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9th March 2005, 03:59 PM
Pyare doston apnoN ki farmaaish per to aksar log kuchh na kuchh kehte haiN...aaj mai yahaaN apnoN ki shikaayat per kuchh likh raha hooN...jo aap sab ki nazar kar raha hooN.
ApnoN ki Shikaayat Per Mere yaar mere pyar pe shaayad Wo pehle sa eitbaar nahi kar paate, Mai jo Mut.thibhar aasmaaN chaahuN to Daaman Chhudane pe, aa jaate haiN, Mere Vujud ke sookhe pat.te giraane ke liye Wo naadaan meri shaakhoN ko hilaate haiN, Per aksar un sookhe huve pat.toN ke saath Kuchh maasoom-anchhuve, KoNpal bhi gir jaate haiN, Kuchh ghataaeiN amaawas ki tareh Apni shakshiyat pe chhaa jaati hai, Isme apni kya khata hai gar suraj ki tarah Ye ghataaein ham cheer nahi paate haiN, Beronak is jindgi me tumhare phooloN ne Phir bhi kuchh to mehka rak.kha hai, Mere ghar me Guldaan nahi ye kehkar Wo apne phooloN ko waapas liye jaate haiN, Mumkin hai ke is taraf se tumko Sab Ujla-Ujla hi nazar aata ho, Is ‘Chaand’ ka ek syah chehra peechhe bhi hai Shaayad mere dost, use dekh nahi paate haiN. Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN. - Chaand |
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Re: ApnoN ki Shikaayat Per -
9th March 2005, 04:17 PM
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9th March 2005, 04:39 PM
Mere yaar mere pyar pe shaayad
Wo pehle sa eitbaar nahi kar paate, Mai jo Mut.thibhar aasmaaN chaahuN to Daaman Chhudane pe, aa jaate haiN, Again a wonderful start to the post.... Mere Vujud ke sookhe pat.te giraane ke liye Wo naadaan meri shaakhoN ko hilaate haiN, Per aksar un sookhe huve pat.toN ke saath Kuchh maasoom-anchhuve, KoNpal bhi gir jaate haiN, Waaahhh! Kuchh ghataaeiN amaawas ki tareh Apni shakshiyat pe chhaa jaati hai, Isme apni kya khata hai gar suraj ki tarah Ye ghataaein ham cheer nahi paate haiN, WAaaaaaaahhhh... Beronak is jindgi me tumhare phooloN ne Phir bhi kuchh to mehka rak.kha hai, Mere ghar me Guldaan nahi ye kehkar Wo apne phooloN ko waapas liye jaate haiN, Woh apne phoolon ko waapis liye jaate hian........Amazinggggg!! Mumkin hai ke is taraf se tumko Sab Ujla-Ujla hi nazar aata ho, Is ‘Chaand’ ka ek syah chehra peechhe bhi hai Shaayad mere dost, use dekh nahi paate haiN. Aaaaaaaaaaah.... Chaand bhai..Ultimate.... Dear Chaand Bhai! Ek aur behetreen rachna, Kitne saade aur khoobsurat shabdon me aapne apne ehsaas pesh kiye hain.. humesh aki tarah.... Aapke ehsaas itne sundar hote hain...ke shabdon ka chhooo jaan laazmi hai... Meri dilee daad is behetreen rachna ke liye  Unse Guzarish hai.. I mean aapse guzarish hai .. Likhte reha... Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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9th March 2005, 04:50 PM
Hi Chaand Bhai,
Wah mere bhai, shikayat ko bhi itna behtereen kalaam bana daala. Bohot khoob. Bas uhi umda kalaam likhte raho. Salim If there are no tears in the eyes, there will be no rainbow in the soul Happiness is a butterfly, which, when pursued, is always just beyond your grasp, but which, if you sit down quietly, may alight upon you. We come to love not by finding a perfect person but by learning to see an imperfect person perfectly |
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Re: ApnoN ki Shikaayat Per -
9th March 2005, 05:08 PM
Waah..Chand..bahoot hi umda kaha hai aapne..
Bade behatareen shabdon ke moti chune hain.. aapne.. wishes.. Quote:
Dhoop Mai.N Baitha Hai Khud Pedh Lagaane Wala http://artwanted.com/vijen http://vijendrasvij.com |
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9th March 2005, 05:15 PM
Chaand bhai.....
bahut aacha likha hai.....wah to nahi kahoonga kyunki dard hai isme.....lekin dil mein utar gaya aapka ye dard.... **(*·.¸(`·.¸ ¸.·´)¸.·*)** *·.¸Paigaam -e- Aman¸.·* **(¸.·´(¸.·* *·.¸)`·.¸)** ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* inhan ankhaaon vicho kadi, tere hanju vaghe si..... aaj ki hoye, jehda ^AMAN^ da lahoo vagda ae...... AMAN RAHI |
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9th March 2005, 05:16 PM
~~~Tanhaa~~~
waah ji waah kamaal hi kar diya aapne to.. aapka ye kalaam padne ke baad to aansoo aur bhi bewafaa ho gaye.. ab mujhko unse koi shikaayat nahi rahi, iski bhi unhe shikaayat hai kya karen... aapka dost ~~~tanhaa~~~ wo chubtey hai aur zakhm dete hai imaandaari se, phool to bewafa hotey hai...dhoka dete hai wafadaari se DARD KO BHI AB DARD HONE LAGA, DARD KHUD HI GAAV BARANE LAGA, DARD KE MAARE HUM NA ROYE KABHI, DARD HUM KO CHUKAR KHUD HI RONE LAGA.............. |
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hi -
9th March 2005, 05:38 PM
Chaand ji..m so sorry i read this post so late!...its 2 gud chaand ji..apke chehre pe jo saadgi nazar ati hai...voh iin shabdon mein ubhar k dikh rahi hai...wel ek ek shabd dil ko chhu gaya hai...kya kahu...U r 2 good........!
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9th March 2005, 07:56 PM
Meena ji...aapki upastithi...sir aaNkhoN per...aapke reply ka is naacheez ko besabri se intzaar rahega.
Chaand Pulkit mere dost...shukriya...na sirf tumhaari is daad ke liye, balki mere ehsaasoN ko samjha...shukriya dost...meri is hausla afzaai or zarra nawaazi ke liye. Chaand Salim mere dost..shaayad yahi achchha hai ki shikaayat ek rachna ka roop ikhtiyaar kar le..or apnoN ki berukhi bhi na rahe. Shukriya Dost...meri is hausla afzaai ke liye. Chaand Vijen ...shukriya dost...tahe dil se shukriya tumhaare is reply or mera hausla barhane ke liye. Chaand Aman dost...shukrgujaar hai ye Chaand tumhaara bhi...meri post per tumhaare reply or meri hausla afzaai ka tahe dil se shukriya. Chaand ab mujhko unse koi shikaayat nahi rahi, iski bhi unhe shikaayat hai kya karen Bahut achchhe tanhaa ji...aapke is sher ne to gazab dha diya...tahe dil se shukriya aapke reply or behtreen sher ke liye. Chaand Sorry kehkar dostoN ko sharminda nahi karte Komal ji..aap der se nahi haiN ...bilkul sahi samay per haiN meri is koshish per...or aksar der ho bhi sakti hai...per khushi hai ki aapne ise parha mujhe saraaha....tahe dil se shukrgujaar hai ye Chaand aapka bhi. Ye nawaazish hai aapki dostoN...jo ye Chaand khud ko aasmaaN ke Chaand ke kareeb paata hai. Shukriya aap sabhi ka. Chaand Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN. - Chaand |
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9th March 2005, 08:23 PM
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har uljhan yuN ulajhati ja rahi jindgi maiN.. dostoN ka aitbaar na raha jab jindgi maiN... patto pe kabhi tehar na saka "saccha_pyar" maiN unki soch ke pachtaya phir jindgi maiN... chaNd bhai .... bohat khoob likha hai aapne ye kalaam .... apni likhawat se thoda sa change karte hue .... sach kabhi kabhi yuN hota hai jab huM .. jinke liye poori tarah se sochte hai.. unke liye apne upar musibatoN ko le lete hai... par tab bhi khatawaar keh laate hai ... bohat dukh hota hai ... ek kahani jo maiNe 10th claas maiN padhi thi english ki book maiN yaad aa gayi ... bohtoN ne padhi hogi ,... par aaj yahaN likh raha huN ... kyuNki hath rukna nahi chahte ... sankchhipt maiN hi sahi ... to hua yuN .... kahiN ek gareeb kisaan tha bohat din pehle ... poore saal bhar kheti karta ... par tab bhi itna na kama paata ki poore saal aaram se gujar sake... kharcha badi mushkil se hi chalta tha ... par is saal woh kisaan kuch jyada pareshan tha kyuNki baarish na ke barabar hui .. aur woh jitni kheti kar paya usse poore saal ka gujara nahi chal pata ... tab usne socha ki woh ek khat bhagwaan ke naam likhega ... aur unse apne upar reham ki bheek mangega... usne waisa hi kiya ... aur ek khat likha ... jisme poori vyatha keh sunai usne ... aur bhagwaan se kaha ki use 3000 rs bhi bheje .. taki woh is sal ka kharcha chala sake aur agle saal kheti bhi kar paye ... usne letter fold kiya ek envolep maiN dala aur uske upar likh diya to god... aur apna pata peeche likh diya ...aur use post box maiN daal aaya .... rozana ki tarah post box maiN se mail nikali gayi aur post master ke pas bheji gayi alag karne ke liye ... post master chonk gaya .. jab usne dekha ye chitthi to bhagwaan ke naam hai ... par bhagwaan ke paas kaise bheje use woh .. usne letter nikala aur padha to use rona aa gaya kisaaan ki halat padh kar ... uska vishawash kaise tod de letter wapas bhej uski samajh na aa raha tha ... usne faisla kiya ki sare post office ke karam chari apni salary ka kuch hissa daan kareNge uske liye ... sabne bhi is nek kam maiN hath batane ka faisla kiya ... paise jama kiye gaye ... par kul mila ke 2500 rs hi jama ho paye ... post master ne sare paise bhej diye aur ek letter bhi .. bhagwaan ki taraf se ... ki maiN paise bhej raha huN .... paise kisaan ko mile ... kisan patra pake khushi se phool gaya .., aur usne paise gine ... to paya isme 500 rs kam hai .,,, aur letter maiN likha tha ki paise bhej raha huN... tab usne aek doosra khat likha ... phir post master ke hath maiN aaya wo .. par woh chonk gaya use padh ke .... usme likha tha ... bhagwaan aap bohat dayawaan ho ... aapne mujh gareeb ki suni ... mujhe poore paise nahi mile hai ... 500 rs aur bheje jaldi se ... aur haN kisi aur jariye se bhejna ... post office wale bade chor hai ...pichli bari maiN se unhone 500 rs chura ke apne paas rakh liye the ... paise jaldi bhejna ....  to bhai yahi baat hai ... jab koi humare liye karta hai .. bina bataye ... apne ko chupa ke .. to kayi bar hum khud hi gunahgaar ban jate hai... aapka last sher sahayd yahi keh raha hai ... aap meri daad teh dil se kabool kareN ... aur haN ... kahani poori tarah se sahi hai iske bare maiN keh nahi sakta .. par jitni yaad hai yahaN likh di ... aap apna khayal rakhna ... aur aate rehna .... aapka bhai kunal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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10th March 2005, 01:04 PM
Beronak is jindgi me tumhare phooloN ne
Phir bhi kuchh to mehka rak.kha hai, Mere ghar me Guldaan nahi ye kehkar Wo apne phooloN ko waapas liye jaate haiN, wah kaya baat hai bahut acche , Dard Jab kaanto se milta hai to 2-4 pal ka hota hai , Aur dard jo phoon se mile wo behisab hota hai bye tanha |
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10th March 2005, 01:20 PM
Namaskar Chand ji
ek bahut khoobsurat sa qalam pesh kiya hay aapne.Simplicity with beauty of imaginations......... Mere yaar mere pyar pe shaayad Wo pehle sa eitbaar nahi kar paate, Mai jo Mut.thibhar aasmaaN chaahuN to Daaman Chhudane pe, aa jaate haiN, Dhoondtey hain muthey bhar Asmaan par hamesha asmaan nahin milta is duniya mein sabhi ko muqadar ka taz nahin milta Mere Vujud ke sookhe pat.te giraane ke liye Wo naadaan meri shaakhoN ko hilaate haiN, Per aksar un sookhe huve pat.toN ke saath Kuchh maasoom-anchhuve, KoNpal bhi gir jaate haiN, beautiful imaginations Kuchh ghataaeiN amaawas ki tareh Apni shakshiyat pe chhaa jaati hai, Isme apni kya khata hai gar suraj ki tarah Ye ghataaein ham cheer nahi paate haiN, kali ghata itni gehre to nahin ki suraj na aa sakey.........kirno ki roshni ko kaun rok paya hay Beronak is jindgi me tumhare phooloN ne Phir bhi kuchh to mehka rak.kha hai, Mere ghar me Guldaan nahi ye kehkar Wo apne phooloN ko waapas liye jaate haiN, Mumkin hai ke is taraf se tumko Sab Ujla-Ujla hi nazar aata ho, Is ‘Chaand’ ka ek syah chehra peechhe bhi hai Shaayad mere dost, use dekh nahi paate haiN. In all a very nice poem u have presented |
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10th March 2005, 03:21 PM
Kunal mere dost shukrya tumhaare is reply or khoobsoorat si story yaad dilaane ke liye...tahe dil se shukrguzaar hai ye Chaand tumhaara.
Dard Jab kaanto se milta hai to 2-4 pal ka hota hai , Aur dard jo phoon se mile wo behisab hota hai tanha ji...aapka ye sher bilkul sahi hai or pasand bhi aaya...shukriya is sher or...meri hausla afzaai ke liye. Chaand Sukanya ji...tahe dil se shukriya aapka mere in shabdoN me chhupe khayaalatoN ko aapne samjha ...jaana or mera hausla barhaya. shukriya ek baar phir. Chaand Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN. - Chaand |
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11th March 2005, 01:31 AM
namastee..chandji...
kasie hoo sirkar... . wah yar..bahut khoob ..likha hai apne...i mean .. i don't have.. words.. for this..gr8 stuff..... .. apka kalam.. padh kar..wakai mein kuch baat yaad aa gai...bahut khoob likha hai sikar.. apne..bahut khoob..these..lines are..gr8--> Mere Vujud ke sookhe pat.te giraane ke liye Wo naadaan meri shaakhoN ko hilaate haiN, Per aksar un sookhe huve pat.toN ke saath Kuchh maasoom-anchhuve, KoNpal bhi gir jaate haiN, Kuchh ghataaeiN amaawas ki tareh Apni shakshiyat pe chhaa jaati hai, Isme apni kya khata hai gar suraj ki tarah Ye ghataaein ham cheer nahi paate haiN, bahut.. khoob..sirkar..aise hi likhte rahiyega.... aur mehfil.. ko ..apne..rangon se rangeen karte rahiyega... bye n... take care.. Zindagi Maut ke pehlu mein soo rai hai... Us bewafa se na pucho meri maut ki wajah... Woh to bus zamane ko dikhane ke liye roo rai hai... |
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11th March 2005, 12:26 PM
mana mere dost...tumhe meri ye koshish pasand aayi...jaankar achchha laga...tahe dil se shurkguzaah hai tumhara ye Chaand, is hausla afzaai ke liye...per jo baat yaad aai uska jikr to kiya hi nahi tumne...jaroor likhna.
Thanks Chaand Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN. - Chaand |
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6th May 2005, 08:00 PM
chaandji
behad khoob kaha hai aapne daad kubul kijiye sonal |
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7th May 2005, 02:07 PM
Tahe dil se shukriya Soni_Sonal ji....meri is hausla afzaai ke liye tahe dil se shukriya.
Chaand Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN. - Chaand |
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