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Zidd bhai main bhi wo cheezein jaan paunga to mere liye bade rasookh ki baat hogi.
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practice makes a man perfect.everthing will come in time.
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Chaliye is safar par chalne ka shayad yahi maqsad raha hai mera.
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humsab aapke saathi hai...milke chalenge.
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Waise aapne jo ek line quote ki hai. Iska matlab bahut negative lagta hai. Aap meri baat ko galat na samjhein
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aap negative na len...ek general baat ki hai to get things in proper perspective aur priotriy stress karne ke liye. aap ko personally kuch nahi kaha hai..honestly nothing in the preamble was directed agaist you
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Zidd bhai ye nayi hain is baat ko dekhte hue maine 'pe' khud se 'par' hi padha hai. Waise 'pe' ko bhi long syllable bola ja sakta hai(My personal view)
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tecnicals are objective things so isme personal opinion ki jagah nahi
'pe' khecha jaa sakta hai,zarur.aur swetaji ko tecnically galat nahi kah sakte.
magar jis jagah 'par' aa sakta hai waha 'pe' istemaal karna ,kaccha istemaal mana jayega.... maine bus information diya. ab padne wale ki marzi accept kare ya nahi ,ya cross check karke accept kare
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Bhai ye TIME ki aapne soch kyu pakad li ye nahi samajh paya. Alfaaz to aisa khul kar nahi keh rahe.
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bhai ab ye mai aapko nahi samjha sakta....is tarah ki baat ya to turunt pata chal jati hai ya nahi...
.aap bhi bahut accha likhte hai ,so nuance and inflexion ka importance samjhte hai.
ye baat kahna repetion hoga ki alfaaz aksar khulkar nahi kahte ,ya kabhi kabhi to jo kaha hai, vo hi nahi kah rahe hai....
magar uske nuance aur inflexion,context ,uski bandish se ishara milta hai. magar jaisa maine pahle kaha kuch aate aate hi aata hai...
abhi to aapko 2 mahine bhi nahi huye likhte,apne aap ko bhi kuch samay do bhai....mujhe yakeen hai aap is baat ko aaj se 2 mahine baad ek dusri light me dekhenge
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Waise agar deeply dekhein to bahut kam sheyr aise hote hain jin ke ek se jyada matlab na ho.
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baat sahi hai aapkki
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Isliye is baat ka faislaa shayar par hi chhoda jana chahiye.
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ab is baat ka itna bada jawaab hai ki aalas ke mare de nahi paunga.
shayar ki marzi hai vo jo chahe likhe.....public ki marzi hai use kaise accept kare. kabhi kabhi audience vo matlab bhi nikal leti hai jo shayar ne socha nahi hota.
baki agar shayar ki marzi hai kuch bhi karne ki to audience ki bhi marzi hai use pasand nahi karne ki..kyu?
aisa samjh lijiye ki jo shayar
kuch bhi nahi karte unke naam sabki zabaa par aa jaate hai....aur jo kuch bhi karte hai....vo to kuch bhi karte hai phir
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unfortunatley aisa riwaaj nahi hai ke har sher ke saath shayar uski commentary bhi de...agar aisa hota tovhum aapvyaha baat nahi kar rahe hote aur saare faisle shayar ke haath me hote.
ye baate aap kuch din baad mehsuus karenge ke saare faisle shayar ke haath me nahi hai.
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isi liye to ghazal likhi jaati hai ke theme padhne wale ko clear ho jaaye.
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ghazal ki koi theme nahi hoti 99 percent.
agar thematic hai to use musalsal ghazal kahnege jaise ke 'chupke chupe'
kabhi kabhi ek ghazal ke 2 sher scheme me hote hai jise shayar ko qita declare karna padta hai.
aap galib,meer etc.kisi ki bhi ghazal sunye kisi aur se ...to sher jumble bhi ho jaaye to koi farq nahi padta...koi bhi sher kisi bhi sequene me pada jaa sakta hai....agar aap kisi galib fan ko kahenge ki koi ghazal sunaoo to zaruri nahi ke vo sher ke sahi sequence me sunaye...aur kuch farq bhi nahi padega...sab sher apne aap me independent hai
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Bhai sher to bahut achha hua hai par pehle se khaas bhi kya hua hai. Pehle 'hi' tha waha ab 'to' hai'. Kya isi ke liye sher change karna chahiye.
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aapne jab kaha ki accha hua hai to aapka jawaab aapne khud de diya.
mere hisaab se islah ka matlab ye nahi ki shayar ke sher badal do
agar maine sher ko alag bana diya to vo mera sher hoga shayar ka nahi...
yaha maqsad bariki ka importance batana hai...one should always be on ones toes...complacency should never set in.one can never learn enough in one lifetime....so yaha manzil sab kuch jaan.na nahi hai kyuki vo impossible hai,yaha manzil jyada se jyada jaan.na hai....
badkismati se is ki koi ek kitaab nahi hai...mai aapko bata sakta hu jo mujhe pata hai aur aap mujko...isliye sab yaha ikhatta huye hai ke sabki knowledge pool ho jaaye aur collective knowledge bade.
ab ye to nahi kahunga ki pahle se khas kya hai ye bata sakta hu ki pahle se alag kya hai...ab sher me symettry hai,uski rawaani bad gayi hai,'hi'lafz se bach gaye aur do tukde ke badle line ek ban gayi hai (joki maqsad hona chaiye generally)
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Bhai aapki baat se poori tarah ittefaaq rakhta hu.
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mat rahiye bhai itna bharosa mujpar ya kisipar poori tarah se...cross check kijiye.....isme koi buraii nahi .mai khud bhi aise hi karta hu....
ek faida aur ye crosscheck karne me ki us context ki aur bhi kuch baate pata chal jaati hai.
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Ye art har kisi ko nahi aati.
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har kisi ke paas kuch na kuch kahne ke liye hai...zinda hai to kuch kahne keliye bhi hai......aate aate sabkuch aa jata hai...ye mera maanna hai.haa ye zarur kahunga ki sirf kisi tarah se mehnat karne se kuch nahi hota....dimag se hota hai...sahi aur honest guidance...baadme mehnat.
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Waise mera matlab aapse thhodi islaah paane ka tha. warna main kabhi bhi ye reply na karta.
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you are most welcome anytime...agar meri aukaat huii to meri knowledge aapki sewa me hazir hai
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Asha karta hu ki aap meri baato'n ko anyathha na lenge
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dont worry...ded do saal pahle mai aaphi ke jaisa tha
mujhe bhi.
regards