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Simplest way to learn ghazal writing( For new comers here) -
13th July 2014, 04:26 AM
AdaaoN se apni rijhaane lage haiN,
Woh chupke se dil me samaane lage haiN.
Kabhii paas reh kar kabhii door reh kar,
Woh pal pal hame ab sataane lage haiN.
JahaaN bhii milo yuun hi bas muskuraana,
Keh dil is adaa per lutaane lage haiN.
Jo dekha hameiN to woh sharmaaye hai yuu.N,
Keh haathoN se chehraa chupaane lage haiN.
Jo nazreN milii thi to palke.n jhuka lee,
Hayaa ke ye manzar suhaane lage haiN.
Mile dil se dil, ab na ye phir judaa ho,
Duaa yeh laboN per sajaane lage haiN.
Nasha ishq ka hai ajab sa yeh zainy,
Sanam ke sitam bhi lubhaane lage haiN.
Ghazal likhne ka sab se aasaaN tarika:
Ghazal likhte waqt 4 batoN ko dhyan me rakhna zaruri hai:
Matla, Maqta ,Radeef, aur Kafiya
1) Matla:Pehla sher ( pehle 2 lines) ko matla kehte haiN.( laal rang ki lines)
2)Maqta: Aakhri sher( aakhri 2 lines) Jisme shayer ka naam hota hai usko maqta kehte hain.( hare rang ki lines)
3) Radeef:Har sher ke aakhiri alfaaz ko radeef kehte hain..jaise ke upar ki ghazal me "Lage hain" radeef hai...
Radeef sabhi ashaar me ek hi rahega, badlega nahi..radeef pehle sher me dono lines me hoga aur baqi ashaar me sirf dusri line me hoga..( neele rang me).
4)Kafiya: Radeef se pehle ke lafz ko kafiye kehte hain, yeh har sher me alag alag hoga,lekin kafiye ke alfaaz ki aawaaz milti jhulti hogi, jaise ke upar ki ghazal me
Suhaane ,Lutaane, Samaane etc...( Maroon rang ke alfaz)
Ek aur baat bhi bohat zaruri hoti hai ghazal me, woh hai behr,..
lekin filhaal aap in char batoN ko dhyan me rakhker apni ghazal likhne ki koshish kijiye..
Koi sawaal puchna ho to hamaare ustaad zidd sahib, ufaq sahib, shad sahib, zarraa sahib, sumit sahib etc se puuch sakte hain...
(In English)
Lets start with Matla ,Maqta, Kafiya and Radeef
4 basics of ghazal
1)Matla: First 2 lines of the ghazal are called matla (Red coloured)
2)Maqta: last 2 lines are called maqta, with writers name in it.(Green coloured)
3)"Lage hain"...in the above ghazal is radeef ( Blue coloured).
Radeef should be there in the end of first 2 lines as well as all the second lines of all ashaar...
4)Rijhane, samaane, sataane etc are all kafiye..(Maroon coloured)..
Kafiye should be there in the first 2 lines of ghazal as well as ,second line of all ashaar, just before radeef...
One more thing is important in ghazal and that is behr, but right now you can practice writing your ghazal keeping in mind ,the above 4 aspects..
PS:..I am not a teacher, I just wanted to say few basics of ghazal writing, the way I learned it...
Any doubts ..pls contact our Ustads....Zidd sahib, Ufaq sahib, Sumit sahib, Shaad sahib..
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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13th July 2014, 05:37 AM
bohat khoob Zainy sahiba jawaab nahi aapka har lines lajawaab hai is kam zarf ki dil se dher saari daade qubool ki jiye
kuch arz karna chata hu gustakhi maaf
ummeed hai aapko bura na lage
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Originally Posted by zainy
AdaaoN se apni rijhaane lage haiN,
Woh chupke se dil me samaane lage haiN
( Apne Hi Shehar K Log Satane Lage hai
san apna apna dard sunane lage hai )
Kabhii paas reh kar kabhii door reh kar,
Woh pal pal hame ab sataane lage haiN.
( Hamare Naam Se Chalti Thi Jinki Sansein
Aaj Wohi Hum Se Nazrein Churane Lage hai )
JahaaN bhii milo yuun hi bas muskuraana,
Keh dil is adaa per lutaane lage haiN
( Haq Wafa Ka Jo Hamne chaha nibhana
wo Kuch Kah K bas Muskurane Lage hai)
Jo dekha hameiN to woh sharmaaye hai yuu.N,
Keh haathoN se chehraa chupaane lage haiN.
( Ham Ko Jina Parega Furqat Me unki
Ab wo Himmat meri Azmane Lage hai )
Jo nazreN milii thi to palke.n jhuka lee,
Hayaa ke ye manzar suhaane lage haiN.
( Jan Bachti meri Nazar aati Nahi ab
Gair Ulfat Bahut wo Jatane Lage hai)
Mile dil se dil, ab na ye phir judaa ho,
Duaa yeh laboN per sajaane lage haiN
( Kya Karon Nazron Se manzar Hat'ta Nahi ye
Hath Chhura Kr Mera ab Wo Jane Lage hai)
Nasha ishq ka hai ajab sa yeh zainy,
Sanam ke sitam bhi lubhaane lage haiN
(Dar Hai Meri Zuban Khul na Jaye kahi
Wo Baten Bahut ab Banane Lage hai)
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safar yun hi Kat jaye khushyon bhara
sa
dua hai rahe saath yun hi hamara
ye mehfil hamesha sab yun hi sajana
ham na ho jahaa'n me to yaad rakhe zamana
I like 2 wlk in rain bez its hide my
tears bcz
My smile is fake.......
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13th July 2014, 10:12 AM
Time of posting Today, 04:26 AM
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sab acche khayal subah hi Kyu aate hain....!
Thanks zainy ji...ek baar firse sikhane ke liye....
Save me from the safety of my SILENCE
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13th July 2014, 12:23 PM
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bohat khoob Zainy sahiba jawaab nahi aapka har lines lajawaab hai is kam zarf ki dil se dher saari daade qubool ki jiye
kuch arz karna chata hu gustakhi maaf
ummeed hai aapko bura na lage
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Bohat khoob furqann sahab. .................
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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13th July 2014, 12:26 PM
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Time of posting Today, 04:26 AM
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sab acche khayal subah hi Kyu aate hain....!
Thanks zainy ji...ek baar firse sikhane ke liye....
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To phir chaliye......kyun na ek ghazal ho jaaye aapki taraf se.....
Bohat din se kuch share nahi kiya aapne...
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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13th July 2014, 04:07 PM
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Originally Posted by zainy
AdaaoN se apni rijhaane lage haiN,
Woh chupke se dil me samaane lage haiN.
Kabhii paas reh kar kabhii door reh kar,
Woh pal pal hame ab sataane lage haiN.
JahaaN bhii milo yuun hi bas muskuraana,
Keh dil is adaa per lutaane lage haiN.
Jo dekha hameiN to woh sharmaaye hai yuu.N,
Keh haathoN se chehraa chupaane
lage haiN.
Jo nazreN milii thi to palke.n jhuka lee,
Hayaa ke ye manzar suhaane lage haiN.
Mile dil se dil, ab na ye phir judaa ho,
Duaa yeh laboN per sajaane lage haiN.
Nasha ishq ka hai ajab sa yeh zainy,
Sanam ke sitam bhi lubhaane
lage haiN.
Lets start with Matla ,Maqta, Kafiya and Radeef
4 basics of ghazal
1)Matla: First 2 lines of the ghazal are called matla (Red coloured)
2)Maqta: last 2 lines are called maqta, with writers name in it.(Green coloured)
3)"Lage hain"...in the above ghazal is radeef ( Blue coloured).
Radeef should be there in the end of first 2 lines as well as all the second lines of all ashaar...
4)Rijhane, samaane, sataane etc are all kafiye..(Maroon coloured)..
Kafiye should be there in the first 2 lines of ghazal as well as ,second line of all ashaar, just before radeef...
Now try to write your ghazal..
PS:..I am not a teacher, I just wanted to say few basics of ghazal writing, the way I learned it...
Any doubts ..pls contact our Ustads....Zidd sahib, Ufaq sahib, Sumit sahib, Shaad sahib..
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sorry for disturbing your class Zainy ji .... bas aap ko ghazal par daad dene chala aaya ... sabhi sher khoobsurat haiN, aur maqta to khaas taur se aur bhi ziyada achchha laga !!
.... and a very good initiative too !!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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13th July 2014, 04:24 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by zainy
AdaaoN se apni rijhaane lage haiN,
Woh chupke se dil me samaane lage haiN.
Kabhii paas reh kar kabhii door reh kar,
Woh pal pal hame ab sataane lage haiN.
JahaaN bhii milo yuun hi bas muskuraana,
Keh dil is adaa per lutaane lage haiN.
Jo dekha hameiN to woh sharmaaye hai yuu.N,
Keh haathoN se chehraa chupaane lage haiN.
Jo nazreN milii thi to palke.n jhuka lee,
Hayaa ke ye manzar suhaane lage haiN.
Mile dil se dil, ab na ye phir judaa ho,
Duaa yeh laboN per sajaane lage haiN.
Nasha ishq ka hai ajab sa yeh zainy,
Sanam ke sitam bhi lubhaane lage haiN.
Lets start with Matla ,Maqta, Kafiya and Radeef
4 basics of ghazal
1)Matla: First 2 lines of the ghazal are called matla (Red coloured)
2)Maqta: last 2 lines are called maqta, with writers name in it.(Green coloured)
3)"Lage hain"...in the above ghazal is radeef ( Blue coloured).
Radeef should be there in the end of first 2 lines as well as all the second lines of all ashaar...
4)Rijhane, samaane, sataane etc are all kafiye..(Maroon coloured)..
Kafiye should be there in the first 2 lines of ghazal as well as ,second line of all ashaar, just before radeef...
Now try to write your ghazal..
PS:..I am not a teacher, I just wanted to say few basics of ghazal writing, the way I learned it...
Any doubts ..pls contact our Ustads....Zidd sahib, Ufaq sahib, Sumit sahib, Shaad sahib..
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14th July 2014, 02:00 AM
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sorry for disturbing your class Zainy ji .... bas aap ko ghazal par daad dene chala aaya ... sabhi sher khoobsurat haiN, aur maqta to khaas taur se aur bhi ziyada achchha laga !!
.... and a very good initiative too !!
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bohat bohat shukriyah zarraa sahab. ....
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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14th July 2014, 11:35 AM
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To phir chaliye......kyun na ek ghazal ho jaaye aapki taraf se.....
Bohat din se kuch share nahi kiya aapne...
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For sure....................i'll try soon
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14th July 2014, 08:41 PM
nice initiative zainy saahebaa....... bahot hi acchii tarah se aapne shaayrii ki bareekiyon ko samjhaaya hai..... aur mere khyaaal se har wo point mention kiyaa hai jo ek kaamyaaab ghazal/ shaayri ke liye zaruri hai... har ek nayaa shaayr in baaton ko dimaag me rakh kar shuruaat to kar saktaaa hai... par seekhne ke liye umren kam pad jaatii hain.... ilm wo sagar hai jisme jitna doobo kam hi hotaa hai.... shaayri ki deewano ko mera salaam...
Shaad....
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nice initiative zainy saahebaa....... bahot hi acchii tarah se aapne shaayrii ki bareekiyon ko samjhaaya hai..... aur mere khyaaal se har wo point mention kiyaa hai jo ek kaamyaaab ghazal/ shaayri ke liye zaruri hai... har ek nayaa shaayr in baaton ko dimaag me rakh kar shuruaat to kar saktaaa hai... par seekhne ke liye umren kam pad jaatii hain.... ilm wo sagar hai jisme jitna doobo kam hi hotaa hai.... shaayri ki deewano ko mera salaam...
Shaad....
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shukriyah shaad sahab. .
ummeed hai ke naye members ke liye yeh thread faidemand saabit hoga....
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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10th July 2015, 11:17 AM
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Originally Posted by zainy
AdaaoN se apni rijhaane lage haiN,
Woh chupke se dil me samaane lage haiN.
Kabhii paas reh kar kabhii door reh kar,
Woh pal pal hame ab sataane lage haiN.
JahaaN bhii milo yuun hi bas muskuraana,
Keh dil is adaa per lutaane lage haiN.
Jo dekha hameiN to woh sharmaaye hai yuu.N,
Keh haathoN se chehraa chupaane lage haiN.
Jo nazreN milii thi to palke.n jhuka lee,
Hayaa ke ye manzar suhaane lage haiN.
Mile dil se dil, ab na ye phir judaa ho,
Duaa yeh laboN per sajaane lage haiN.
Nasha ishq ka hai ajab sa yeh zainy,
Sanam ke sitam bhi lubhaane lage haiN.
Ghazal likhne ka sab se aasaaN tarika:
Ghazal likhte waqt 4 batoN ko dhyan me rakhna zaruri hai:
Matla, Maqta ,Radeef, aur Kafiya
1) Matla:Pehla sher ( pehle 2 lines) ko matla kehte haiN.( laal rang ki lines)
2)Maqta: Aakhri sher( aakhri 2 lines) Jisme shayer ka naam hota hai usko maqta kehte hain.( hare rang ki lines)
3) Radeef:Har sher ke aakhiri alfaaz ko radeef kehte hain..jaise ke upar ki ghazal me "Lage hain" radeef hai...
Radeef sabhi ashaar me ek hi rahega, badlega nahi..radeef pehle sher me dono lines me hoga aur baqi ashaar me sirf dusri line me hoga..( neele rang me).
4)Kafiya: Radeef se pehle ke lafz ko kafiye kehte hain, yeh har sher me alag alag hoga,lekin kafiye ke alfaaz ki aawaaz milti jhulti hogi, jaise ke upar ki ghazal me
Suhaane ,Lutaane, Samaane etc...( Maroon rang ke alfaz)
Ek aur baat bhi bohat zaruri hoti hai ghazal me, woh hai behr,..
lekin filhaal aap in char batoN ko dhyan me rakhker apni ghazal likhne ki koshish kijiye..
Koi sawaal puchna ho to hamaare ustaad zidd sahib, ufaq sahib, shad sahib, zarraa sahib, sumit sahib etc se puuch sakte hain...
(In English)
Lets start with Matla ,Maqta, Kafiya and Radeef
4 basics of ghazal
1)Matla: First 2 lines of the ghazal are called matla (Red coloured)
2)Maqta: last 2 lines are called maqta, with writers name in it.(Green coloured)
3)"Lage hain"...in the above ghazal is radeef ( Blue coloured).
Radeef should be there in the end of first 2 lines as well as all the second lines of all ashaar...
4)Rijhane, samaane, sataane etc are all kafiye..(Maroon coloured)..
Kafiye should be there in the first 2 lines of ghazal as well as ,second line of all ashaar, just before radeef...
One more thing is important in ghazal and that is behr, but right now you can practice writing your ghazal keeping in mind ,the above 4 aspects..
PS:..I am not a teacher, I just wanted to say few basics of ghazal writing, the way I learned it...
Any doubts ..pls contact our Ustads....Zidd sahib, Ufaq sahib, Sumit sahib, Shaad sahib..
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bahot kaam ki thread par nazar padi hai...shukriya zainy sahiba ka ki unhone is jankari ko yahaan share kiya bahot simple tareeke se samjhaya hai...jin bhi doston ko shayri ke basics dekhne hon ye thread zaroor dekhein...han ab vo sare log sdc par nahi hai jinke naam yahaan diye huye..par..aapki madad karne ke liye...shaad sahab..mast sahab...jaise dost sdc par hain...to aap bas shuruaat kijiye....ham aapke sath hain..
अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी
आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे
madhu..
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