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13th December 2005, 10:44 AM
mai.n apane Khvaab se kaT kar jiyuu.N to meraa Khudaa
ujaa.D de merii muTThii ko dar-ba-dar kar de --iftikhar arif Khuda na kare ki shayar se uska tasavvur ruuth jaaye…uske khayaal hain tau uske dil ki mehfil kabhi veeraan nahin…duniya se sukoon ki ummiid….? bilkul nahin...kuch bikhre se khayaal...kuch tuute se alfaaz...aapki nazar-o-karam ke talabgaar... tumhein suni nahin meri sada, koyi baat nahin tere dar se laut aayi meri sada, koyi gila nahin tanhaa batiyaate rahe us paar, koyi shikwa nahin din bhar naaz uthaye rozi ke, koyi shiqayat nahin raat jhuujhte rahe sannaton se, tujhse tau kuch kaha nahin yaqeen kaanch se tuut te rahe, tujhpe tau koyi ilzaam nahin par meri tanhaayi ki munder pe jo aksar aakar baith jaate hain mere tarashe huye khayal, mere gair haqiqi waehm, mere duur daraaz tasawwur in par sar basar haq mera hai… ki yeh tau teri nemat nahin… mere anjaane sapne meri phadphadaati hasratein meri anchaahi chaahatein meri machalti dhadhkanein, meri sulagati saansein, mere dilkash gunaah meri tarasti nigaahein mere dil ke biyabaan viraanon ke sur ke saath sur milaate ye ranj ik tees jagaate, ik pyaas badhaate, ik tadap dabaate, palakon pe rukte, phisalte, gaalon pe suukhte yeh aansoon in par bhi tamaam haq mera hai… ki yeh bhi teri saugaat nahin… tarashe = carved gair haqiqi = unrealistic duur daraaz = extensive, far-fetched nemat = blessing sar basar = absolutely, entirely gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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13th December 2005, 10:45 AM
good 1 dd bahut pasand aaya likhte rahiye
wo chahat hamesha tum hogi ab to chahna hi reh gaya hai zindagi main na jane yeh chahat kab puri hogi |
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13th December 2005, 11:00 AM
HAI PARAS JAAN....KAISI HO...BARE DINO DINO BAAD NAZER AATI HO..KAHA.N KHO JAATI HO IS DUNIYA KI BHEED ME..HAM SITE PER AA AA KAR DHOOND DHOOND KAR THAKE KADMO SE LAUT JAATE HAI..ASAFALTAO K TOKRA SIR PER LIYE.....
tumhein suni nahin meri sada, koyi baat nahin tere dar se laut aayi meri sada, koyi gila nahin tanhaa batiyaate rahe us paar, koyi shikwa nahin din bhar naaz uthaye rozi ke, koyi shiqayat nahin raat jhuujhte rahe sannaton se, tujhse tau kuch kaha nahin yaqeen kaanch se tuut te rahe, tujhpe tau koyi ilzaam nahin EK DAM SAHI TAL-MAIL HAI SHABDO KA AUR BARI SOOJH-BOOJH SE DARD KO PIROYA HAI TUMNE IS KALAAM ME...YE ANDAAZ KUCHH HAT K LAGA...KAFI ASARDAAR HAI... par meri tanhaayi ki munder pe jo aksar aakar baith jaate hain mere tarashe huye khayal, mere gair haqiqi waehm, mere duur daraaz tasawwur in par sar basar haq mera hai… ki yeh tau teri nemat nahin… KITNI AASANI SE KEH PATI HO..JO BAATE SIRF MEHSOOS KARNE-KARAANE KI HOTI HAI...SUPER.B.... CLAP...CLAP...CLAP...GUSTKHI CHAHENGE AAP K DARD PER CLAP NAHI KAR RAHE HAI...SHABDO KO AASANI SE DHAAL LENE KI KALA PAR CLAP KAR RAHE HAI.... mere anjaane sapne meri phadphadaati hasratein meri anchaahi chaahatein meri machalti dhadhkanein, meri sulagati saansein, mere dilkash gunaah meri tarasti nigaahein mere dil ke biyabaan viraanon ke sur ke saath sur milaate ye ranj ik tees jagaate, ik pyaas badhaate, ik tadap dabaate, palakon pe rukte, phisalte, gaalon pe suukhte yeh aansoon in par bhi tamaam haq mera hai… ki yeh bhi teri saugaat nahin… SUCH ME IS SAB JAZBATO KO HAM IS TAREH SHABDO KA JAMA NAA PEHNA PAATE...VERY GOOD....DIL KO CHOO GAYA HAR SHABD KHAS TAUR SE....PHADPHADATI HASRATEIN..SULAGTI SAANSE, DILKASH GUNAAH, TARASTI NIGAHE...YE ALFAAZ TADPA GAYE DARD KO B.... OK BYE....APNE DHYAAN RAKHIYEGA...HAM FIKRMAND REHTE HAI....AAP AATI REHTI HAI TO SAKOON REHTA HAI KI SAB THEEK HAI... gam-e-lashkar |
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13th December 2005, 09:38 PM
My Pyaari Guru Ji,
U're works are always so dear to us. Rather an honor 4 us. N this time real happy cos u've just written u're free thoughts without any restraints by means of rules and regulations of shayri  Just a small correction if i may, I just felt the first line should've been: tumne suni nahin meri sada, koyi baat nahin Felt it so said it. Well please do keep writing more so with emotions so rare nd thoughts so free and hope n pray u're benevolent presence is always there with us. Aapka Nalayak Shagird. Salim If there are no tears in the eyes, there will be no rainbow in the soul Happiness is a butterfly, which, when pursued, is always just beyond your grasp, but which, if you sit down quietly, may alight upon you. We come to love not by finding a perfect person but by learning to see an imperfect person perfectly |
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15th December 2005, 07:11 PM
Hello Mehul...
Deri ke liye muafi chahti hoon...apko yeh mere bikhare se khayal pasand aaye...daad ke liye shukria...milte rahiyega gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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15th December 2005, 07:17 PM
Ohh Gam-e-lashkar...
itni shiddat se tau maine in tukdon ko likha bhi nahin thaa jitni shiddat se aapne is pe apni raaye pesh kee...apka tahe dil se shukria...wo alfaaz jo aapne pasand kiye...bus ehsaas ko kagaz pe utaarne ke liye kafi lage...halanki technically this would be a zero...but mujhe inko likhkar sukoon mehsoos hua...aur aapne mere kalaam ki ruuh ko pehchana inayat aapki...yoonhi karam farmaate rahieye...aur apna khayaal rakhieye gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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15th December 2005, 11:30 PM
bahaut khoob paras d....
dil ko choo gaya hai aapka yeh lajawaab kalaam... yuhin apne kalaamon se mehfil ko roshan karti rahiye.... Subha Kii Gard MeiN Naa Kho JaayeiN Aa ! Tere Gham MeiN Jaagtii AankheiN Kam Se Kam Aik Raat So JaayeiN." **~*FaRhAnA*~** |
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15th December 2005, 11:53 PM
ye halaat-e-aashiq hai ya dastaan-e-jang
jahan dekhiye fate se kapade aur lahu ka laal rang.....? it becomes more and more universal. |
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16th December 2005, 12:18 AM
meri paras,
tumhe padhti hu to dard is kadar gale lagta hai k shabd ghabhra ke simat jaate hai kahi door door chale jate hai... or pratibimb mai yah hota hai ke mere maun se tum ruth jaati ho...  tumhari meena |
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16th December 2005, 12:27 AM
Guddo Didi...
Mujhe aadat hai apne gham chupane ki ... alfazoN se suna duN to gunah na kehna... cheeN lena mujhse daulat-e-jahaN chahe... aur virasat-e-walid, meri kalam na cheen lena... Bas meri kalaM jo bas barsa saki aapki mehfil maiN arz kar diya .. kyuNki is kangaal ke paas tareef aur alfaz ke alawa hai hi kya .. le lo meri jhuki nazroN pe se... aapka apna Kunal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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16th December 2005, 12:42 PM
wah kya baat meri dua aap ke saath hai aap aise hi likhte rahiye
par unse jakar puchiye jinhe hasil nahi hai hum  .............. call or msg at 00919823008024 |
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16th December 2005, 03:02 PM
tumhein suni nahin meri sada, koyi baat nahin
tere dar se laut aayi meri sada, koyi gila nahin tanhaa batiyaate rahe us paar, koyi shikwa nahin din bhar naaz uthaye rozi ke, koyi shiqayat nahin raat jhuujhte rahe sannaton se, tujhse tau kuch kaha nahin yaqeen kaanch se tuut te rahe, tujhpe tau koyi ilzaam nahin Very welll said Guruji.... last line was too good...! par meri tanhaayi ki munder pe jo aksar aakar baith jaate hain mere tarashe huye khayal, mere gair haqiqi waehm, mere duur daraaz tasawwur WaaaaaaaH...loved these lines...! in par sar basar haq mera hai… ki yeh tau teri nemat nahin… mere anjaane sapne meri phadphadaati hasratein meri anchaahi chaahatein meri machalti dhadhkanein, meri sulagati saansein, mere dilkash gunaah meri tarasti nigaahein Beautifullll....very nice words....! mere dil ke biyabaan viraanon ke sur ke saath sur milaate ye ranj ik tees jagaate, ik pyaas badhaate, ik tadap dabaate, palakon pe rukte, phisalte, gaalon pe suukhte yeh aansoon in par bhi tamaam haq mera hai… ki yeh bhi teri saugaat nahin… Waaaaaaaaaahhhhh..... kya keh diya hai...simply loved it...! Dearest Guruji, Ek baar fir aapko padhkar bahut hi accha laga...sach behad khoobsuarati se ehsaas bayaan kiye hain...I liked it a lot...! Last stanza specially...Ek haq se, ik guroor se bola...loved it...! Bass.. aise hi likhti raho.. My Daad is always with u...Apna khayal rakhna acche se...! Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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18th December 2005, 05:54 AM
Jeete raho Salim...
Well well well! galati bhi meri pakadte ho phir khud ko nalaayak batate ho...your correction is well noted and saved Sir...please aage bhi be jhijhak bata diya karo...you dont want your guru to show flaws in her writing...do you? tumhare liye kitne sharm ki baat hogi..nai?  gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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18th December 2005, 05:58 AM
Dear farhana...
main tau bus tumhara avatar hi dekhti rahi...ki kitni baar yeh ladki likhegi mere liye...I Love you....I love you...lol...meri posts pe aati rehti ho...phir daad bhi hamesha deti ho...really nice of you...waqt nikalne ke liye shukriya... gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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18th December 2005, 06:02 AM
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kya khuub kaha...Aashiqii bina ammunition ke ladi jaane wali jang hi tau hai...sab ke sab ghayal hi nazar aate hain...khuun-e-jigar...khuun-e-tamanna gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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18th December 2005, 06:08 AM
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Yeh sab...kuch na likhne ka bahana hai...sab jaanti hoon...aap jo bhi kahain...lekin kehna padegaa...maun ki bhasha mujhe samajh nahin aati...aur phir gar rooth gayi tau kasoor sirf aapka hoga...bus... mujhe apne pyaar se be-dakhl kar dijiey chahe...lekin mujhe sab chahiye...nahin tau kuch bhi nahin... gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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