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Ghazal: Ek diya mayoos sa. - 19th November 2011, 09:49 AM

sdc pariwaar ke sabhee sadasyo ko mera namaskar.apnee ek aur "koshish" lekar aap logo ke saamane haazir hoon.meree ye "koshish" kis had tak ghazal ban payee hai.iska phaisla aapko karna hai. aapkee beshkeemti raay ka intazaar rahega.


Sardiyo'n me'n dhoop khilnaa saa lage.
Tera ghar aanaa bahut achcha lage.

Zulmato'n* ki had huyi raate'n meri,
Har diyaa maayuus saa jaltaa lage.

Aye hawaa aahista chal is baagh me'n,
Phuul Ke paikar* se Ik kaa'ntaa lage.

Chal chale aa baadalo'n Ke paar ham,
Apnii chhat se ye dhanak* rastaa lage.

Shaakh se sab Zard* patte'n gir gaye'n,
Mera daftar bhii mujhe uthataa lage.

WO nahii'n haasil to kuch haasil na ho,
Baato'n se to tuu ufaq bachchaa lag
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Zulmato'n = darkness
Paikar = body
Dhanak = rainbow
Zard = yellow

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19th November 2011, 11:02 AM

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sdc pariwaar ke sabhee sadasyo ko mera namaskar.apnee ek aur "koshish" lekar aap logo ke saamane haazir hoon.meree ye "koshish" kis had tak ghazal ban payee hai.iska phaisla aapko karna hai. aapkee beshkeemti raay ka intazaar rahega.
sardiyo men dhoop khilana sa lage.
tera ghar aana badha accha lage.

zulmato kee had huyi raaten meree,
ek diya mayoos sa ladata lage.

he hawaa dheere baho ki baag men,
phool ke paekar se ek kanta lage.

rang haatho men pakadane chal diye,
meri chhat se ye dhanak rastaa lage.

zard patte shaakh se girne lage,
mera daftar bhi mujhe uthata lage.

phir abas teri gali men chal diye,
jab gaye humko dikha parda lage.

wo nahi milna to kuch bhi na mile,
baato se to tu UFFAK baccha lage.


paekar- body
zulmat- darkness
dhanak- rainbow

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19th November 2011, 11:10 AM

[QUOTE=uff ak;433271]sdc pariwaar ke sabhee sadasyo ko mera namaskar.apnee ek aur "koshish" lekar aap logo ke saamane haazir hoon.meree ye "koshish" kis had tak ghazal ban payee hai.iska phaisla aapko karna hai. aapkee beshkeemti raay ka intazaar rahega.

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bahut achi pyaaro ghazal huee hai bhayee meri taraf se mubarakbaad


sardiyo men dhoop khilana sa lage.
tera ghar aana badha accha lage.

very nice acha matlaa hai...



zulmato kee had huyi raaten meree,
ek diya mayoos sa ladata lage.

bahut khoob ....... bahut achy daaad

he hawaa dheere baho ki baag men,
phool ke paekar se ek kanta lage.

bahut khoob ..... kyaa nazuk khyaal hai bhayee.... bahut acha

hawaa dheere chalo.... baho ki jagah acha lage to dekh lena

rang haatho men pakadane chal diye,
meri chhat se ye dhanak rastaa lage.


hmmm acha khyaal hai bhayee aur saaf ho saktaa hai...
bahut acha khyaal hai

zard patte shaakh se girne lage,
mera daftar bhi mujhe uthata lage.

haha... bahut achy kyaa sher hai waah ...
bahut achy... kyaa shayri karte ho yaar ... waaah

phir abas teri gali men chal diye,
jab gaye humko dikha parda lage.

hmm ise fir se dekhne ki zaroorat hai...

wo nahi milna to kuch bhi na mile,
baato se to tu UFFAK baccha lage.


acha maqtaa hai bhayee..... .. bas na.... ka wazn jahan tak ho 1 hi lena chahiye ye urdu mai choti awaaz hai.....
isliye ise fir se dekh leN... na ko 1 wazn par hi laye ya iisse bachy


bahut acha lagaa padhnaa... masoom si shayri hai...
dil choo gayeee

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sdc pariwaar ke sabhee sadasyo ko mera namaskar.apnee ek aur "koshish" lekar aap logo ke saamane haazir hoon.meree ye "koshish" kis had tak ghazal ban payee hai.iska phaisla aapko karna hai. aapkee beshkeemti raay ka intazaar rahega.

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bahut achi pyaaro ghazal huee hai bhayee meri taraf se mubarakbaad


sardiyo men dhoop khilana sa lage.
tera ghar aana badha accha lage.

very nice acha matlaa hai...



zulmato kee had huyi raaten meree,
ek diya mayoos sa ladata lage.

bahut khoob ....... bahut achy daaad

he hawaa dheere baho ki baag men,
phool ke paekar se ek kanta lage.

bahut khoob ..... kyaa nazuk khyaal hai bhayee.... bahut acha

hawaa dheere chalo.... baho ki jagah acha lage to dekh lena

rang haatho men pakadane chal diye,
meri chhat se ye dhanak rastaa lage.


hmmm acha khyaal hai bhayee aur saaf ho saktaa hai...
bahut acha khyaal hai

zard patte shaakh se girne lage,
mera daftar bhi mujhe uthata lage.

haha... bahut achy kyaa sher hai waah ...
bahut achy... kyaa shayri karte ho yaar ... waaah

phir abas teri gali men chal diye,
jab gaye humko dikha parda lage.

hmm ise fir se dekhne ki zaroorat hai...

wo nahi milna to kuch bhi na mile,
baato se to tu UFFAK baccha lage.


acha maqtaa hai bhayee..... .. bas na.... ka wazn jahan tak ho 1 hi lena chahiye ye urdu mai choti awaaz hai.....
isliye ise fir se dekh leN... na ko 1 wazn par hi laye ya iisse bachy


bahut acha lagaa padhnaa... masoom si shayri hai...
dil choo gayeee

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sardiyo men dhoop khilana sa lage.
tera ghar aana badha accha lage.

zulmato kee had huyi raaten meree,
ek diya mayoos sa ladata lage.

he hawaa dheere baho ki baag men,
phool ke paekar se ek kanta lage.

rang haatho men pakadane chal diye,
meri chhat se ye dhanak rastaa lage.

zard patte shaakh se girne lage,
mera daftar bhi mujhe uthata lage.

phir abas teri gali men chal diye,
jab gaye humko dikha parda lage.

wo nahi milna to kuch bhi na mile,
baato se to tu UFFAK baccha lage.
ji bhaut sundar .................................



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sardiyo men dhoop khilana sa lage.
tera ghar aana badha accha lage.

zulmato kee had huyi raaten meree,
ek diya mayoos sa ladata lage.

he hawaa dheere baho ki baag men,
phool ke paekar se ek kanta lage.

rang haatho men pakadane chal diye,
meri chhat se ye dhanak rastaa lage.

zard patte shaakh se girne lage,
mera daftar bhi mujhe uthata lage.

phir abas teri gali men chal diye,
jab gaye humko dikha parda lage.

wo nahi milna to kuch bhi na mile,
baato se to tu UFFAK baccha lage.
WaaH ! BehtreeN !!

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Umdaa Ghazal Huii .. UFFAK JI !

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sdc pariwaar ke sabhee sadasyo ko mera namaskar.apnee ek aur "koshish" lekar aap logo ke saamane haazir hoon.meree ye "koshish" kis had tak ghazal ban payee hai.iska phaisla aapko karna hai. aapkee beshkeemti raay ka intazaar rahega.
sardiyo men dhoop khilana sa lage.
tera ghar aana badha accha lage.

zulmato kee had huyi raaten meree,
ek diya mayoos sa ladata lage.

he hawaa dheere baho ki baag men,
phool ke paekar se ek kanta lage.

rang haatho men pakadane chal diye,
meri chhat se ye dhanak rastaa lage.

zard patte shaakh se girne lage,
mera daftar bhi mujhe uthata lage.

phir abas teri gali men chal diye,
jab gaye humko dikha parda lage.

wo nahi milna to kuch bhi na mile,
baato se to tu UFFAK baccha lage.



paekar- body
zulmat- darkness
dhanak- rainbow
uffak saheb aadaab,

kaise haiN aap?
aapki ye koshish bahut achhi lagi mujhe....meri jaanib se daad qubuul kijiyega...


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he hawaa dheere baho ki baag men,
phool ke paekar se ek kanta lage.


ye sher meraa sabse pasandeedah rahaa... Daad na nazraana qabool karen

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kaise haiN aap?
aapki ye koshish bahut achhi lagi mujhe....meri jaanib se daad qubuul kijiyega...
aadaab,bhai sahab.hum to us khuda ke fazal se bahut acche hai.aap kahe aap kaise hain.
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he hawaa dheere baho ki baag men,
phool ke paekar se ek kanta lage.


ye sher meraa sabse pasandeedah rahaa... Daad na nazraana qabool karen

Shaad...
namaskar, shaad bhai.aapko is ghazal ka ye sher pasand aaya.ye puree ghazal qaamayaab rahee.aapkee daad ka nazrana mere sar-maathe.bahut-2 shukriya.
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