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Ghazal:'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa', -
18th September 2006, 05:57 PM
yaaraan-e-mehfil:
aadaab arz hai:-
aaj phir meiN aap sab ke Khidmat meiN haazir ho rahaa hooN..
aik gairmuraddif Ghazal peSh hai .. jis ki farmaa'iSh aap meiN se to kisi ne bhi naheeN kii, par apni hii farmaa'iSh par peSh kar rahaa huuN ..
vaazeh ho k is Ghazal kee "Zameen" jis par maine 'Khast kaari'kee hai, 'janaab-e-jigar mooradaabaadi Saahib' ki hai... yeH Ghazal aap sab kee nazar karta huuN.. (maine ess Ghazal se apna taKhallus 'Ghaafil' istemaal kiya hai)
tau, leejiye, Ghazal haazir hai.. aap agar ise dheeme dheeme gungunaa kar paRheN to kyaa baat ho!
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Matla arz hai:-
'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa'
sitam dhaaieyega tau pachtaaieyegaa
na dil apna yuuN aap taRpaaiyegaa
Khataa gar ho ham se tau samajhaaiyegaa
yeH Sher deKhiye:-
agar baat naa ban sake muskuraa kar
tau aShkoN se daaman bhigo laaiyegaa
haiN dar par tumhaare sadaa dast_basta
jo ho hukm sarkaar farmaaiyegaa
(dast_basta: hands folded . haath joRe)
Khilona jo samjhaa, bane ham Khilona
KhilonoN se kya dil ko behlaaiyega.
bagaawat, adaavat, jafaa aur zulmat
muHabbat meiN kya raNg diKhlaaiyega
bhulaane kee koShiSh kareiN ess tarah kee
jo bhoole haiN ham ab, na yaad aaiyegaa
Gaur farmaaiye:-
muHabbat hai dil meiN Shikaayat zabaaN par
kareN kya ab izhaar farmaaiyegaa
Maqta arz hai:-
judaa ho ke :GHAFIL: nahiiN jee sakegaa
agar jaaieyegaa tau laut aaiyegaa
(Ghaafil: Care less also taKhallus here)
Khair-aNdesh
- Mayank 'Ghaafil'[/b]
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18th September 2006, 08:38 PM
mayank ji kaise ho aap
aapki peshkas bahot hi alag hoti hai yaar har bar ki tarha
bhot achha laga ye peshkas padhke
aap bahot hi umda likhte hai
ummid haiage bhi aap kiumda peshkas hame un padhne ko milegi
aapka dost
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ek bar phir -
18th September 2006, 11:09 PM
ek bar phir tum ne ahsas dila diya ek tum kya ho bahut khoobsoorat kalam laye ho
aur sare sher lajawab hain par mujeh jo sab se zyada ahhe lage woh ye hain bahut khoob hain
Anil
na dil apna yuuN aap taRpaaiyegaa,
Khataa gar ho ham se tau samajhaaiyegaa..
agar baat naa ban sake muskuraa kar,
tau aShkoN se daaman bhigo laaiyegaa..
muHabbat hai dil meiN Shikaayat zabaaN par,
kareN kya ab izhaar farmaaiyegaa..
judaa ho ke :GHAFIL: nahiiN jee sakegaa
agar jaaieyegaa tau laut aaiyegaa..
mere ashar ko mahoob samjh ke chhoomte the jo
kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai
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Re: Ghazal:'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa', -
19th September 2006, 12:24 AM
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Originally posted by Anjana Rahi
[color=royal blue]yaaraan-e-mehfil:
aadaab arz hai:-
aaj phir meiN aap sab ke Khidmat meiN haazir ho rahaa hooN..
aik gairmuraddif Ghazal peSh hai .. jis ki farmaa'iSh aap meiN se to kisi ne bhi naheeN kii, par apni hii farmaa'iSh par peSh kar rahaa huuN ..
vaazeh ho k is Ghazal kee "Zameen" jis par maine 'Khast kaari'kee hai, 'janaab-e-jigar mooradaabaadi Saahib' ki aik geet "aji ham se bach kar kahaaN jaaiyegaa" se hai,aur essi Ghazal ka ek misra bataur taaraahi misra ke maine istemaal kiya hai.. yeH Ghazal aap sab kee nazar karta huuN.. (maine ess Ghazal se apna taKhallus badal kar 'Ghaafil' kar liya hai)
tau, leejiye, Ghazal haazir hai.. aap agar ise dheeme dheeme gungunaa kar paRheN to kyaa baat ho!
************************************************
Matla arz hai:-
'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa',
sitam dhaaieyega tau pachtaaieyegaa..
na dil apna yuuN aap taRpaaiyegaa,
Khataa gar ho ham se tau samajhaaiyegaa..
yeH Sher deKhiye:-
agar baat naa ban sake muskuraa kar,
tau aShkoN se daaman bhigo laaiyegaa..
haiN dar par tumhaare sadaa dast_basta,
jo ho hukm sarkaar farmaaiyegaa..
(dast_basta: hands folded . haaTh joRe)
Khilona jo samjhaa, bane ham Khilona,
KhilonoN se kya dil ko behlaaiyega..
bagaawat, adaavat, jafaa aur zulmat,
muHabbat meiN kya raNg diKhlaaiyega..
bhulaane kee koShiSh kareiN ess tarah kee,
jo bhoole haiN ham ab, na yaad aaiyegaa..
Gaur farmaaiye:-
muHabbat hai dil meiN Shikaayat zabaaN par,
kareN kya ab izhaar farmaaiyegaa..
Maqta arz hai:-
judaa ho ke :GHAFIL: nahiiN jee sakegaa
agar jaaieyegaa tau laut aaiyegaa..
(Ghaafil: Care less also taKhallus here)
Khair-aNdesh
- Mayank 'Ghaafil'[/color]
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Mayank saahab tasleemaat
aapki Ghazal padhi aur bohat pasaNd bhi aayi.....tam'aam ash'aar achche haiN, meri mubarakbaad qabuul kijiye
rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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19th September 2006, 01:52 PM
wah! wah! wah!
janab jitni tareef ki jaye kam hai....behad pasand aaya kalaam
daad qabool kijiyega
Aaina mujhse meri pehli si surat maange
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Re: Ghazal:'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa', -
19th September 2006, 08:00 PM
Namaskar Ghaafil Ji
Socha jab aapne takhallus change kiya hay to ghaafil hi likhein....Aapki Yeh Ghazal bahut khoobsurat hay.....pichle baar to kuch mistakes dhuund payi thi par iss baar koyi mistake nahin dhuund payi...it's perfect.....itney khoobsurat Ghazal ke liye hamare daad aur mubarakbaad kabul kijeyega...
'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa',
sitam dhaaieyega tau pachtaaieyegaa..
judaa ho ke :GHAFIL: nahiiN jee sakegaa
agar jaaieyegaa tau laut aaiyegaa..
Yeh donon sher bahut khoobsurat hain....yuunhi likhtey rahiye....
Sada kush rahiye
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Re: Ghazal:'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa', -
20th September 2006, 12:26 PM
Quote:
Originally posted by Anjana Rahi
[color=royal blue]yaaraan-e-mehfil:
aadaab arz hai:-
aaj phir meiN aap sab ke Khidmat meiN haazir ho rahaa hooN..
aik gairmuraddif Ghazal peSh hai .. jis ki farmaa'iSh aap meiN se to kisi ne bhi naheeN kii, par apni hii farmaa'iSh par peSh kar rahaa huuN ..
vaazeh ho k is Ghazal kee "Zameen" jis par maine 'Khast kaari'kee hai, 'janaab-e-jigar mooradaabaadi Saahib' ki aik geet "aji ham se bach kar kahaaN jaaiyegaa" se hai,aur essi Ghazal ka ek misra bataur taaraahi misra ke maine istemaal kiya hai.. yeH Ghazal aap sab kee nazar karta huuN.. (maine ess Ghazal se apna taKhallus badal kar 'Ghaafil' kar liya hai)
tau, leejiye, Ghazal haazir hai.. aap agar ise dheeme dheeme gungunaa kar paRheN to kyaa baat ho!
************************************************
Matla arz hai:-
'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa',
sitam dhaaieyega tau pachtaaieyegaa..
na dil apna yuuN aap taRpaaiyegaa,
Khataa gar ho ham se tau samajhaaiyegaa..
yeH Sher deKhiye:-
agar baat naa ban sake muskuraa kar,
tau aShkoN se daaman bhigo laaiyegaa..
haiN dar par tumhaare sadaa dast_basta,
jo ho hukm sarkaar farmaaiyegaa..
(dast_basta: hands folded . haaTh joRe)
Khilona jo samjhaa, bane ham Khilona,
KhilonoN se kya dil ko behlaaiyega..
bagaawat, adaavat, jafaa aur zulmat,
muHabbat meiN kya raNg diKhlaaiyega..
bhulaane kee koShiSh kareiN ess tarah kee,
jo bhoole haiN ham ab, na yaad aaiyegaa..
Gaur farmaaiye:-
muHabbat hai dil meiN Shikaayat zabaaN par,
kareN kya ab izhaar farmaaiyegaa..
Maqta arz hai:-
judaa ho ke :GHAFIL: nahiiN jee sakegaa
agar jaaieyegaa tau laut aaiyegaa..
(Ghaafil: Care less also taKhallus here)
Khair-aNdesh
- Mayank 'Ghaafil'[/color]
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janb gaafil sahab
aadab arz hai
aaj aapne ek aur behtreen kalam pesh kiya hai jiski jitni bhi tarif ki jaye kam hai......... aapke likhne ka tarika itna nayab hai ki ise padte huye esa laga ki kisi mushayre main shirkat ki ja rahi ho
janab dil se daad kabool farmaiyega
dilip
" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
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20th September 2006, 12:44 PM
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mayank ji kaise ho aap
aapki peshkas bahot hi alag hoti hai yaar har bar ki tarha
bhot achha laga ye peshkas padhke
aap bahot hi umda likhte hai
ummid haiage bhi aap kiumda peshkas hame un padhne ko milegi
aapka dost
dhaval
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[color=royal blue]Dhaval saaheb,
Jaan kar behad Khushi huii kee har baar kee taarh aap ko hamaari yeh peShkaSh pasand aaii.. aur jab aap ko ham par ummeed hai tau uss par kaamyaab hone kee zaroor koShiSh kareNge.. YuuN hee aap aate raheN..
-Ghafil[/color]
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20th September 2006, 12:45 PM
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Originally posted by masoomshayer
ek bar phir tum ne ahsas dila diya ek tum kya ho bahut khoobsoorat kalam laye ho
aur sare sher lajawab hain par mujeh jo sab se zyada ahhe lage woh ye hain bahut khoob hain
Anil
na dil apna yuuN aap taRpaaiyegaa,
Khataa gar ho ham se tau samajhaaiyegaa..
agar baat naa ban sake muskuraa kar,
tau aShkoN se daaman bhigo laaiyegaa..
muHabbat hai dil meiN Shikaayat zabaaN par,
kareN kya ab izhaar farmaaiyegaa..
judaa ho ke :GHAFIL: nahiiN jee sakegaa
agar jaaieyegaa tau laut aaiyegaa..
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[color=royal blue]Anil Bhaa'i,
Namsakaar,
zarra navaazi ke liye Khaaksaar aap ka Shukr-guzaar hai.. aap ne beShtar Sher pasand kiye haiN aur aur jis aNdaaz se aap ne ise saraaha hai, us se meri be-had hausila-afzaa'ii hu'i hai. bohat bohat ShukriYa..
Khair-andeSh
- Mayank'Ghafil'[/color]
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Re: Re: Ghazal:'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa', -
20th September 2006, 12:46 PM
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Originally posted by maikasH
Mayank saahab tasleemaat
aapki Ghazal padhi aur bohat pasaNd bhi aayi.....tam'aam ash'aar achche haiN, meri mubarakbaad qabuul kijiye
rab raakha
maikash
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[color=royal blue]MaikaSh bhaaii,
PurKkhuloos Tasleemaat
Ghazal ki pasaNdeedagii ke liye sar-aa-paa mamnoon huuN... huzoor, chuuN kee aap Khud ek kuhna-mashq Shaa'ir haiN, is liye aap ki daad-o-mubaarak baad Khaaksaar ke liye be-had hausala-afzaa'i hai. aap ki navaaziSh ke liye aap ka bohat bohat Shukriya...
Khair andeSh
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Re: Ghazal:'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa', -
20th September 2006, 12:53 PM
Quote:
Originally posted by Anjana Rahi
[color=royal blue]yaaraan-e-mehfil:
aadaab arz hai:-
aaj phir meiN aap sab ke Khidmat meiN haazir ho rahaa hooN..
aik gairmuraddif Ghazal peSh hai .. jis ki farmaa'iSh aap meiN se to kisi ne bhi naheeN kii, par apni hii farmaa'iSh par peSh kar rahaa huuN ..
vaazeh ho k is Ghazal kee "Zameen" jis par maine 'Khast kaari'kee hai, 'janaab-e-jigar mooradaabaadi Saahib' ki aik geet "aji ham se bach kar kahaaN jaaiyegaa" se hai,aur essi Ghazal ka ek misra bataur taaraahi misra ke maine istemaal kiya hai.. yeH Ghazal aap sab kee nazar karta huuN.. (maine ess Ghazal se apna taKhallus badal kar 'Ghaafil' kar liya hai)
tau, leejiye, Ghazal haazir hai.. aap agar ise dheeme dheeme gungunaa kar paRheN to kyaa baat ho!
************************************************
Matla arz hai:-
'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa',
sitam dhaaieyega tau pachtaaieyegaa..
na dil apna yuuN aap taRpaaiyegaa,
Khataa gar ho ham se tau samajhaaiyegaa..
yeH Sher deKhiye:-
agar baat naa ban sake muskuraa kar,
tau aShkoN se daaman bhigo laaiyegaa..
haiN dar par tumhaare sadaa dast_basta,
jo ho hukm sarkaar farmaaiyegaa..
(dast_basta: hands folded . haaTh joRe)
Khilona jo samjhaa, bane ham Khilona,
KhilonoN se kya dil ko behlaaiyega..
bagaawat, adaavat, jafaa aur zulmat,
muHabbat meiN kya raNg diKhlaaiyega..
bhulaane kee koShiSh kareiN ess tarah kee,
jo bhoole haiN ham ab, na yaad aaiyegaa..
Gaur farmaaiye:-
muHabbat hai dil meiN Shikaayat zabaaN par,
kareN kya ab izhaar farmaaiyegaa..
Maqta arz hai:-
judaa ho ke :GHAFIL: nahiiN jee sakegaa
agar jaaieyegaa tau laut aaiyegaa..
(Ghaafil: Care less also taKhallus here)
Khair-aNdesh
- Mayank 'Ghaafil'[/color]
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mayank ji namaskar.
appke kalaam to hote hi badiya hain par yeh kalaam to kaya kahney, bahut hi badiya banna hain. majja aa gaya padkar. yu hi likhtey rahiye taki humey bi kuch seekhney ko milta rahey.
take care
aapki dost
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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20th September 2006, 08:07 PM
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wah! wah! wah!
janab jitni tareef ki jaye kam hai....behad pasand aaya kalaam
daad qabool kijiyega
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[color=royal blue]wafa Sahibaah,
aap ne jis daryaa-dilii se is Ghazal ki daad dii hai, us se mujhe be-intehaa khuShi huii hai..par kyaa yeh waaqe'i is qaabil hai ke is par musalsaal waah, waah ke naare buland kiye jaayeN? vaise, agar aap ko aisa hi mehsoos huaa hai to yeh mere liye be-intehaa'ii KhuShi aur fakr kee baat hai aur maiN, aap ki taraf se mili huii is hausala-afzaa'i ke liye, aap ka tah-e-dil se shukr-guzaar huuN.. yuuN hee bazm meiN sirkat karti raheN.. ess Ghazal ka ek Sher jo maine Ghazal meiN Shaamil nahiiN kiya, aap ko sunaata huuN...
na puucheNge ham kaisi hai be-qaraari,
kabhii tau hamaiN khud hi batlaaiyega..
Aji rooTh kar ab kahaaN jaaiyega..
jaate jaate ek baar phir se Shukriya adaa karna chaahuNga..
-Ghaafil[/color]
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21st September 2006, 08:11 AM
Aji ruuthkar ab kahaan jaayiegaa...
jahaan jaayiegaa hamein paayiegaa
one of my favorite songs...lol...ispe likha na tumne? Bahut achhe...i sang instead of reading it...aur bahut bahut mazzaa aaya...tumhari yeh tehreer padhkar...
hain ‘gaafil’ andaaz tumhare niraale
yaqeenan dilon se yuun takraayiga
Daad kabuul farmaayiegaa!!
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
--Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan
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21st September 2006, 04:09 PM
bhai sahab is GAFIl se to pehli mulakat hui hai humari. waise ye hai kaun??
janaab aapne aaj kal radeef se lagta hai faasla hi bana liya hai,kyun?
ghazal kaafi ahchi thi bade bhai sirf laga jyada badi ho gayi hai.waise kehne ka haq to nahi par haan aisa laga jaroor.umeed karta hun ki aap aage v yunhi mehfilen sajate rahenge.hum jaise naadaano ke seekhne ke liye.
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27th October 2006, 07:41 PM
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janb gaafil sahab
aadab arz hai
aaj aapne ek aur behtreen kalam pesh kiya hai jiski jitni bhi tarif ki jaye kam hai......... aapke likhne ka tarika itna nayab hai ki ise padte huye esa laga ki kisi mushayre main shirkat ki ja rahi ho
janab dil se daad kabool farmaiyega
dilip
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Dilip Saahib:
maiN aap ka be-had sHukr guzaar huuN ki aap ne meri is Chhoti si koShiSh ko na sirf paRhaa bal-ki ise saraahaa bhi!!! aur jis dariya-dilii se aap ne is ki taareef ki hai, us ne to mujhe laa-jaavaab kar ke rakh diyaa hai. ab sivaaye is ke maiN aap ka hazaar baar shukriya adaa karooN aur kyaa kar sakta huuN? to, leejiye, hazaar baar shukriya qubool keejiye..
-Mayank
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28th October 2006, 06:38 PM
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[color=royal blue]yaaraan-e-mehfil:
aadaab arz hai:-
aaj phir meiN aap sab ke Khidmat meiN haazir ho rahaa hooN..
aik gairmuraddif Ghazal peSh hai .. jis ki farmaa'iSh aap meiN se to kisi ne bhi naheeN kii, par apni hii farmaa'iSh par peSh kar rahaa huuN ..
vaazeh ho k is Ghazal kee "Zameen" jis par maine 'Khast kaari'kee hai, 'janaab-e-jigar mooradaabaadi Saahib' ki aik geet "aji ham se bach kar kahaaN jaaiyegaa" se hai,aur essi Ghazal ka ek misra bataur taaraahi misra ke maine istemaal kiya hai.. yeH Ghazal aap sab kee nazar karta huuN.. (maine ess Ghazal se apna taKhallus badal kar 'Ghaafil' kar liya hai)
tau, leejiye, Ghazal haazir hai.. aap agar ise dheeme dheeme gungunaa kar paRheN to kyaa baat ho!
************************************************
Matla arz hai:-
'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa',
sitam dhaaieyega tau pachtaaieyegaa..
na dil apna yuuN aap taRpaaiyegaa,
Khataa gar ho ham se tau samajhaaiyegaa..
yeH Sher deKhiye:-
agar baat naa ban sake muskuraa kar,
tau aShkoN se daaman bhigo laaiyegaa..
haiN dar par tumhaare sadaa dast_basta,
jo ho hukm sarkaar farmaaiyegaa..
(dast_basta: hands folded . haaTh joRe)
Khilona jo samjhaa, bane ham Khilona,
KhilonoN se kya dil ko behlaaiyega..
bagaawat, adaavat, jafaa aur zulmat,
muHabbat meiN kya raNg diKhlaaiyega..
bhulaane kee koShiSh kareiN ess tarah kee,
jo bhoole haiN ham ab, na yaad aaiyegaa..
Gaur farmaaiye:-
muHabbat hai dil meiN Shikaayat zabaaN par,
kareN kya ab izhaar farmaaiyegaa..
Maqta arz hai:-
judaa ho ke :GHAFIL: nahiiN jee sakegaa
agar jaaieyegaa tau laut aaiyegaa..
(Ghaafil: Care less also taKhallus here)
Khair-aNdesh
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Waah mayank saheb......naam se kai baar mukalta sa lag jata hai janaab.....id kambakhat hamre demaag se kyuiN nikalta hai......bahoot hi sunder kalaam.....bahoot gehra sochte ho......
bhulaane kee koShiSh kareiN ess tarah kee,
jo bhoole haiN ham ab, na yaad aaiyegaa......choo jata hai dil ko.....
Ek ek asharka lutf demaag ne uthhaya hai
shayad aapko in asharoN ne khud azmaya hai
Bahoot khoob dost
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30th October 2006, 11:26 AM
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[color=royal blue]yaaraan-e-mehfil:
aadaab arz hai:-
aaj phir meiN aap sab ke Khidmat meiN haazir ho rahaa hooN..
aik gairmuraddif Ghazal peSh hai .. jis ki farmaa'iSh aap meiN se to kisi ne bhi naheeN kii, par apni hii farmaa'iSh par peSh kar rahaa huuN ..
vaazeh ho k is Ghazal kee "Zameen" jis par maine 'Khast kaari'kee hai, 'janaab-e-jigar mooradaabaadi Saahib' ki aik geet "aji ham se bach kar kahaaN jaaiyegaa" se hai,aur essi Ghazal ka ek misra bataur taaraahi misra ke maine istemaal kiya hai.. yeH Ghazal aap sab kee nazar karta huuN.. (maine ess Ghazal se apna taKhallus badal kar 'Ghaafil' kar liya hai)
tau, leejiye, Ghazal haazir hai.. aap agar ise dheeme dheeme gungunaa kar paRheN to kyaa baat ho!
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Matla arz hai:-
'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa',
sitam dhaaieyega tau pachtaaieyegaa..
na dil apna yuuN aap taRpaaiyegaa,
Khataa gar ho ham se tau samajhaaiyegaa..
yeH Sher deKhiye:-
agar baat naa ban sake muskuraa kar,
tau aShkoN se daaman bhigo laaiyegaa..
haiN dar par tumhaare sadaa dast_basta,
jo ho hukm sarkaar farmaaiyegaa..
(dast_basta: hands folded . haaTh joRe)
Khilona jo samjhaa, bane ham Khilona,
KhilonoN se kya dil ko behlaaiyega..
bagaawat, adaavat, jafaa aur zulmat,
muHabbat meiN kya raNg diKhlaaiyega..
bhulaane kee koShiSh kareiN ess tarah kee,
jo bhoole haiN ham ab, na yaad aaiyegaa..
Gaur farmaaiye:-
muHabbat hai dil meiN Shikaayat zabaaN par,
kareN kya ab izhaar farmaaiyegaa..
Maqta arz hai:-
judaa ho ke :GHAFIL: nahiiN jee sakegaa
agar jaaieyegaa tau laut aaiyegaa..
(Ghaafil: Care less also taKhallus here)
Khair-aNdesh
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janaab myank saab appko raj ka namaskaar....appki peshkash wakiya hee bhut dilkash hai.....har share apni kahani kghud byaan kar raha hai....meri dil se daad kabool kijiyega.....yu hee mehfil ko mehkaye rakhiyega......take care......raj.....
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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30th October 2006, 11:32 AM
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mayank ji namaskar.
appke kalaam to hote hi badiya hain par yeh kalaam to kaya kahney, bahut hi badiya banna hain. majja aa gaya padkar. yu hi likhtey rahiye taki humey bi kuch seekhney ko milta rahey.
take care
aapki dost
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Sunita jii,
Namaskaar,
Behad Shukriya ki aap ki meri yeH ghazal bhiiiiii pasand aaii.... haalaaki
mujeh ummeed thaa ki yeH ghazal shaayad hii kisii ko pasand aaye.. bahut
bahut shukriya aap ka kii aap ne, hamesha ki tarah, aaj bhi hausila--afza'ii
ki hai.. maiN apna naya kalaam aap ko zaroor sunaauNga gar kuchh liKh paaya
to.. Take care
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30th October 2006, 11:46 AM
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Aji ruuthkar ab kahaan jaayiegaa...
jahaan jaayiegaa hamein paayiegaa
one of my favorite songs...lol...ispe likha na tumne? Bahut achhe...i sang instead of reading it...aur bahut bahut mazzaa aaya...tumhari yeh tehreer padhkar...
hain ‘gaafil’ andaaz tumhare niraale
yaqeenan dilon se yuun takraayiga
Daad kabuul farmaayiegaa!!
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Paras Saahiba,
Namaste:
Jawaab meiN taaKheer ke liye ma'azrat-Khwaah huuN aur aap ka mamnoon-o-mutaShakkir huuN ki aap ko yeH Ghazal ess qadar pasand aaii hai..
HaaN jii, aap ne duruust farmaaya hai yeH Ghazal usi Ghazal ke bol par liKhi
huii hai.. Aur Ghazal ko paRhne ki bajuz agar gaaya jaaye to Ghazal bhi
Ghazak sa mazaa milta hai...
zah e qismat ke aap ne mere ess Ghazal ko paRh kar mujhe par ek Sher farmaaya... ab aap hi bataayeN kii, mujh jaise Khaak-nisheeN ke liye is se
baRi mubaarak baad Kya ho sakti hai..
ess bahrpoor daad ke liye, aap ka bharpoor Shukriya azeeza.. qubool
farmaayeN...
Mayank
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30th October 2006, 11:51 AM
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bhai sahab is GAFIl se to pehli mulakat hui hai humari. waise ye hai kaun??
janaab aapne aaj kal radeef se lagta hai faasla hi bana liya hai,kyun?
ghazal kaafi ahchi thi bade bhai sirf laga jyada badi ho gayi hai.waise kehne ka haq to nahi par haan aisa laga jaroor.umeed karta hun ki aap aage v yunhi mehfilen sajate rahenge.hum jaise naadaano ke seekhne ke liye.
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Dear lucky,
Namaskaar,
"ghaafil" ko samajhna itna aasaan nahiiN hai lucky thoRa sa waqt lagega
samjhne meiN, jab samajh jaaoge tab aage aur nahiiN puuchhoge ki yeH ghaafil saahab kauN haiN
Ghazal ko pasand kiya tum ne ess ke liye maiN aap ka Shukr-guzaar huuN.. aur rahii baat lambaa'ii kii to yeH nahiiN lagta ki lambaa'ii zeyaadah hai...
Khayaal aate rahe aur maiN liKhata gaya.. lambaa;i parr dhyaan nahiiN gaya..
Mayank
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30th October 2006, 11:53 AM
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Waah mayank saheb......naam se kai baar mukalta sa lag jata hai janaab.....id kambakhat hamre demaag se kyuiN nikalta hai......bahoot hi sunder kalaam.....bahoot gehra sochte ho......
bhulaane kee koShiSh kareiN ess tarah kee,
jo bhoole haiN ham ab, na yaad aaiyegaa......choo jata hai dil ko.....
Ek ek asharka lutf demaag ne uthhaya hai
shayad aapko in asharoN ne khud azmaya hai
Bahoot khoob dost
Harash
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HarSh Bhaa'ii ,
Namaste:
Ab naam meiN kya raKkha hai, Jis naam se bhi pukaar leN banda ye samajh
jaayegaa..
maiN aap ka be-had sHukr guzaar huuN ki aap ne meri is chhoti si koShiSh ko
na sirf paRhaa bal-ki ise saraahaa bhi... aur jis dariya-dilii se aap ne ess
ki taareef ki hai, us ne to mujhe laa-jaavaab kar ke rakh diyaa hai.
Ek ek asharka lutf demaag ne uthhaya hai
shayad aapko in asharoN ne khud azmaya hai
hoti hai yahaaN azmaaiSheN kuchh ess qadar diloN ki,
puuche jaate haiN sawaal, jinka jawaab nahiiN hota,
[Mayank]
navaazish hai aap ki, ba-raah-e-karam, agar aap isi tarah se hausilaa-afzaa'ii karte raheN ge to khaaksaar yuuN hi liKhata rahegaa..
Shukriya..
Mayank
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30th October 2006, 12:16 PM
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Originally Posted by Anjana Rahi
[color=royal blue]yaaraan-e-mehfil:
aadaab arz hai:-
aaj phir meiN aap sab ke Khidmat meiN haazir ho rahaa hooN..
aik gairmuraddif Ghazal peSh hai .. jis ki farmaa'iSh aap meiN se to kisi ne bhi naheeN kii, par apni hii farmaa'iSh par peSh kar rahaa huuN ..
vaazeh ho k is Ghazal kee "Zameen" jis par maine 'Khast kaari'kee hai, 'janaab-e-jigar mooradaabaadi Saahib' ki aik geet "aji ham se bach kar kahaaN jaaiyegaa" se hai,aur essi Ghazal ka ek misra bataur taaraahi misra ke maine istemaal kiya hai.. yeH Ghazal aap sab kee nazar karta huuN.. (maine ess Ghazal se apna taKhallus badal kar 'Ghaafil' kar liya hai)
tau, leejiye, Ghazal haazir hai.. aap agar ise dheeme dheeme gungunaa kar paRheN to kyaa baat ho!
************************************************
Matla arz hai:-
'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa',
sitam dhaaieyega tau pachtaaieyegaa..
na dil apna yuuN aap taRpaaiyegaa,
Khataa gar ho ham se tau samajhaaiyegaa..
yeH Sher deKhiye:-
agar baat naa ban sake muskuraa kar,
tau aShkoN se daaman bhigo laaiyegaa..
haiN dar par tumhaare sadaa dast_basta,
jo ho hukm sarkaar farmaaiyegaa..
(dast_basta: hands folded . haaTh joRe)
Khilona jo samjhaa, bane ham Khilona,
KhilonoN se kya dil ko behlaaiyega..
bagaawat, adaavat, jafaa aur zulmat,
muHabbat meiN kya raNg diKhlaaiyega..
bhulaane kee koShiSh kareiN ess tarah kee,
jo bhoole haiN ham ab, na yaad aaiyegaa..
Gaur farmaaiye:-
muHabbat hai dil meiN Shikaayat zabaaN par,
kareN kya ab izhaar farmaaiyegaa..
Maqta arz hai:-
judaa ho ke :GHAFIL: nahiiN jee sakegaa
agar jaaieyegaa tau laut aaiyegaa..
(Ghaafil: Care less also taKhallus here)
Khair-aNdesh
- Mayank 'Ghaafil'[/color]
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kya kahun mayank ji
bahut acha likha hai apne.
such
sakhi
कुछ ऐसे पल जिनको संजोना है ,
शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे
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31st October 2006, 04:41 PM
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janaab myank saab appko raj ka namaskaar....appki peshkash wakiya hee bhut dilkash hai.....har share apni kahani kghud byaan kar raha hai....meri dil se daad kabool kijiyega.....yu hee mehfil ko mehkaye rakhiyega......take care......raj.....
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Rajveer jee,
Namaskaar:
Aap ne meri ghazal ko qaabil-e-taareef samjhaa uske liye aap kaa bahut shukriyaa.
aap ka bohat Shukriyaa kii aapne apna waqt nikaal kar meri ghazal par reply liKhe aur ise saraahaa bhii. ummiid hai aaindaH bhi aap se baateN hoti raheNgii. yuuN hi aate raheN…
Mayank
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31st October 2006, 04:59 PM
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kya kahun mayank ji
bahut acha likha hai apne.
such
sakhi
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Sakhi jii:
Aap ne Ghazal ko qaabil-e-taariif samjha yeh jaan kar behad Khushi huii.. aap ka Shukriya jo aap ne waqt nikal kar apni raa’ey zaahir ki.. ummeed hai yuuN hi aati raheNgii… Take care..
Mayank
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10th September 2008, 06:04 PM
mayank bhai !
badii dil fareb ghazal likhi hai !
kuch ashaar to jaise nashtar ki maanind siine meiN utar gaye !
'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa'
sitam dhaaieyega tau pachtaaieyegaa
*bhai kahiN naa kahiN to zulm o sitam kaa hisaab kitaab hona hi hai unke kadam nishaan ban ke unke piche to rah hi jayenge !
agar baat naa ban sake muskuraa kar,
tau aShkoN se daaman bhigo laaiyegaa..
*rag pakad li aapne bewafa sanam kii ,jab unke muskuraane kaa asar khatam ho jata hai to aasuoN ke zariye bevkuuf banaane kaa kaam karte haiN !
bhulaane kee koShiSh kareiN ess tarah kee,
jo bhoole haiN ham ab, na yaad aaiyegaa..
*bilkul bajaa farmayaa kisii ko roz bhulana aur bhulaa ke fir wapis bulana aur fir bhulaane se to behtar hai ki usse hamesha ke liye bhulaa diya jaaye !
judaa ho ke :GHAFIL: nahiiN jee sakegaa
agar jaaieyegaa tau laut aaiyegaa..
isske liye maiN kya jawaab likhuN saiib ye to laa jawaab hai !
mujhe ghazal ka har ashaar har misra bharpoor pasand aaya ! yakiinan aapne apne juzbaatoN ko ek mukammal shakal aikhtiyaar dii !
meri taraf se iss koshish e kadR par mubaaraQbaad ..aur
daad Qabool farmaayeiN !
abhi ijaazat dijiye
apnaa khyaal rakhiye !
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23rd January 2009, 06:33 PM
Mayank Ji
Namaskaar
Fursat ke samay mein aapki yeh ghazal saamne aayi jisse parhna sukhad raha. Bahaut hee bareeki se shabdon ka sambodhan kiya hai aapne.
aabhaar
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26th January 2009, 12:45 PM
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Mayank Ji
Namaskaar
Fursat ke samay mein aapki yeh ghazal saamne aayi jisse parhna sukhad raha. Bahaut hee bareeki se shabdon ka sambodhan kiya hai aapne.
aabhaar
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vipin jee:
namaskaar!
kaise hai.n aap? aur khaa.n gaayab hai.n. aap ko yahaan dekh kar khushi huii.. aur ab aap ayae hai.n to yuu.n hi aate rahe.n....
aap ne is dabi huii Ghazal ko phir se nikaal kat paDha jaan kar bhead khushii huii........Ghazal ki pasandeegi ke liye bhi main aap ka shukr-guzaar huu.n...
yuu.n hi aate rahe.n
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22nd February 2009, 12:58 PM
mayank ji
apko daad dene ke liye hamare pass lafz to nahi hain per itna jaroor kehna chahoongi ki aapka her lafz dil ko choo leta hai.kabhi lagta hai ke kisi derd ki baat ho rahi hai to kabhi halki si shararat to kabhi pyar ki gehrai...ek hi gazalme jab itne sare roop dekhney aur parhney ko miley to hamare pas daad dene ke liye lagzo ki kami hona munasib hai...
yun hi likhtey rahiye..duaon ke sath....
swati...............some words about tears in!
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26th February 2009, 09:40 PM
agar baat naa ban sake muskuraa kar,
tau aShkoN se daaman bhigo laaiyegaa..
muHabbat hai dil meiN Shikaayat zabaaN par,
kareN kya ab izhaar farmaaiyegaa..
bohat acha likha hai aapne mayank ji wesay to poori ghazal achi hai magar ye do ashaar behad pasand aye likhte rahiyega
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin
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27th February 2009, 03:53 PM
bahot khub mayank ji, bahot hi khubsurat gazal hai, yun hi sunate rahe, take care bye
koi pyaar chahe to koi jahan chahe,
koi doulat chahe to koi shaan chahe,
hum to jindagi ke sataye huwe hai,
‘Eliyas’ to khudase do gaaz zameen aur kafan chahe
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8th July 2009, 02:09 PM
Bohat khoobsurat ghazal hai mayank jii.........Lagta hai kisi ke judaai ke gham me likhi gayi hai yeh ghazal................
Saare sher bohat acche haiN........ummeed hai aapki aor se jald hi kuch naya padhne ko milega...........
yuhi likhte rahiye
khush rahiye...........................
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
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8th July 2009, 02:28 PM
Bohat khoob Ghafil saheb.........
Jhoot kehdu yeh meri fitrat me nahi shamil
Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta...
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9th July 2009, 05:37 PM
Good Shayari Keep It Up................................
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10th July 2009, 11:32 AM
aji janaab....aadaab arj hai....bahot khoob
bhulaane kee koShiSh kareiN ess tarah kee
jo bhoole haiN ham ab, na yaad aaiyegaa
sabhi sher pasand aaye..khaas kar is sher par meri daad kubool kijiye
Thanks & Regards
Aapka
Tanha _dil
Duniya mein dard-e-dil ki dawa hoti to pee gaye hote
Zindagi itni aasaan hoti .....to jee gaye hote.
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