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dont know wat 2 name dis.... sacchai shayad
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dont know wat 2 name dis.... sacchai shayad - 18th September 2009, 03:02 PM

Ek din ek ajnabi mujhko yu aise mila
Jaise barson se bas usi ki talaash mein thi..
Duniya usne pyar bhari kuch yu mujhko dikhaayi
Jaise tamannaon ki wo anchuyi tokri aaj jeene ko aayi..

Chua usne mujhko aise yaad phir kuch raha nahi
Mai kaun hu, kiski hu, dil ne phir kuch kaha nahi..
Khoti gayi uski saanson mein kuch yu si meri saansein
Mujhme jaise phir mera, baki hi kuch raha nahi..

Aaj wo ajnabi mujhse durr durr sa rehta hai
Bhul gaya hu mai tumko, aasani se kehta hai..
Ek lamha tha jab mere uske beech hawa bhi na thi
Aur aaj hamare beech ek pura zamana rehta hai..

Phir bhi mere dil ko, aitbaar uspe hai
Kuch majburiyaan hongi uski, ye ehsaas mujhko hai..
Kaise bhulu mai usko, sach, dil se chaha tha
Bin mausam ab aakhon mein barsaat har pal hai..

Tum to yaha ho nahi, par yaadon mein ab behti hu
Tum sunoge to nahi phir bhi, ye baat tumse kehti hu..
Kabhi to yaad kar lena, kabhi to haal puch lena
Tum paas nahi, mai khaas nahi, par saath tumhare rehti hu...


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Yeh jo baat hui hogi ye to sirf ishq mei.n hoti hai
Dekh ke har nazaara man mei.n ik khalish si hoti hai
Aag lagi hai jaha.n barsaat phir waha.n kyo.n nahi hoti
Jaha.n hote hai.n labalab paimaane teri innayat bhi wahi.n kyo.n hoti hai
Dard-e-dil ko mere han'si mei.n uda diya tha tumne
Yeh bhi na socha tumne ki har subha ki ik shaam bhi to hoti hai
Aaoge tum jante hai.n hm kyonki aana tumhaara to laazim hai
Dekna to ab bhi yeh raha baaki ke mere hauslo.n ki zame'e.n kitni hai



.....I agree, some times you jus want to write something without thinking about topic or rhyme....and most often such a creation turns out to be the best that you have ever written....Yours is one such creation and name really does not matter. Please accept my appreciations!!!


'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali
Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho
Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi....



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9th October 2009, 02:23 PM

thanks a lot..... kisi ko toh acha laga... i thot it turned out really pathetic... hehe


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Ek din ek ajnabi mujhko yu aise mila
Jaise barson se bas usi ki talaash mein thi..
Duniya usne pyar bhari kuch yu mujhko dikhaayi
Jaise tamannaon ki wo anchuyi tokri aaj jeene ko aayi..

Chua usne mujhko aise yaad phir kuch raha nahi
Mai kaun hu, kiski hu, dil ne phir kuch kaha nahi..
Khoti gayi uski saanson mein kuch yu si meri saansein
Mujhme jaise phir mera, baki hi kuch raha nahi..

Aaj wo ajnabi mujhse durr durr sa rehta hai
Bhul gaya hu mai tumko, aasani se kehta hai..
Ek lamha tha jab mere uske beech hawa bhi na thi
Aur aaj hamare beech ek pura zamana rehta hai..

Phir bhi mere dil ko, aitbaar uspe hai
Kuch majburiyaan hongi uski, ye ehsaas mujhko hai..
Kaise bhulu mai usko, sach, dil se chaha tha
Bin mausam ab aakhon mein barsaat har pal hai..

Tum to yaha ho nahi, par yaadon mein ab behti hu
Tum sunoge to nahi phir bhi, ye baat tumse kehti hu..
Kabhi to yaad kar lena, kabhi to haal puch lena
Tum paas nahi, mai khaas nahi, par saath tumhare rehti hu...
Anchal G Harash aapko is haseen mehfil maiN adaab baja lata hai....aapki rachna nazroN se do chaaar hui...aapka prosetic view achha raha....aapke bhaav bahoot hi sunder ban pdeiN haiN...bas use ek roop dene ki zaroorat hai...Apne bhavoN ko apni kalam ki siyaahi meiN pirona hi apne aap meiN ek bahoot badii baat hai....aapne toh phir bhi bahot kuchh sanwaar ker likh diya.....our jitna apne saathiyoN ko padeNgii utna hi hunar aapka sashakt hoga...bahoot khoob likha hai aapne....

Aanchal G jo bhaav aaapne apni kalam se utaare haiN..shayad unhe maiN bhi is dhaNg se na utaar pata pata......merii zaanib se aapko iss taehreer per daad deta hooN...


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Ek din ek ajnabi mujhko yu aise mila
Jaise barson se bas usi ki talaash mein thi..
Duniya usne pyar bhari kuch yu mujhko dikhaayi
Jaise tamannaon ki wo anchuyi tokri aaj jeene ko aayi..

Chua usne mujhko aise yaad phir kuch raha nahi
Mai kaun hu, kiski hu, dil ne phir kuch kaha nahi..
Khoti gayi uski saanson mein kuch yu si meri saansein
Mujhme jaise phir mera, baki hi kuch raha nahi..

Aaj wo ajnabi mujhse durr durr sa rehta hai
Bhul gaya hu mai tumko, aasani se kehta hai..
Ek lamha tha jab mere uske beech hawa bhi na thi
Aur aaj hamare beech ek pura zamana rehta hai..

Phir bhi mere dil ko, aitbaar uspe hai
Kuch majburiyaan hongi uski, ye ehsaas mujhko hai..
Kaise bhulu mai usko, sach, dil se chaha tha
Bin mausam ab aakhon mein barsaat har pal hai..

Tum to yaha ho nahi, par yaadon mein ab behti hu
Tum sunoge to nahi phir bhi, ye baat tumse kehti hu..
Kabhi to yaad kar lena, kabhi to haal puch lena
Tum paas nahi, mai khaas nahi, par saath tumhare rehti hu...
Aanchal Jii Aadaab......

Aapke ahsaas wakai sachchi bayan kar rahe hai but lafzon mein proper bayan nahi ho paye..... aapke ahsaas bahut khoob hai...... Jaise Harash jii ne rai i hai main bhi unki rai se sehmat huN aap inhi ahsaas ko aur bhi bahut khoobi se parosh sakte hai.....

Highlighted stanza bahut achche lage......

Likhate rahiye..
Khush rahiye..


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