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tera hushn - 26th October 2007, 09:25 PM

ae chand aana na kahi unke aage
tera hushn kuch bhi nahi unke aage.

wo aakhon ki masti wo julfon ke badal
kisi ko bhi karde wo ik pal me pagel.
wo muhabbat ke foolon ka ik chaman hai
kya tujhme bhi aisi ada aisa fan hai
ae chand...................................

wo isharon me baton ka samjhana unka
wo nazren milakar ke sharmana unka.
thori masumiyat thora sa bholapan hai
kya tujhme bhi aisi ada aisa fan hai.
ae chand..................................

na haton me kangan na kano me bali
na mathe pe bindiya na hoton pe lali.
bin sajaye hi lagti wo koi dulhan hai
kya tujhme bhi aisi ada aisa fan hai.
ae chand aana na kahin unke aage
tera hushn kuch bi nahi unke aage

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27th October 2007, 12:37 PM

Bahut khuubsurat ehsaas hein, Rahnuma Ji...! Iss shayri ki jagah gar Ishk section par hoti to baat kuch aur hoti...! ( I think so...)

Keep writing like this and take care, ok...?

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27th October 2007, 02:39 PM

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ae chand aana na kahi unke aage
tera hushn kuch bhi nahi unke aage.

wo aakhon ki masti wo julfon ke badal
kisi ko bhi karde wo ik pal me pagel.
wo muhabbat ke foolon ka ik chaman hai
kya tujhme bhi aisi ada aisa fan hai
ae chand...................................

wo isharon me baton ka samjhana unka
wo nazren milakar ke sharmana unka.
thori masumiyat thora sa bholapan hai
kya tujhme bhi aisi ada aisa fan hai.
ae chand..................................

na haton me kangan na kano me bali
na mathe pe bindiya na hoton pe lali.
bin sajaye hi lagti wo koi dulhan hai
kya tujhme bhi aisi ada aisa fan hai.
ae chand aana na kahin unke aage
tera hushn kuch bi nahi unke aage


wow bohat khubsurti se mehboob ke husn ko bayan kia hai aur danny ji ne bilkul sahi fermaya hai unke mashware per amal kijiyega.....


Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
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27th October 2007, 03:29 PM

very beautifully expressed...yeah danny ji is right ishq section ke liye hi hain yeh post..likhte rahiye.......


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ae chand aana na kahi unke aage
tera hushn kuch bhi nahi unke aage.

wo aakhon ki masti wo julfon ke badal
kisi ko bhi karde wo ik pal me pagel.
wo muhabbat ke foolon ka ik chaman hai
kya tujhme bhi aisi ada aisa fan hai
ae chand...................................

wo isharon me baton ka samjhana unka
wo nazren milakar ke sharmana unka.
thori masumiyat thora sa bholapan hai
kya tujhme bhi aisi ada aisa fan hai.
ae chand..................................

na haton me kangan na kano me bali
na mathe pe bindiya na hoton pe lali.
bin sajaye hi lagti wo koi dulhan hai
kya tujhme bhi aisi ada aisa fan hai.
ae chand aana na kahin unke aage
tera hushn kuch bi nahi unke aage
yun to apki hur tehreer buahat ghaur se parh ke dil mein utaar letee hei maham ke aap ka likha buahat hee acha lagta hei hamae

magar aaj is tehreer ne yaadon ke dher sare daftar khol diye jaise

kuch hee arse qabl kisi ne hamare liye aisi hee eik nazm likhee thee , vo yaad agayee ............bilkul ishee se milti julti ........kamal ho gaya yeh tou , hans pare isko parh kar

hmmmmmmmm

lagta hei janab apka mehboob buahat khubsoorat hei ya shayed pyar se jab koi dekhta hei to usko vo shakhs khud hee khubsoorat nazar ata hei ,

Khubsooratee se piyar nahi hota

Maham ke khayal mein piyar se hee khubsoorti hoa kartee hei

bauhat pyaree lagee apkee ye tehreer hamae

bauhat see daad hazir hei

suniye ,

ye FOOLON nahi PHOOLON kar lijiye
aur ye HUSN kijiye spell instead of HUSHN
julfon ki bajaiyae ZULFON kar lijiye


theek hei na hmm?


apke ye challenging tones buahat khub lage is nazm mein hamae ,

chaand ko challenge kiya hai ap ne

baraiy raast

wah

khub ye hoee na baat !

Luved ur poem here , sir....


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maham ji - 2nd November 2007, 08:18 PM

maham ji bahut bahut shukriya aapki nawjishon ka aur aapki har islah ka ...
na manzil thi ye meri na rasta mera.
use harane ki zid me itni aage nikal gaye.
urdu tab sahi hoti jab urdu padi hoti ye shayeri ka marz to na jane kab ho gaya.aur maham ji insan har surat me chand se jyada hasin hai kyun ki insan ki tareef khud khuda ne apni kitab me ki hai jab ke chand ki tareef nahi ki khair ..........khuda hafiz...rahnuma
   
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hi - 4th November 2007, 04:21 PM

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ae chand aana na kahi unke aage
tera hushn kuch bhi nahi unke aage.

wo aakhon ki masti wo julfon ke badal
kisi ko bhi karde wo ik pal me pagel.
wo muhabbat ke foolon ka ik chaman hai
kya tujhme bhi aisi ada aisa fan hai
ae chand...................................

wo isharon me baton ka samjhana unka
wo nazren milakar ke sharmana unka.
thori masumiyat thora sa bholapan hai
kya tujhme bhi aisi ada aisa fan hai.
ae chand..................................

na haton me kangan na kano me bali
na mathe pe bindiya na hoton pe lali.
bin sajaye hi lagti wo koi dulhan hai
kya tujhme bhi aisi ada aisa fan hai.
ae chand aana na kahin unke aage
tera hushn kuch bi nahi unke aage
rehnuma ji bahut khoobsurat se ehsaas le kar aaya hai aap ka yeh kalaam, padh kar maza aa gaya. hoobahoo dil ki baat bayan kar rahi hai aap ki yeh nazm.yunhii likhate rahiyega

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hii - 4th November 2007, 04:42 PM

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ae chand aana na kahi unke aage
tera hushn kuch bhi nahi unke aage.

wo aakhon ki masti wo julfon ke badal
kisi ko bhi karde wo ik pal me pagel.
wo muhabbat ke foolon ka ik chaman hai
kya tujhme bhi aisi ada aisa fan hai
ae chand...................................

wo isharon me baton ka samjhana unka
wo nazren milakar ke sharmana unka.
thori masumiyat thora sa bholapan hai
kya tujhme bhi aisi ada aisa fan hai.
ae chand..................................

na haton me kangan na kano me bali
na mathe pe bindiya na hoton pe lali.
bin sajaye hi lagti wo koi dulhan hai
kya tujhme bhi aisi ada aisa fan hai.
ae chand aana na kahin unke aage
tera hushn kuch bi nahi unke aage

rahnuma ji bhot pyara likha hai aapne..bhot accha..

khush rahiye


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maham ji bahut bahut shukriya aapki nawjishon ka aur aapki har islah ka ...
na manzil thi ye meri na rasta mera.
use harane ki zid me itni aage nikal gaye.
urdu tab sahi hoti jab urdu padi hoti ye shayeri ka marz to na jane kab ho gaya.aur maham ji insan har surat me chand se jyada hasin hai kyun ki insan ki tareef khud khuda ne apni kitab me ki hai jab ke chand ki tareef nahi ki khair ..........khuda hafiz...rahnuma

Tabhi to apki itni qadr karte hein ke ap URDU ki zubaan se nabalad hein phir bhi aap itna umda likhte hien ,

aap ki tarha hum bhi HINDI se naabalaud hein phir bhi eik HINDI KAVITA likhne ki koshish ki thee kabhi wahan ja ke parhiye ga us section mein ,

janab ap ko urdu atee ho na atee ho magar ap kamal ke lafz aur andaz khub hie apka ,

aru sab se barh ke jo jazbe ap lafzon ke havalae karte hein bauhat qeemtee mehsus hote hein hamae ,

chaand se haceen tar hone ki baat khub kahee aap ne

aur agar insaan he chaand ho tou haahhhaa

i mean ke MAHAM ka matlab hei MERA CHAAND

ab boliye haahhaa

Just kidding

jokes aside ,

ap ke qalam ki madah,

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maham ji - 23rd November 2007, 09:53 PM

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