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Yaad aate ho mutaqil hamein... -
30th July 2006, 01:01 PM
Dosto…
kya tadapna dil-e-bismil ka bhala lagta hai
jab uchalta hai tau seene se jaa lagta hai
--ibrahim zauq
Arse baad kuchh likh paayi hoon…couldn’t keep my promise of keeping dard out of it…magar kuchh doston ka kaha nahi taal saki…masroofiyat tau hai hee…na jaane kya likha hai...phir bhi…lijiey aapki nazar ek adna sa kalaam…
Saagar ne kiya na ik qatre mein shamil hamein
Ab hai sehra mein hardum paani haasil hamein
Aankhon mein teri paa liye dono jahaan maine
Kya tuune bhi samjha kisi taur kaamil hamein
Ik hum hain, na aaye bhuule se yaad tujhe
Ik tum ho ki yaad aate ho mustaqil hamein
Teri aahat pe dil chaunka, sar uth gaya khushi se
Kyun gira diya ashqon sa, maharam-e-dil hamein
Zakhm-kaari adaa teri, khaak-saari adaa apni
Maar hee daalega lahuu hokar yeh dil hamein
Khush rang yadein teri, mere soz-e-jigar ki taab
Dekhna dhuund hee legii khud manzil hamein
‘Paras’ pe aaye reham? Main kaun hoon tera?
Khush hai tuu aah-o-zaari se tau kya mushkil hamein
Kaamil = complete
Mustaqil = continuously
maharam-e-dil = resident of the heart
zakhm-kaari = deep wound
khaak saari = humbleness
soz-e-jigar = sorrowful heart
taab = lustre
aah-o-zaari = wailing, cries
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
--Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan
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Re: Yaad aate ho mutaqil hamein... -
30th July 2006, 02:02 PM
Quote:
Originally posted by Parastaar
Dosto…
kya tadapna dil-e-bismil ka bhala lagta hai
jab uchalta hai tau seene se jaa lagta hai
--ibrahim zauq
Arse baad kuchh likh paayi hoon…couldn’t keep my promise of keeping dard out of it…magar kuchh doston ka kaha nahi taal saki…masroofiyat tau hai hee…na jaane kya likha hai...phir bhi…lijiey aapki nazar ek adna sa kalaam…
Saagar ne kiya na ik qatre mein shamil hamein
Ab hai sehra mein hardum paani haasil hamein
Aankhon mein teri paa liye dono jahaan maine
Kya tuune bhi samjha kisi taur kaamil hamein
Ik hum hain, na aaye bhuule se yaad tujhe
Ik tum ho ki yaad aate ho mustaqil hamein
Teri aahat pe dil chaunka, sar uth gaya khushi se
Kyun gira diya ashqon sa, maharam-e-dil hamein
Zakhm-kaari adaa teri, khaak-saari adaa apni
Maar hee daalega lahuu hokar yeh dil hamein
Khush rang yadein teri, mere soz-e-jigar ki taab
Dekhna dhuund hee legii khud manzil hamein
‘Paras’ pe aaye reham? Main kaun hoon tera?
Khush hai tuu aah-o-zaari se tau kya mushkil hamein
Kaamil = complete
Mustaqil = continuously
maharam-e-dil = resident of the heart
zakhm-kaari = deep wound
khaak saari = humbleness
soz-e-jigar = sorrowful heart
taab = lustre
aah-o-zaari = wailing, cries
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Namaskaar Paras Ji
aapko parhkar hamesha se hee aisa hee lagta hai ki "yeh meri khusnaseebi hee hai ki main aapko parh paata hoon".
Urdu ki gehri samajh na honey ke bavzood saath mein diye gaye meanings se urdu samajhney mein aasaani ho jaati hai. Jinke jariye aapki qaabiliyat ke aage sar jhuk jaata hai.
Isi tarah aage bhi parhney ka awsar detey rahiyega.
v i p i n
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30th July 2006, 02:31 PM
paras ji namste
youn to main kai dino se aapki gazal pad raha hoon. per sahi mayne main manine aapko kuccha-e-kalam se jana. jiske bare me mujhe sunita ji ne bataya. aap itni senior or mashhoor shayer hai. or main aapko pad pa raha hoon meri khushmati hai.
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30th July 2006, 09:56 PM
Zakhm-kaari adaa teri, khaak-saari adaa apni
Maar hee daalega lahuu hokar yeh dil hamein
Khush rang yadein teri, mere soz-e-jigar ki taab
Dekhna dhuund hee legii khud manzil hamein
Namaskar Paras ji
Kafi samey ke baad aaj aapka qalam dekha....bahut kushi hui aaj aapka qalam padh......paras ji this one has a deep meaning expressed with beautiful words.....aapki pehley parhi sari rachnao mein shayad iski ek alag hi pehchaan hogi.......Sagar sa gehra laga aapka qalam....mere daad kabul kijeyega itni gehrayi se likhey iss qalam ke liye......yuun hi likhti rahiye....
Apna khyal rakhiyega
Keep Smiling
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Re: Yaad aate ho mutaqil hamein... -
31st July 2006, 09:59 AM
Quote:
Originally posted by Parastaar
Dosto…
kya tadapna dil-e-bismil ka bhala lagta hai
jab uchalta hai tau seene se jaa lagta hai
--ibrahim zauq
Arse baad kuchh likh paayi hoon…couldn’t keep my promise of keeping dard out of it…magar kuchh doston ka kaha nahi taal saki…masroofiyat tau hai hee…na jaane kya likha hai...phir bhi…lijiey aapki nazar ek adna sa kalaam…
Saagar ne kiya na ik qatre mein shamil hamein
Ab hai sehra mein hardum paani haasil hamein
Aankhon mein teri paa liye dono jahaan maine
Kya tuune bhi samjha kisi taur kaamil hamein
Ik hum hain, na aaye bhuule se yaad tujhe
Ik tum ho ki yaad aate ho mustaqil hamein
Teri aahat pe dil chaunka, sar uth gaya khushi se
Kyun gira diya ashqon sa, maharam-e-dil hamein
Zakhm-kaari adaa teri, khaak-saari adaa apni
Maar hee daalega lahuu hokar yeh dil hamein
Khush rang yadein teri, mere soz-e-jigar ki taab
Dekhna dhuund hee legii khud manzil hamein
‘Paras’ pe aaye reham? Main kaun hoon tera?
Khush hai tuu aah-o-zaari se tau kya mushkil hamein
Kaamil = complete
Mustaqil = continuously
maharam-e-dil = resident of the heart
zakhm-kaari = deep wound
khaak saari = humbleness
soz-e-jigar = sorrowful heart
taab = lustre
aah-o-zaari = wailing, cries
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Paras Ji
Namaskar !
app es baar bahut dino baad ayye hai, appka to har kalaam badiya hota hai. aur hum to es kabil bhi nahi hai ki appke kalaam ke tareef karey. kyuki humey to kuch bhi nahi aata, bas yeh hai ki shayri bahut pasand hai. ha maine bhi 4-5 gazals post karney ki gustakhi ki hai. par kuch khaas nahi likh paaye hu.
Paras ji appka shuru kiya hua kuccha-e-kalaam aggey badaney ki koshish ki hai, actually woh 441 post tak jakar ruk sa gaya tha. to mai chahti thi ki etna acchi post hai esy aur aagey badna chahiye, so maine kuch dosto se kaha ki hum esy aagey badaey to bahut accha hai. thodi se kaamyaab hue hu. app bahut dino baad site par aatey ho, agar contiue aatey rahey to accha hai.
appki dost
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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1st August 2006, 11:30 PM
Ik hum hain, na aaye bhuule se yaad tujhe
Ik tum ho ki yaad aate ho mustaqil hamein
tooooooooooo good bohat acha bohat bohat acha likha hai aap ne really very touchy keep it up
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin
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2nd August 2006, 11:47 AM
Vipin jee,
Namaskaar! Aap jaise uchh vicharon wale lekhak ka mujhe padhna aur saraahna mere liye ek khushnaseebi hai...kaabliyat tau malum nahin...haan jazzbaaton mein beh jaana khuub aata hai mujhe aur wahi bus utaar deti hoon kaagaz par...shukriya aapka...
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
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2nd August 2006, 11:52 AM
Dilip jee...
aapki inayat hai...mujhse tau bahut se senior memberaan hain yahan...aur mujhse zyada kaabil...aap naye hain tau aapka iss bazm mein swaagat hai...mere liye waqt nikaalne ke liye shukrguzaar hoon aapki...
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
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2nd August 2006, 11:59 AM
Sukanya jee...
jab dil ke dariya mein sailaab aa jaaye tau khud ba khud gehraayi aa jaati hai...hai na? thanks for coming here my dear...your comments are always close to my heart...
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
--Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan
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2nd August 2006, 06:47 PM
Saagar ne kiya na ik qatre mein shamil hamein
Ab hai sehra mein hardum paani haasil hamein
Aankhon mein teri paa liye dono jahaan maine
Kya tuune bhi samjha kisi taur kaamil hamein
waaaaaaah... well said....
Ik hum hain, na aaye bhuule se yaad tujhe
Ik tum ho ki yaad aate ho mustaqil hamein
Teri aahat pe dil chaunka, sar uth gaya khushi se
Kyun gira diya ashqon sa, maharam-e-dil hamein
ufff... both these shers weree tooo goood... loved them...
Zakhm-kaari adaa teri, khaak-saari adaa apni
Maar hee daalega lahuu hokar yeh dil hamein
Khush rang yadein teri, mere soz-e-jigar ki taab
Dekhna dhuund hee legii khud manzil hamein
kya baat hai...
‘Paras’ pe aaye reham? Main kaun hoon tera?
Khush hai tuu aah-o-zaari se tau kya mushkil hamein
waaahhh...
Dearest Guruji,
Thsi one is soooo expressive yaarr... Kucch sher to itne khoobsurat thhe ke dil ko bahut hi akreeb se chhua.... I just loved this work of yours.... Dard to hai ,magara its expressed beautifully.... meri daad kubool karna... Dooo keep writing like this....
Apna khayal rakhna
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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3rd August 2006, 10:53 AM
meri behan
der se aane ki muaazrat.
Yeh misra haasil e ghazel hai mere khayal mein
"Zakhm-kaari adaa teri, khaak-saari adaa apni"
mujhe pata hai meri behan ke saare shab-o-roaz isi misre se ibaarat hain.
aur yeh misraa hi meri behan ki aadaat o atwaar, kirdaar, guftaar ka aayinaa daar hai.
meri dua hai ke hamesha khush rahe meri behna aur jis tarah tum sab per apni mohabbatein nichawer karti ho isi tarah tum bhi hamesha khushiyon aur mohabbaton ke beech zindagi ki tamaam khushiyaan haasil karo.
bhai hamesha dua go hai tumhare liye.
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3rd August 2006, 01:34 PM
Meri Pyari GuruJi,
I for one am very happy that u broke u're promise n wrote again. Pain expressed so beautifully actually doesn't cause so much pain to us but rather leaves us mesmerized at the beauty of it. As always, u're work's an absolute honor to read and we are truly grateful that u share such gems with us. Please do keep writing more so.
U're Nalayak Shagird
Luvs,
Salim
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4th August 2006, 10:47 AM
Ik hum hain, na aaye bhuule se yaad tujhe
Ik tum ho ki yaad aate ho mustaqil hamein
wow......
Hello madam,
it's really nice. and do keep writting & keep smiling too.
take care!
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5th August 2006, 07:22 AM
Dear Sunita jee...
main muaafi chahti hoon ki ab zyaada shirkat nahin kar paati iss bazm mein...zara kaam se faarig huyi tau yeh mumkin ho sakega...lekin summer mein yahi haal rahega...i appreciate your participation...but i see that no body is bothering to read the very first page where the rules have been posted...can you pls make sure that they do go through them...see, that thread was initiated only because all of us love shayri but were not writing properly...and i believe at least one thread should be kept where every one follows the rules of shayri...don't you agree? thanks a million for making time for me...keep up the good work
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
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5th August 2006, 11:56 AM
paras.
kasi ho
pocha une se k dard byan kiya hay
muskura kar kahte hain" Hansi Meri"
tumhare klam or klaam mainjo andaz jhlakta hay
dard us ki majbori hay...or waise bhi sochne wale sochte hain
Dil-e-lachar gar sukhi hota to kiya hota...
Acha laga tumhre lafzon main tumhara andaz dekh kar
keep it up
duain
khan
banjara''''
agar mohabbat hay to judai kiyon
or judai main mohabbat kasi????
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6th August 2006, 08:19 AM
koi to ho jee...
shukriya aapka ki aapne mujhe padhaa aur iss kalaam ko pasand kiya...milte rahieygaa...
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
--Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan
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6th August 2006, 08:21 AM
Hey Pulkit...
Tumhara hukum sarr aankhon mein...likhte raheinge yoonhi aur tumhein jabardasti sunaate bhi raheinge...pasand aaye yaa na...lol
take care buddy
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
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6th August 2006, 08:25 AM
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Originally posted by musharrafhusain
meri behan
der se aane ki muaazrat.
Yeh misra haasil e ghazel hai mere khayal mein
"Zakhm-kaari adaa teri, khaak-saari adaa apni"
mujhe pata hai meri behan ke saare shab-o-roaz isi misre se ibaarat hain.
aur yeh misraa hi meri behan ki aadaat o atwaar, kirdaar, guftaar ka aayinaa daar hai.
meri dua hai ke hamesha khush rahe meri behna aur jis tarah tum sab per apni mohabbatein nichawer karti ho isi tarah tum bhi hamesha khushiyon aur mohabbaton ke beech zindagi ki tamaam khushiyaan haasil karo.
bhai hamesha dua go hai tumhare liye.
musharrafhusain
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Pyaare Bhayyia...
malum hai naraaz honge, ki baat nahin kar paayi hoon itne din se aapse...kaise hain aap? aapka jawaab yahan dekh kar dil ko bahut sukoon sa mil jaata hai...ki sahi jaa rahi hoon...aap yoonhi inaayat qaayam rakhieygaa...issi se tau main ameer hoon...hai na?
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
--Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan
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6th August 2006, 08:29 AM
mere pyaare pyaare nalaayak shagird...
tumhari kuchh jhoothi kucchh sachhi taareef...mere honthon pe muskaan le aati hai...hamesha...so aate rehna...in fact you'll have to keep on coming...lol
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
--Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan
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6th August 2006, 08:31 AM
Sweet Parul...
yaad aa hee gayi tumhein...miss you too...got your message...thank you so much...aur ab kuchh aur apna likha hua jaldi hee sunaana...
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
--Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan
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7th August 2006, 03:01 PM
[color=royal bule]Paras jee,
Namsate:
Kaafi dino ke baad aaj aap ka likha huaa Parha aur behad achchha laga aap ko paRhna... Apni 2 kauRi kee raa'ey ke saath haazir huuN.. [/color]
Ik hum hain, na aaye bhuule se yaad tujhe
Ik tum ho ki yaad aate ho mustaqil hamein
[color=royal bule]ess sher ke baare meN kahna hee kyaa... khoobsuurat ehsaas aur andaaz-e-bayaaN bhee la-jawaab... Daad haazir hai.. Par pahle misre meN aap ne likha hai..'tujhe' aur duusre misre meN 'hamein' mere kahne ka matlab yeh hai kee 'Tujhe aur hameiN'milte huYe lafz nahee haiN, behtar lagega agar aap pahle sher ko ess tarh likheN..
'Ik hum hain, na aaye bhuule se yaad tumheN
Ik tum ho ki yaad aate ho mustaqil hamein'[/color]
Zakhm-kaari adaa teri, khaak-saari adaa apni
Maar hee daalega lahuu hokar yeh dil hamein
[color=royal bule]waah!Pahle misra behad khuubsuurat likha hai.. kaafi jaaN hai ess meN.. Duusre meN kuchh gunjaaish hai.. [/color]
‘Paras’ pe aaye reham? Main kaun hoon tera?
Khush hai tuu aah-o-zaari se tau kya mushkil hamein
[color=royal bule]khuubsuurat maqta..
Ik khuubsuurat ghazal ke liYe mere jaanib se daad ke satah mubaarak baad qabuul kareN.. meri kuchh baat burii lagi ho to beshaq dar-guzaar kar deejiYegaa..YuuN hee likhtii raheN..
aap ka apna
Mayank[/color]
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7th August 2006, 04:15 PM
paras ji,
namashkaar,
aankhein nam hogayi aapki yeh gazal padhke.apne haal-e-dil se bahut kareeb lagi.bahut umdah likha aapne.yeh ashaar to waaqi choo gaye dilko,
Aankhon mein teri paa liye dono jahaan maine
Kya tuune bhi samjha kisi taur kaamil hamein
Ik hum hain, na aaye bhuule se yaad tujhe
Ik tum ho ki yaad aate ho mustaqil hamein
‘Paras’ pe aaye reham? Main kaun hoon tera?
Khush hai tuu aah-o-zaari se tau kya mushkil hamein
maqtaa bahut dard bhara hai.
dua hai allah se ke yeh dard aapki zindagi se hamesha ke liye dafaa haojaaye.
likhte rahiye,
tc
yun bin bulaaye milne chala aata hai,
gham ko mujh se yeh unsiyat kaisi??
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Re: hi -
13th August 2006, 10:48 AM
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Originally posted by banjara''''
paras.
kasi ho
pocha une se k dard byan kiya hay
muskura kar kahte hain" Hansi Meri"
tumhare klam or klaam mainjo andaz jhlakta hay
dard us ki majbori hay...or waise bhi sochne wale sochte hain
Dil-e-lachar gar sukhi hota to kiya hota...
Acha laga tumhre lafzon main tumhara andaz dekh kar
keep it up
duain
khan
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Dearest khan bhai...
kahan rehte hain aap aajkal? aapko apne kalaam par dastaq dete huye dekhkar behad khushi huyi...
pocha une se k dard byan kiya hay
muskura kar kahte hain" Hansi Meri"
aur yeh do lines bhi bahut pasand aayin...aapke jawaab ka agle kalaam par bhi intezaar karoongi...shukriya...aate rahiye...milte rahieye
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
--Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan
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13th August 2006, 10:54 AM
Mayank Sahib...
ess sher ke baare meN kahna hee kyaa... khoobsuurat ehsaas aur andaaz-e-bayaaN bhee la-jawaab... Daad haazir hai.. Par pahle misre meN aap ne likha hai..'tujhe' aur duusre misre meN 'hamein' mere kahne ka matlab yeh hai kee 'Tujhe aur hameiN'milte huYe lafz nahee haiN, behtar lagega agar aap pahle sher ko ess tarh likheN..
aapne theek kaha...asal mein iss baat ka abhaas ho gaya thaa mujhe, lekin tab tak the 10min. limit was over so maine aise hee rehne diya, edit nahin kiya...lekin maine ek duusre forum mein use change kar ke likha thaa
Ik hum hain, na aaye bhuule se yaad tumhein
Ik tum ho ki yaad aate ho mustaqil hamein
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baarikee se ghazal padhne ke liye aabhaari hoon aapki...yoonhi tanz o tanqeed se nawaazte rahieyga...
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
--Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan
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13th August 2006, 10:57 AM
My dear Akelijaan ji...
aapko apni post pe dekhkar hamesha sukoon milta hai...aur aapke jawaab ka bhi hamesha intezaar rehta hai...ek khuubsurat daad aur dua ke liye main shukrguzaar hoon...aap khayaal rakhieyga apna...
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
--Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan
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14th August 2006, 02:40 AM
aadaab namaste aur SSA
maiN aaj yuuN hi ek sarsarii nazar daalne forum pe aaya tha aur aapki ye post dekhi....aur kuch kahe bina jaana munaasib na samjha so here i am....
pehle to peshagi muaafi maaNge leta huuN Ghaaliban aapko meri koi baat buri lag jaaye to kaam aayegi....
meri ek bohat hi buri aadat hai ke maiN har Ghazal ka may'aar uske matle ko dekh kar tay kar leta huuN jo ke Ghair-munasib hai aur isi kambakht aadat hi wajah se maiN aapki is shaahkaar Ghazal ko padhne se mehruum reh jaata
ba-har-haal maiN arz karna chahta huuN ke ho sake to aap is Ghazal ke matle ko phir se likhiye.......
matlaa :-
Saagar ne kiya na ik qatre mein shamil hamein
Ab hai sehra mein hardum paani haasil hamein
yahaaN duusra misra aapne khoob likha hai , mubarak ho, jahaaN taq meri samajh jaati hai to aapko kehna chahti haiN haiN ki ashqoN ki ba'daulat aapko ab sehraa meiN bhi paani haasil hai jo ke bohat achcha aur qaabil-e-daad khayaal hai.......lekin mushkil ye ha hai ke donoN misroN meiN rabt behadd kamzor hai aur mafhuum saaf nahiiN hote....maslan sagar aur qatre ko aap kis suurat bayaan kar rahi haiN......waise apne aap meiN pehla misra bhi khoob hai ke dariya se ye taq na gawaara hua ko kisi ka wajuud uske ek qatre meiN bhi jhalke, ya duusri suurat meiN berukhi ki iNtehaa numayaaN hoti hai......lekin mas'alaa rabt ka hai......meri tajviiz hai ke aap ek baar phir se dekh lijiye ya agar mujh kam-aql ko baat samah nahiN aayi (aisa hone ki bohat guNjayiish hai ) to mehr'baani karke aap wajaahat farmaa dijiye phir meiN sharmiNdaa ho luuNga ..
ye to thi matle ki baat.......apni aadat ko is martabaa jaib meiN rakh kar maine aapki puuri Ghazal padhi aur mut'asir hue bina na reh saka......taKKhayul aur taGhazzul ke hawaale se aapne bohat tarraqi ki hai, mubarak ho aur aapko padhne se saaf zaahir hota hai ke ab aap beh'r-o-wazan ko bekaar ki cheez nahiiN samajhti jo ke bohat achchi baat hai......urdu adab meiN ilm aur tajurbe ka choli-daaman jaisa saath hota hai....tajurba jitna hoga ilm utna hi badhta hai.......isliye mera israar hai ke mashq jaari rakhiye.....
aur jaane se pehle aapko yaad dilaa duuN ke :in case: mujh se koi gustaakhi ho gayi ho to just scroll up aur meri peshagi maaNgi hui muaafi "Tikaa" lijiye.....shukriya
rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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Last edited by maikasH; 14th August 2006 at 04:27 AM..
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