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Sapna_e_jana - 10th June 2004, 06:16 AM

subho hui to khiyal aya
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Re: Sapna_e_jana - 10th June 2004, 08:52 AM

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khan bhai,
aap ne kbhi wada kiya thha k likhte rahenge humaari mushkuraahat ke liye.... aaj aapne likha.... aapka shukriaa. baat dard ya khushi ki nahi... baat hoti hai apna maan ne ki. jiske sathh aap apne ahesaas baanto.... hai na?
khush raho. thhodi gustakhi karti hu. haq ke sathh
aapki laadli bahna.

bhale sapna hi thha kuchh pal ka
par woh mere kitnae paas thha
subho hui to khiyaal aaya
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10th June 2004, 06:37 PM

bohat khoobsurat baat aur bohat lateef pairaye mein.
khan dost bohat khoob.
khush rahen , aabaad rahen
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Waah...! - 10th June 2004, 09:55 PM

subho hui to khiyal aya
raat ka dhoka acha tha

Waah banjara saahab waah....kya baat hai aapki ....kuchh kaha bhi nahi or kya kuchh nahi keh gaye...hamaari taraf se daad kubool kijiye...is behtreeN se sher ke liye...


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Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN.

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11th June 2004, 11:27 AM

Moon merii jaan... Ye haq maine tumse hii paya hai...
ye khyal hii na marrwa dete hai...hakikat badii kadvii hotii hai....galiB sahaab ka woh sher yaad aa raha hai.....

hum ko bhii malum hai jannat kii hakikat lekeen
dil ko behalane ke liye 'galib' ye khayal acha hai....

hmmmm khoob hai bhai khoob....kam kam hii sahii....par laajawab likht ho....adhnii sii jaan se daad kabul karooo...

subho hui to khiyal aya
raat ka dhoka acha tha......waaah!


Jindagi se to khair shikvaa tha,

muddato mout ne bhi tarsaaya hame..

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12th June 2004, 11:58 AM

Khan Bhai!

Salaam..

hmmm..

Haseen dhoke se behtar kaRwi sachchai. Chhoti si baat hai.. magar hum insaano ko samajhhne me kaafi waqt lagta hai.. Waise aapki tareef hum kya karein?? Kuchh kehne ki zaroorat hai?


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12th June 2004, 05:55 PM

subho hui to khiyal aya
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Agar main ik Lekhak hota tau shayad in lines par ik kitaab likh jaata..magar afsos main tau ik bahut hi aam sa aadmi huun aur bas itna hi keh sakta huun ke kayi baar sach mein gar aadmi dokhe mein hi rahe tau zindagi aaram se guzar jaati hai ,sachaii ki karwahat kayi baar is kadar zehar ban jaati hai jo naa tau jeene deti hai aur maut ki baahon mein bhi nahin jaane deti..


kyon zindagi ki raah mein akele chalta hai dost
chal waha chal jahan tere jaise aur bhi hai...
   
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Re: Sapna_e_jana - 13th June 2004, 01:34 PM

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subho hui to khiyal aya
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to be honest

i cant find words to appriciate

itni bare bat or itnay kam ilfaz main

yar kia kamal sameta ha ap ne sare life ko

is shair ki jjitni be explanatiooon karna chahao ki ja sakte ha

or taareef jitni be karo no doubt kam

simply amazing

i love this shair


do sache bol ,ek pyar bhuri muskan,thora pyar
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13th June 2004, 02:35 PM

subah hui to mehsus hua
raat ka dhoka achha tha

padhne ko to bahot hi saade lafj hai
magar inhe gaur se samja jaye to bahot gehra matlab nikalta hai
ek gehre ehsas ko do lines me kehne ka hunar bahot kam logo me hota hai..
aapme paya..khub paya


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jo ab ye bewaqt hi tuje satane aa gaye
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13th June 2004, 05:39 PM

subah hui to mehsus hua
raat ka dhoka achha tha

Wah banjara ji...bahut khoob likha hai....
sabse pehle to der se aane ki maafi chaungi....jaanti hu pehla reply mera hi hona chahiye tha..magar tabiyat kuch kharab thi...hospitalized thi..isliye nahi aa saki.......
magar ab time se likhne ki koshish karungi..
aapki dost
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thanks - 13th June 2004, 06:22 PM

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khan bhai,
aap ne kbhi wada kiya thha k likhte rahenge humaari mushkuraahat ke liye.... aaj aapne likha.... aapka shukriaa. baat dard ya khushi ki nahi... baat hoti hai apna maan ne ki. jiske sathh aap apne ahesaas baanto.... hai na?
khush raho. thhodi gustakhi karti hu. haq ke sathh
aapki laadli bahna
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aik baar koshihs ki thi aap k muskurahat k liye..likhne ki...
magar yakin mano hasrat rahe gi k tumhari muskurahat jaisa kuch likh sakon...jab bhi kuch aisa laga..yakin mano zaror likhon ga...
yeh to ik dard tha..magar bohat maze ka dard...or dard to waise bhi maze ka hota hay..hay na...or main phir bhi kahta hun..k likhta rhaon ga...agar meri jana..har raat mujhay yun hi dhoka dene ati rahe...
.....JANTA HUN DHOKA HAY....phir bhi
apna khiyal rkahna...
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MUSSHARAF SAHIB...
kaise ho?
yar aap to shyad ham se kuch naraz hi lagte ho..koi khata ho gayi koi pm nahi..koi hello hi nahi...kiya hwa yar...
ham ne choti si koshihs ki aap ko pasand ayi..or kiya chahiye...
apna khiyal rakhiye ga...
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chand sahib
kaise ho dost?
kuch kaha bhi nahi or bohat kuch kah gaye...han yeh to hay...
dard byan ka yehi to maza hay bhai..aik lafz or pori kahani...
ik lafz hay ...MOHABBAT...jis main dard bhi hay...khishiyan bhi...maut bhi zindagi bhi...ham bhi or woh bhi...aik lafz or itna sab kuch...
hay na herat ki baat....
apna khiyal rkahna..thanks a lot
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sanjoo sanjoo sanjoo
aap ka to haq sab se pahle or sab se ziada...
kuch log aise hote hain jinhain apna haq mangne ki zarorat nahi hoti...unhain mil jata hay....aap ka or hmara rishta bhi kuch ais ahi hay....ab chahe ..moon kaho....mr moon kaho..yah..asad..yah kuch bhi..aap ka haq hay...
aap ne kuch ziad ahi tarif kar di...
apna khiyal rakhna...


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thanks - 13th June 2004, 11:17 PM

ghayal sahib
kaise ho?
mujhay yad hay aik bar mere teacher ne kaha tha har bara shaks ajiz hota hay....maghror nahi...phir hmain pata hay k aap kitna acha likhte ho...aap sa likhne ki koshihs hi to hay yeh sab..magar afsos har bar ham nakam hote hain...
yar dhoka ..dekha jaye to zindagi se bara dhoka koi nahi..aap bilkul sach kahte ho...aap ne shukria ka moka diya apn akhiyal rkahna...
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anas sahib....
kaise ho?
aap ne aaj kaise zehmat kar di jnab...?
kisi ne itla de hi di..k is nachiz k lafz aye hain...
hahah..thanks boss thanks again...
kabhi kabhi dhoka khana bohat acha lagta hay....
dekhain sahab ham todhoka kha lete hain hans kar...
magar kabhi to un ka bhi waqt aye ga jo maze se dhoka dete hain hmain...
apna khiyal rakhna...
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sana
kasi ho....?
ham ne koshish ki thi...baki aap ki husne nazar hay...
aap ne samjhne ki koshish ki to aap ko gahrayi nazar ayi...
hmari kismat achi hay k hmare lafzon ko bhi samjhne ki koshish ki kisi ne.........
warna byan kuch nahi hota jab tak us k liye nazar nahi ho...
apna khiyal rkahna..thanks a lot
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pari...
pahle to btao k ab kasi ho?
hwa kiya tha...?
tum ne der se reply kiya doesnt matter...kuch ziada waqwt nahi hwa ise bhi post kiye hwe...
waise bhi...reply kar dena hi hmareliye khay...
apna khiyal rkahna...

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14th June 2004, 02:00 PM

subho hui to khiyal aya
raat ka dhoka acha tha

khan bhayyia...

kuch kehte nahin bana...zara kalam tez karke phir aaongi...bus batane ke liye aayi ki i came as promised...

paras


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15th June 2004, 08:14 AM


Khvaabo.n me.n Khvaab us ke yaado.n me.n yaad us kii
niindo.n me.n ghul gayaa ho jaise ke rat_jagaa saa

--ahmad faraz


subho hui to khiyal aya
raat ka dhoka acha tha

wo gaye daman bachake
mil lete tau acha tha

'banjare' yahin teri duniya
na kehte tau acha tha

naye suraj ke sath naye khwab
chun lo na kehte tau acha tha

chaand ke saath na doobtin
ye hasratein tau acha tha

subah ki pehli kirnayein
hosh na laati hamein tau acha tha

--paras


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hello - 15th June 2004, 01:11 PM

Khan bhai,

Gagar mein sagar...chhoti si baat per bahut badi...

subho hui to khiyal aya
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hi - 27th June 2004, 10:36 PM

parastaar
kasi ho?
u came as ur promise..
thanks....
aap k lafzon ki tareef kaise karon...
chalo..kalam tez kar k phir aon ga...
apna khiyal rkahna
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AKANT
kahan gum ho yar?
tumhari tareef bhi si tarah ...gagar main sagar
likha karo plz...
gum nahi hwa karo...
apna khiyal rakhna..
thanks for replying...


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hello - 28th June 2004, 01:04 AM

hello banjara sahib ji!


subho hui to khiyal aya
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,,,,,, kitne kum lafzon me kitni gehrai...!!!!!!!..bahooot khoob!
" raat hui to khayal aya
din ka aitbaar accha tha
....."ek choti si galti,,,apni feelings ko jorne ki,..umeed hai app bura nahi manengey...


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Re: Sapna_e_jana - 28th June 2004, 12:29 PM

subho hui to khiyal aya
raat ka dhoka acha tha


banjara bhai aadab
wah janab !!! in do linon mein hi aapne saari raat ka falsafa bayan kar diya huzooor...aaj subah hamare saath bhi kuch yun hi hua.....ek thandi aah bhar kar reh gaye ham.,....aapke sher par mashoor singar talat mehmood ka gaya film "ek gaaon ki kahani" ka ek geet yaad aa gaya....."raat ne kya kya khawab dikhaye,,rang bhare so jaal bichaye...aankhein khuli to sapne toote,,reh gaye gam ke kaale saaye "(lyrics :rajendra krishan)
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