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Hi, Neha.............,,
aapne meri line padhe k baad jo uski taarif ki he mujhe khushi he ki is duniya me kadar karne waale ab bhi mojud he or aapne kaha ki aap kisi ko yeh dedicate karna chahti he to mujhe khushi hogi ki meri stanza is kaabil bhi he ki kisi ko dedicate bhi ki jaaye isse badhkar mere liye khushi ki kya baat he or main aapko izaazat deta hoo ki aap iska use apni marji se kae sakti he ...............isse khush hokar main kuch line or paish kar raha hoo ummid he aapko pasand aayegi....................?
Hum woh nahi jo aapko naarazgi me chod denge,
Hum who nahi jo aapse nata tod denge,
Hum to who dost he ..agar aapki saanse ruki to
Hum apni saanse jod denge………
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thanks i have dedicated that stanza...thankfuLL to u
this stanza is also nice but that was out standing
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asslam alykum Neha,
ummid he aap par allah ka karam hoga or aapki dua se hamari dua kabool ho rahi hogi...
ummid he yeh chand ash-aar pasand aayenge
Mohabbat ka ajeeb karobar humne kiya,
Who bewafa sahi magar pyar humne kiya,
Agar woh chadd agye tanha to mat kaho buraunko,
Kasorr unka nahi aitbaar humne kiya………
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nice stanza
sorry if i will not reply u b/c agar feel karongi k there is a need of my reply then i will do that otherwise dont mind haan plz
hope u will understand
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15th April 2008, 09:48 AM
Very Nice. I like it.
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15th April 2008, 10:54 PM
Mohabbat ka ajeeb karobar humne kiya,
Who bewafa sahi magar pyar humne kiya,
Agar woh chadd agye tanha to mat kaho buraunko,
Kasorr unka nahi aitbaar humne kiya
Soch mein shayad koi bhi ho....gham nahin...
Aaj batha de.N k aap kisise kam nahin...
mansoor ali jee...
good work keep it up...
If you want ur dreams to cum true...
WAKE UP...!
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Very Nice. I like it.
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thanks a lot kafi dinoo k bad apse bat horahi hai
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Mohabbat ka ajeeb karobar humne kiya,
Who bewafa sahi magar pyar humne kiya,
Agar woh chadd agye tanha to mat kaho buraunko,
Kasorr unka nahi aitbaar humne kiya
Soch mein shayad koi bhi ho....gham nahin...
Aaj batha de.N k aap kisise kam nahin...
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good work keep it up...
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thank u very much simran jinice stanza u gave me on my post
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19th April 2008, 12:42 PM
very well written neha keep it up
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13th June 2008, 06:07 AM
Really great one .. neha
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Really great one .. neha
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thanks dear u again replied me really i m very thankfull 2 u
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bohut acha likha hai neha ...................
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thanks sana thank u sweety where r u sweet heart i m waiting 4 ur next pm
h r u?all set na?
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sansain meri rukti nahi par chalte chalte thamti hain
jane usko bair hai kesa,mujse rothe jata hai...........
sari raat main ro ro katoon thame na ansoo pal bhar ko
ishq ka khel wo khel kada,,jo mujko diboe jata hai........
uske naam ki mala japte lamhe,sadiyaan beet gaeen
phir b usko yaqin nahi,wo mujhko rulae jata hai........
tehal tehal kar chat par akeli uski raheen takti hoon
jan boojh kar yaroon main,wo waqat ko bitae jata hai
mazi ke sudar lamhoon ki yad mujhe satati hai
uska bojhal lehja,mere lub ko hansae jata hai
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apki ghazal muje buhat achi lagi neha ji hi i m new at this site
apke likhne ka andaz b buhat acha hai main ne aik sher post kia hai muje bataiyega kesa hai thanks neha ji
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Asalam-u-alekum minha ji -
27th June 2008, 02:44 PM
salam
thanks 4 liking my poetry so u r new ok weLL come from my side
ur name is very nice.
ya sure main apke stanza ko zaror read kar k comment dongi ok na
take care dear
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sansain meri rukti nahi par chalte chalte thamti hain
jane usko bair hai kesa,mujse rothe jata hai...........
sari raat main ro ro katoon thame na ansoo pal bhar ko
ishq ka khel wo khel kada,,jo mujko diboe jata hai........
uske naam ki mala japte lamhe,sadiyaan beet gaeen
phir b usko yaqin nahi,wo mujhko rulae jata hai........
tehal tehal kar chat par akeli uski raheen takti hoon
jan boojh kar yaroon main,wo waqat ko bitae jata hai
mazi ke sudar lamhoon ki yad mujhe satati hai
uska bojhal lehja,mere lub ko hansae jata hai
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Humein unki ebadat se fursat nahi milti ,
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Usko chaha bhi to iqraar karna na aaya,
Kat gayi umr, hamein pyar karna na aaya,
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sansain meri rukti nahi par chalte chalte thamti hain
jane usko bair hai kesa,mujse rothe jata hai...........
sari raat main ro ro katoon thame na ansoo pal bhar ko
ishq ka khel wo khel kada,,jo mujko diboe jata hai........
uske naam ki mala japte lamhe,sadiyaan beet gaeen
phir b usko yaqin nahi,wo mujhko rulae jata hai........
tehal tehal kar chat par akeli uski raheen takti hoon
jan boojh kar yaroon main,wo waqat ko bitae jata hai
mazi ke sudar lamhoon ki yad mujhe satati hai
uska bojhal lehja,mere lub ko hansae jata hai
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bohat khub achah hai bohat hi pyaara kalam pesh kiya
wery nicw jitani bi tarif ki jaye to kam hai mai bi kuch isi tarah k sher likh ta hu arj karta hu pasand ayr to pls rep dena
Pucho na us kagaj se,
jis pe hum dil ke bayan likhte hai,
Tanhayino me beeti baate tamam likhte hai
,Wo Kalam bhi dewani ho gayi,
jis se hum AAP ka Naam likhte hai.
Humein unki ebadat se fursat nahi milti ,
log na jane kisko khuda kehte hain ,
dil mein rakha hai unko,
log na jane kyon juda kehte hain.[
Usko chaha bhi to iqraar karna na aaya,
Kat gayi umr, hamein pyar karna na aaya,
Usney maanga bhi agar kuch to maangi judaai,
Aur ek hum thay ke inkaar karna na aaya!!!!
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bohat khub achah hai bohat hi pyaara kalam pesh kiya
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Pucho na us kagaj se,
jis pe hum dil ke bayan likhte hai,
Tanhayino me beeti baate tamam likhte hai
,Wo Kalam bhi dewani ho gayi,
jis se hum AAP ka Naam likhte hai.
Humein unki ebadat se fursat nahi milti ,
log na jane kisko khuda kehte hain ,
dil mein rakha hai unko,
log na jane kyon juda kehte hain.[
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Hi rijan bahut achi share hai, ek baat poochni thi ye shair main pahle
padh chuka hoon kuch is tarah
unki yaad me bahut paigam likhte hai
unki yaad me guzri wo shaam likhte hai
wo kalam bhi unki diwani hojati hai
jis kalam se unka naam likhte hai
is shayri ko mere dost ne likhi hai
Har Saans pe hai maut ka pehra laga hua,
Kitni badi mazak hai ye zindagi ke sath
Wo kaise Log the Ya Rub Jinhone Pa Liya Tujh ko
Hume To Hogaya Dushwar Ek Insaan ka Milna
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hi, well shayri
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salam neha ji -
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salam
thanks 4 liking my poetry so u r new ok weLL come from my side
ur name is very nice.
ya sure main apke stanza ko zaror read kar k comment dongi ok na
take care dear
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wa salam neha ji
thanks ke apko mera name pasand aya hai muje bhi apna naam buhat pasand hai...minha ka matlab hota hai "muhabbat",ur wellcome neha ji apki poetry tarif k qabil thi aur thank u neha ji ke apne meri poetry pe jakar buhat acha comment kia hai buhat shukria.
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hmmmm..........bahut accha likha hai aapne neha....keep it up dear
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lab pe aati hai dua banke tamanna meri
tamanna kya hai bas khushi hai teri
ye dil tera hai ab, tu jahan bhi rahe
har pal mohobbat bayaan karega ye meri
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wery nicw jitani bi tarif ki jaye to kam hai mai bi kuch isi tarah k sher likh ta hu arj karta hu pasand ayr to pls rep dena
Pucho na us kagaj se,
jis pe hum dil ke bayan likhte hai,
Tanhayino me beeti baate tamam likhte hai
,Wo Kalam bhi dewani ho gayi,
jis se hum AAP ka Naam likhte hai.
Humein unki ebadat se fursat nahi milti ,
log na jane kisko khuda kehte hain ,
dil mein rakha hai unko,
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thanks n ya ur poetry is very nice
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Hi rijan bahut achi share hai, ek baat poochni thi ye shair main pahle
padh chuka hoon kuch is tarah
unki yaad me bahut paigam likhte hai
unki yaad me guzri wo shaam likhte hai
wo kalam bhi unki diwani hojati hai
jis kalam se unka naam likhte hai
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what is this azam just talk wid me ok plz
azam u know what i m saying dearplz
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lab pe aati hai dua banke tamanna meri
tamanna kya hai bas khushi hai teri
ye dil tera hai ab, tu jahan bhi rahe
har pal mohobbat bayaan karega ye meri
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u dont admire me even not point out any mistake so ur given stanza its ok
thanks 4 this atleast
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thanks neha ji
so main apko neha ji na kaha karoon?
ji ap jab chahen meri har ghalti ko mention kar sakti hain muje khushi hogi
ji bilkul neha ji
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sansain meri rukti nahi par chalte chalte thamti hain
jane usko bair hai kesa,mujse rothe jata hai...........
sari raat main ro ro katoon thame na ansoo pal bhar ko
ishq ka khel wo khel kada,,jo mujko diboe jata hai........
uske naam ki mala japte lamhe,sadiyaan beet gaeen
phir b usko yaqin nahi,wo mujhko rulae jata hai........
tehal tehal kar chat par akeli uski raheen takti hoon
jan boojh kar yaroon main,wo waqat ko bitae jata hai
mazi ke sudar lamhoon ki yad mujhe satati hai
uska bojhal lehja,mere lub ko hansae jata hai
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sunder ehsaas hai....technicalities mein thoda aap beher aur radeef ka khayaal rakhte to aur bhi behter hota...par aapke ehsaas zaroor dil chu gaye...likhte rahiYeGaa
aapka apnaa
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han sweety jo dil kare wo kaha karo u know na tumhare jejo ko pata lag gaya hai k tum meri sweet si cousin ho unse chupana tha wohi jan gaeacha koi prob tu nahi na aur ho kahan tum ghar aoo yar i m waiting 4 shopping trip aj sham after maghrib ok
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thanks thanks thanks a lot k apne muje meri mistake batai
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Chehre Pe Khushi Chah Jati Hai
Ankhon Mein Suroor Aajata Hai
Jab Tum Mujhe Apna Kehte Ho
Apne Pe Guroor Aajata Hai
Tum Husn Ki Khud Ek Dunya Ho,
Shayad Yeh Tumhain Maloom Nahi
Mehfil Mein Tumhare Aane Se ,
Har Chiz Pe Noor Aajata Hai
Hum Pass Se Tum Ko Kiya Dekhen
Jab Tum Mukabil Hote HO
Betaab Nighaoon Ke Aage ,
Parda Sa Zaroor Aajata Hai
Jab Tumse Mohabbat Ki Humne
Tab Jake Kahin Yeh Raaz Khula
Marne Ka Saliqa Aata Hi Nahi
Jeene Ka Shaoor Aajata Hai
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Chehre Pe Khushi Chah Jati Hai
Ankhon Mein Suroor Aajata Hai
Jab Tum Mujhe Apna Kehte Ho
Apne Pe Guroor Aajata Hai
Tum Husn Ki Khud Ek Dunya Ho,
Shayad Yeh Tumhain Maloom Nahi
Mehfil Mein Tumhare Aane Se ,
Har Chiz Pe Noor Aajata Hai
Hum Pass Se Tum Ko Kiya Dekhen
Jab Tum Mukabil Hote HO
Betaab Nighaoon Ke Aage ,
Parda Sa Zaroor Aajata Hai
Jab Tumse Mohabbat Ki Humne
Tab Jake Kahin Yeh Raaz Khula
Marne Ka Saliqa Aata Hi Nahi
Jeene Ka Shaoor Aajata Hai
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wha irfaan bahi kiya baat hai yaar bahut khoob likha hai but i dint got one thing u can post it in individual thread u will get more replies ya fir zyada logo ko padhne ka muka milega any way keep it up cheers mujhe bahut pasand aayi
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neha pls muje shayri.com opret karna nahi ata pls aap meri madat karongi mai bi aap ki tarah apne andaj pesh karna chahata hu.... pls rep me
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Originally Posted by salauddin.azam
wha irfaan bahi kiya baat hai yaar bahut khoob likha hai but i dint got one thing u can post it in individual thread u will get more replies ya fir zyada logo ko padhne ka muka milega any way keep it up cheers mujhe bahut pasand aayi
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thanks azam n u know thanks 4 what?
take care
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