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8th June 2014, 04:11 PM
Ik muddat baad bazm me'n kuch kahane jaa raha hu'n.......
Mai'n bhii tanhaa huu'n , hamsafar tanhaa.
Saath chalte to hai'n magar tanhaa.
Sab parinde to udh gaye'n dar Ke,
Ik sadaa* se huyaa shajar* tanhaa.
Qaafile manzilo pe jaa pahu'nche'n,
Phir se lo ho gayii dagar tanhaa.
Tanhaa aaye the'n , tanhaa jaaye'nge,
Us pe jiina hai umr bhar tanhaa.
Laash sadhane kii gandh aatii hai,
Maut kiskii hai is qadar tanhaa.
Dekhe , aatii hai aur abhii kyaa - kyaa,
Aaafat aayii hai kab idhar tanhaa.
Bebasii ab to ishtiyaaq* huyi,
Achchhaa lagne lagaa hai ghar tanhaa.
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Sadaa = Sound
Shajar = Tree
Ishtiyaaq = Fondness
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WWWWAAAAAHHHHH !!! LAAJAWAAB !!!!
bas kamaal hi kamaal hai ye ghazal
meri jaanib se dheron daad aur mubaarakbaad aap ko Ufaq sahab.
har ek sher behtareen hai aur qaabil e daad hai
aur ye aashaar to mujhe had se zyada pasand aaye
Tanhaa aaye the'n , tanhaa jaaye'nge,
Us pe jiina hai umr bhar tanhaa.
Dekhe , aatii hai aur abhii kyaa - kyaa,
Aaafat aayii hai kab idhar tanhaa.
Bebasii ab to ishtiyaaq* huyi,
Achchhaa lagne lagaa hai ghar tanhaa.
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8th June 2014, 04:39 PM
Dekhe , aatii hai aur abhii kyaa - kyaa,
Aaafat aayii hai kab idhar tanhaa.
Bebasii ab to ishtiyaaq* huyi,
Achchhaa lagne lagaa hai ghar tanhaa.
Wah wah!
Ek bohat hi khoobsurat aur purasar ghazal ke liye...tah e dil se dheron daad qubool farmaiye. .ufaq sahab...
Sabhi ashaar laajawaab hain. .per aakhri sher aur maqta behad pasand aaye mujhe...matla bhi kamaal hai..
Yuhi likhte rahiye. ...
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
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9th June 2014, 12:04 PM
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Ik muddat baad bazm me'n kuch kahane jaa raha hu'n.......
Mai'n bhii tanhaa huu'n , hamsafar tanhaa.
Saath chalte to hai'n magar tanhaa.
Sab parinde to udh gaye'n dar Ke,
Ik sadaa* se huyaa shajar* tanhaa.
Qaafile manzilo pe jaa pahu'nche'n,
Phir se lo ho gayii dagar tanhaa.
Tanhaa aaye the'n , tanhaa jaaye'nge,
Us pe jiina hai umr bhar tanhaa.
Laash sadhane kii gandh aatii hai,
Maut kiskii hai is qadar tanhaa.
Dekhe , aatii hai aur abhii kyaa - kyaa,
Aaafat aayii hai kab idhar tanhaa.
Bebasii ab to ishtiyaaq* huyi,
Achchhaa lagne lagaa hai ghar tanhaa.
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Sadaa = Sound
Shajar = Tree
Ishtiyaaq = Fondness
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bahot hi khubsurat ghazal hai, Uffaqsaab.....
behad pasand aayee hameN.......
yuN hi likhte rahiye......
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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9th June 2014, 02:39 PM
Uffaq saahab aadaab..... aaj arse baad aapki kalaam ko padhne kii khushnaseebi hasil huii...
main bayaan nahi kar saktaa kis kadar main iski rangeenniiyat me kho gayaa.... alfaazon ke saagar me doob jaana har baar nahii hota , magar is baar aapki kalam ne wo sahar paidaa kiyaa hai ke merii bayaani ke baahar hai...
Sab parinde to udh gaye'n dar Ke,
Ik sadaa* se huyaa shajar* tanhaa.
Qaafile manzilo pe jaa pahu'nche'n,
Phir se lo ho gayii dagar tanhaa.
Tanhaa aaye the'n , tanhaa jaaye'nge,
Us pe jiina hai umr bhar tanhaa.
Laash sadhane kii gandh aatii hai,
Maut kiskii hai is qadar tanhaa.
Dekhe , aatii hai aur abhii kyaa - kyaa,
Aaafat aayii hai kab idhar tanhaa.
ye saare aashar itne ummdahh hain ke kyaa kahun........ bas waahhh hi waahhh aapki khidmat me daad ke phool nazraana e aqeedat pesh karta hoon... aur ummeed karta hoon ke aage bhi hame in kalaamon se aap mahroom na rakkhenge.....
Sach kahun to ye kalaam bahot apnaa sa lagaa mujhe, kyonki kuch aisaa hi nacheeez ne bhii likhne ki koshish kii thii, shayad ke is meyaar kaa na ho magar aap ek baar dekh lenge to mujhe khushi hogii... tohfa samajhiyega saahab...
http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthread.php?t=73759
aate rahiyega..
Shaad.....
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12th June 2014, 09:50 AM
Zarra sahib hausla afzaai Ke liye aapka shukrguzar hu
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13th June 2014, 10:48 PM
उफाक साहब.....बेहद खूबसूरत कलाम पेश किया है आपने......तनहा आये थे...तनहा जायेंगे...वाह........
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17th June 2014, 05:54 PM
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18th June 2014, 02:36 AM
Lajawaab ghzal se nawaaza hai aapne ehle bazm ko tamaam aashaar bhut khoob rhe par khass karke aakhri dono aasharo ke kya kehne daad hazir e khidmat hai qubool farmaaiye
Aslam
zindagi ke haseen lamhe ka
Khoobsurat sa intekhaab ho tum
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22nd June 2014, 06:00 PM
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Dekhe , aatii hai aur abhii kyaa - kyaa,
Aaafat aayii hai kab idhar tanhaa.
Bebasii ab to ishtiyaaq* huyi,
Achchhaa lagne lagaa hai ghar tanhaa.
Wah wah!
Ek bohat hi khoobsurat aur purasar ghazal ke liye...tah e dil se dheron daad qubool farmaiye. .ufaq sahab...
Sabhi ashaar laajawaab hain. .per aakhri sher aur maqta behad pasand aaye mujhe...matla bhi kamaal hai..
Yuhi likhte rahiye. ...
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22nd June 2014, 07:21 PM
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Ik muddat baad bazm me'n kuch kahane jaa raha hu'n.......
Mai'n bhii tanhaa huu'n , hamsafar tanhaa.
Saath chalte to hai'n magar tanhaa.
Sab parinde to udh gaye'n dar Ke,
Ik sadaa* se huyaa shajar* tanhaa.
Qaafile manzilo pe jaa pahu'nche'n,
Phir se lo ho gayii dagar tanhaa.
Tanhaa aaye the'n , tanhaa jaaye'nge,
Us pe jiina hai umr bhar tanhaa.
Laash sadhane kii gandh aatii hai,
Maut kiskii hai is qadar tanhaa.
Dekhe , aatii hai aur abhii kyaa - kyaa,
Aaafat aayii hai kab idhar tanhaa.
Bebasii ab to ishtiyaaq* huyi,
Achchhaa lagne lagaa hai ghar tanhaa.
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Sadaa = Sound
Shajar = Tree
Ishtiyaaq = Fondness
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simiply minblowing! bahot khub sahab....thnx for sharing
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Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
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23rd June 2014, 12:13 PM
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Ik muddat baad bazm me'n kuch kahane jaa raha hu'n.......
Mai'n bhii tanhaa huu'n , hamsafar tanhaa.
Saath chalte to hai'n magar tanhaa.
Sab parinde to udh gaye'n dar Ke,
Ik sadaa* se huyaa shajar* tanhaa.
Qaafile manzilo pe jaa pahu'nche'n,
Phir se lo ho gayii dagar tanhaa.
Tanhaa aaye the'n , tanhaa jaaye'nge,
Us pe jiina hai umr bhar tanhaa.
Laash sadhane kii gandh aatii hai,
Maut kiskii hai is qadar tanhaa.
Dekhe , aatii hai aur abhii kyaa - kyaa,
Aaafat aayii hai kab idhar tanhaa.
Bebasii ab to ishtiyaaq* huyi,
Achchhaa lagne lagaa hai ghar tanhaa.
##################
Sadaa = Sound
Shajar = Tree
Ishtiyaaq = Fondness
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Waaah ufaq sahab. Bahut bahut shaandaar ghazal ke liye mubaarakbad aapko. Bahut khushi hui aapki ghazal padh kar. YooN hi likhte rahiye sahab aur mahfil ko rangeen banaaye rakhiye.
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26th June 2014, 10:40 AM
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bahot hi khubsurat ghazal hai, Uffaqsaab.....
behad pasand aayee hameN.......
yuN hi likhte rahiye......
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Uffaq saahab aadaab..... aaj arse baad aapki kalaam ko padhne kii khushnaseebi hasil huii...
main bayaan nahi kar saktaa kis kadar main iski rangeenniiyat me kho gayaa.... alfaazon ke saagar me doob jaana har baar nahii hota , magar is baar aapki kalam ne wo sahar paidaa kiyaa hai ke merii bayaani ke baahar hai...
Sab parinde to udh gaye'n dar Ke,
Ik sadaa* se huyaa shajar* tanhaa.
Qaafile manzilo pe jaa pahu'nche'n,
Phir se lo ho gayii dagar tanhaa.
Tanhaa aaye the'n , tanhaa jaaye'nge,
Us pe jiina hai umr bhar tanhaa.
Laash sadhane kii gandh aatii hai,
Maut kiskii hai is qadar tanhaa.
Dekhe , aatii hai aur abhii kyaa - kyaa,
Aaafat aayii hai kab idhar tanhaa.
ye saare aashar itne ummdahh hain ke kyaa kahun........ bas waahhh hi waahhh aapki khidmat me daad ke phool nazraana e aqeedat pesh karta hoon... aur ummeed karta hoon ke aage bhi hame in kalaamon se aap mahroom na rakkhenge.....
Sach kahun to ye kalaam bahot apnaa sa lagaa mujhe, kyonki kuch aisaa hi nacheeez ne bhii likhne ki koshish kii thii, shayad ke is meyaar kaa na ho magar aap ek baar dekh lenge to mujhe khushi hogii... tohfa samajhiyega saahab...
http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthread.php?t=73759
aate rahiyega..
Shaad.....
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30th June 2014, 01:34 PM
Qaafile manzilo pe jaa pahu'nche'n,
Phir se lo ho gayii dagar tanhaa.
Bohat Khoob kaha Ufaq! Daad pesh hai!
Pravenn
raah meiN hi manziloN ka zikr mat chedo Praveen
manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi
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उफाक साहब.....बेहद खूबसूरत कलाम पेश किया है आपने......तनहा आये थे...तनहा जायेंगे...वाह........
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Bahut khoobsurat expression hai emotions ka...wah
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3rd July 2014, 01:14 PM
Wahhhhhh Janab Ufaq Sahab.... Achi Ghazal Hui Hai...
Dheron DAAAAD
Likhte Rahiye
Ay Chaara-Saaz Dil Pe M're Daal Ik Nazar
Mujhko Bas Aik Jism Ka Aazaar Hee Nahi
AHMAD ALI SHAKIL
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ek sachchaai..............
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5th July 2014, 12:29 AM
Bohot hi khubsurat ghazal huee hai janaab mubarakbaad aur daad qubool kijiyegaa..
YuuN tau mehfil bhari hai logoN se,
Ho gaya tujhko soch kar tanha.
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5th July 2014, 01:09 AM
Congratulations for this awesome ghazal, ufaq ji...!
2nd sher is my favourite...!
Keep it up, ok...?
Jeene ke liye mujhe ek sapna dedo
Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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8th July 2014, 09:16 AM
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waaaaaaah waaah janab bahot khub,............................................. !!!!!
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8th July 2014, 09:41 PM
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Ik muddat baad bazm me'n kuch kahane jaa raha hu'n.......
Mai'n bhii tanhaa huu'n , hamsafar tanhaa.
Saath chalte to hai'n magar tanhaa.
Sab parinde to udh gaye'n dar Ke,
Ik sadaa* se huyaa shajar* tanhaa.
Qaafile manzilo pe jaa pahu'nche'n,
Phir se lo ho gayii dagar tanhaa.
Tanhaa aaye the'n , tanhaa jaaye'nge,
Us pe jiina hai umr bhar tanhaa.
Laash sadhane kii gandh aatii hai,
Maut kiskii hai is qadar tanhaa.
Dekhe , aatii hai aur abhii kyaa - kyaa,
Aaafat aayii hai kab idhar tanhaa.
Bebasii ab to ishtiyaaq* huyi,
Achchhaa lagne lagaa hai ghar tanhaa.
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Sadaa = Sound
Shajar = Tree
Ishtiyaaq = Fondness
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Ufaq sahab ....waah kya baat hai.....behtareen ahsaasoN se saji aapki ye peshkash ....... ”,ik sadaa se hua shazar tanha" ......dili daad....qabool farmaaoyega.
Jitni baar bhi pado utni baar naya lutf....
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10th July 2014, 10:54 AM
Dekhe , aatii hai aur abhii kyaa - kyaa,
Aaafat aayii hai kab idhar tanhaa.
Wahh... kia kehne...
daad hi daad,
DuaooN k saath,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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Lajawaab ghzal se nawaaza hai aapne ehle bazm ko tamaam aashaar bhut khoob rhe par khass karke aakhri dono aasharo ke kya kehne daad hazir e khidmat hai qubool farmaaiye
Aslam
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13th July 2014, 09:24 PM
Dekhe , aatii hai aur abhii kyaa - kyaa,
Aaafat aayii hai kab idhar tanhaa.
Wahhh.. Ufaq saheb...
kia kehne janab... boht khoob...
DuaooN k saath,,,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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17th July 2014, 09:25 AM
bahut hee badiya ghazal hui ufaq jee....saare sher dil ke kareeb rahe.......daad kubul karein.....
एक हाथ में दिल उनके एक हाथ में खंजर था
चेहरे पे दोस्त का मुखौटा अजीब सा मंजर था
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Superb...excellent piece of work...expression, thoughts, emotions....amazing.
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6th August 2014, 04:43 PM
bahot khoob. yeh sher haasil-e-ghazal rahaa..dil se daad
Qaafile manzilo pe jaa pahu'nche'n,
Phir se lo ho gayii dagar tanhaa.
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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Waaah ufaq sahab. Bahut bahut shaandaar ghazal ke liye mubaarakbad aapko. Bahut khushi hui aapki ghazal padh kar. YooN hi likhte rahiye sahab aur mahfil ko rangeen banaaye rakhiye.
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23rd August 2014, 10:33 PM
Qaafile manzilo pe jaa pahu'nche'n,
Phir se lo ho gayii dagar tanhaa.
is ek sher pe qurbaan jaaun ufaq saahab... waah kya andaaze bayaan hai, kyaa soze dil hai.... bahot khoob... majboor kar diyaaa ek baar fir se iski shaan me kaseede padhne ke liye.... nayaab shaayri ka namuuna hai ye kalaam..... daad tahe dil se pesh hain....
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24th August 2014, 12:23 AM
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Ik muddat baad bazm me'n kuch kahane jaa raha hu'n.......
Mai'n bhii tanhaa huu'n , hamsafar tanhaa.
Saath chalte to hai'n magar tanhaa.
Sab parinde to udh gaye'n dar Ke,
Ik sadaa* se huyaa shajar* tanhaa.
Qaafile manzilo pe jaa pahu'nche'n,
Phir se lo ho gayii dagar tanhaa.
Tanhaa aaye the'n , tanhaa jaaye'nge,
Us pe jiina hai umr bhar tanhaa.
Laash sadhane kii gandh aatii hai,
Maut kiskii hai is qadar tanhaa.
Dekhe , aatii hai aur abhii kyaa - kyaa,
Aaafat aayii hai kab idhar tanhaa.
Bebasii ab to ishtiyaaq* huyi,
Achchhaa lagne lagaa hai ghar tanhaa.
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Sadaa = Sound
Shajar = Tree
Ishtiyaaq = Fondness
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Bohut sundar. Shukriya urdu lafzo ke matlab ke liye warna main besamajh iska pura lutf na utha paati.
Apki dost
Sarika
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