Chattaan Ka Phool.......................] -
4th June 2006, 01:43 PM
Chattan ke beech mein
khila hua chamkeela phool.
Sirr uthaye ghamand se
chattan hai tow kya hua.
Tum door se mujhe
dekh sakte ho,
Meri khusbhu ko
mehsoos kar sakte ho.
Tapega Surya tow kya
main hawa kee thodi si nami paa
khud ko sambhaal loonga.
Phir chali aayegi shaam
nikat andhere ke.
Phir Chidiya lautegi
paas ke ghosle mein kahin.
Mujhe apna geet suna
sulayegi meri pattiyon ko hila.
Mujhe santosh hai
maine apna jeevan akele jiya.
Aur khushi-khushi sukh jo mila
Usne akele ka ehsaas hee na hone diya.
Bahut khoobsurat Rachna likhi hay Aapne......Kayi baar kuch imaginations kitna kuch kehtey hain......beautiful imaginations......kuch kuch aise hi ek English poetry likhi thi school days mein.......A Silent white lily on a Rock......uss poetry ki yaad aa gayi......may be har poetry ka meaning har poet ke liye different hota hoga....par soch ke acha laga how the imaginations says so many things through each poet's words......
Bahut khoobsurat Rachna likhi hay Aapne......Kayi baar kuch imaginations kitna kuch kehtey hain......beautiful imaginations......kuch kuch aise hi ek English poetry likhi thi school days mein.......A Silent white lily on a Rock......uss poetry ki yaad aa gayi......may be har poetry ka meaning har poet ke liye different hota hoga....par soch ke acha laga how the imaginations says so many things through each poet's words......
keep up the good work
Namaskaar Sukanya Ji,
Bahaut accha laga aapne mujhe fir parha. Meri khusnaseebi hogi yadi main aapki likhit uss poem ko parh sakun.
Thanx for your valuable comments/views and kind word.
Take care
Accha laga jankar ki aap mere veh poetry sunna chahtey hay... Kushnaseebi kaise....It's a simple poetry with simple words... Posting this poetry here itself......will like to know how it is....may be it won't be perfect like urs but imaginations used is somewat similar to ur poetry....
A Silent white lily on a Rock.
Silent breeze flowing over the ocean
Far from me near the almighty
In midst of blue angel
Flourishing a little angel
All quiet on a black rock
Named white lily by the world
Tender lily appears so cool
In a serene world so cool
Held firmly by the rock
Living under the care of breeze
Dusk approaching with silent horror
Sun appears to be drowning
White angel takes over orange angel
Rushing tides sweeping across the rock
Torning the tender petals of lily with a mock
Night torning tender petals
Dawn bringing up new petals
Some petals get torn away
Some petals remain intact
One hand of allah takes away tender petals
One hand of allah gifts tender petals
Someday everyone will posses tender petals
Tender petals of love from the beautiful hands of almighty.
sach maaniye...bus sheershak dekh kar kaafi din tak iss kavita ko maine ignore kar diya...phir aaj socha agar aapne chattaan ke phool ko lekar likhi hai tau kucch tau hoga uss chattaan ke phool mein ...aur kiss khubsurati se aapne uske buland hausle, uske santusht rehne aur phir har haal mein jeene ko ubhara hai...I salute you sir! for a wonderful poem...I loved every word...
Aur Sukanya jee...
Aapki kavita bhi behad khubsurat hai...jaante huye ki aapne kitni choti umr mein isse likhaa...simply beautiful...
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
kitni saadgi se itni gehri baat hain isme chhipi simply outstanding.... one the too gud posts ..i liked it vipin ji khil sa gaya mann isse dekh kar
apna khayaal rakhiyega
Pallavi...
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Your attitude towards life decides Life's attitude towards you...
Adarniya Paras Ji, .....aapko mera pranaam
accha laga jaankar ki aapne mujhe fir parha aur saraaha. Isi prakaar aap yadi parttey rahenge tow himmat milti rahegi likhtey rehne ki.
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Dhanyavaad Parul Ji......mujhe parhney ke liye.
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Aapko mera Pranaam Meena Ji,
Jaisa ki main pehle bhi keh chuka hoon ki Dots ke roop mein Aapka maatr hastaakshar hee bahaut himmat deta hai.
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Pallavi ji, Namaskaar
Accha laga aapne iss saadgi ko saraaha aur apney vichaar rakhey. Koshish karta rahunga.....shaayad kabhi accha likh sakun. Himmat dene ke liye aapka bahaut bahaut dhanyavaad.
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Namaskaar Pulkit ji,
Bahaut khushi hui jaankar ki aap woh mehsoos kar sakey jise likhney ka maine prayaas kiya tha. Saarthakta ki oar ek aur kadam aage barhgayi hai yeh rachna. Aapka dhanyavaad
Kya khub vipinji
Jindgi ko itna positivly aapne bataya he ,agar insan ummid kho de to jina mushkil ho jayega par ummid banaye rakhe aur jindgi ko positive leke chale to vo aasan ho jati he jine ko.
Phir chali aayegi shaam
nikat andhere ke.
Phir Chidiya lautegi
paas ke ghosle mein kahin.
Mujhe apna geet suna
sulayegi meri pattiyon ko hila.
Originally posted by ilesh shah Kya khub vipinji
Jindgi ko itna positivly aapne bataya he ,agar insan ummid kho de to jina mushkil ho jayega par ummid banaye rakhe aur jindgi ko positive leke chale to vo aasan ho jati he jine ko.
Phir chali aayegi shaam
nikat andhere ke.
Phir Chidiya lautegi
paas ke ghosle mein kahin.
Mujhe apna geet suna
sulayegi meri pattiyon ko hila.
Good 1
With wishes
ilesh
Ilesh Ji
aapne sahi kaha hai ki Positive soch jeevan ko aasaan bana deti hai.
bahaut khushi hui aapne mujhe parha....aapka bahaut bahaut dhanyavaad.
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