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kadmoN meiN tere aakhiri dhadkan bicHaa chale -
7th February 2003, 08:25 PM
mehfil ko aadaab
aik muddat ke baad lauta huuN....ek nayi Ghazal haazir hai mulaizaa farmaayeN kadmoN meiN tere aakhiri dhadkan bicHaa chale maathe pe tere ik jo shikan thii , mitaa chale waqt-e-nizaa itni tassalli to thii dil ko tum be-wafaa hue to hue , HUM nibhaa chale aaraam tha kuch aag ki garmii se zaKhm ko aaye voh meri kabr par , shama bhujhaa chale kaise banauuN us jagah khwaboN ka aashiyaaN har samt fareboN ki jahaaN par hawaa chale usne hamaari khwaahisheN pairoN tal'e rauNdiiN har ik razaa pe jiski hum gardan jhukaa , chale haathoN ki lakiiroN ko bajaa jaan kar chup huN kismat meiN hai liKhaa jo uspe zor kya chale ! nakaam hasratoN ko bhulaane kahaaN jaate !! nikle teri galii se suu-e-maikadaa chale "maikash" yuN Gham-e-yaar tu seene meiN cHupa le chehra bhi gar koi paDhe , kuch na pataa chale is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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8th February 2003, 08:26 AM
kya kaha hai... well said (Y)
"haathoN ki lakiiroN ko bajaa jaan kar chup huN kismat meiN hai liKhaa jo uspe zor kya chale ! " wah kya sher hai.. amazing.. so true.. well well written...keep it going..   zindagi ki nahi hamare Maghfirat ki dua karna.. ----------------------- |
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23rd February 2003, 02:08 AM
hi maiKash ji,
kaise hai aap ? aapne bahut achaa sher likha hai.. wah wah.. luv riddhi |
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ji janab -
24th February 2003, 10:08 AM
aapne bahut accha likha hai itna shayad mai bhi nahi likh pati.
ees liye pahli baar taarif kar rahi hoo!!! aasha karti hoo k aap hamesha aisa hi likhe |
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12th March 2003, 02:00 PM
very well written.some of your shers are really beautiful,and rythmic.hope to hear from u more .bye
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lajawab -
12th March 2003, 03:09 PM
aap jab bhi kuchh likhte hai bas padhte rehne ko dil karta hai. shayri to hajaro log likhte hai lekin rythem me aa sake aise kalam bahot kam hote hai. magar aap me wo khubi bahot umda hai...
waqt-e-nizaa itni tassalli to thii dil ko tum be-wafaa hue to hue , HUM nibhaa chale usne hamaari khwaahisheN pairoN tal'e rauNdiiN har ik razaa pe jiski hum gardan jhukaa , chale this sounds so touchable. bahot hi jiyada unselfish,dedicated and secrificed words. bahot bahot bahot khoob likha hai. hope to hear next soon bye and take care sanam jo ab ye bewaqt hi tuje satane aa gaye logo ne nahi dekha apne girebaan main aur dekho 'sanam' ko aajmane aa gaye -> SaNaM |
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