dard-e-mohobbat

sweet_nashaa · **dard-e-mohobbat -** 12th December 2002, 05:43 AM

Aaj bohoth dino baad kuck pesh kar rahi hun. Shayad aap ko pasand aaye. Aap ke raye ke muntazir rahungi.

What does it take for one to know
Love is not always to show
Broken hearts will cry forever
Loneliness will rule forever
Desires will burn like fire
And one will burn in its fire
Feelings will be the same
Love will be the same
Past moments will live again
In memories again and again
When someone dear leaves
The soul silently grieves
Not only does it hurt you
It painfully tears you
Living in so much pain
Makes one go insane
But one will anxiously wait
For luck to strike their fate
Maybe one day their fantasy
Would become reality

Sharaabi · 12th December 2002, 06:44 AM

Ab aur intezaar karne ki zaroorat nahiiN hai!
This is pretty good; I like the structure, and use of words which created images.
Waise, broken hearts can be mended - aap bas thoDi si talaash karo.

Hmm, dUbara kahuunga ki yeh pasand aaya - aur likhte rahiye ga zaroor.

Chalta huun,
Aman

allahabadrptds · 12th December 2002, 07:51 PM

hi amrita ji

bade dino baad aap se guftgoo ho rahi hai
aap ki ye peshkash bahut dara liye hue hai
"Broken hearts will cry forever
Loneliness will rule forever"

lekin koi bhi cheez hamesha nahi rehti
"na khushi na gam"

keep writting

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aviral

sweet_nashaa · 14th December 2002, 05:32 AM

hi aman
It was nice hearing your reply. Thanx for liking my poem. Waise to mohobbat mein zakhm bharte nahin, aur jab bharte hain to woh bohoth takdeer waale hote hain. Hum un takdeer waalon mein se nahin.

Thanx again for your reply

Amrita

sweet_nashaa · 15th December 2002, 04:32 PM

Hi aviral
Sach mein, bohoth dino baad aaj aap se mulakaat ho rahi hain.
Thanx for liking my poem. Aur jaise aap ne kaha ke koi bhi cheez hamesha nahin rehti...bilkul sach kaha hain aap ne, magar mohobbat ki duniya mein aisa hi hota hain. Dil jab toot jaata hain to aisa lagta hain jaise ke duniya hi khatam ho gayi hain. Issi liye har dard ki ahesaas humme hamesha ke liye hi lagta hain.

Waise bhi toote hue dil kabhi judte nahin aur agar judte hain to woh mohobbat bohot mazboot nahin.

If i said anything wrong then sorry...but that's just my opinion from my experiences.

Thanx again for liking my poem.

Amrita

sidh · **this is reply for avirals comment -** 24th December 2002, 08:10 PM

hi amrita,,,,,,,
aap ki poems hume bahot lubhati hai,dard ke dil mita ti hai,ehsas dilati hai ke hai koi jo shayad humari baaton ko bayaan kar raha hai.......

hey aviral aap ne kaha "

hum kehna chate hai.........hope so amrita aap ise accept karoge..

"zakhm bhale hi bhar jaye waqt ke sath
par nishaan zaroor chod jate hai......
Dard bhale hi kam ho jaye waqt ke sath
par tanhai zaroor chod jate hai....... "

aviral ise sirf humari feelings samajna ...m not writing this to oppose u...... amrita plz do comment .......

heartbell · 24th December 2002, 11:15 PM

aapki yeh peshkash padh kar meri aakhon mein paani aa gaya
khoobsurat cheezein aksar rula kar kyon jaati hain

sweet_nashaa · 25th December 2002, 11:19 AM

sidh ji...humne aap ki reply accept karlee hain. Waise aap ne bohoth sach kaha hain.

Mere zakhm abhi bhar nahin paaye, magar kuch nishaan zaroor hain. Dard kam ho nahin paaye, aur tanhaayi ne apna saath dediya.

Thanx for the reply...it means alot to me.

Amrita

sweet_nashaa · 25th December 2002, 11:24 AM

Hi heartbell ji...thanx for liking my poem. Patha hain, humme bhi is sawaal ka jawaab nahin maloom nahin hain khoobsurat cheezein aksar rula kar kyon jaati hain...magar jaanne ki koshish bohoth kee hain. Lagta hain aap ki kahaani mujhse kuch milti julti hain.

Thanx again for the reply...I appreciate it a lot.

Amrita

chaahat · 25th December 2002, 12:39 PM

hi Amrita!
i really liked ur poem.. it has so much pain in it.. reminded me of someone.. well.. my case is a bit different.. i wud like to say sth.

"Falak se teer ka kya dekhta nishana tha,
Udhar thi bijli, idhar mera aashiyana tha.
Pohnachne hi vali thi kinare par kashti-e-umeed,
Usi vakt is toofan ko bhi aana tha"..

i don't know who has written these above lines.. but i really like them, and i hope that u'll like them too.

"Na jaane kitni minnate ki thi, khuda se tujhe paane ke liye,
Na jaane kitne sitam the jhele, tere nazar aane ke liye.
Phir bhi us khuda ne door kiya tumhe humse,
SIRF AUR SIRF HUMEIN TADPAANE KE LIYE."

yeh maine tab likhin thi when my hrt was broken but not now.. it has been mended.. but aapi poem padh ke mujhe apne un dinon ki yaad aa gayi!

keep it up!

lekin is tarah udaasi ke shaaare zindagi nahi kaati jaati.. insaan chaahe jo bhi karle jaise bhi karle, use muskurana hi padta hai har haal mein.. khush rehne ki koshish keejiyega! na seh paao kabhi phir tum is zindagi ke thapedon ko, to yaad kar lena apni is nacheez dost ko..

sweet_nashaa · 30th December 2002, 07:02 AM

dear chaahat ji,
thanx fro replying. By the way those four lines are very nice. I like them too.

And as for the other lines
"Na jaane kitni minnate ki thi, khuda se tujhe paane ke liye,
Na jaane kitne sitam the jhele, tere nazar aane ke liye.
Phir bhi us khuda ne door kiya tumhe humse,
SIRF AUR SIRF HUMEIN TADPAANE KE LIYE"
These are also very nice. I can really relate to them.

Thanx for the advice...Aap ne jo kaha ke humme muskuraana padtha hain chahe jo bhi ho, yeh bilkul sach hain kiyun ki yeh zaalim duniya hum mohobbat karne waalon ko samajh nahin paati.Waise aaj kal humme muskuraane ke liye koi wajah mili hain. Magar afsos, yeh khushi todi hi dino ke liye hain.
Agar zaroorat padi to aap ko zaroor yaad karenge. Thanx again.

Amrita