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Loquacious Adonis
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Lutff toofaan ka....... -
16th December 2009, 04:54 PM
Well Aplog ko bahut bore kiya games khel khel key ab kuch pad lijiye
Ab ye nahi kehna...
Baqz sudhar gaya and all that blah blah blah and yack yack yack...
I dont know why am posting this here ............
Lutff toofaan ka uthata hai uthaney wala,
Kashti kaagaaz ki samundar mein bahaney wala
Kal talak rah-e-wafa mein jo mere saath raha
Ye wohi shakhs hai anjaan sa janey wala
Sirf yaadein hee nahi, Khwaab, Umeedein, khushiyan...
Ghar ka ghar ley gaya ghar chhod ke janey wala
Kho gaya hai kahan shohraat ki bulandi chu kar...
Saari duniya ko isharon pe nachaney wala
Tod dey ta hai hawaon ki shikayaat sun kar,
Ek gharonda Lab-e-sahil pe bananey wala
Sunna hai khwaab ab bhi shaher mein bhiktey hai
Konsa khwaab khareedon mein zamaney wala
*The One and Only Baqz*
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'Bismil'
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16th December 2009, 05:54 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Baqtiar
Well Aplog ko bahut bore kiya games khel khel key ab kuch pad lijiye
Ab ye nahi kehna...
Baqz sudhar gaya and all that blah blah blah and yack yack yack...
I dont know why am posting this here ............
Lutff toofaan ka uthata hai uthaney wala,
Kashti kaagaaz ki samundar mein bahaney wala
Kal talak rah-e-wafa mein jo mere saath raha
Ye wohi shakhs hai anjaan sa janey wala
Sirf yaadein hee nahi, Khwaab, Umeedein, khushiyan...
Ghar ka ghar ley gaya ghar chhod ke janey wala
Kho gaya hai kahan shohraat ki bulandi chu kar...
Saari duniya ko isharon pe nachaney wala
Tod dey ta hai hawaon ki shikayaat sun kar,
Ek gharonda Lab-e-sahil pe bananey wala
Sunna hai khwaab ab bhi shaher mein bhiktey hai
Konsa khwaab khareedon mein zamaney wala
*The One and Only Baqz*
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acha likha hai ...daad..khaas kar mujhe aakhri sher bahot pasand aaya..matla bhi umda hai...acha likhte ho..
Lutff toofaan ka uthata hai uthaney wala,
Kashti kaagaaz ki samundar mein bahaney wala
Sunna hai khwaab ab bhi shaher mein bhiktey hai
Konsa khwaab khareedon mein zamaney wala
bahot khoob..
god bless
Pradhyuman
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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16th December 2009, 06:34 PM
Baqtiar Ji.....Aadaab ! aapki tehreer ke sabhi ashaar bahut umda lage mujhe.....khayal aur adaayegi bahut pasand aai......aakhiri sher mujhe khaas laga.....
dil se daad hazir hai........kabul farmaaye....
yuhi likhte rahiye....
duaoon ke saath...
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
---Naresh Mehra----
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Huii Sabse Paraayi
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16th December 2009, 07:54 PM
Baqs jee humne aapki kalam padh liya
gar ijazat milegi to tahreer ke bare mein kuchh kahenge
Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
Goodbye SDC
Diya
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Loquacious Adonis
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19th December 2009, 12:20 PM
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Originally Posted by Diya_Jale
Baqs jee humne aapki kalam padh liya
gar ijazat milegi to tahreer ke bare mein kuchh kahenge
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You can PM me.............................
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Banned
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16th December 2009, 11:04 PM
Kho gaya hai kahan shohraat ki bulandi chu kar...
Saari duniya ko isharon pe nachaney wala
Tod dey ta hai hawaon ki shikayaat sun kar,
Ek gharonda Lab-e-sahil pe bananey wala
Sunna hai khwaab ab bhi shaher mein bhiktey hai
Konsa khwaab khareedon mein zamaney wala
jabardst ...... tumhari baq baq to bahto ki sanjeedgi se achi hai
soch raha hun tumhari tareef karu to kaise aur buaryee to kaise
mujhe tum bilkul waise hi lagte ho jaise mai tha ..
ab kya kahu khud nahi pata
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Aapki dost
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17th December 2009, 12:02 AM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Baqtiar
Well Aplog ko bahut bore kiya games khel khel key ab kuch pad lijiye
Ab ye nahi kehna...
Baqz sudhar gaya and all that blah blah blah and yack yack yack...
I dont know why am posting this here ............
Lutff toofaan ka uthata hai uthaney wala,
Kashti kaagaaz ki samundar mein bahaney wala
Kal talak rah-e-wafa mein jo mere saath raha
Ye wohi shakhs hai anjaan sa janey wala
Sirf yaadein hee nahi, Khwaab, Umeedein, khushiyan...
Ghar ka ghar ley gaya ghar chhod ke janey wala
Kho gaya hai kahan shohraat ki bulandi chu kar...
Saari duniya ko isharon pe nachaney wala
Tod dey ta hai hawaon ki shikayaat sun kar,
Ek gharonda Lab-e-sahil pe bananey wala
Sunna hai khwaab ab bhi shaher mein bhiktey hai
Konsa khwaab khareedon mein zamaney wala
*The One and Only Baqz*
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Kabhi kabhi mai sochti thi ke Baqz saheb akhir sdc per kyun aatey haiN...??..ab samajh me aaya ek acche shayer ke liye bilkul sahi jagah hai yeH......
keep it up.......keep writing........
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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Loquacious Adonis
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Point to ponder....... -
19th December 2009, 12:22 PM
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Originally Posted by zainy
Kabhi kabhi mai sochti thi ke Baqz saheb akhir sdc per kyun aatey haiN...??..ab samajh me aaya ek acche shayer ke liye bilkul sahi jagah hai yeH......
keep it up.......keep writing........
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Probably aisa bahut log sonchte hai ke mein akir sdc par kyun aata hoon???
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An Incomplite Dream
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17th December 2009, 05:12 PM
Baktiyaar Bhai As salam waleuM..........
Bhai aapki yeh koshish to behad lajwab lagi, Kafi gehri soch hai janab ise chupaker na rakha karo...... sabhi sher behad sanjidgi se kahe hai aur khoob kahe hai........
Sabhi sher la jawab hai yaar sach mein kisi sher men kuch bhi atpata nahi laga, isi ek sher ko pasand karun to puri kalam ke saath nainsafi hogi puri kalam per dil se daad kabool aro........ aur khayaloN ki gehrai ne to mujhe daad ke liye lafz hi nahi chore...........
Keep it Bhai, Aise hi likhate raho..........
Main humesha padhta rahuNga............
Khush raho khuda hafez..........
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beautiful moment.........
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17th December 2009, 07:56 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Baqtiar
Well Aplog ko bahut bore kiya games khel khel key ab kuch pad lijiye
Ab ye nahi kehna...
Baqz sudhar gaya and all that blah blah blah and yack yack yack...
I dont know why am posting this here ............
Lutff toofaan ka uthata hai uthaney wala,
Kashti kaagaaz ki samundar mein bahaney wala
Kal talak rah-e-wafa mein jo mere saath raha
Ye wohi shakhs hai anjaan sa janey wala
Sirf yaadein hee nahi, Khwaab, Umeedein, khushiyan...
Ghar ka ghar ley gaya ghar chhod ke janey wala
Kho gaya hai kahan shohraat ki bulandi chu kar...
Saari duniya ko isharon pe nachaney wala
Tod dey ta hai hawaon ki shikayaat sun kar,
Ek gharonda Lab-e-sahil pe bananey wala
Sunna hai khwaab ab bhi shaher mein bhiktey hai
Konsa khwaab khareedon mein zamaney wala
*The One and Only Baqz*
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woooooooooooooo..........................Baqz , ye kya ho gaya tumhe yaar...tum chit-chat forum me hi raho yaar....is tarah shayari karke hum sab ko shock mat do...muje to abhi tak yakeen nahi ho raha ke ye tumne kiya hai ...waise likha to bahut khoob hai...par plz yaar hum sab pe kuch taras khao aur aise sadme naa diya karooo....
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa ,
ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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Loquacious Adonis
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19th December 2009, 12:25 PM
Thatz what am gonna do Janeman.....
tumhe heart attack se marr ne ka irada hai...
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Some Mirrors Lie...
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18th December 2009, 05:22 PM
Baqz bhai,
Main bikul shocked nahi hua aap ki composition dekh kar,
After reading "Kuch Aashaar.." i was of the view that u can write better,,,
Keep the spirit up,,,
Take care n Regardz,,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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Sifar
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22nd December 2009, 09:32 PM
Bohat hi khoob ...
tareef shabdoN ki mohtaaz nahi ... meri muskaan aaj aapke kalaam ke naam ...
Kunaal
KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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Loquacious Adonis
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7th April 2010, 04:11 PM
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Originally Posted by KunaaL
Bohat hi khoob ...
tareef shabdoN ki mohtaaz nahi ... meri muskaan aaj aapke kalaam ke naam ...
Kunaal
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Muskaan......Dekhne mein kaisi hai...... ???
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7th April 2010, 06:42 PM
another excellent creation.
this one was very good
Lutff toofaan ka uthata hai uthaney wala,
Kashti kaagaaz ki samundar mein bahaney wala
Quote:
Originally Posted by Baqtiar
Well Aplog ko bahut bore kiya games khel khel key ab kuch pad lijiye
Ab ye nahi kehna...
Baqz sudhar gaya and all that blah blah blah and yack yack yack...
I dont know why am posting this here ............
Lutff toofaan ka uthata hai uthaney wala,
Kashti kaagaaz ki samundar mein bahaney wala
Kal talak rah-e-wafa mein jo mere saath raha
Ye wohi shakhs hai anjaan sa janey wala
Sirf yaadein hee nahi, Khwaab, Umeedein, khushiyan...
Ghar ka ghar ley gaya ghar chhod ke janey wala
Kho gaya hai kahan shohraat ki bulandi chu kar...
Saari duniya ko isharon pe nachaney wala
Tod dey ta hai hawaon ki shikayaat sun kar,
Ek gharonda Lab-e-sahil pe bananey wala
Sunna hai khwaab ab bhi shaher mein bhiktey hai
Konsa khwaab khareedon mein zamaney wala
*The One and Only Baqz*
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ता उम्र रहा इक रोज़-ए -मुकम्मल का इंतज़ार
किसी में शाम न मिली तो किसी में सहर नहीं
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8th April 2010, 07:24 PM
I am just speechlesssssssssss..................mere bhai aapne to bolti bandh kar di. Sach kahu to mar dala zalim kya ghazal likhi hai wahhhhhhhhhhhh.
Subhan_allah mujhe to pehle se pata hai janab aap mamuli cheeze nahi ho......yeh sher hamesha yaad rahege.
Kal talak rah-e-wafa mein jo mere saath raha
Ye wohi shakhs hai anjaan sa janey wala
Sirf yaadein hee nahi, Khwaab, Umeedein, khushiyan...
Ghar ka ghar ley gaya ghar chhod ke janey wala
Kho gaya hai kahan shohraat ki bulandi chu kar...
Saari duniya ko isharon pe nachaney wala
Jhoot kehdu yeh meri fitrat me nahi shamil
Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta...
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Loquacious Adonis
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11th April 2010, 01:39 PM
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Originally Posted by sajid_ghayel
I am just speechlesssssssssss..................mere bhai aapne to bolti bandh kar di. Sach kahu to mar dala zalim kya ghazal likhi hai wahhhhhhhhhhhh.
Subhan_allah mujhe to pehle se pata hai janab aap mamuli cheeze nahi ho......yeh sher hamesha yaad rahege.
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Koi nahi mila kya dude......hehehe meri hi Tangg keench rahey ho....
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Loquacious Adonis
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19th December 2009, 12:26 PM
Tu Khamakha bahut kuch karti hai.....
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19th December 2009, 01:33 PM
Well done................ aacha likha hai aacha hi nahi bahut aacha likha hai..... baqs G ...... aise hi likhte rahiye
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Hasratein dilo ki chupaye nahi chupti hai,
dard juba par bankar bayan sab karti hai.....
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Dard ki mehfil me ek sher hum bhi aarz kiya karte hai..
Na kisi se marham Na duaon ki Ummed kiya karte hai..
kayi chehre lekar log yaha jiya karte hai.......
hum in aasunao ko ek chehre ke liye peeya karte hai....
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