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Love Maal Bas Itna Hai Teri Taqdeer Mein Hum Nahi - 13th November 2010, 06:21 AM
Dearest friends...this ghazal, I know is technically not right. I have put together few lines that came to my mind without putting too much thought to it. Just sharing...

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tum hume na chaahon, is baat ka koi gham nahi
malaal bas itna hai, teri taqdeer mein hum nahi

mohabaaton ke safar mein, hum bhale majbur ho
paas humari hai yaadein teri, beshak tum dur ho

naa mumkin sa ab lagta hai, apna ek hona dobara
har lamha par rahega hume, intezaar sirf tumhara

main yeh toh nahi kaheti ki, mere bin tum bezaar ho
par hai muskil ki ho koi jise, mujh jaisa tujhse pyaar ho

jasbaaton ne meri, bana diya tha mujhe kamzor
chalo achcha hai tute dil pe, na chalega ab kisi ka zor

hai dua humari, ki qabul teri har fariyaad ho
tu bane kaamyaab, gila nahi hum barbaad ho

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Andar Ka Dard BayaaN karte ... Sabhi ehsaas dil ko Nam Karte Lagte Mujhe ... bahut umdaa likha hai aapne ... Praneeta Ji !

Yeh do khayal dil ke khaas kareeb rahe ...

tum hume na chaahon, is baat ka koi gham nahi
malaal bas itna hai, teri taqdeer mein hum nahi

hai dua humari, ki qabul teri har fariyaad ho
tu bane kaamyaab, gila nahi hum barbaad ho

Tahe Dil Se Daad Hazir Hai ...

Yunhi likhti rahen aage bhi ... Khush Rahen ...

duaaon ke saath ...



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Dearest friends...this ghazal, I know is technically not right. I have put together few lines that came to my mind without putting too much thought to it. Just sharing...

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tum hume na chaahon, is baat ka koi gham nahi
malaal bas itna hai, teri taqdeer mein hum nahi

mohabaaton ke safar mein, hum bhale majbur ho
paas humari hai yaadein teri, beshak tum dur ho

naa mumkin sa ab lagta hai, apna ek hona dobara
har lamha par rahega hume, intezaar sirf tumhara

main yeh toh nahi kaheti ki, mere bin tum bezaar ho
par hai muskil ki ho koi jise, mujh jaisa tujhse pyaar ho

jasbaaton ne meri, bana diya tha mujhe kamzor
chalo achcha hai tute dil pe, na chalega ab kisi ka zor

hai dua humari, ki qabul teri har fariyaad ho
tu bane kaamyaab, gila nahi hum barbaad ho
praneetajee
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Dearest friends...this ghazal, I know is technically not right. I have put together few lines that came to my mind without putting too much thought to it. Just sharing...

Regards

tum hume na chaahon, is baat ka koi gham nahi
malaal bas itna hai, teri taqdeer mein hum nahi

mohabaaton ke safar mein, hum bhale majbur ho
paas humari hai yaadein teri, beshak tum dur ho

naa mumkin sa ab lagta hai, apna ek hona dobara
har lamha par rahega hume, intezaar sirf tumhara

main yeh toh nahi kaheti ki, mere bin tum bezaar ho
par hai muskil ki ho koi jise, mujh jaisa tujhse pyaar ho

jasbaaton ne meri, bana diya tha mujhe kamzor
chalo achcha hai tute dil pe, na chalega ab kisi ka zor

hai dua humari, ki qabul teri har fariyaad ho
tu bane kaamyaab, gila nahi hum barbaad ho

paneeta jee ko shaad ka aadab.. aaj subah hi aapki is ghazal se mukhatibb hua hoon... behad acche lage aapke khayaalaat... sari kalaam hi mukammal lagi hai..

jasbaaton ne meri, bana diya tha mujhe kamzor
chalo achcha hai tute dil pe, na chalega ab kisi ka zor

ye kalaam kaafi asardar raha... likhti rahen

shaad.

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Dearest friends...this ghazal, I know is technically not right. I have put together few lines that came to my mind without putting too much thought to it. Just sharing...

Regards

tum hume na chaahon, is baat ka koi gham nahi
malaal bas itna hai, teri taqdeer mein hum nahi

mohabaaton ke safar mein, hum bhale majbur ho
paas humari hai yaadein teri, beshak tum dur ho

naa mumkin sa ab lagta hai, apna ek hona dobara
har lamha par rahega hume, intezaar sirf tumhara

main yeh toh nahi kaheti ki, mere bin tum bezaar ho
par hai muskil ki ho koi jise, mujh jaisa tujhse pyaar ho

jasbaaton ne meri, bana diya tha mujhe kamzor
chalo achcha hai tute dil pe, na chalega ab kisi ka zor

hai dua humari, ki qabul teri har fariyaad ho
tu bane kaamyaab, gila nahi hum barbaad ho

aadaab
parneta ji laa jawaab feelings hain main aap ka shukr adaa kartaa hun ki aap ne is khoobsoorat kavita ke parhne ka maoqa diyaa
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Andar Ka Dard BayaaN karte ... Sabhi ehsaas dil ko Nam Karte Lagte Mujhe ... bahut umdaa likha hai aapne ... Praneeta Ji !

Yeh do khayal dil ke khaas kareeb rahe ...

tum hume na chaahon, is baat ka koi gham nahi
malaal bas itna hai, teri taqdeer mein hum nahi

hai dua humari, ki qabul teri har fariyaad ho
tu bane kaamyaab, gila nahi hum barbaad ho

Tahe Dil Se Daad Hazir Hai ...

Yunhi likhti rahen aage bhi ... Khush Rahen ...

duaaon ke saath ...
Naresh ji namaste

shukriya aap ke response ke liye
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bahut khoob.....kai baar technic naa bhi ho dil ke zajbaat likhnechahiye achha lagta hai daad kubul karen matla bahut zabardast hai pasandeeda raha
duaon ke saath
shukriya Ishk sahab 4 ur kind words
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tum hume na chaahon, is baat ka koi gham nahi
malaal bas itna hai, teri taqdeer mein hum nahi

mohabaaton ke safar mein, hum bhale majbur ho
paas humari hai yaadein teri, beshak tum dur ho

naa mumkin sa ab lagta hai, apna ek hona dobara
har lamha par rahega hume, intezaar sirf tumhara

main yeh toh nahi kaheti ki, mere bin tum bezaar ho
par hai muskil ki ho koi jise, mujh jaisa tujhse pyaar ho

jasbaaton ne meri, bana diya tha mujhe kamzor
chalo achcha hai tute dil pe, na chalega ab kisi ka zor

hai dua humari, ki qabul teri har fariyaad ho
tu bane kaamyaab, gila nahi hum barbaad ho

Nice creation Praneeta ji.congratulations.
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paneeta jee ko shaad ka aadab.. aaj subah hi aapki is ghazal se mukhatibb hua hoon... behad acche lage aapke khayaalaat... sari kalaam hi mukammal lagi hai..

jasbaaton ne meri, bana diya tha mujhe kamzor
chalo achcha hai tute dil pe, na chalega ab kisi ka zor

ye kalaam kaafi asardar raha... likhti rahen

shaad.
shukriya shaad sahab padhne aur pasand karne ke liye

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tum hume na chaahon, is baat ka koi gham nahi
malaal bas itna hai, teri taqdeer mein hum nahi

mohabaaton ke safar mein, hum bhale majbur ho
paas humari hai yaadein teri, beshak tum dur ho

naa mumkin sa ab lagta hai, apna ek hona dobara
har lamha par rahega hume, intezaar sirf tumhara

main yeh toh nahi kaheti ki, mere bin tum bezaar ho
par hai muskil ki ho koi jise, mujh jaisa tujhse pyaar ho

jasbaaton ne meri, bana diya tha mujhe kamzor
chalo achcha hai tute dil pe, na chalega ab kisi ka zor

hai dua humari, ki qabul teri har fariyaad ho
tu bane kaamyaab, gila nahi hum barbaad ho

Nice creation Praneeta ji.congratulations.
daad or dua dono qbul kareiN.
rajinderseep
rajinder ji shukriya padhne ke liye
daad or dua qabul hai

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Dearest friends...this ghazal, I know is technically not right. I have put together few lines that came to my mind without putting too much thought to it. Just sharing...

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tum hume na chaahon, is baat ka koi gham nahi
malaal bas itna hai, teri taqdeer mein hum nahi

mohabaaton ke safar mein, hum bhale majbur ho
paas humari hai yaadein teri, beshak tum dur ho

naa mumkin sa ab lagta hai, apna ek hona dobara
har lamha par rahega hume, intezaar sirf tumhara

main yeh toh nahi kaheti ki, mere bin tum bezaar ho
par hai muskil ki ho koi jise, mujh jaisa tujhse pyaar ho

jasbaaton ne meri, bana diya tha mujhe kamzor
chalo achcha hai tute dil pe, na chalega ab kisi ka zor

hai dua humari, ki qabul teri har fariyaad ho
tu bane kaamyaab, gila nahi hum barbaad ho
Aadaab Praneeta ji

Mohtarma bahut umda ehsaso ko aapne alfazo men piroya hai dil ke kareeb raha aapka kalaam meri daad aapke is umda kalaam ke liye qubool kare unhi likhti rahiye aur apni shayri se hame rubaru karati rahiyee...T C...Best of Luck

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9th January 2012, 09:08 PM
emotions are really beyond technicality or rules .
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Meri pyari pari...tere ahsaas muje behad apne se lage...ahsaason ki apni jubaan hoti hai, technically sahi ya galat nahi maloom muje, par ahsaas dil ke kareeb rhe...!!

god bless u dear

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pari ji,very nice lines...i ve read ur poems in this forum...ur all poems,lines r osam n vry heart touching n true one...aise lgta hai ki uss situation me hum khud hi khadae ho...really salute u...god bless u!!!
   
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Aadaab Praneeta ji

Mohtarma bahut umda ehsaso ko aapne alfazo men piroya hai dil ke kareeb raha aapka kalaam meri daad aapke is umda kalaam ke liye qubool kare unhi likhti rahiye aur apni shayri se hame rubaru karati rahiyee...T C...Best of Luck
thank you Kashif sahab.................

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emotions are really beyond technicality or rules .
suna tha jab dard had se guzar jaata hai,labzo ke mele lag jaate hai.aaj kuch aise hi dekha.jus awesome.
thanks Krishna ji................

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Meri pyari pari...tere ahsaas muje behad apne se lage...ahsaason ki apni jubaan hoti hai, technically sahi ya galat nahi maloom muje, par ahsaas dil ke kareeb rhe...!!

god bless u dear
pyari dii........thank you so much.......

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pari ji,very nice lines...i ve read ur poems in this forum...ur all poems,lines r osam n vry heart touching n true one...aise lgta hai ki uss situation me hum khud hi khadae ho...really salute u...god bless u!!!
thanks Tarun ji...............

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Praneeta jii adaab bhut khoob ehssaat aur jazbaaton mai rachi aapki ye kaawish, yun hi apne kalaamo se bazm ko nawaazti rahiye bhut khoob daad qubool framaaiye


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