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wo waqt bemisal thaa jo tere saath guzar gaya......(gazal) -
9th August 2006, 11:13 AM
dosto app sabko raj ka bhut bhut pyar........ajj main ek aise gazal ke saath bazam main shirkat farma raha hoon......jo ki appke seene main sanso ki manind bass jayegi.....or appke dil ki dharkan ban jayegi........raj.......
wo waqt bemisal thaa jo tere saath guzar gaya,
wo ashak aabe hyaat thaa jo tere daman me gir gaya....
tujhe bhoolne ki koshishain sab nakaam he rahi,
tera chhehra aankho ke raste dil main uttar gaya....
jee raha hoon bass tujhe milne ki aas pe warna,
khabo ke saath mera wajood kab ka bikhar gaya....
deewarain poochne lagi udaasi ka sabab mujhse,
tere khat jalake shaam ko jab main apne ghar gaya....
tum kaya mile mujhe zindagi ke tanha safar main,
mere maajhi se babasta har zakham phir nikhar gaya.....
ashko ka sailaab jo baha to phir thaam na saka,
apna afsana-e-gham lekar jab nadi ke paas sagar gaya.....
'veer' ko gham nahi gar ho gaya kafan bhee neelaam,
acha hua mere dost teri inayaton ka karz to uttar gaya.......
umeed karta hoon appko pasand aiyegi......appka dost raj......
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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Re: wo waqt bemisal thaa jo tere saath guzar gaya......(gazal) -
9th August 2006, 11:25 AM
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Originally posted by rajveeer
dosto app sabko raj ka bhut bhut pyar........ajj main ek aise gazal ke saath bazam main shirkat farma raha hoon......jo ki appke seene main sanso ki manind bass jayegi.....or appke dil ki dharkan ban jayegi........raj.......
wo waqt bemisal thaa jo tere saath guzar gaya,
wo ashak aabe hyaat thaa jo tere daman me gir gaya....
tujhe bhoolne ki koshishain sab nakaam he rahi,
tera chhehra aankho ke raste dil main uttar gaya....
jee raha hoon bass tujhe milne ki aas pe warna,
khabo ke saath mera wajood kab ka bikhar gaya....
deewarain poochne lagi udaasi ka sabab mujhse,
tere khat jalake shaam ko jab main apne ghar gaya....
tum kaya mile mujhe zindagi ke tanha safar main,
mere maajhi se babasta har zakham phir nikhar gaya.....
ashko ka sailaab jo baha to phir thaam na saka,
apna afsana-e-gham lekar jab nadi ke paas sagar gaya.....
'veer' ko gham nahi gar ho gaya kafan bhee neelaam,
acha hua mere dost teri inayaton ka karz to uttar gaya.......
umeed karta hoon appko pasand aiyegi......appka dost raj......
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aree raj ji app pasand ki baat kar rahey hai, yeh rachna to sach mai dil mai uttar gaye. bahut khoob likha hai appney, dil se daad hazir hai, kabool farmayega.
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9th August 2006, 02:51 PM
raj ji,bahut acha likha aapne.har sher lajawaab hai.yeh sher bahut ache lage,
jee raha hoon bass tujhe milne ki aas pe warna,
khabo ke saath mera wajood kab ka bikhar gaya....
ashko ka sailaab jo baha to phir thaam na saka,
apna afsana-e-gham lekar jab nadi ke paas sagar gaya.....
daad kabool kijiye.
yun bin bulaaye milne chala aata hai,
gham ko mujh se yeh unsiyat kaisi??
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9th August 2006, 04:39 PM
waqai bohat acha likha hai alfaaz kum parr jayengay ager tareef kernay lagoon to keep it up
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin
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11th August 2006, 01:38 PM
sunita ji app meri post par i apne bhuuy time me se time nikaalke mujhe para.......or pasand bheee kiya.....raj tahe dil se appka shukar guzaar hai.....umeed karta hoon ki yu hee appka sath milta rahega.....raj.........
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17th August 2006, 10:23 AM
raj ji,bahut acha likha aapne.har sher lajawaab hai.yeh sher bahut ache lage,
jee raha hoon bass tujhe milne ki aas pe warna,
khabo ke saath mera wajood kab ka bikhar gaya....
ashko ka sailaab jo baha to phir thaam na saka,
apna afsana-e-gham lekar jab nadi ke paas sagar gaya.....
daad kabool kijiye.
jaan ji app jab bhee meri post ka reply karti ho to lagta hai ki saach main maine kush aisa likh diya hai jo saach main tareef ke qabil hai......appne meri gazal ko paraha or saraha main appka shukarguzaar hoon........yu hee mera sath dete rehna......raj.....
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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Re: wo waqt bemisal thaa jo tere saath guzar gaya......(gazal) -
17th August 2006, 11:08 AM
wo waqt bemisal thaa jo tere saath guzar gaya,
wo ashak aabe hyaat thaa jo tere daman me gir gaya....
jee raha hoon bass tujhe milne ki aas pe warna,
khabo ke saath mera wajood kab ka bikhar gaya....
Wah......Aagaaz bohat acha kiya hai
deewarain poochne lagi udaasi ka sabab mujhse,
tere khat jalake shaam ko jab main apne ghar gaya....
tum kaya mile mujhe zindagi ke tanha safar main,
mere maajhi se babasta har zakham phir nikhar gaya.....
Bohat khoob....aesa lag raha hai ki koi shayar samne betha apna haal-e-dil suna raha ho
'veer' ko gham nahi gar ho gaya kafan bhee neelaam,
acha hua mere dost teri inayaton ka karz to uttar gaya.......
Masa'alah.........bohat badhiya
Veer Bhai
Sach kaha dil ko chhu gaye aapke Ashaar... padhte padhte main khud kho gaya tha...maqtaa to aur bhi pyaara laga mujhe...ek umda gazal likhne k liye dili daad kabool kijiye...
APKA
Diggaj
Navard-e-ishq mein kya hua kya bataye hum
kabhi humne yu khud ko harata naa dekha
Kaise Samjhau Dil-e-hasarat-nasiib Ko Apne
K Sab Kuch Milta Nahi Chah Lene Se Ish Zamane Mein..... "Diggaj"
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Re: wo waqt bemisal thaa jo tere saath guzar gaya......(gazal) -
17th August 2006, 11:15 AM
wo waqt bemisal thaa jo tere saath guzar gaya,
wo ashak aabe hyaat thaa jo tere daman me gir gaya....
tujhe bhoolne ki koshishain sab nakaam he rahi,
tera chhehra aankho ke raste dil main uttar gaya....
'veer' ko gham nahi gar ho gaya kafan bhee neelaam,
acha hua mere dost teri inayaton ka karz to uttar gaya.......
raj bhai
bahoot khooob...!!! yun to poori gazal hi bemisaal hai..magar yeh sher behad pasand aaye...meri daad kubool kijiye
take care
-MANOJ
apne usoolon par ham apne andaaz se chalte hai
karte hai jo "kureel" se gila karte rahein.
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hi -
21st August 2006, 10:52 AM
waqai bohat acha likha hai alfaaz kum parr jayengay ager tareef kernay lagoon to keep it up
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janaab koi to ho ji.....appne mujhe birthday wish ki or meri gazal ko bhee saraha iske liye main tahe dil se appka shukar guzaar hoon.....umeed karta hoon yu hee app apni raye se mujhe nawazte rahoge......raj........
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
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31st August 2006, 10:07 AM
wo waqt bemisal thaa jo tere saath guzar gaya,
wo ashak aabe hyaat thaa jo tere daman me gir gaya....
jee raha hoon bass tujhe milne ki aas pe warna,
khabo ke saath mera wajood kab ka bikhar gaya....
Wah......Aagaaz bohat acha kiya hai
deewarain poochne lagi udaasi ka sabab mujhse,
tere khat jalake shaam ko jab main apne ghar gaya....
tum kaya mile mujhe zindagi ke tanha safar main,
mere maajhi se babasta har zakham phir nikhar gaya.....
Bohat khoob....aesa lag raha hai ki koi shayar samne betha apna haal-e-dil suna raha ho
'veer' ko gham nahi gar ho gaya kafan bhee neelaam,
acha hua mere dost teri inayaton ka karz to uttar gaya.......
Masa'alah.........bohat badhiya
Veer Bhai
Sach kaha dil ko chhu gaye aapke Ashaar... padhte padhte main khud kho gaya tha...maqtaa to aur bhi pyaara laga mujhe...ek umda gazal likhne k liye dili daad kabool kijiye...
APKA
Diggaj
diggaj bhai appko raj ka bhut bhut parnaam....zahenaseeb jo app hamari post par tasreef laye.....kasam se dil jhoom raha hai....ek baat kahu gar ijajat ho to app jis andaaz main tareef karte ho na qalaam ki gar qalaam main kush bhee na ho to bhee wo parne layak to ho hee jata hai.....appko meri koshish pasand i main tahe dil se appka shukarguzaar hoon.....hamesha isee tarha appka saath chhahunga.......raj.....
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
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31st August 2006, 10:56 AM
veer tum ney boht acha likha hai itna acha k such much dil mein uter gea hai dil ki darken main saaz ban ker uter gea hai jasy her sans mein bas gea ho
dil k rishton ko dil todrne waly kya jane
dil k rewajon ko yeh zamany waly kya jane
hoti hai kitni takleef kaber mein
yeh uper say phool rakhne waly kya jane
wo waqt bemisal tha jo tere sath guzer gera
kya baat hai
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1st September 2006, 11:28 AM
wo waqt bemisal thaa jo tere saath guzar gaya,
wo ashak aabe hyaat thaa jo tere daman me gir gaya....
tujhe bhoolne ki koshishain sab nakaam he rahi,
tera chhehra aankho ke raste dil main uttar gaya....
'veer' ko gham nahi gar ho gaya kafan bhee neelaam,
acha hua mere dost teri inayaton ka karz to uttar gaya.......
raj bhai
bahoot khooob...!!! yun to poori gazal hi bemisaal hai..magar yeh sher behad pasand aaye...meri daad kubool kijiye
take care
-MANOJ
manoj ji meri har post ko appke reply ka intzaar rehta hai.....jane kaya hai appke reply main ki mera kalaam khud-b-khud acha lagne lagta hai.....app meri post par tashreef laye zahenaseeb......appko mera likha acha laga......bhut shukria appka yu hee saath dete rehna ......appka ........raj.......
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
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1st September 2006, 11:38 AM
hi BIG B
bahot hi anokha andaz hai aapka
aur bahot hi achhi peshkas har bar ki tarha
mujhe bhi aapse kuch sikhne ko milega
aapka dost dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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1st September 2006, 11:53 AM
jee raha hoon bass tujhe milne ki aas pe warna,
khabo ke saath mera wajood kab ka bikhar gaya....
'veer' ko gham nahi gar ho gaya kafan bhee neelaam,
acha hua mere dost teri inayaton ka karz to uttar gaya.......
raj sahab ithni khoob surat gazal or maine padi nahi... sach bade pyae alfaz hain aapke hamesha ki tarah............ bus u samajh lo ki seedhe dil per asar karte hai.nnnnnnnnnn
meri dua dil se kabool kigiye ha...........
or ese hi likhte rahiye
aapka dost
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" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
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Re: wo waqt bemisal thaa jo tere saath guzar gaya......(gazal) -
1st September 2006, 04:57 PM
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Originally posted by rajveeer
dosto app sabko raj ka bhut bhut pyar........ajj main ek aise gazal ke saath bazam main shirkat farma raha hoon......jo ki appke seene main sanso ki manind bass jayegi.....or appke dil ki dharkan ban jayegi........raj.......
wo waqt bemisal thaa jo tere saath guzar gaya,
wo ashak aabe hyaat thaa jo tere daman me gir gaya....
tujhe bhoolne ki koshishain sab nakaam he rahi,
tera chhehra aankho ke raste dil main uttar gaya....
jee raha hoon bass tujhe milne ki aas pe warna,
khabo ke saath mera wajood kab ka bikhar gaya....
deewarain poochne lagi udaasi ka sabab mujhse,
tere khat jalake shaam ko jab main apne ghar gaya....
tum kaya mile mujhe zindagi ke tanha safar main,
mere maajhi se babasta har zakham phir nikhar gaya.....
ashko ka sailaab jo baha to phir thaam na saka,
apna afsana-e-gham lekar jab nadi ke paas sagar gaya.....
'veer' ko gham nahi gar ho gaya kafan bhee neelaam,
acha hua mere dost teri inayaton ka karz to uttar gaya.......
umeed karta hoon appko pasand aiyegi......appka dost raj......
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hamesha ki tarha ye gazal bhi aapki achhi lagi hai. bahot khub likha hai.
aapki dost
pooja
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11th September 2006, 01:33 PM
wo waqt bemisal thaa jo tere saath guzar gaya,
wo ashak aabe hyaat thaa jo tere daman me gir gaya....
tujhe bhoolne ki koshishain sab nakaam he rahi,
tera chhehra aankho ke raste dil main uttar gaya....
'veer' ko gham nahi gar ho gaya kafan bhee neelaam,
acha hua mere dost teri inayaton ka karz to uttar gaya.......
raj bhai
bahoot khooob...!!! yun to poori gazal hi bemisaal hai..magar yeh sher behad pasand aaye...meri daad kubool kijiye
take care
-MANOJ
manoj ji appka meri post par aana mano mere qalaam ki khusnaseebi......appko meri gazal pasand i main tahedil se appka shukarguzaar hoon.....umeed karta hoon appka saath yu he milta rahega.......raj.......
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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11th September 2006, 02:27 PM
raj ji,
aapki likhi shayri padhi bahut achchhi lagi..pahali ki suruat bahut achchhi rahi jabki duseri line mein slight bahak gaye the aap.. punah phir puri shayri mein sudhar aa gaya.. overall aapki lekhani ki pakad majboot banati ja rahi hai..
likhate rahiye
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11th September 2006, 03:15 PM
deewarain poochne lagi udaasi ka sabab mujhse,
tere khat jalake shaam ko jab main apne ghar gaya....
tum kaya mile mujhe zindagi ke tanha safar main,
mere maajhi se babasta har zakham phir nikhar gaya
kya baat hai Raj!!! chhu gaye miyan dil ko!!!
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13th September 2006, 11:17 AM
veer tum ney boht acha likha hai itna acha k such much dil mein uter gea hai dil ki darken main saaz ban ker uter gea hai jasy her sans mein bas gea ho
dil k rishton ko dil todrne waly kya jane
dil k rewajon ko yeh zamany waly kya jane
hoti hai kitni takleef kaber mein
yeh uper say phool rakhne waly kya jane
wo waqt bemisal tha jo tere sath guzer gera
kya baat hai
rehman ji appka pehli daffa meri post par tashreef laye ho main tahe dil se appka shukria aada karta hoon ......meri gazal appko pasand i iske liye bhee appka shukria.....umeed karta hoon yu hee appka saath milta rahega,.....raj.......
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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27th September 2006, 06:42 PM
hi BIG B
bahot hi anokha andaz hai aapka
aur bahot hi achhi peshkas har bar ki tarha
mujhe bhi aapse kuch sikhne ko milega
aapka dost dhaval
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dhaval acha lagga ki tumne bhut dil se mujhe parha hai........koshish karounga ki isse bhee behtar likhu or tum isse bhee behtsr reply karo.....umeed karta hoon saath bana rahega.......take care.......raj........
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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