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Ek Gazal..Aap ke liye. - 28th December 2009, 10:25 AM
Tum ne jodi thi zindgi,mujh se
Pyar karte the tum kabhi,mujhse.

Aaj kya farq aa gaya mujh mein
Ho gayee itni be-rukhi,mujh se.

Baant lo mujh se apne gum saare
Gar na baanton koi khushi,mujh se.

Guzre lamhon ke waste hi sahi
Phir se kar lo na dosti,mujh se.

Ik dafa jhooth mooth hi kah do
Tum na todo-ge dosti,mujh se.

‘vasl ki raat aur ye ansoo
kar gaya ishq dillagi mujh se.

(a gazal from Main BHi Akela..by Prashant Vasl..the author..all rights reserved)
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28th December 2009, 10:37 AM
Vasl Saahab,...

Loot liya aashaaroN ne ... sach mai is baar ... ek dhaage mai piroy maala jaisa

Guzre lamhon ke waste hi sahi
Phir se kar lo na dosti,mujh se.

Itne masoom ehsaas hai ye... par ab koi nahi samajhta inhe ...

aap aise hi likhte rahe...

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28th December 2009, 12:14 PM
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Tum ne jodi thi zindgi,mujh se
Pyar karte the tum kabhi,mujhse.

Aaj kya farq aa gaya mujh mein
Ho gayee itni be-rukhi,mujh se.

Baant lo mujh se apne gum saare
Gar na baanton koi khushi,mujh se.

Guzre lamhon ke waste hi sahi
Phir se kar lo na dosti,mujh se.

Ik dafa jhooth mooth hi kah do
Tum na todo-ge dosti,mujh se.

‘vasl ki raat aur ye ansoo
kar gaya ishq dillagi mujh se.

(a gazal from Main BHi Akela..by Prashant Vasl..the author..all rights reserved)
hmmmmm.......vasl sahab....kaise hai aap?

ye ghazal bahut baar suni hui hai.......vasl sahab....iski shelf life khatm ho gayi hai..........vajpayee ki us kavish ki tarah" geet naya gaata hu mai" aur 15 saal se wahi suna rahe hai...vajpayee sahab....

magar is ghazal me apka makta hamesha mujhe pareshaan kar gaya...na jaane kyu ise jab bhi padta hu ek hi khyal mann me aa jata hai......"KYA VO LULI YA KAANI NIKLI?'

Aise khayal aaye bina maqte ka matlab kabhi samj nahi aaya.......

baki ghazal ke liye daad meri hamesha hazir rahi hai.........

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28th December 2009, 10:26 PM
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Tum ne jodi thi zindgi,mujh se
Pyar karte the tum kabhi,mujhse.

Aaj kya farq aa gaya mujh mein
Ho gayee itni be-rukhi,mujh se.

Baant lo mujh se apne gum saare
Gar na baanton koi khushi,mujh se.

Guzre lamhon ke waste hi sahi
Phir se kar lo na dosti,mujh se.

Ik dafa jhooth mooth hi kah do
Tum na todo-ge dosti,mujh se.

‘vasl ki raat aur ye ansoo
kar gaya ishq dillagi mujh se.

(a gazal from Main BHi Akela..by Prashant Vasl..the author..all rights reserved)
Vasl Sahab...Aadaab ! aapko padha toh maine kai baar....par reply shayad pehli de raha hu........aapki ghazal ke ashaar bahut khub lage....iske ehsaas dil ko chhu gaye...yuhi likhte rahiye...

aapke kalaam ko dil se daad hazir hai....kabul ki jiye...

khush rahiye...
duaaon ke saath....



YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...

Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...

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29th December 2009, 03:01 PM
Vasl saheB, Namaskaar.........

Tumchi gazal ekdum mast aahe, pan kharach kahi navin pan tumchya yaa rachnet mala disla nahi......... pan he don sher mala khup awadlet.........

Baant lo mujh se apne gum saare
Gar na baanton koi khushi,mujh se.

Guzre lamhon ke waste hi sahi
Phir se kar lo na dosti,mujh se.

Lihit raha...........
Khush raha.......
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7th January 2010, 11:43 PM
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Tum ne jodi thi zindgi,mujh se
Pyar karte the tum kabhi,mujhse.

Aaj kya farq aa gaya mujh mein
Ho gayee itni be-rukhi,mujh se.

Baant lo mujh se apne gum saare
Gar na baanton koi khushi,mujh se.

Guzre lamhon ke waste hi sahi
Phir se kar lo na dosti,mujh se.

Ik dafa jhooth mooth hi kah do
Tum na todo-ge dosti,mujh se.

‘vasl ki raat aur ye ansoo
kar gaya ishq dillagi mujh se.

(a gazal from Main BHi Akela..by Prashant Vasl..the author..all rights reserved)

namaste bhaiya.....aapki poetry ki tareef karne ke layak maiN hoon nahi, bas etna kahna chahuNgi ki aap har poetry superb hoti hai...!

regards
aapki chotti

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9th January 2010, 11:35 PM
Aap kis laayaq hain,ye mujhe khoob pata hai,aur isi liye aap ki 'taareef' ke chand alfaaz mere jaise shayar ke liye bahut maani rakhte hain..
Please meri taareef khul kar karen,ya khul kar mujhe khaarij karen.Dono suraton mein,aap ka shukra guzaar rahoonga..Saun Rab Di..Sunita Di.
   
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‘vasl ki raat aur ye ansoo
kar gaya ishq dillagi mujh se.


daad ....prashant ji bahut hi khoob,shukriya

ibadat bhi khuda hai,bagavat bhi khuda hai
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