam likhne ko
wo pyar deewana hota hai
kar deti hai haal-e-dil bayaan
wo kalaam shayraana hota hai
jab yaad karte hai kisi ko
wo waqt suhana hota hai...
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duniya mein kitna gam hai
apna gam phir bhi kam hai
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25th August 2005, 03:46 PM
Kuhulika Ji,
Namaskaar,
Aapka message parha, accha laga kisi ne iss dhundli si rachna ko aaj parha hai.........varna yeh tow shoonya ho chuki hai......
Aapka bahut bahut dhanyavaad
Vipin
...ek shoonya
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25th August 2005, 05:04 PM
no words to appreciate this... bahut hi umda rachna... Likhte rahiye bhai..!
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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