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20th July 2015, 07:33 PM
Mere Pyaare dostoN:
Namskaar aur Aadaab!!
aik baar fir bazm meiN haaZir huuN nayii Ghazal ke saath.. ummid kartaa huuN aapko merii Ghazal pasaNd aayengee... aapki raa'ey kaa iNtezaar rahengaa.. mulaaiizaa farmaaiiye....!
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iShQ tuune zaKhm aise de diye
naa hi ziNdaa hum rahe naa mar rahe
wo zamaanaa KhuShnumaa saa Kho gayaa
Ghumzadaa dil Ghumzadaa hum ho gaye
Ik mukammal ziNdagee kii aarazoo
Ye Khayaal aate hi aaNsuu gir paDe
maikade se dosatee jab se hu’ii
GhooNT kaDwe ziNdagee ke pee rahe
maikade: bar
Ghar taraf jo deKhate haii lauT kar
deKhate haiN dard ke hii Qaafile
Ik zamaane baad mujh ko tum diKhe
zaKhm saare kar gaye fir se hare
dushmanii haii "JOSH" kee yuuN iShQ se
iShQ par wo ik Ghazal bhee naa liKhe
"JOSH" kaisaa waasataa ye iShQ se
door reh kar bhee ise ho chaahate
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*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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20th July 2015, 10:25 PM
Bohut dard bhare ehsaas....
Bohut achi lagi aapki ye pyari si koshish
Yun hi likhte rahiye.
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20th July 2015, 10:39 PM
Waaaahhh.dhaval ji......bahut pasand aaya aapka dard me dooba hua ye kalaam......bahut sari daad kubool kijiyega..
Bas ek baat ki ishq se itni bhi dushmani kya...ki ek ghazal bhi na likhe..... ...Agli baar ishq me miliye janaab...
likhte rahiye....
Khush rahiye...
अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी
आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे
madhu..
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20th July 2015, 11:36 PM
Dhaval ji, aapne bahaut khubsoorat likha hai...har ek sher bahaut pasand aaya.
Aur khaaskar ke yeh lines toh dil ke bahaut kareeb rahi...
Ik zamaane baad mujh ko tum diKhe
zaKhm saare kar gaye fir se hare
Keep writing.
Zindagi wahi jise khul ke Jiya jaaye, apne armaanon ko pankh lagaa udhne do...
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21st July 2015, 09:56 AM
bahut khoob Dhaval miyaan.................. kya baat hai
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21st July 2015, 11:23 AM
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Originally Posted by Dhaval
Mere Pyaare dostoN:
Namskaar aur Aadaab!!
aik baar fir bazm meiN haaZir huuN nayii Ghazal ke saath.. ummid kartaa huuN aapko merii Ghazal pasaNd aayengee... aapki raa'ey kaa iNtezaar rahengaa.. mulaaiizaa farmaaiiye....!
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iShQ tuune zaKhm aise de diye
naa hi ziNdaa hum rahe naa mar rahe
wo zamaanaa KhuShnumaa saa Kho gayaa
Ghumzadaa dil Ghumzadaa hum ho gaye
Ik mukammal ziNdagee kii aarazoo
Ye Khayaal aate hi aaNsuu gir paDe
maikade se dosatee jab se hu’ii
GhooNT kaDwe ziNdagee ke pee rahe
maikade: bar
Ghar taraf jo deKhate haii lauT kar
deKhate haiN dard ke hii Qaafile
Ik zamaane baad mujh ko tum diKhe
zaKhm saare kar gaye fir se hare
dushmanii haii "JOSH" kee yuuN iShQ se
iShQ par wo ik Ghazal bhee naa liKhe
"JOSH" kaisaa waasataa ye iShQ se
door reh kar bhee ise ho chaahate
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wah dhaval bhai kamaal ka likha hai aapne
likhte rahen
duaon ke saath
Aapka Apna Ishk
'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है
इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है
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21st July 2015, 04:10 PM
Dhaval ji, bohot achhi koshish.
Aapka yeh kalaam achha laga.
Likhte rahiye
Khair andesh
Sagar Aashna
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Qaul thae ke 'Sagar' milengae kal magar
Taareeki musalsal hai, savera nahii hota
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22nd July 2015, 04:33 PM
Chottu...main hairaan hu ki teri kalam kuch waqt khamosh kaise rhi, etne umda, etne josh bhare, dard bhare ehsaas kaise ghute rhe teri kalam meiN, ab esko phir se khamosh mat hone dena...duaa hai teri kalam chalti rhe...par dard ki jagah agar ishq jayada ho to majja do-guna ho jayega.
pyar aur duaoN ke saath
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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bahut khub -
28th July 2015, 09:01 PM
Dear dhaval
Kaise ho aap..? Aapki ghazal padhi..to reply likhe bina raha nahi gaya.. Bas etana kaunga ki likhate rahe.
Akant...
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आहट सी कोइ आये तो समझ लेना कि तुम हो...
AahaT si koi aaye to samajh lena ki tum ho...
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28th July 2015, 11:52 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Dhaval
Mere Pyaare dostoN:
Namskaar aur Aadaab!!
aik baar fir bazm meiN haaZir huuN nayii Ghazal ke saath.. ummid kartaa huuN aapko merii Ghazal pasaNd aayengee... aapki raa'ey kaa iNtezaar rahengaa.. mulaaiizaa farmaaiiye....!
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iShQ tuune zaKhm aise de diye
naa hi ziNdaa hum rahe naa mar rahe
wo zamaanaa KhuShnumaa saa Kho gayaa
Ghumzadaa dil Ghumzadaa hum ho gaye
Ik mukammal ziNdagee kii aarazoo
Ye Khayaal aate hi aaNsuu gir paDe
maikade se dosatee jab se hu’ii
GhooNT kaDwe ziNdagee ke pee rahe
maikade: bar
Ghar taraf jo deKhate haii lauT kar
deKhate haiN dard ke hii Qaafile
Ik zamaane baad mujh ko tum diKhe
zaKhm saare kar gaye fir se hare
dushmanii haii "JOSH" kee yuuN iShQ se
iShQ par wo ik Ghazal bhee naa liKhe
"JOSH" kaisaa waasataa ye iShQ se
door reh kar bhee ise ho chaahate
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Bahut badhiya Dhaval... Gehre ehsaas, sundar bayaani. Likhte raho yun hi.
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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29th July 2015, 04:56 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Dhaval
Mere Pyaare dostoN:
Namskaar aur Aadaab!!
aik baar fir bazm meiN haaZir huuN nayii Ghazal ke saath.. ummid kartaa huuN aapko merii Ghazal pasaNd aayengee... aapki raa'ey kaa iNtezaar rahengaa.. mulaaiizaa farmaaiiye....!
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iShQ tuune zaKhm aise de diye
naa hi ziNdaa hum rahe naa mar rahe
wo zamaanaa KhuShnumaa saa Kho gayaa
Ghumzadaa dil Ghumzadaa hum ho gaye
Ik mukammal ziNdagee kii aarazoo
Ye Khayaal aate hi aaNsuu gir paDe
maikade se dosatee jab se hu’ii
GhooNT kaDwe ziNdagee ke pee rahe
maikade: bar
Ghar taraf jo deKhate haii lauT kar
deKhate haiN dard ke hii Qaafile
Ik zamaane baad mujh ko tum diKhe
zaKhm saare kar gaye fir se hare
dushmanii haii "JOSH" kee yuuN iShQ se
iShQ par wo ik Ghazal bhee naa liKhe
"JOSH" kaisaa waasataa ye iShQ se
door reh kar bhee ise ho chaahate
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Dhaval bhai - Der se nazar padhi aur ab aa paaya hoon, khoob ehsaas hue hai yunhi likhte rahiYeGaa
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नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं
क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ
रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है
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10th August 2015, 01:55 AM
Bohat achi koshish hai dhaval yunhi likhte raho khush raho
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin
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19th April 2018, 01:06 AM
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Bohut dard bhare ehsaas....
Bohut achi lagi aapki ye pyari si koshish
Yun hi likhte rahiye.
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Shukriyaah sarika jee
Aaj bade dinon baad khud ki hi likhi hui ghazal padh rahaa tha... Padhte rahen aage bhee
Duaaon ke saath ijaazat
Aapka
Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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19th April 2018, 01:07 AM
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Waaaahhh.dhaval ji......bahut pasand aaya aapka dard me dooba hua ye kalaam......bahut sari daad kubool kijiyega..
Bas ek baat ki ishq se itni bhi dushmani kya...ki ek ghazal bhi na likhe..... ...Agli baar ishq me miliye janaab...
likhte rahiye....
Khush rahiye...
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Madhu jee
Namaste
Padhne ke liye shukriyaah.. Saath dete rahen
Duaaon ke saath ijaazat
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Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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19th April 2018, 01:08 AM
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Dhaval ji, aapne bahaut khubsoorat likha hai...har ek sher bahaut pasand aaya.
Aur khaaskar ke yeh lines toh dil ke bahaut kareeb rahi...
Ik zamaane baad mujh ko tum diKhe
zaKhm saare kar gaye fir se hare
Keep writing.
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Meri Ghazal ko pasand karne ke liye dil se shukriyaah
Ummid kartaa hun aap aage bhee padhte rahenge
Duaaon ke saath ijaazat
Aapka
Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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19th April 2018, 01:09 AM
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wah dhaval bhai kamaal ka likha hai aapne
likhte rahen
duaon ke saath
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Rajibder jee
Namaste
Dhanyawaad Aapka.. Padhte rahiye
Duaaon ke saath ijaazat
Aapka
Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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19th April 2018, 01:10 AM
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Dhaval ji, bohot achhi koshish.
Aapka yeh kalaam achha laga.
Likhte rahiye
Khair andesh
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Sagar bhai
Ghazal kee pasandgee ke liye main aapka behad shukraguzaar huyb
Duaaon ke saath ijaazat
Aapka
Dhaval
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19th April 2018, 01:12 AM
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Chottu...main hairaan hu ki teri kalam kuch waqt khamosh kaise rhi, etne umda, etne josh bhare, dard bhare ehsaas kaise ghute rhe teri kalam meiN, ab esko phir se khamosh mat hone dena...duaa hai teri kalam chalti rhe...par dard ki jagah agar ishq jayada ho to majja do-guna ho jayega.
pyar aur duaoN ke saath
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Sister
Pranaan
Ab aapse kyaa kahuun.. Bas saath rahiyegaa hameshaa aise hi
Aapka
Chhotu
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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19th April 2018, 01:13 AM
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Dear dhaval
Kaise ho aap..? Aapki ghazal padhi..to reply likhe bina raha nahi gaya.. Bas etana kaunga ki likhate rahe.
Akant...
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Akant bhaiya
Pranaam
Main theek hun bhaiya.. Aap sab se hi seekhaa thaa thoda bahot kich likh letaa hub ab
Duaaon ke saath ijaazat
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Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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19th April 2018, 01:14 AM
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bahut khoob Dhaval miyaan.................. kya baat hai
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Shaad bhai
Namaste
Shukriyaah bhai.. Padhte raheb
Duaaon ke saath ijaazat
Aapka
Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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19th April 2018, 01:15 AM
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Bahut badhiya Dhaval... Gehre ehsaas, sundar bayaani. Likhte raho yun hi.
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Pulkit bhaiya
Namaste
Thank you so much. Padhte rahuye
Duaaon ke saath ijaazat
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Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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19th April 2018, 01:15 AM
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Dhaval bhai - Der se nazar padhi aur ab aa paaya hoon, khoob ehsaas hue hai yunhi likhte rahiYeGaa
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Shumriyaah anu bhai
Saath dete rahuye
Duaaon ke saath ijaazat
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Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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19th April 2018, 01:16 AM
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Bohat achi koshish hai dhaval yunhi likhte raho khush raho
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Maani didi
Thank you... Padhte rahuye
Duaaon ke saath ijaazat
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Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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