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4th September 2009, 09:30 PM
Doston ko aadab bado ko salaam , aap ki mehafil main fir say aana hua hai
ise umeed per ki aap mera housla afzai karoge.................
mera ek kawaab hai .........................pura hai yaa adhura hai faisla aapka ?
Kaash is zindagi mein ye bhi nazaara dekhoon.
Aankh meri ho magar khwaab tumhara dekhoon..
Mere hi dil mein nahin ishq ki shamaa roshan.
Teri ankhon mein bhi chaahat ka sharaara dekhoon."
Tujh se milne ki duaa lab se nikal jaati hai.
Aasmaan pe jo koi toot-ta taara dekhoon..
Teri aankhon ke samander mein is tarah dooboon.
Ta-qayaamat na kabhi koi kinaara dekhoon..
Ab mujhe koi zuroorat nahin bahaaron ki.
Main to khilne ke liye tera ishaara dekhoon..
Tere haathon ki laqeeron mein hai kismat meri.
Arsh per kyon main muqadder ka sitaara dekhoon..
Jo maseeha tha wohi ban gaya dushman mera.
Ab main jeene ke liye kiska sahaara dekhoon..
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4th September 2009, 10:12 PM
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Originally Posted by vichiter
Doston ko aadab bado ko salaam , aap ki mehafil main fir say aana hua hai
ise umeed per ki aap mera housla afzai karoge.................
mera ek kawaab hai .........................pura hai yaa adhura hai faisla aapka ?
Kaash is zindagi mein ye bhi nazaara dekhoon.
Aankh meri ho magar khwaab tumhara dekhoon..
Mere hi dil mein nahin ishq ki shamaa roshan.
Teri ankhon mein bhi chaahat ka sharaara dekhoon."
Tujh se milne ki duaa lab se nikal jaati hai.
Aasmaan pe jo koi toot-ta taara dekhoon..
Teri aankhon ke samander mein is tarah dooboon.
Ta-qayaamat na kabhi koi kinaara dekhoon..
Ab mujhe koi zuroorat nahin bahaaron ki.
Main to khilne ke liye tera ishaara dekhoon..
Tere haathon ki laqeeron mein hai kismat meri.
Arsh per kyon main muqadder ka sitaara dekhoon..
Jo maseeha tha wohi ban gaya dushman mera.
Ab main jeene ke liye kiska sahaara dekhoon..
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विचत्रा भाई
अपने अच्छा लिखा है पर मेरी सम्झ में नही आया के आपका सब्जेक्ट क्या है और आप अपने र्य्दम से बिल्कुल ही अलग हट गये है इस कविता मैं. आपका संदेश तो मैं समझा हूँ पर कोई और समझेगा के नही ये तो पड़ने वाले ही बताएँगे.
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Abed Farooqui
Jalegi shammaye tere naam se qamar
Parwaana hun tera naam jo liya karun
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4th September 2009, 10:39 PM
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विचत्रा भाई
अपने अच्छा लिखा है पर मेरी सम्झ में नही आया के आपका सब्जेक्ट क्या है और आप अपने र्य्दम से बिल्कुल ही अलग हट गये है इस कविता मैं. आपका संदेश तो मैं समझा हूँ पर कोई और समझेगा के नही ये तो पड़ने वाले ही बताएँगे.
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DOST YEH CHAHAT HAI KISE KI KISE KAY LIYE
AB ISKAY AALAVA TO MAIN KYA BOLO
BAS CHAHAT HAI MERI
AAPKA VICHITRA
Yeh manjilen yeh rastay mushkilo bhari yeh dager.....
Tu nahin hai mere sath to mushkilo ka hai safer......
Tham lay tu mera daman meri khushiyan nahi hai koi.....
Na meri manjil na mera karwaan na humsafer hai koi............
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4th September 2009, 10:49 PM
are sorry apne lika bhot acha hai apne space nai diye hai isliye meri samjh me nai aya tha acha lkha hai apne main ek nazar mein samj nai paya tha sorry.
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4th September 2009, 10:53 PM
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are sorry apne lika bhot acha hai apne space nai diye hai isliye meri samjh me nai aya tha acha lkha hai apne main ek nazar mein samj nai paya tha sorry.
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HOTA HAI HOTA HAI
AISA BHI HOTA HAI
AAPKA VICHITRA
Yeh manjilen yeh rastay mushkilo bhari yeh dager.....
Tu nahin hai mere sath to mushkilo ka hai safer......
Tham lay tu mera daman meri khushiyan nahi hai koi.....
Na meri manjil na mera karwaan na humsafer hai koi............
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5th September 2009, 12:27 AM
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Kaash is zindagi mein ye bhi nazaara dekhoon.
Aankh meri ho magar khwaab tumhara dekhoon..
Mere hi dil mein nahin ishq ki shamaa roshan.
Teri ankhon mein bhi chaahat ka sharaara dekhoon."
Tujh se milne ki duaa lab se nikal jaati hai.
Aasmaan pe jo koi toot-ta taara dekhoon..
Teri aankhon ke samander mein is tarah dooboon.
Ta-qayaamat na kabhi koi kinaara dekhoon..
Ab mujhe koi zuroorat nahin bahaaron ki.
Main to khilne ke liye tera ishaara dekhoon..
Tere haathon ki laqeeron mein hai kismat meri.
Arsh per kyon main muqadder ka sitaara dekhoon..
Jo maseeha tha wohi ban gaya dushman mera.
Ab main jeene ke liye kiska sahaara dekhoon..
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vichiter ji.....bahut khub....badi umda aur khubsurat ghazal kahi hai aapne....sabhi sher mohabbat ki kahani ka dukh sukh khud hi bayaan kar rahe hai....mujhe padh kar acha laga......very nice creation.....superB........aise hi likhte rahiye.....khush rahiye.......
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
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5th September 2009, 11:25 AM
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vichiter ji.....bahut khub....badi umda aur khubsurat ghazal kahi hai aapne....sabhi sher mohabbat ki kahani ka dukh sukh khud hi bayaan kar rahe hai....mujhe padh kar acha laga......very nice creation.....superB........aise hi likhte rahiye.....khush rahiye.......
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dhanyavaad naresh ji
bas aap jaise kadardaan ki zarorat hai jo sabka housla afzai kartay hai
aapka
vichitra
Yeh manjilen yeh rastay mushkilo bhari yeh dager.....
Tu nahin hai mere sath to mushkilo ka hai safer......
Tham lay tu mera daman meri khushiyan nahi hai koi.....
Na meri manjil na mera karwaan na humsafer hai koi............
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5th September 2009, 11:32 AM
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Doston ko aadab bado ko salaam , aap ki mehafil main fir say aana hua hai
ise umeed per ki aap mera housla afzai karoge.................
mera ek kawaab hai .........................pura hai yaa adhura hai faisla aapka ?
Kaash is zindagi mein ye bhi nazaara dekhoon.
Aankh meri ho magar khwaab tumhara dekhoon..
Mere hi dil mein nahin ishq ki shamaa roshan.
Teri ankhon mein bhi chaahat ka sharaara dekhoon."
Tujh se milne ki duaa lab se nikal jaati hai.
Aasmaan pe jo koi toot-ta taara dekhoon..
Teri aankhon ke samander mein is tarah dooboon.
Ta-qayaamat na kabhi koi kinaara dekhoon..
Ab mujhe koi zuroorat nahin bahaaron ki.
Main to khilne ke liye tera ishaara dekhoon..
Tere haathon ki laqeeron mein hai kismat meri.
Arsh per kyon main muqadder ka sitaara dekhoon..
Jo maseeha tha wohi ban gaya dushman mera.
Ab main jeene ke liye kiska sahaara dekhoon..
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Bohat hi khoob...
maiN humesha kaha karta huN takneek se jyada mujhe nayapan lubhata hai .. kyuNki khyaal to wahi hai ... par hum use kitne naye alfaazon maiN piro ke khoobsoorat aur gehra bana paaye wahi shayri maiN noor aa jaata hai ,, mujhe behad pasand aaye aapke ye alfaaz .. inme naya pan to hai hi .. bebaak bayani bhi hai ..
aise hi likhte rahiye
Kunaal
KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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5th September 2009, 11:36 AM
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Bohat hi khoob...
maiN humesha kaha karta huN takneek se jyada mujhe nayapan lubhata hai .. kyuNki khyaal to wahi hai ... par hum use kitne naye alfaazon maiN piro ke khoobsoorat aur gehra bana paaye wahi shayri maiN noor aa jaata hai ,, mujhe behad pasand aaye aapke ye alfaaz .. inme naya pan to hai hi .. bebaak bayani bhi hai ..
aise hi likhte rahiye
Kunaal
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kunaal bhai ko aadaab
kaise hai bhai jaan
aapnay mujhay jo protsahit kiya hai uska dhanya vaad
aapka vichitra
Yeh manjilen yeh rastay mushkilo bhari yeh dager.....
Tu nahin hai mere sath to mushkilo ka hai safer......
Tham lay tu mera daman meri khushiyan nahi hai koi.....
Na meri manjil na mera karwaan na humsafer hai koi............
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5th September 2009, 03:58 PM
Kaash is zindagi mein ye bhi nazaara dekhoon.
Aankh meri ho magar khwaab tumhara dekhoon..
Mere hi dil mein nahin ishq ki shamaa roshan.
Teri ankhon mein bhi chaahat ka sharaara dekhoon.
Tujh se milne ki duaa lab se nikal jaati hai.
Aasmaan pe jo koi toot-ta taara dekhoon..
Teri aankhon ke samander mein is tarah dooboon.
Ta-qayaamat na kabhi koi kinaara dekhoon..
Ab mujhe koi zuroorat nahin bahaaron ki.
Main to khilne ke liye tera ishaara dekhoon..
Tere haathon ki laqeeron mein hai kismat meri.
Arsh per kyon main muqadder ka sitaara dekhoon..
Jo maseeha tha wohi ban gaya dushman mera.
Ab main jeene ke liye kiska sahaara dekhoon..
Vichiter ji namaskaar
bahut hi umda likha hai aapne, aapki likhi hue gazal pheli baar padi hai, sabhi ahsaas bahut umda haiN, aur khaas baat ki poori gazal ka flow bahut badiya hai......daad hazir hai dil se.
god bless u
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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5th September 2009, 08:46 PM
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Kaash is zindagi mein ye bhi nazaara dekhoon.
Aankh meri ho magar khwaab tumhara dekhoon..
Mere hi dil mein nahin ishq ki shamaa roshan.
Teri ankhon mein bhi chaahat ka sharaara dekhoon.
Tujh se milne ki duaa lab se nikal jaati hai.
Aasmaan pe jo koi toot-ta taara dekhoon..
Teri aankhon ke samander mein is tarah dooboon.
Ta-qayaamat na kabhi koi kinaara dekhoon..
Ab mujhe koi zuroorat nahin bahaaron ki.
Main to khilne ke liye tera ishaara dekhoon..
Tere haathon ki laqeeron mein hai kismat meri.
Arsh per kyon main muqadder ka sitaara dekhoon..
Jo maseeha tha wohi ban gaya dushman mera.
Ab main jeene ke liye kiska sahaara dekhoon..
Vichiter ji namaskaar
bahut hi umda likha hai aapne, aapki likhi hue gazal pheli baar padi hai, sabhi ahsaas bahut umda haiN, aur khaas baat ki poori gazal ka flow bahut badiya hai......daad hazir hai dil se.
god bless u
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sunita ji namaskar
aapki daad .........kabool ki
aise hi protsahit kijeyega
thanks
with regards
vichitra
Yeh manjilen yeh rastay mushkilo bhari yeh dager.....
Tu nahin hai mere sath to mushkilo ka hai safer......
Tham lay tu mera daman meri khushiyan nahi hai koi.....
Na meri manjil na mera karwaan na humsafer hai koi............
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5th September 2009, 10:45 PM
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Kaash is zindagi mein ye bhi nazaara dekhoon.
Aankh meri ho magar khwaab tumhara dekhoon..
Mere hi dil mein nahin ishq ki shamaa roshan.
Teri ankhon mein bhi chaahat ka sharaara dekhoon.
Tujh se milne ki duaa lab se nikal jaati hai.
Aasmaan pe jo koi toot-ta taara dekhoon..
Teri aankhon ke samander mein is tarah dooboon.
Ta-qayaamat na kabhi koi kinaara dekhoon..
Ab mujhe koi zuroorat nahin bahaaron ki.
Main to khilne ke liye tera ishaara dekhoon..
Tere haathon ki laqeeron mein hai kismat meri.
Arsh per kyon main muqadder ka sitaara dekhoon..
Jo maseeha tha wohi ban gaya dushman mera.
Ab main jeene ke liye kiska sahaara dekhoon..
Vichiter ji namaskaar
bahut hi umda likha hai aapne, aapki likhi hue gazal pheli baar padi hai, sabhi ahsaas bahut umda haiN, aur khaas baat ki poori gazal ka flow bahut badiya hai......daad hazir hai dil se.
god bless u
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EK SHAYR KO JAB TAK ..............DAAD NA MILAY TO KUCH ADHURA HI LAGATA HAI AUR JAB AAP JAISE .........SHOKEEN MILAY TO DIL MAIN AGHAY LIKHNAY KI TAMMANA JAGTI HAI.........
AAP SABHI KA HOUSLA AFFZAI KARTI HAIN.........AISE HI KIJYEGA .....KHUSH RAHIYE
APPKA VICHITRA
Yeh manjilen yeh rastay mushkilo bhari yeh dager.....
Tu nahin hai mere sath to mushkilo ka hai safer......
Tham lay tu mera daman meri khushiyan nahi hai koi.....
Na meri manjil na mera karwaan na humsafer hai koi............
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8th September 2009, 09:14 AM
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vichiter ji.....bahut khub....badi umda aur khubsurat ghazal kahi hai aapne....sabhi sher mohabbat ki kahani ka dukh sukh khud hi bayaan kar rahe hai....mujhe padh kar acha laga......very nice creation.....superB........aise hi likhte rahiye.....khush rahiye.......
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EK SHAYR KO JAB TAK ..............DAAD NA MILAY TO KUCH ADHURA HI LAGATA HAI AUR JAB AAP JAISE .........SHOKEEN MILAY TO DIL MAIN AGHAY LIKHNAY KI TAMMANA JAGTI HAI.........
AAP SABHI KA HOUSLA AFFZAI KARTI HAIN.........AISE HI KIJYEGA .....KHUSH RAHIYE
APPKA VICHITRA
Yeh manjilen yeh rastay mushkilo bhari yeh dager.....
Tu nahin hai mere sath to mushkilo ka hai safer......
Tham lay tu mera daman meri khushiyan nahi hai koi.....
Na meri manjil na mera karwaan na humsafer hai koi............
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8th September 2009, 09:21 AM
DIL SE''''''
HUM HAIN NACHEEZ TUM HO NAZNEEN MERE..
HUM HAIN WFA-E-HUSN TUM HO DIL K SHEHZADE MERE....
TUMHARE BINA DIL CHADTA NHI SURAJ DHALTA NHI MERA..
TUM HI BS TUM HI HO DILNASHEEN MERE...........
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9th September 2009, 12:59 AM
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DIL SE''''''
HUM HAIN NACHEEZ TUM HO NAZNEEN MERE..
HUM HAIN WFA-E-HUSN TUM HO DIL K SHEHZADE MERE....
TUMHARE BINA DIL CHADTA NHI SURAJ DHALTA NHI MERA..
TUM HI BS TUM HI HO DILNASHEEN MERE...........
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kya shair hai aapka
per ek baat pucho ager aap bura na manye to?
yeh aapnay kis par likha hai
aapka vichitra
Yeh manjilen yeh rastay mushkilo bhari yeh dager.....
Tu nahin hai mere sath to mushkilo ka hai safer......
Tham lay tu mera daman meri khushiyan nahi hai koi.....
Na meri manjil na mera karwaan na humsafer hai koi............
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14th September 2009, 05:33 PM
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Doston ko aadab bado ko salaam , aap ki mehafil main fir say aana hua hai
ise umeed per ki aap mera housla afzai karoge.................
mera ek kawaab hai .........................pura hai yaa adhura hai faisla aapka ?
Kaash is zindagi mein ye bhi nazaara dekhoon.
Aankh meri ho magar khwaab tumhara dekhoon..
Mere hi dil mein nahin ishq ki shamaa roshan.
Teri ankhon mein bhi chaahat ka sharaara dekhoon."
Tujh se milne ki duaa lab se nikal jaati hai.
Aasmaan pe jo koi toot-ta taara dekhoon..
Teri aankhon ke samander mein is tarah dooboon.
Ta-qayaamat na kabhi koi kinaara dekhoon..
Ab mujhe koi zuroorat nahin bahaaron ki.
Main to khilne ke liye tera ishaara dekhoon..
Tere haathon ki laqeeron mein hai kismat meri.
Arsh per kyon main muqadder ka sitaara dekhoon..
Jo maseeha tha wohi ban gaya dushman mera.
Ab main jeene ke liye kiska sahaara dekhoon..
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Amit sahab aadaab......
Bhai aapki kalam mein to kafi nikhhar aa gaya hai achche khayal hai aur adaygii bhi achchi hai but kuch sher aapne mazmoom se hat ker bayan kiye hai...
High lighted sher achche lage..
Likhate rahiye
Khush rahiye
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16th September 2009, 06:27 PM
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Amit sahab aadaab......
Bhai aapki kalam mein to kafi nikhhar aa gaya hai achche khayal hai aur adaygii bhi achchi hai but kuch sher aapne mazmoom se hat ker bayan kiye hai...
High lighted sher achche lage..
Likhate rahiye
Khush rahiye
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EK SHAYR KO JAB TAK ..............DAAD NA MILAY TO KUCH ADHURA HI LAGATA HAI AUR JAB AAP JAISE .........SHOKEEN MILAY TO DIL MAIN AGHAY LIKHNAY KI TAMMANA JAGTI HAI.........
AAP SABHI KA HOUSLA AFFZAI KARTI HAIN.........AISE HI KIJYEGA .....KHUSH RAHIYE
APPKA VICHITRA
Yeh manjilen yeh rastay mushkilo bhari yeh dager.....
Tu nahin hai mere sath to mushkilo ka hai safer......
Tham lay tu mera daman meri khushiyan nahi hai koi.....
Na meri manjil na mera karwaan na humsafer hai koi............
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17th September 2009, 07:52 AM
Adarniya vichiter JI
daad kabul kijiyega
wakai me aapne alfajo ke maydhaym se apne
bhawana ko bahut khub shabdo se bayaan
kiya hai. sach me tareef ke kabil hai.
bahut aacha .. aise hi koshish karte rahiyega.
khus rahe kaamyaab hote rahe........
Ajay nidaan
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17th September 2009, 09:44 PM
Vichitr ji..
eshaason ko badi hi sanjeedgi se lafzon ka roop diya hai aapne... vohi dard...har dafa naya aur taaza sa lagta hai...
Rabb raakha........
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19th September 2009, 07:33 AM
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Adarniya vichiter JI
daad kabul kijiyega
wakai me aapne alfajo ke maydhaym se apne
bhawana ko bahut khub shabdo se bayaan
kiya hai. sach me tareef ke kabil hai.
bahut aacha .. aise hi koshish karte rahiyega.
khus rahe kaamyaab hote rahe........
Ajay nidaan
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bhai AJAY JI
aadaab
aur aapnay jo meri rachna ko saraha hai uskay liye aapka bhout bhout shukriya.........
bas aap aisay hi apna pyaar banaye rakhiyega ....
main aap ki seva main aur kuch bhi likhta rahounga............
aapka
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Yeh manjilen yeh rastay mushkilo bhari yeh dager.....
Tu nahin hai mere sath to mushkilo ka hai safer......
Tham lay tu mera daman meri khushiyan nahi hai koi.....
Na meri manjil na mera karwaan na humsafer hai koi............
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20th September 2009, 07:53 PM
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Vichitr ji..
eshaason ko badi hi sanjeedgi se lafzon ka roop diya hai aapne... vohi dard...har dafa naya aur taaza sa lagta hai...
Rabb raakha........
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Aap sabhi gazal kay shokeeno ka dhanyavaad
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Tu nahin hai mere sath to mushkilo ka hai safer......
Tham lay tu mera daman meri khushiyan nahi hai koi.....
Na meri manjil na mera karwaan na humsafer hai koi............
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24th September 2009, 02:56 PM
HELLOOO...
JI KAISE HAIN AAP?
ARZ KIYA HAI..
BAN SAHARAA BE SAHARON K LIYE.
BAN KINARA BE-KINARON K LIYE..!
JO JIYE APNE LIYE TO KYA JIYE.
JEE SKE TO JEE HZARON K LIYE..!
YE ISHQ NHI AASAAN YARO...
EK AAG KA DARIYA HAI AUR DOOB K JAANA HAI !!
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Doston ko aadab bado ko salaam , aap ki mehafil main fir say aana hua hai
ise umeed per ki aap mera housla afzai karoge.................
mera ek kawaab hai .........................pura hai yaa adhura hai faisla aapka ?
Kaash is zindagi mein ye bhi nazaara dekhoon.
Aankh meri ho magar khwaab tumhara dekhoon..
Mere hi dil mein nahin ishq ki shamaa roshan.
Teri ankhon mein bhi chaahat ka sharaara dekhoon."
Tujh se milne ki duaa lab se nikal jaati hai.
Aasmaan pe jo koi toot-ta taara dekhoon..
Teri aankhon ke samander mein is tarah dooboon.
Ta-qayaamat na kabhi koi kinaara dekhoon..
Ab mujhe koi zuroorat nahin bahaaron ki.
Main to khilne ke liye tera ishaara dekhoon..
Tere haathon ki laqeeron mein hai kismat meri.
Arsh per kyon main muqadder ka sitaara dekhoon..
Jo maseeha tha wohi ban gaya dushman mera.
Ab main jeene ke liye kiska sahaara dekhoon..
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KYA BAAT HAI JI
MAIN AAPSE POOCHTI HU YE KHWAAB
KISKE LIYE HAI............
YE ISHQ NHI AASAAN YARO...
EK AAG KA DARIYA HAI AUR DOOB K JAANA HAI !!
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Doston ko aadab bado ko salaam , aap ki mehafil main fir say aana hua hai
ise umeed per ki aap mera housla afzai karoge.................
mera ek kawaab hai .........................pura hai yaa adhura hai faisla aapka ?
Kaash is zindagi mein ye bhi nazaara dekhoon.
Aankh meri ho magar khwaab tumhara dekhoon..
Mere hi dil mein nahin ishq ki shamaa roshan.
Teri ankhon mein bhi chaahat ka sharaara dekhoon."
Tujh se milne ki duaa lab se nikal jaati hai.
Aasmaan pe jo koi toot-ta taara dekhoon..
Teri aankhon ke samander mein is tarah dooboon.
Ta-qayaamat na kabhi koi kinaara dekhoon..
Ab mujhe koi zuroorat nahin bahaaron ki.
Main to khilne ke liye tera ishaara dekhoon..
Tere haathon ki laqeeron mein hai kismat meri.
Arsh per kyon main muqadder ka sitaara dekhoon..
Jo maseeha tha wohi ban gaya dushman mera.
Ab main jeene ke liye kiska sahaara dekhoon..
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vichiter sahab.........
badi badnaseebi hai meri ke itne der baad maine apko dekha..........
itni acchi ghazal sunai hai apne....tarif ke liye shabd kum pad jaaye.........
bahut saaf aur rawani wali likhawat hai apki............
har sher accha hai.........
regards
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HELLOOO...
JI KAISE HAIN AAP?
ARZ KIYA HAI..
BAN SAHARAA BE SAHARON K LIYE.
BAN KINARA BE-KINARON K LIYE..!
JO JIYE APNE LIYE TO KYA JIYE.
JEE SKE TO JEE HZARON K LIYE..!
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hi .........i m good u say ...how r u
kya baat hai ji
bhout hi achcha likha hai aapnay ..........
aapka vichitra
Yeh manjilen yeh rastay mushkilo bhari yeh dager.....
Tu nahin hai mere sath to mushkilo ka hai safer......
Tham lay tu mera daman meri khushiyan nahi hai koi.....
Na meri manjil na mera karwaan na humsafer hai koi............
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26th September 2009, 05:30 PM
waH KYA LIKHA H AAPNE BUS AISE LIKHTE REHNA
TALAAB ME BHARA PAANI SAMAYA NAHI JAATA,
DIL MEIN PYAR ITNA BATAYA NAHI JAATA
PYAR KAB HOTA HAI PURA
JAB ISKA IST WORD HI HAI ADHURA
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KYA BAAT HAI JI
MAIN AAPSE POOCHTI HU YE KHWAAB
KISKE LIYE HAI............
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main to bas itna hi kehna chahounga ki
koi to hai ..............jiskay liye yeh khwaab dekha hai maine ..............
ab wo koun hai ...........yeh nahin bata sakta hoon main.........
aapka vichitra
Yeh manjilen yeh rastay mushkilo bhari yeh dager.....
Tu nahin hai mere sath to mushkilo ka hai safer......
Tham lay tu mera daman meri khushiyan nahi hai koi.....
Na meri manjil na mera karwaan na humsafer hai koi............
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29th September 2009, 10:31 AM
KOI BAAT NHI
NAA BTAIYE........
AAP KHUSH RAHIYE TO
HUM BHI KHUSH HAIN........
YE ISHQ NHI AASAAN YARO...
EK AAG KA DARIYA HAI AUR DOOB K JAANA HAI !!
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29th September 2009, 10:33 AM
RUB SE DUA KARTI HU MAIN... RUB KRE AAPKA YE KHWAAB .............
JALD SE JALD ........... POORAAA HO....
BE HAPPY
YE ISHQ NHI AASAAN YARO...
EK AAG KA DARIYA HAI AUR DOOB K JAANA HAI !!
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6th October 2009, 12:32 PM
vichiter ji.......kya yeh ghazal aapne khud likhi hai.....................??
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
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8th October 2009, 09:18 AM
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KOI BAAT NHI
NAA BTAIYE........
AAP KHUSH RAHIYE TO
HUM BHI KHUSH HAIN........
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AAPKO KYA KAHOON MAIN AAPKA NAAM BHI NAHIN JAANTA HOON BAS ITNA HI KEHNA CHAHATA HOON KI WAQT SAY PEHLAY KABHI KISI KO KUCH NAHIN MILTA HAI...........AUR AAPNAY JO PUCHA HAI WO SABKO BATANAY WALI BAAT NAHIN HAI ...........
AAPKA VICHITRA
Yeh manjilen yeh rastay mushkilo bhari yeh dager.....
Tu nahin hai mere sath to mushkilo ka hai safer......
Tham lay tu mera daman meri khushiyan nahi hai koi.....
Na meri manjil na mera karwaan na humsafer hai koi............
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8th October 2009, 09:27 PM
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vichiter ji.......kya yeh ghazal aapne khud likhi hai.....................??
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Zainy ji ko aadaab
...................yeh gazal meri hi hai aur maine hi likhi hai
kyoun kya baat hai ....kaaran jaan sakta hoon kya ....
aapka vichitra
Yeh manjilen yeh rastay mushkilo bhari yeh dager.....
Tu nahin hai mere sath to mushkilo ka hai safer......
Tham lay tu mera daman meri khushiyan nahi hai koi.....
Na meri manjil na mera karwaan na humsafer hai koi............
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16th October 2009, 12:10 PM
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Kaash is zindagi mein ye bhi nazaara dekhoon.
Aankh meri ho magar khwaab tumhara dekhoon..
Mere hi dil mein nahin ishq ki shamaa roshan.
Teri ankhon mein bhi chaahat ka sharaara dekhoon." Tujh se milne ki duaa lab se nikal jaati hai.
Aasmaan pe jo koi toot-ta taara dekhoon..
Teri aankhon ke samander mein is tarah dooboon.
Ta-qayaamat na kabhi koi kinaara dekhoon..
Ab mujhe koi zuroorat nahin bahaaron ki.
Main to khilne ke liye tera ishaara dekhoon..
Tere haathon ki laqeeron mein hai kismat meri.
Arsh per kyon main muqadder ka sitaara dekhoon..
Jo maseeha tha wohi ban gaya dushman mera.
Ab main jeene ke liye kiska sahaara dekhoon..
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vichitra saahab,
namaskaar,
aap kii Ghazal achchhi lagiii, meri aur se daad qubool keejiyegaa.... yuu.n to sabhii sher achche hai.n, par yeh sher zyaadah asardaar hai.n...
Tujh se milne ki duaa lab se nikal jaati hai.
Aasmaan pe jo koi toot-ta taara dekhoon..
Teri aankhon ke samander mein is tarah dooboon.
Ta-qayaamat na kabhi koi kinaara dekhoon..
Jo maseeha tha wohi ban gaya dushman mera.
Ab main jeene ke liye kiska sahaara dekhoon..
bohat khuub.... yuu.n hii likhte rahe.n..
Mayank
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hasan saahb aur baqs saahab,
aadaab arz,. agar aap ke paas valid links hai.n jo kii yeh prove kare ki, Ghazal vichitra shaab ki likhii huii nahii hai, to aap yahaa.n par pesh kar sakte hai.n yaa phir kisii mod kii madad le sakte hai.n, yeh to aap dekh hi chuke hai.n ki, aap ke diye huye links koii kaam ke nahii.n hai.. ummeed hai aap is baat ka khayaal rakhe.nge... shukriyah!
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16th October 2009, 11:10 PM
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vichitra saahab,
namaskaar,
aap kii Ghazal achchhi lagiii, meri aur se daad qubool keejiyegaa.... yuu.n to sabhii sher achche hai.n, par yeh sher zyaadah asardaar hai.n...
Tujh se milne ki duaa lab se nikal jaati hai.
Aasmaan pe jo koi toot-ta taara dekhoon..
Teri aankhon ke samander mein is tarah dooboon.
Ta-qayaamat na kabhi koi kinaara dekhoon..
Jo maseeha tha wohi ban gaya dushman mera.
Ab main jeene ke liye kiska sahaara dekhoon..
bohat khuub.... yuu.n hii likhte rahe.n..
Mayank
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hasan saahb aur baqs saahab,
aadaab arz,. agar aap ke paas valid links hai.n jo kii yeh prove kare ki, Ghazal vichitra shaab ki likhii huii nahii hai, to aap yahaa.n par pesh kar sakte hai.n yaa phir kisii mod kii madad le sakte hai.n, yeh to aap dekh hi chuke hai.n ki, aap ke diye huye links koii kaam ke nahii.n hai.. ummeed hai aap is baat ka khayaal rakhe.nge... shukriyah!
Mayank
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mayank bhai ko aadaab
bhai jaan aaj kay baad main aapko is shyari.com par nahin mil paounga
aapnay jo mujhko protsahit kiya hai aapka bhout bhout dhanyavaad........
aapka
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Yeh manjilen yeh rastay mushkilo bhari yeh dager.....
Tu nahin hai mere sath to mushkilo ka hai safer......
Tham lay tu mera daman meri khushiyan nahi hai koi.....
Na meri manjil na mera karwaan na humsafer hai koi............
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mayank bhai ko aadaab
bhai jaan aaj kay baad main aapko is shyari.com par nahin mil paounga
aapnay jo mujhko protsahit kiya hai aapka bhout bhout dhanyavaad........
aapka
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vichitra bhai,
jab aap ne kuch Ghalat nahii.n kiyaa hai, shayri.com ko chhoRne ki baat kyu.n kar rahe hai.n.. aap kii poetry kuchh member ko itni achchhi lagii ki unhe yaqeen hii nahii huaa, aur ek Ghaltfehmi ho gayee, waise, jo Ghalatfehmi thii, jo duur huiii... mai.n to aap se yahii kahuu.ngaa ki site chhoRh kar na jaaye.n..
apna khayaal rakhiye,...
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Vichitra whats this Bhai haan, aapne jo bhi kaha mujhe achcha nahi laga... Aur site chorne ki baat na kare Plz.... Baqs mera dost hai woh just mujhse mazak kiya and don't think about it more... Agar uski mazak ka aapko bura laga hai to main uski taraf se sorry kehta huN.... And haan site chorne ki baat na karna...
Warna Itni pyari pyare ahsaas se hum ruberu kaise ho payenge...
Take care don't get tension, Be happy Happy diwali
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17th October 2009, 11:47 PM
Sameer bhai ko aadaab
theek hai bhai jaan ..........ager maine kuch keha to aapsay
mafi chahata hoon ........aaghay say koi aise baat nahin hogi
...............aapko aur aapkay parivaar ko meri aur say diwali ki
shubhkamna.....
aapka
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Yeh manjilen yeh rastay mushkilo bhari yeh dager.....
Tu nahin hai mere sath to mushkilo ka hai safer......
Tham lay tu mera daman meri khushiyan nahi hai koi.....
Na meri manjil na mera karwaan na humsafer hai koi............
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Doston ko aadab bado ko salaam , aap ki mehafil main fir say aana hua hai
ise umeed per ki aap mera housla afzai karoge.................
mera ek kawaab hai .........................pura hai yaa adhura hai faisla aapka ?
Kaash is zindagi mein ye bhi nazaara dekhoon.
Aankh meri ho magar khwaab tumhara dekhoon..
Mere hi dil mein nahin ishq ki shamaa roshan.
Teri ankhon mein bhi chaahat ka sharaara dekhoon."
Tujh se milne ki duaa lab se nikal jaati hai.
Aasmaan pe jo koi toot-ta taara dekhoon..
Teri aankhon ke samander mein is tarah dooboon.
Ta-qayaamat na kabhi koi kinaara dekhoon..
Ab mujhe koi zuroorat nahin bahaaron ki.
Main to khilne ke liye tera ishaara dekhoon..
Tere haathon ki laqeeron mein hai kismat meri.
Arsh per kyon main muqadder ka sitaara dekhoon..
Jo maseeha tha wohi ban gaya dushman mera.
Ab main jeene ke liye kiska sahaara dekhoon..
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Aadaab jannaab,
pehli baar mukhatib hua huN aapki kalam se aur ek mukkamal ghazal padhne ko mili,is baat ki khushi hai,
Jis gali, jis ghar ko dekhuN bas chehra tumhara dekhuN,
Jab neend ki godd me khwab aaye,to bita waqt humara dekhuN....
kuch lamhaat se yaad aa gaye aapki ghazal ko padh ke to bas ye kuch alfaaz nikal pade, umeed karta hun ki aage v aapko padhne ka mauka milta rahega, bas yuNhi likhte rahiye....!!
Aapka GHAYAL...!!
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19th October 2009, 09:05 AM
vichiter ji
aapne in shabdo ko saadagi aur khoobsurat ke sath pesh -e- nazar kiya hai vo apane aap me ek kamaal ki koshish hai, wakai me insaan me sirf vichaar hi hote hai aur kuch nahi jis vo kis tarah se present karata hai ye baat uske shabdo ke gyan pa nibhar karti hai kyoki jitna zyada shabdo ka gyan hoga utna hi ham apni soch ke aache se pesh kar paayege.
kabile tareef hai ....
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Aadaab jannaab,
pehli baar mukhatib hua huN aapki kalam se aur ek mukkamal ghazal padhne ko mili,is baat ki khushi hai,
Jis gali, jis ghar ko dekhuN bas chehra tumhara dekhuN,
Jab neend ki godd me khwab aaye,to bita waqt humara dekhuN....
kuch lamhaat se yaad aa gaye aapki ghazal ko padh ke to bas ye kuch alfaaz nikal pade, umeed karta hun ki aage v aapko padhne ka mauka milta rahega, bas yuNhi likhte rahiye....!!
Aapka GHAYAL...!!
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aadaab huzoor
ji aghay bhi aapka pyaar aisay hi milta rahayga aisi kaamna karta hoon main
aapka
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Yeh manjilen yeh rastay mushkilo bhari yeh dager.....
Tu nahin hai mere sath to mushkilo ka hai safer......
Tham lay tu mera daman meri khushiyan nahi hai koi.....
Na meri manjil na mera karwaan na humsafer hai koi............
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