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Mera dil bechain hai -
2nd August 2014, 04:12 PM
Ek nazm pesh hai ..kachy..pakki si, kabool farmayein
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Mera dil bechain hai usse milne ko ,
jiske aane ki koi umeed nahin.
Ise dil ka veham kahun ya pagalpan ,
Na jaane kyon aati mujhe neend nahin.
Gar aankh lag jaye ghari do gharee ,
Shayad sapnon mein ho jaye unki deed kahin.
Jab bichre thhe waqt tham gaya tha wahin ,
Ab us bin man ko aata chain nahin.
Per farfarate hai per urne ki aadat nahin ,
Dil aur dimag mein chalti hai takraar kahi.
khone Pane ki daur mein yun uljha hai har bashar ,
Isee kashmeqash mein kat raha Zindagee ka safar.
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2nd August 2014, 06:11 PM
Bahut khoobsurat.........
Wah....
अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी
आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे
madhu..
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3rd August 2014, 02:34 AM
Bilkul kabool ki ye khoobsurat jazbaat se bhari nazm Hamdam ji !! Waah !!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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3rd August 2014, 11:56 PM
Per farfarate hai per urne ki aadat nahin ,
Dil aur dimag mein chalti hai takraar kahi.
Hamdam saheb,,
Wahhh! kia kehne... Poori nazm dilkash hai...
lekin quoted lines to janab bilkul hi naya aur aik achhota
khiyaal hai... wahh! wahh!
Khaas in lines k liye dherooN daad qabool kijiye..
Reps added for that lines.
Likhte rahiye,,
DuaooN ke saath,,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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5th August 2014, 10:51 AM
Quote:
Originally Posted by N@zneen
Bahot khoob......khaskar ye ashaar kafi pasand aye
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Thanks Nazneen ......aap ko humara khayal bahut pasand aya.
Sanjay Sehgal
khone Pane ki daur mein yun uljha hai har bashar ,
Isee kashmeqash mein kat raha Zindagee ka safar.
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5th August 2014, 11:15 AM
bahot khoob peshkash hai Sanjay saahab... kaafi waqt ke baad aapko padhnaa acchaa lagaa... llikhte rahen...
Gar aankh lag jaye ghari do gharee ,
Shayad sapnon mein ho jaye unki deed kahin.
Jab bichre thhe waqt tham gaya tha wahin ,
Ab us bin man ko aata chain nahin.
nice lines.....
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5th August 2014, 01:40 PM
Very Very Very Nyc Creation..............................!!
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16th August 2014, 03:35 PM
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Originally Posted by Madhu 14
Bahut khoobsurat.........
Wah....
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Madhu ji aap ka tahe dil se shukriya
khone Pane ki daur mein yun uljha hai har bashar ,
Isee kashmeqash mein kat raha Zindagee ka safar.
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16th August 2014, 03:38 PM
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Originally Posted by zarraa
Bilkul kabool ki ye khoobsurat jazbaat se bhari nazm Hamdam ji !! Waah !!
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Zarra ji aap ke dil se nikli wah ko hum kabool karte hain
aur humari nazm ko sarahne ke liye shukriya ada karte hain.
khone Pane ki daur mein yun uljha hai har bashar ,
Isee kashmeqash mein kat raha Zindagee ka safar.
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Tere Intzaar Mein....
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16th August 2014, 03:58 PM
kya baat hai sir ji.................bahut khubbbbbbbbbbbbb
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16th September 2014, 08:02 PM
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Originally Posted by Hassan
Per farfarate hai per urne ki aadat nahin ,
Dil aur dimag mein chalti hai takraar kahi.
Hamdam saheb,,
Wahhh! kia kehne... Poori nazm dilkash hai...
lekin quoted lines to janab bilkul hi naya aur aik achhota
khiyaal hai... wahh! wahh!
Khaas in lines k liye dherooN daad qabool kijiye..
Reps added for that lines.
Likhte rahiye,,
DuaooN ke saath,,
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Hasan Bhai , Namaskar
Aaj peeche jhanka aur paya.ki.main aap logon ke complements acknowlege karna bhool
gaya.. Khair der aye durust aye ...bahut meherbani janab aapki .
khone Pane ki daur mein yun uljha hai har bashar ,
Isee kashmeqash mein kat raha Zindagee ka safar.
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16th September 2014, 08:07 PM
Sameer bhai , Masoom pyar ji aur Rajeev bhai ...
Aap logon se bhi ye hi kahunga .
..ki bhool jane ki.koi na saza dena
bus hi humara hausla barate rehna .
Aap.sub khush rahein.aur yun hi khsushoyan baante rahein sab mein .
Duaon ke saath izazat .
Sanjay Sehgal
khone Pane ki daur mein yun uljha hai har bashar ,
Isee kashmeqash mein kat raha Zindagee ka safar.
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17th September 2014, 12:14 AM
bht mast likha hai humdam ji...
Aaj fir dil shayar hona chahta hai..
Dard lafzon me pirona chahta hai..
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18th September 2014, 06:03 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Hamdam
Mera dil bechain hai usse milne ko ,
jiske aane ki koi umeed nahin.
(Na-ummeed bhi ho toh ummeed milne ki hai, issiliye bechaini hai.. nice one)
Ise dil ka veham kahun ya pagalpan ,
Na jaane kyon aati mujhe neend nahin.
(seriously, bata nahin sakte ki veham hai ya pagalpan, bas ek aarzoo rehti hai dil mein, good one again sir)
Gar aankh lag jaye ghari do gharee ,
Shayad sapnon mein ho jaye unki deed kahin.
(yeh toh bas wish hoti hai.. )
Jab bichre thhe waqt tham gaya tha wahin ,
Ab us bin man ko aata chain nahin.
(Bas yeh chhahat hoti hai ki dobara ussi ghadi mein wapis jayein, fir manayein, duuriyon ko mitayein, waqt toh ussi soch par tham sa gaya hai..
nice sir)
Per farfarate hai per urne ki aadat nahin ,
Dil aur dimag mein chalti hai takraar kahi.
(Battle of Mind and Heart.. Mind says ignore, Heart says No)
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Awesome feelings..
Nice one Hamdam;464018 ji.
very nicely expressed feelings of love and desire..
Keep writing..
Main toh kab ka marr chuka hoon,
Zinda hai ye Jism mera,
Ki koi phir apni Mohabbat se,
Jeene ki nayi wajah de dein...
The Demon Prince...
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21st September 2014, 06:07 PM
bahut khoob sanjay jee..... very nice work.............................................. ............
एक हाथ में दिल उनके एक हाथ में खंजर था
चेहरे पे दोस्त का मुखौटा अजीब सा मंजर था
Arvind Saxena
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