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18th November 2008, 04:35 PM
Log poochhte hain ke kyun likhte nahi ho aaj kal? Main kehta hun ke likhne ke liye jazbaat nahi aate, Log to ab bhi dil tod dete hain jane anjaane mein Par mayoosiyon ke mujhko ab khyalaat nahi aate, Aisa nahi hai ke badal gaya hun main Par apni hi nafrat se darr gaya hun main Neki kar to deta hun aaj bhi bina samjhe Par jataane ke mujhko andaaz nahi aate, Woh geet tha kabhi jo gaaya jata tha labon se, Ab un nagmo se hun jo bhoole se bhi yaad nahi aate Dosti zakhm se hi jab ho gayi hai to dard kaisa Yeh woh ghaav hai jispe koi marham kaam nahi aate Neend to aaj bhi utni hi hai raaton ko “Jasdeep” Par khushaliyon ke ab mujhko khwaab nahi aate Khushaliyon ke ab mujhko khwaab nahi aate….. Badnaseeb bhi nahi par mera naseeb bhi nahi Maana ke main ameer nahi par gareeb bhi nahi Dil ki gehraaiyon mein chhipaya hai jise Woh door bhi nahi mujhse par kareeb bhi nahi Chahta to hoon dena usko khushiyan saare jahan ki par mil jaayein unke gham "Jasdeep" itna khushnaseeb bhi nahi
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18th November 2008, 09:35 PM
jasdeep ji bohat ache ahsasaat hain ye sher bohat pasand aya....................
Log to ab bhi dil tod dete hain jane anjaane mein Par mayoosiyon ke mujhko ab khyalaat nahi aate, likhte rahiye............... apne ander se pash pash hoon main zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin |
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18th November 2008, 10:33 PM
Dear Jasdeep...............kaya khoob likha hai aapne, ahsaas bahut acche lage, mujhe pata hai aap aise hi ho jaisa aapne likha hai, par bhai aaj jis daur se hum guzar rahe haiN yahaN kisi ko bhi doosre ke ahsaaso.n ki fikar nahi hai, har koi har baat mein apna fayada dekhta hai....so etna hi kahna chahuNgi ki khud ko badal lijiye, ab bhi waqt hai......! aapki shayri bahut acchi lagi....yoon hi likhtey rahiye.
god bless u  .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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18th November 2008, 10:51 PM
wah wah jasbeer bhai kya andaz hai bahut pasand aaya
dua ki aap aise hi likhte rahiye bhagwan |
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20th November 2008, 11:45 AM
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Bahut bahut shukriya........... Badnaseeb bhi nahi par mera naseeb bhi nahi Maana ke main ameer nahi par gareeb bhi nahi Dil ki gehraaiyon mein chhipaya hai jise Woh door bhi nahi mujhse par kareeb bhi nahi Chahta to hoon dena usko khushiyan saare jahan ki par mil jaayein unke gham "Jasdeep" itna khushnaseeb bhi nahi
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20th November 2008, 11:48 AM
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Shukriya aapko hamara likha hua pasand aya.. aur aapka bahut shukarguzaar hun ke aapne mujhe samjha aur sahi salah di.... Koshish karunga ke jald hi khud ko aise andaaz mein badal saku ke aasani se kisi se hurt na ho saku... Shukriya. Badnaseeb bhi nahi par mera naseeb bhi nahi Maana ke main ameer nahi par gareeb bhi nahi Dil ki gehraaiyon mein chhipaya hai jise Woh door bhi nahi mujhse par kareeb bhi nahi Chahta to hoon dena usko khushiyan saare jahan ki par mil jaayein unke gham "Jasdeep" itna khushnaseeb bhi nahi
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20th November 2008, 11:49 AM
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par ek baat ki aapse guzaarish karna chahunga... Mera naam "jasbeer" nahi "Jasdeep" hai. umeed hai aap isse agli baar se sahi likha karnege.. Khush rahiye hamesha. Badnaseeb bhi nahi par mera naseeb bhi nahi Maana ke main ameer nahi par gareeb bhi nahi Dil ki gehraaiyon mein chhipaya hai jise Woh door bhi nahi mujhse par kareeb bhi nahi Chahta to hoon dena usko khushiyan saare jahan ki par mil jaayein unke gham "Jasdeep" itna khushnaseeb bhi nahi
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24th November 2008, 09:31 AM
Dosti zakhm se hi jab ho gayi hai to dard kaisa
Yeh woh ghaav hai jispe koi marham kaam nahi aate Neend to aaj bhi utni hi hai raaton ko “Jasdeep” Par khushaliyon ke ab mujhko khwaab nahi aate BAHUT KHOOBSURAT EHSAAS HAIN............. ZAINY Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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24th November 2008, 11:44 AM
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Badnaseeb bhi nahi par mera naseeb bhi nahi Maana ke main ameer nahi par gareeb bhi nahi Dil ki gehraaiyon mein chhipaya hai jise Woh door bhi nahi mujhse par kareeb bhi nahi Chahta to hoon dena usko khushiyan saare jahan ki par mil jaayein unke gham "Jasdeep" itna khushnaseeb bhi nahi
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26th November 2008, 01:03 AM
jasdeep ji
bhaut khubsurti se apne jajbaat bayaan kiye hai...dili daad kubul farmaaye शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे |
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26th November 2008, 04:56 PM
Log poochhte hain ke kyun likhte nahi ho aaj kal?
Main kehta hun ke likhne ke liye jazbaat nahi aate, Log to ab bhi dil tod dete hain jane anjaane mein Par mayoosiyon ke mujhko ab khyalaat nahi aate, Ehesaas achha laga .................daad ke saath Diya  Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz. Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai Goodbye SDC Diya |
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26th November 2008, 07:04 PM
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tumhaara kalam bada hi pyaara laga aur yakeenan main chahta hoon tum is waqt jaise ho waise hi raho. duniya ke dar se ye nek niyati nnahi chhodo... poori nazm per daad dilip  " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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24th June 2009, 11:56 AM
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Hello Sakhi g, aaj bade din baad zindagi ke kuch puraane panne farol raha tha to meri nazar meri iss post pe aapke reply pe padi. Muaafi chahta hun ke itni der se reply kar raha hun. Aapne hamein padha aur reply kiya uske liya bahut bahut shukriya. Badnaseeb bhi nahi par mera naseeb bhi nahi Maana ke main ameer nahi par gareeb bhi nahi Dil ki gehraaiyon mein chhipaya hai jise Woh door bhi nahi mujhse par kareeb bhi nahi Chahta to hoon dena usko khushiyan saare jahan ki par mil jaayein unke gham "Jasdeep" itna khushnaseeb bhi nahi
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24th June 2009, 11:58 AM
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jaisa ke maine upar wali post mein Sakhi g se deri se reply ke liye muaafi maangi to aapse bhi yehi darkhaast hai. Kaam mein kuchh is kadar busy tha ke iss post ko check karne ka mauka hi nahi mila. Aapki daad ke liye dil se shukriya.... Badnaseeb bhi nahi par mera naseeb bhi nahi Maana ke main ameer nahi par gareeb bhi nahi Dil ki gehraaiyon mein chhipaya hai jise Woh door bhi nahi mujhse par kareeb bhi nahi Chahta to hoon dena usko khushiyan saare jahan ki par mil jaayein unke gham "Jasdeep" itna khushnaseeb bhi nahi
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24th June 2009, 12:00 PM
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aapka dost, Pradhyuman gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai? musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai? -------------------------------------------------- |
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24th June 2009, 12:01 PM
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Hello diplip G, Sakhi g aur Diya g ki tarah aapse bhi deri se reply karne ke liye muaafi chahta hun. par apka reply karne mein maine der kar di aur khud ko thoda bahut badalne ki koshish shuru kar chuka tha. Insaan ki basic nature jaisi hoti hai woh waise hi rehti hai kabhi change nahi ho paati. Jyada to nahi par shayad thoda sa to change ho gya hun main. aur aapke iss pyaar bhare reply aur salah ke liye shukriya. Badnaseeb bhi nahi par mera naseeb bhi nahi Maana ke main ameer nahi par gareeb bhi nahi Dil ki gehraaiyon mein chhipaya hai jise Woh door bhi nahi mujhse par kareeb bhi nahi Chahta to hoon dena usko khushiyan saare jahan ki par mil jaayein unke gham "Jasdeep" itna khushnaseeb bhi nahi
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24th June 2009, 08:16 PM
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chaliye reply ke bahane hi sahi.... aapki is nazm ko padne ka mauka to mila.... "Log poochhte hain ke kyun likhte nahi ho aaj kal? Main kehta hun ke likhne ke liye jazbaat nahi aate," kuch kahun??? gar bura na maane to???? "dard na hota, jazbaat na hote, mayusiyon ke agar khayalat na hote.... to na hoti bazm mein is nazm se raunak, aur guftgu ke haalaat na hote..." bahut hi umda ehsaas..... likhte rahiyega.... aapki dost nisha par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye... |
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24th June 2009, 09:33 PM
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Kya baat hai Nisha, Bahut hi khoob....... Ye mera jawaab Zakhm bhi aur Dard bhi hai, seene mein bhi tadapti pyaas hai Mere seene mein dehekti aag se, buland bhi meri awaaz hai Shauk bhi hai meri kalam ko, likhne ka kalaam-e-ruswaayi Ye bebas kaafir par likhe bhi kaise, "Toot chuka Ehsaas hai" Teri bewafaayi meri maut sitamgar, "Toot chuka Ehsaas hai" "Toot chuka Ehsaas hai" Reps+++ added for both Jasdeep and Nisha..... |
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24th June 2009, 09:41 PM
JasdeeP jii AadaaB,
Aapke ahsaas dil ko chu gaye bahut hi umda likha hai aapne, aapki tehreer aur bayan wakai nirala laga, apko padhker khushi hui.. aate rahiye aur likhate rahiye... Khush rahiye khuda hafez.. 
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24th June 2009, 11:50 PM
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jawaab ke liye shukriya.... bura na maane to meri or se bhi kuch pesh hai.... "ehsaason ke bikharne aur kalam ke sambhalne mein faasla bas itna hai... dard se zakhm aur uski bewafai se meri maut ka faasla jitna hai... haan uske sitam saare sar-e-aam main bhi kar saki hun... par dil rok leta hai haatho ko, kya karein??? usse pyaar jo itna hai...." aapki dost nisha par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye... |
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25th June 2009, 01:00 AM
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Haal-e-bayaan zakhm-e-dard, maine bhi alfaaz likhe Riste Lahoo ki boondo se, ik kitaab saja di maine Ik aisi gazal sunn ke jise, royi thi woh kabhi... Ik woh hi gazal duniya ki nazaro.n se chipa li maine |
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25th June 2009, 07:35 PM
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haay..... ab iske aage aur kya kahein???? bas itna.... "ek gazal ko chupa liya, aur socha tumne tanhaaii apne naam kar di??? shabdon ne to raaz chupa liya, afsos!! tumhari nazron ne bewafai kar di..." bahut saari duaaon k saath... aapki dost nisha par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye... |
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26th June 2009, 01:32 PM
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Nisha aap bahut achha likhte ho...... Meri badkismati ke,,,,,, Kaise karti wafa, ye Nazrein batao zara Inme bhi toh basa tha, unka hi chehra, Dil bhi tha pathhar, aur woh bhi harjaayi tha Mere mashooq ka mazhab, Bewafayi tha..... |
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27th June 2009, 09:34 AM
jasdeep jii
howz u? bahut hi khoobsuraat lagii aapki ghazal likhte rahye take care mandeep ~ Mandeep Kaur ~ |
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