Villanelle

[jainrohit]

Space time not only warps , but it also wraps
-- Into its coffers , memories old and new
Ah We could halt or reverse it perhaps !!

No one stands ! Strong and weak equally collapse
Decay thereafter into its residue
Space time not only warps , but it also wraps !!

With each inhaled breath time tightens its straps
With the final pull , spirit begins to spew
Ah We could halt or reverse it perhaps !!

Through melange of sad moments it sets up traps
Fear and helplessness will then ensue ;
Space-time not only warps , but it also wraps !!

Once whirled into it ; our existence snaps
We are locked eternally in cosmic glue ;
Ah We could halt or reverse it perhaps !!

Its powers bathe universe , they can't be cropped
Slow it ; fast it -- but it can't be stopped
Ah We could halt or reverse it perhaps !!
Space-time not only warps , but it also wraps

[zainy]

Once whirled into it ; our existence snaps
We are locked eternally in cosmic glue ;
Ah We could halt or reverse it perhaps !!

Its powers bathe universe , they can't be cropped
Slow it ; fast it -- but it can't be stopped
Ah We could halt or reverse it perhaps !!
Space-time not only warps , but it also wraps


Touching!!...

You have very sucessfully penned down ur thoughts...

A poetry so simple yet so full of emotions.................

Beautiful words, perfect rhyming...loved reading it..

[zidd]

Rohit sahab....this poem intrigues me . whenever i start establishing a particular sense at some point , something is said which demolishes the established premise..............i think its supposed to be a kind of puzzle.

Originally Posted by jainrohit

Space time not only warps , but it also wraps
-- Into its coffers , memories old and new
Ah We could halt or reverse it perhaps !!

in its theory it can be reversed.

No one stands ! Strong and weak equally collapse
Decay thereafter into its residue
Space time not only warps , but it also wraps !!

but that is the function of linear time ? space time alag nahi hoga?


With each inhaled breath time tightens its straps
With the final pull , spirit begins to spew
Ah We could halt or reverse it perhaps !!

alas no .

Through melange of sad moments it sets up traps
Fear and helplessness will then ensue ;
Space-time not only warps , but it also wraps !!



Once whirled into it ; our existence snaps
We are locked eternally in cosmic glue ;
Ah We could halt or reverse it perhaps !!

existence ceases but the being carries on? ...does it mean some kind of hyper mind? an association of various conciousness?

Its powers bathe universe , they can't be cropped
Slow it ; fast it -- but it can't be stopped
Ah We could halt or reverse it perhaps !!
Space-time not only warps , but it also wraps

i really had a very hard time imagining the warp and the wrap at the same time.....thanks to you , i imagined images which i would not have imagined ,but for this poem

good effort sir.

regards

[zidd]

Originally Posted by zainy

Once whirled into it ; our existence snaps
We are locked eternally in cosmic glue ;
Ah We could halt or reverse it perhaps !!

Its powers bathe universe , they can't be cropped
Slow it ; fast it -- but it can't be stopped
Ah We could halt or reverse it perhaps !!
Space-time not only warps , but it also wraps


Touching!!...

You have very sucessfully penned down ur thoughts...

A poetry so simple yet so full of emotions.................

Beautiful words, perfect rhyming...loved reading it..

aapko simple laga? zainyji.....

hmm lagta hai , complicated logo ko sab simple lagta hai.

[zainy]

hahahaha......Zidd sahab....mere liye.... jo baat samajh me aajaaye woh simple, jo samajh me naa aaye woh complicated hoti hai...........

AS SIMPLE AS THAT......

[jainrohit]

Originally Posted by zidd

Rohit sahab....this poem intrigues me . whenever i start establishing a particular sense at some point , something is said which demolishes the established premise..............i think its supposed to be a kind of puzzle.

shukriya shukriya shukriyaa zidd sahab ......

ha , spacetime ko reverse kiya jaa sakta he , kyunki wo temporal dimension he :O

yahaa mera nazariya aisa tha ke insaan ko waqt ke saamne bauna dikhaana tha.

agar hum apni duniya me koi black hole banaa paae to shayad hum use reverse kar sake ....... ya phir lhc me bana hua mini black hole (jo khaali theoretical he ) istemaal kar time reverse kare ....

last waala triplet black hole par hi he , kyunki black hole ke andar ki singularity me hum eternally fas jaate he (locked eternally into cosmic glue : )

thorough analysis ke liye shukriya





hausla badhaane ke liye shukriya zainy ji

[saadat tahir]

lovely philosophical and allegorical
nice working rhymes

overall impact great...
liked reading

cheers
sat