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26th November 2010, 08:12 PM
us naazuk dharkan ke naam jis ke zero zabar ne mujhe jeenaa sikhaayaa Itnee si aarzoo thi meree aashnaa ke saath Zakhme jigar ho dubadoo dast e shifaa ke saath aashna ,, mahboob ,, daste shefaa ,, shefaa ka haath Tarke ta”alluqaat ke ik arsa baad bhi Shaamil teraa khiyaal rahaa har doa ke saath tarke ta"alluqaat ,, alag ho jana Ik baat be khayaali me aayi zabaan par Tum ne nazar jhukaa li thi haai kis adaa ke saath Mujh ko qaraar mil gayaa tum ko sokoon bhi Goyaa ki jism mil gaye apnee doaa ke saath Jab jab doaaye sehr me shaamil kiyaa tumhen Haathon me irteaash thaa kaas e doaa ke saath doaye sehr ,, subh ki doa ,,irteaash ,,kapkapaahat kaase doa ,, doa ka peyaalah Muddat se ek khwaahishe zindaane nafs hai Ho munsalik naseeb meraa mudda”aa ke saath khowaahishe zindaane nafs ,, man ke jel ki muraad munsalik .. mil janan ,, mudda"aa ,,muraad Hassaas kaainaat ho aao gale milo Haan itni iltejaa hai ki aao hayaa ke saath hassaas ,,sesitive,, kainaat ,,universe ilteja ,, guzaarish ek sher apne desh ke naam kuwait me apne mulk ki boo baas mil gayi Chaawal jo main ne khaaye kabhi raaj maa ke saath |
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26th November 2010, 08:53 PM
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Hassaas ji, Aadaab kya baat hai janab.... bahut bahut umdaa kalaam likha hai aapne.... dil chhuu liya.... dhero daad.... ehsaas aur andaaz-e-bayaan kamaal raha... kya kahu, lafz hi jaise kho gaye hai ... aapko padhne ke baad to kuch bhi likhne ki himmat hi nahi hoti.... yuhi ye mehfil sajate rahiye.... khush rahiye....   "LAMHA"mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa , ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe.... |
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28th November 2010, 03:03 AM
Yeh sher lajawab raha mere bhai....
Tarke ta”alluqaat ke ik arsa baad bhi Shaamil teraa khiyaal rahaa har doa ke saath Bas ek ajeeb baat ne pareshaan kiya.......yu laga mano aap duaa lafz me atak se gaye, aapne kitne waqt me yeh kalam likha yeh to mujhe pata nahi ha itna zaroor mehsoos hua ke is Ghazal ko agar aap aur waqt detein to Ghazal aur bhi shaandaar hoti. Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta... Mob.: +971 501297654
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28th November 2010, 12:28 PM
masood bhai aadab ,,
ahhhhh ........ahhhhhhhh..........ahhhhhhhhhhhh.. allah ..........allah......allah ............... bhai yaar masood bhai ......kya kaha jaaye yaar ..ghazall kya hai mere bhai ...pataqa hai pataqa ..ahhhhhhhhhhhhhh....ghanaiyat khoob mutacir karti hai bhai aur mazamin allah allah hain .......apko to pata hi hoga ke ghazal sirf do ik shero.N pe tiki hoti aur baaqi bharti ke liye hi hote hain ..magar apki is ghazal ko kya kahen sahab ...ik bhi sher aisa nahi jisko bharti kahe saken ....umda shero.N ki ladi hai ....moti se piroi is ghazal ke naam hai meri dad ..khubool karen ... Tarke ta”alluqaat ke ik arsa baad bhi Shaamil teraa khiyaal rahaa har doa ke saath ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh hhhhhhh........kya hausla hai bhai ..kya hi tahezibi sher kaha hai bhai is sher pe mubarik baad khubool karen ....dad hi dad ... allah apko mazeed tarakhiyun se nawaze bhai ... talib e ilm qadeertoopchi |
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28th November 2010, 02:14 PM
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Tumhari ae shaandaar paesh-kash sae to main jaesae kho gayee bahut khoob likha hai tum nae Aek aek lafz jaesae sitaroan ki chamak ko bhi jaesae maand ker gayae itna achcha to shayed main bhi likh na paoan ae mubaliqha arayee nahin haqeeqat hai Khuda tumharae khalam main aur nikhar layae Ameen Razia |
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29th November 2010, 11:04 PM
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aadaab kaise hain aap aajkalnazar hi nahiaa rahee hain jabkiaapkomaaloom honaa chaahiye ki aap se mahfil ke rang sewaa ho jaataa hai aapke daad ka andaaz kisee bhishair ko mazeed khoobsoorat kalaam par uksaataa hai jis saadah laohi se aap kalaam ki pazeeraayi kartee hain us se shaair ke ehsaas kojilaa miltee hai main tahe dil se aap ki daad ka shukr guzaar hun ghazal kipasandeedagee ka be had shukriyah mukhlis masood hassaas |
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29th November 2010, 11:15 PM
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aadaab sajid bhai kaise hain allah aap ko jazaaye khair de aap ne jis etebaar se ghazal ko dekhaa us ke liye main aap ka shukr guzaar hun aor yaar aap jab dost ho to itna dar dar ke kiun kah rahe ho dil ki baat saaf khul ke kaho yaar .. main ye kab kahtaa hun ki main jo likhtaa hun wahi harfe aakhir hai are yaar aapko kaheen koi baat lag rahee hai use tafseel se kaho agar aap ki baat samajh me aa gayi to use tabdeel bhi kiyaa ja saktaa hai yaar sajid bhai ye to aap ko pata hai ki jab kise ghazal ka maahaol ban jaataa hai to dhun me likhna prataa hai ab us me kaheen koi ek sher kamzor bhi hotaa hai kuchh achhe bhi hote hain ye alag baat hai ki log apne kalaam ki chhantaayi karte hain magar yaar ab kiyaa karun ek taraf to kasbe m"aash me uljhaa hun dossree taraf dekh hi rahe ho ki aaj kal kis qadar likh raha hun yaar sajid bhai mujhe to kuchh aisaa khaas is sher me nazar nahi aayaa shayad is liye ki ye meraa hai hahahahaha lekin agar aap ko lag rahaa hai to plz bataa do taaki mai nuse sahee kar lun ummeed kartaa hu ki aap meree be talluf guftagu ko pasand farmaayen ge kiun ki main ne apnee dostee ke haq ko saamne rakh ke baat ki hai apnaa khiyaal rakhnaa aor aap ki koi ghazal nahi aa rahee hai yaar kiya masla hai ? sab khair to hai naa ? doa me yaad rakhnaa yun hi aate rahnaa tumhaara apnaa masood hassaas |
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30th November 2010, 03:50 PM
Tarke ta”alluqaat ke ik arsa baad bhi
Shaamil teraa khiyaal rahaa har doa ke saath bahut khoob masood ji......... |
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1st December 2010, 01:57 PM
masood bhai
radhe radhe bahut khoob............................................. .. Aapka Apna Ishk 'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है email: rkm179@gmail.com 
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2nd December 2010, 03:37 PM
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aadaab qadeer bhai janaab ye to aap ki mohabbat hai jo is tarah tareef ke donge barsaa rahe hain aor ye aap ka kholoos hai ki aap saraapaa sanaa khwaani ka libaadah ban gaye hain ye aap ka husne nazar hai ki aap qatrey ko kainaat ka darjah de rahe hain ye aap ka zarf hai ki aap mujhe kamaaliyaat w jamaaliyaat ka maahire fan gardaan rahe hain main aap in alfaz ka mustahiq to hun nahi taaham aap ki jaanib se aayaa huwaa ek ek lafz dil ki zameen pe tukhme rezee ke amal se guzaar diyaa hai saraapa sipaas hun allah aap ko khush rakkhe aap ko doat masood hassaas |
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2nd December 2010, 03:42 PM
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adaab shipra ji kaisee hain aap mujhe yaqeen nahiho rahaa hai ki is sher ko itnaa pasand kiyaa gaya hai jab ki haqeeqat yahee hai ki taqreeban har ek ne ise saraaha hai ab logon ki baaten sun ke ehsaas ho rahaa hai ki baat to sahee hai kisher achha ho gayaa hai aor is nigaah se jab dekhtaa hun to lagtaa hai ki aap kis qadar zaheen hain ki aor aap ka mezaaj kitnaa oumdah hai ki aap ek oumdah sher ko hi quote kar rahee hain main aap ka shukr adaa kartaa ki aap ne mujhe ye izzat dee meree doayen aap saath hain mukhlis masood hassaas |
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3rd December 2010, 03:42 AM
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aadaab bahot shukriyah merey dost aap aate hain to lagtaa hai ki bahaaron ka jhonkaa aayaa ho khush rahiye masood hassaas |
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5th December 2010, 03:43 PM
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aadaab maaf kijiye gaa main aap ke ashaar me kho kar rah gayaa thaa aap ki baz ghazlen is qadar shaandaar theen ki use baar baar parhaa aor baaz jaghon pe aap ke jawaabaat is qadar dil pazeer the ki use parh ki lagaa ki meree hi kahaane dohraayi jaa rahee ho khair qisaa kotaah aap ne jin lafzon me naacheez ko saraahaa hai wo aap ke batin ki shaffaafiyat pe dalaalat kartaa hai aor ye bhi waazeh kartaa hai ki aap apne maa fiz zameer ki wazaahat ke liye kisee tarh bhi kinaayah se kaam nahi leteen hain balki use lafzon me dhaal ke awaamun naas ko bhi shareek kar letee hain aap ke ke liye dher saaree doaaon ke saath masood hassaas |
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6th December 2010, 03:50 PM
masha allah huzoor masha allaha..... kamaal ka likha hai ab hum kya tareef karen apki.. bahot khoob huzoor bahot khoob.. yoonhi humpar apni kalaamon i nawazish bana rakhen.. khush rahen. aabaad rahen.
shaad... |
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6th December 2010, 06:58 PM
Mujh ko qaraar mil gayaa tum ko sokoon bhi
Goyaa ki jism mil gaye apnee doaa ke saath Bahut hi umdaa khayal ........ Masood Bhai ! aapki har peshkash itni acchi hoti hai ... kabhi kabhi taareef ke liye lafz bhi kam padh jaate hai ... yaa kahe ki dhundne ki zarurat pesh aa jaati hai ... yeh ghazal bhi qaabile taareef bani hai ... dil se daad hazir hai ... yunhi aate rahen aur likhte rahen ... khush rahen ... duaaon ke saath ...  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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8th December 2010, 01:39 AM
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aadaab kaise hain aap ? taakheer ki ma"azarat aap ki daad se latafat ka ras milaa halaawat ka zaaeqah bahot bahot shukriyah allah apko khush rakkhe mukhlis masood hassaas |
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8th December 2010, 01:57 AM
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aadaab janab naresh saahab main aap ke nek kalemaat ka aabhaari hun aor ye kahte huye fakhr mahsoos ho raha hai ki aap ke alfaaz haamare liye kisee upkaar se kam nahi main zaati taor pe aap ko apne dil ke us moqaam pe pataa hun jahaan waalid . ustaad . chachaa waghairah ka moqaam hai aap ke qalam se niklaa huwaa ek ek lafz merey liye khushiyon ki saghaat hai mujhe yaqeen hai ki aap mujhe isee tarah apnee doaaon me yaad rakkhen ge main apne khodaa se doa karun gaa ki wo aap ko lambi zindagee de doa go masood hassas |
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